ACADEMIC ENGLISH III Oct. 8, 2014. Today - Academic style: wordiness.
1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the...
-
Upload
percival-thomas -
Category
Documents
-
view
212 -
download
0
Transcript of 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the...
![Page 1: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/1.jpg)
1
Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader
Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness and less precise
words Avoid fancy or less precise words Limit paragraph, word, and sentence length
![Page 2: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/2.jpg)
2
Avoid Weak Verbs
Weak verbs convey practically no sense of action do, make, perform, have forms of the verb to be
Avoid nouns that are really verbs in disguise Substitute verbs that create a clear sense of action
At the core of every good sentence is a strong, precise verb.
![Page 3: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/3.jpg)
3
Verbs Disguised as Nouns
Make a recommendation Recommend
Formulate an argument
Arrive at a conclusion
Perform an analysis
Argue
Conclude
Analyze
![Page 4: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/4.jpg)
4
Active vs Passive Voice
Frisky ate my homework. (4)
My homework was eaten by Frisky. (6)
Frisky = Doer / subject of sentence
ate = Active Verb
homework = Object of action
homework = Object as subject
by Frisky = Doer object of preposition
was eaten = passive verb
![Page 5: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/5.jpg)
5
Active or Passive Voice?
The metropolis has been scorched by the dragon’s fiery breath. (10)
The technicians demanded longer coffee breaks. (6)
The explosion was caused by a kerosene lamp. (8)
The dragon’s fiery breath scorched the metropolis. (7)
The technicians demanded longer coffee breaks.
A kerosene lamp caused the explosion. (6)
![Page 6: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/6.jpg)
6
When Passive Works …
Use active voice unless you have a good reason for choosing passive
Emphasize the receiver of the action
The solution was heated to the boiling point and then reduced in volume by 50 percent.
![Page 7: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/7.jpg)
7
When Passive Works …
Use active voice unless you have a good reason for choosing passive
Passive Voice: A number of problems are indicated by these results.
Active Voice: The results indicate a number of problems.
Further analysis showed / suggested / yielded ….
![Page 8: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/8.jpg)
8
The Dependent Clause
Amplifies or qualifies the statement in the main part of the sentence Highlights the importance Suppresses the incidental Links ideas together Shows how ideas are related
Start with a subordinating conjunction or relative pronoun
![Page 9: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/9.jpg)
9
The Dependent Clause
So Where Before
Although Than Though
After Since When
Because As Whereas
If Unless until
While
Who What Which
That Why How (many)
Subordinating conjunctions
Relative Pronouns
![Page 10: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/10.jpg)
10
The Dependent Clause
The project was not completed on time, because the machine parts were stolen.
If at first you don't succeed, try something else.
A helium nucleus has two protons, whereas hydrogen has only one.
Energy supplies will dwindle, unless we conserve.
![Page 11: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/11.jpg)
11
The Dependent Clause
Where are the parts that I ordered?
The uranium nucleus, which contains 92 protons, is unstable.
Most people don't know who their senators are.
What the aerospace industry needs now is more friends in Congress.
![Page 12: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/12.jpg)
12
Avoid Prepositional Phrases
Less informative alternative to dependent clause
Treat all ideas as grammatically equal No discrimination No emphasis among qualifying details
Reader left to interpret what you are trying to say
![Page 13: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/13.jpg)
13
Avoid Prepositional Phrases
in progress on the floor beside the garage between the cities of data-processing equipment to a Martian by walking on hot coals
![Page 14: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/14.jpg)
14
Avoid Prepositional Phrases
In their specifications for engine parts, titanium is often requested by engineers because of its resistance to the effects of high temperatures. (6)
Because titanium resists high temperatures, engineers often request it in their engine part specifications.
![Page 15: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/15.jpg)
15
Avoid Excess Wordiness
As a matter of fact I might add that It should be pointed out that the presence of
at this point in time
has the ability to
in light of the fact that
in the event that
the question as to whether
Unnecessary Phrases…..
Use only necessary words …..
the course of the fact that It is significant that….
now, then
can
because
if
whether
![Page 16: 1 Writing Style to Avoid Confusion for the Reader Avoid weak verbs Use Active Voice Use the dependent clause Avoid prepositional phrases Avoid excess wordiness.](https://reader036.fdocuments.in/reader036/viewer/2022083004/56649d9c5503460f94a84b05/html5/thumbnails/16.jpg)
16
Editing Approach
Circle the prepositions Determine the doer Determine the action
Use dependent clauses instead of prepositional phrases, when possible
Use active voice instead of passive Use strong verbs Eliminate excess / less precise words
What to look for…..
What to do …..