From Pop to Poems Using the familiar (song lyrics) to teach
unfamiliar texts (poems) Zanita Thompson
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Main objectives to build students confidence in analysing
familiar texts (pop songs) first then unfamiliar texts. to teach
students how to use TEEPEE to analyse texts convincingly and
perceptively for Excellence.
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Prior knowledge - I can define these language techniques
(features): 1.Metaphor and extended metaphor 2.Personification
3.Simile 4.Direct address 5.Concrete noun 6.Symbolism 7.Vivid Verb
8.Connotation 9.Imperative 10.Clich 11.Rhetorical question
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Techniques - definitions 1. Metaphor/extended metaphor a direct
comparison between two very different things, usually impossible.
An extended metaphor is long/developed. 2. Personification a type
of metaphor, where a thing (inanimate object) is compared to a
person or has human characteristics. 3. Simile a comparison between
two different things, using like or as. 4. Direct address use of
2nd person pronouns you to talk to the reader. 5. Concrete noun a
noun (thing) you can see or touch. Many similar nouns may indicate
an extended metaphor. 6. Symbolism use of a concrete noun to
represent an abstract noun (idea/feeling) or organisation. 7. Vivid
Verb a verb (doing word) which is specific and has impact. May have
a positive or negative tone. 8. Connotation ideas or feelings
associated with a word. 9. Imperative a command. 10. Clich a
cheesy/overused saying. 11. Rhetorical question a question asked
for effect.
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Firework by Katy Perry
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QGJuMBdaqIw
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QGJuMBdaqIw
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Do you ever feel like a plastic bag, Drifting through the wind,
wanting to start again? Do you ever feel, feel so paper-thin Like a
house of cards, one blow from caving in? Do you ever feel already
buried deep? Six feet under screams, but no one seems to hear a
thing Do you know that there's still a chance for you? 'Cause
there's a spark in you Chorus You just gotta ignite the light, and
let it shine Just own the night like the Fourth of July 'Cause baby
you're a firework Come on, show 'em what you're worth Make 'em go
"oh, oh, oh!" As you shoot across the sky. Baby you're a firework
Come on, let your colours burst Make 'em go "oh, oh, oh!", You're
gonna leave 'em all in awe, awe, awe You don't have to feel like a
waste of space You're original, cannot be replaced If you only knew
what the future holds After a hurricane, comes a rainbow Maybe the
reason why all the doors are closed So you could open one that
leads you to the perfect road Like a lightning bolt, your heart
will glow And when it's time you know (Chorus) Boom, boom, boom
Even brighter than the moon, moon, moon It's always been inside of
you, you, you And now it's time you let it through.
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Examples of techniques 1.Metaphor/extended metaphor Youre a
firework 2.Simile - Do you ever feel like a plastic bag/drifting
through the wind/wanting to start again? 3.Direct address - Do you
know that there's still a chance for you? 4.Concrete nouns - A
spark, The light, The Fourth of July, A firework, The sky, the moon
5.Vivid Verb Drifting, Wanting to start, Blow, Buried, Screams,
Shoot, Burst, Leave 6.Connotations The first 4 verbs are negative
and the last 3 verbs are positive. 7.Symbolism - After a hurricane,
comes a rainbow a rainbow is a (clich) symbol of hope. 8.Imperative
- show em what youre worth 9.Clich - You don't have to feel like a
waste of space/ You're original, cannot be replaced. 10.Rhetorical
question Do you ever feel already buried deep, Six feet under
screaming, but no one seems to hear a thing? 11.Repetition Youre a
firework
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Zoom in on techniques - use convergent thinking T - What is the
most important technique (language feature) used? E - What is the
most important example of that technique?
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Answer for Zoom In - TEE Technique = metaphor Example - Youre a
firework (The title!) Now highlight all words/phrases to do with
fireworks.
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Answer for Zoom In - TEE Because there are so many words
connected with fireworks, it is an extended metaphor. Firework
Theres a spark in you ignite the light, and let it shine Just own
the night like the Fourth of July (American Independence Day) As
you shoot across the sky. Come on, let your colours burst You're
gonna leave 'em all in awe, awe, awe.
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Zoom In - TEE Technique = extended metaphor Example - Youre a
firework Theres a spark in you. N.B. This will only get you N2 for
the question. You need to show you understand the example for A3+.
E - Explain the most important examples of that technique.
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Possible Answer for Zoom In - TEE Explain - The audience you is
being compared to a firework, which is bright and loud, and creates
a spectacular display for others to admire. The message is to
appreciate the spark (life) in you and dont hide but be confident
and make your mark upon the world as you ignite the light and let
it shine. N.B. This will get you a maximum of A4. You need to show
understanding of other techniques for M5+.
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TEEPEE How to analyse texts convincingly and perceptively for
Excellence. TechniquesExamples Explain Purpose Elaborate
Evaluate
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Zoom out to the poets purpose - use divergent thinking P
Purpose Thinking about all these techniques and examples, why do
you think the author wrote this song?
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Possible Answer - Purpose P Purpose To encourage the audience
to believe in their potential theres a spark in you.
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Elaborate E Elaborate Tone is it positive or negative, amusing
or serious? Respond what is its effect on you? It makes me feel...
Links to wider world (beyond the lines). What do we learn about the
world or human nature from it?
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Possible Answer for Elaborate E - Elaborate Telling the
audience using direct address (you) that they are metaphorically a
firework inspires us to have hope for the future (a rainbow), to
believe that we have innate value (spark) and contrary to negative
pressures (feel buried deep) we have potential to excel in life and
make our mark on the world (boom, boom, boom).
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Evaluate E Evaluate Is it successful? Why?
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Possible Answer for Evaluate Evaluate At times, all teenagers
feel like they are undervalued ( a waste of space), powerless (one
blow from caving in), drifting through life without purpose,
without being heard ( but no one seems to hear a thing), so this
song, with its positive message, ( theres still a chance for you...
Your heart will glow) has universal appeal. The use of the extended
metaphor of fireworks with their positive connotations and
connections with celebrations ( the fourth of July ) match the
purpose of the text in making the audience appreciate their lives
and have hope for the future.
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Peroration Using TEEPEE to analyse texts helps students to
provide sufficient detail and depth for Excellence. If they can
perceptively analyse a familiar text, they can tackle an unfamiliar
text.
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Unfamiliar Text For Albert Wendt (On His Birthday) By Karlo
Mila
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Unfamiliar Text Firstly Scan the texts subject by first reading
the sub- content: Title - What does it reveal? Footnotes - What do
the source notes and glossed words reveal?
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Secondly - Zoom in on TEE Read this unfamiliar text and like we
did with our song: Identify the most important technique, then
Underline the most important examples of that technique.
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For Albert Wendt (On His Birthday) By Karlo Mila you dare to
fish beyond the coral reefs of our understanding your net pulls in
poems flicking salty tales you find nuanua in the eye of hurricanes
celebrate thunder we prefer not to hear and relish the quicksilver
laughter of lightning you shake the tree of the frangipani and as
the flowers fall from grace you string them into sentences ants and
all your narrative is a needle that pierces the thickest skin the
ink of your pen blending with our blood tattooing stories of
altered genealogies between the lines of our naked bodies Source:
Karlo Mila, Dream Fish Floating (Huia: Wellington, 2005) Glossed
words nuanua Samoan word for rainbow Tattoos in many Polynesian
cultures are used to represent a persons genealogy, whakapapa or
family history. Note: Albert Wendt is a celebrated Samoan poet and
writer who lives in NZ.
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Zoom In - TEE T - What is the most important technique used? E
- What are the best examples to use? E - Explain the examples.
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Zoom In - TEE T - Extended metaphor E - your narrative is a
tattoo? (The last stanza) E - Explain the examples.
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Zoom In - TEE E - Explain the examples. Wendts storytelling as
a needle tattooing the story of Polynesian cultures onto society is
apt. The image of his pen acting as a needle to write the stories
of the culture, affecting even those with the thickest skin, lets
the reader know Wendts stories are being heard. His stories blend
old and new as well as different perspectives and have left a
permanent mark on her life.
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Zoom out - PEE P - Purpose Why did she write the text? (Check
the title!) E Elaborate Tone Response Links to wider world (Beyond
the lines) E Evaluate Successful? Include quote bites throughout
your answer.
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Zoom out - PEE P - Purpose Mila wrote the poem for Albert Wendt
on his birthday as a gift to show her appreciation for his stories
and to praise him for his craft.
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Zoom out - PEE E Elaborate Birthdays are a time to celebrate a
person and Milas poem celebrates the writing and imagination of
this man using direct address (you) in recognition ofthe gifts his
life has brought to us all but especially those of Polynesian
culture. The four different extended metaphors in each stanze use
concrete nouns which have links to Wendts Samoan culture (fish,
coral reefs, net, nuanua, frangipani) which shows her appreciation
for his culture. The overall tone is appropriately positive to show
that she likes the way he challenges them Dare to fish.. is
imaginative beyond our understanding and optimistic you find nuanua
in hurricanes. She is specific in her praise of him.
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Zoom out - PEE E Evaluate Milas beautiful poem successfully
crafts extended metaphors to illustrate her strong appreciation of
Wendt. She shows how his narratives have the power to get under the
skin, unsettle but ultimately enlighten in a sacred ritual which
will leave its mark (tattooing) upon current and future generations
(genealogies). His poems are therefore powerful and permanent.
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Top Tips for Tackling Unfamiliar Texts The title is usually an
important clue of the main idea the writer wants us to think about.
A footnote will tell you the source of the text, which can give you
a clue about the audience and purpose. Glossed words give useful
definitions. Identify the most important language features and
write notes/underline the text. (Dont choose alliteration!) Read
the questions carefully and underline key words.
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Remember: Use TEEPEE to analyse texts convincingly and
perceptively for Excellence. TechniquesExamples Explain Purpose
Elaborate Evaluate
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Remember Poems are like songs without the music. Poetry: the
best words in the best order. Samuel Taylor Coleridge
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More Familiar Texts Group work Read the lyrics to this familiar
song and Use TEEPEE to convincingly and perceptively analyse the
text.
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Battle Scars by Lupe Fiasco & Guy Sebastian
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_mPd_SDAryQ&feature=player_detailpage
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_mPd_SDAryQ&feature=player_detailpage
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Hope the wound heals but it never does That's cause you're at
war with love You're at war with love, yeah Chorus: These battle
scars don't look like they're fading, Don't look like they're ever
going away They ain't never gonna change, These battle... Never let
a wound ruin me But I feel like ruin's wooing me Arrow holes, they
never close from Cupid on a shooting spree Feeling stupid cause I
know it ain't no you and me But when you're trying to beat the odds
up Been trying to keep your nods up And you know that you should
know And let her go But the fear of the unknown Holding another
lover strong Sends you back into the zone With no Tom Hanks to
bring you home A lover not a fighter On the front line with a poem
Trying to write yourself a rifle Maybe sharpen up a stone To fight
the tanks and drones of you being alone
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I wish I never looked, I wish I never touched I wish that I
could stop loving you so much Cause I'm the only one that's trying
to keep us together When all of the signs say that I should forget
her I wish you weren't the best, the best I ever had I wish that
the good outweighed the bad Cause it'll never be over, until you
tell me it's over These battle scars, don't look like they're
fading Don't look like they're ever going away They ain't never
gonna change These battle scars, don't look like they're fading
Don't look like they're ever going away They ain't never gonna
change These battle... (Then just leave) You shouldn't have but you
said it (And I hope you never come back) It shouldn't have happened
but you let it Now you're down on the ground screaming medic The
only thing that comes is the post-traumatic stresses Shields, body
armours and vests don't properly work That's why you're in a locker
full of hurt The enemy within and all the fires from your friends
The best medicine is to probably just let it win I wish I couldn't
feel, I wish I couldn't love I wish that I could stop cause it
hurts so much And I'm the only one that's trying to keep us
together When all of the signs say that I should forget her I wish
you weren't the best, the best I ever had I wish that the good
outweighed the bad Cause it'll never be over, until you tell me
it's over (Chorus) Cause you've set me on fire I've never felt so
alive, yeah Hoping wounds heal, but it never does That's because
you're at war with love And I'm at the point of breaking And it's
impossible to shake it See, you hoped the wound heals, but it never
does That's cause you're at war with love Hope it heals, but it
never does That's cause you're at war with love! Chorus
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Techniques - definitions 1. Metaphor/extended metaphor a direct
comparison between two very different things, usually impossible.
An extended metaphor is long/developed. 2. Direct address use of
2nd person pronouns you to talk to the reader. 3. Concrete noun a
noun (thing) you can see or touch. Many similar nouns may indicate
an extended metaphor. 4. Symbolism use of a concrete noun to
represent an abstract noun (idea/feeling) or organisation. 5. Vivid
Verb a verb (doing word) which is specific and has impact. May have
a positive or negative tone. 6. Connotation ideas or feelings
associated with a word. 7. Hyperbole exaggeration for effect. 8.
Rhetorical question a question asked for effect. 9. Emotive
language words that stir emotion in the audience. 10. Allusion
reference to another literary work or text.
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What poems link with the song Battle Scars? Poems: Shoved at
Memorial Park
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Shoved at Memorial Park By Marcel Currin A big kid is
eyeballing my son. The big kid is four years old. I hate him
already. Fletcher is two and a half, Trip-tropping over the
playground, A tiny fish on a busy reef. Whirling colours of
children Swirling over ladders, platforms, slides, Riding and
fighting the eddies. Fletcher in baggy shorts. Finding the gaps For
a quiet turn on things. He knows about stairs and ovens and knives
But who is this large And fierce boy? From the shadow of his
oversized cap He watches the talk, The nudge, and then The shove.
Noisy fish flapping overhead. My son at the bottom of a hard new
world. Glossed word Eddya small whirpool Source: Marcel Currin,
Shoved at Memorial Park, in Emma Neale (ed), Swings + roundabouts:
poems on parenthood (Aucklan: Godwit, 2008), p68.
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Perfect by Pink
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=212iYwq0nQ0&safe=active
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=212iYwq0nQ0&safe=active
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Made a wrong turn, Once or twice Dug my way out, Blood and fire
Bad decisions, That's alright Welcome to my silly life Mistreated,
misplaced, misunderstood Miss "no way, it's all good", It didn't
slow me down Mistaken, Always second guessing Under estimated,
Look, I'm still around Chorus Pretty, pretty please Don't you ever,
ever feel Like you're less than perfect. Pretty, pretty please If
you ever, ever feel Like you're nothing You are perfect to me.
You're so mean, When you talk, About yourself, You were wrong.
Change the voices, In your head Make them like you Instead. So
complicated, Look happy, You'll make it! Filled with so much hatred
Such a tired game. It's enough, I've done all I can think of Chased
down all my demons, I've seen you do the same. Chorus The whole
world stares so I swallow the fear, The only thing I should be
drinking is an ice cold beer. So cool in line and we try, try, try,
But we try too hard, it's a waste of my time. Done looking for the
critics, cause they're everywhere They don't like my jeans, they
don't get my hair We change ourselves and we do it all the time.
Why do we do that, Why do we do that... Why do we do that? Why do I
do that? (Why do I do that?) Chorus
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Titanium by David Guetta featuring Sia
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JRfuAukYTKg&safe=active
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JRfuAukYTKg&safe=active
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You shout it out, But I can't hear a word you say I'm talking
loud not saying much I'm criticized but all your bullets ricochet
You shoot me down, but I get up [Chorus:] I'm bulletproof, nothing
to lose Fire away, fire away Ricochet, you take your aim Fire away,
fire away You shoot me down but I won't fall I am titanium You
shoot me down but I won't fall I am titanium [Sia:] Cut me down But
it's you who'll have further to fall Ghost town and haunted love
Raise your voice, sticks and stones may break my bones I'm talking
loud not saying much [Chorus:] I'm bulletproof, nothing to lose
Fire away, fire away Ricochet, you take your aim Fire away, fire
away You shoot me down but I won't fall I am titanium You shoot me
down but I won't fall I am titanium I am titanium I am titanium
[Sia:] Stone-hard, machine gun Firing at the ones who run
Stone-hard as bulletproof glass [Chorus:] You shoot me down but I
won't fall I am titanium You shoot me down but I won't fall I am
titanium You shoot me down but I won't fall I am titanium You shoot
me down but I won't fall I am titanium I am titanium
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Take It Easy by Stan Walker
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uMT_kr-F7ZQ&safe=active
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uMT_kr-F7ZQ&safe=active
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Stronger days, Bitter nights, Cold hands, Warm heart, Walking
round, But you're staring at the ground, Take hold, fall apart.
Chorus Little by little, Someone blows the whistle, It don't matter
in the end, So just slow it all down, slow it all down. You gotta
take it easy, easy, Live your life, Take on any kind of weather you
and me together, We'll be fine, You gotta take it easy, easy Take
your time, It's just you and me together any kind of weather, We'll
be fine, Open road, broken down, Bright lights, dark town, Stand up
then you fall again, You will find a way in the end. Chorus You
gotta take it easy, easy, Live your life, Take on any kind of
weather you and me together, We'll be fine, You gotta take it easy,
easy, Take your time, It's just you and me together any kind of
weather, We'll be fine,
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Mirrors by Justin Timberlake
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U41KPUfOSFk&safe=active
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What poems link with these songs? 1. Titanium by David Guetta
2.Perfect by Pink 3. Haunted by Taylor Swift 4.Take It Easy by Stan
Walker 5.Mirrors by Justin Timberlake