11. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for

students to study science and mathematics than it is for them to study history and literature.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Education profoundly affects the lives of many people.While some of them

clearly play favorite with sciences, others consider learning liberal arts useful and

fun. As far as I am concerned, natural science subjects slightly have greater impacts

on people life2.

“Education profoundly affects many lives on the earth as a bridge from the human knowledge to the

bright prosperity. A path to succeed with everyone is completely different, some truly believe on the

importance of history and literature, but others involved me consider that mathematics and natural science are

better than other others “

Undeniably, studying maths and relevant subjects comprehensively offer

students chances to enhance intellectual and solid foundation for further

development of each person now and afterward. It is scientifically proved that

solving problems and doing science experiments effectively develop people’s

logical thinking ability and sensitive reaction. For instance, physics generally

provided basic knowledge about how to using household facilities proficiently as

well as giave explanations about natural things. Moreover, people who good at

scientific subjects taking an advantage of right hemisphere, good scientific

learners seemed easilyer to confront troubles and quickly find out solutions by

logically applying essential information. genetic benefits.

Câu mở đoạn phải của em là intellectual and solid foundation thì cả đoạn giải thích, bổ sung cho câu

đầu tiên. Nhưng em lại tiệp tục nêu ý và không đi sâu ở 2 ý nhỏ, thành ra bài của em có tới 4 ý, nhưng liên

kết bị lỏng ko chặt chẽ. Câu văn ổn, nhưng quan trọng nhất vẫn là ý và bố cục.

Có thể là sắp lại như dì

“Undeniably, doing with numerous equations and mathematical complex enhance intellectual and

solid foundation for further development as well as a good contribution for the IQ development both in

children and adult. By understanding and mastering principals of these fields, people’s logical thinking ability

and sensitive reaction are gained significantly. …………………………………….”

Offer students chances to enhance intellectual and solid foundation

Solving problems and doing science experiments effectively develop people’s logical thinking ability and sensitive reaction

confront troubles and quickly find out solutions by logically applying essential information.

Offer students chances to enhance intellectual and solid foundation

1. Enhance intellectual: By doing science experiments effectively develop people’s logical thinking ability and sensitive reactionConfront troubles and quickly find out solutions essential information.

Solid foundationExample: provided basic knowledge about how to using household facilities proficiently as well as gave explanations

Offer students chances to enhance intellectual and solid foundation

More importantly, people who had major in mathematics and science fields

are more competitive compare compared/ in comparison with history and

literature’s major in modern job market. Indeed, (indeed dùng sai nà, câu này hem

liên quan câu trên mừ,Scientific and technological knowledge are significantly

presented everywhere in our daily lives even in spiritual symbols and emotional

figures ,like love which belongs to liberal arts also take its origin from chemistry/al

reactions. Therefore,???it is essential to give scientific subjects more important role

than remaining majors. For example, graduates from natural science and economic

schools are tend to meet employers’ requirements as well as get higher salary than

both history and literature’ occupations.

“Đoạn này kỳ ở chỗ là em nói về thị trường lao động, lương cao, xong lại chuyển qua nói về spirit

&emo, love rồi kết luận therefore, give example về lương, nó không sai nhưng khá là rối, a nghĩ là câu

đầu câu cuối xếp lại gần nhau, rồi đến thứ tự các câu khác là okie, tốt hơn rất nhiều, với ngta ko trừ mình

lặp ý nữa nè

To extend broader in daily lives, a thousands of employees who graduated from universities related

to sciences are listed in top salary rank while historians and artists mostly have undergone with unstable

living conditions and low compensations as well as social welfare. …………………Invisibly but

permanently, science gives a hand to not only erase a mist of stupidity but also sustainably increase quality of

life for human being. “

Topic sentence: More competitive

spiritual symbols and emotional figures

??

Nevertheless, It is true that sciences and maths are an important part of our

lives,however,this should not mean that the achievements of other subjects are

belittled. A society needs comprehensive-educated people, including history,

geography and many others like music and arts.Similarly,a student cannot learn

science well without general knowledge of human evolution and scientific

history.Also Likewise, historical lessons widely learnt from experiences wisdom of

our ancestors. This is especially helpful for people who want to pursue further in

science fields as well as not repeat the same mistakes as our predecessors.

Good!!!

Given the above arguments, it is reasonable to conclude that both natural

science and history as well as other remaining liberal arts are compulsory subjects

and provide a full package for wiser and complete people.However,it is logically to

pay more attention on sciences.

Good!!!

Summary Note

Science

People

Subject

Natural

Chú ý tên môn học, một số môn cuối có s nha

Nhập nhằng giữa topic sentence và developing sentence

Các từ thay thế, historians, authors, economists

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x 8

x6

x5