Lesson Objectives

• To summarise key events in an extract to inform whole extract understanding

• To improve evaluation skills by incorporating evaluative language

• To use language and structure terminology accuratelyRecap of previous learning

➢How did Sir Charles Baskerville die, according to Dr Mortimer?

➢What impression did you get of Sherlock Holmes?

➢What genres were evident in last week’s extract?

Future Lessons

➢Consolidate knowledge and appreciation of a range of 19th century extracts/texts.➢Further develop and consolidate key skills in preparation for examinations.

Extract Two: AO4 Evaluation (15 marks)

In this extract there is an attempt to build up suspense. Evaluate how successfully this is achieved.

Tips:

➢Use the entire extract and refer to specific parts to show progression/build-up of suspense

➢Refer to writer’s intentions and reader’s response

➢Use evaluative language to make judgements on how well suspense builds: successfully, dramatically, effectively etc.

➢Don’t simply say that the writer does something, say how the effect of it is achieved through their writing.

Using critical and evaluative language

Refer more to the writer and what they are doing and how successfully

• The author deliberately constructs/creates the character of… Dr Mortimer to be trustworthy.• The writer cleverly deconstructs/dismantles the belief that… the hound may be more than legend.• Name strongly emphasises/reiterates the point/fact that… the hound may be responsible for the

death.• The writer repeatedly characterises Sir Charles as…. paranoid.• Name slowly illuminates/elucidates the question of/questions surrounding… the circumstances of

the death of Sir Charles.• The author emphatically demonstrates/reveals Sir Charles’ preoccupation with the legend of the

hound.• The writer gradually/immediately presents… a series of gothic conventions, beginning with the

curse of the hound of the Baskervilles.• Name exposes the hypocrisy/deceit (other relevant abstract noun) of… the vulnerability of Sir

Charles’ mental health.

Using critical and evaluative language

Refer more to the writer and what they are doing and how successfully

• The author deliberately constructs/creates the character of… Dr Mortimer to be trustworthy.• The writer cleverly deconstructs/dismantles the belief that… the hound may be more than legend.• Name strongly emphasises/reiterates the point/fact that… the hound may be responsible for the

death.• The writer repeatedly characterises Sir Charles as…. paranoid.• Name slowly illuminates/elucidates the question of/questions surrounding… the circumstances of

the death of Sir Charles.• The author emphatically demonstrates/reveals Sir Charles’ preoccupation with the legend of the

hound.• The writer gradually/immediately presents… a series of gothic conventions, beginning with the

curse of the hound of the Baskervilles.• Name exposes the hypocrisy/deceit (other relevant abstract noun) of… the vulnerability of Sir

Charles’ mental health.

Extract 2 from Chapter 6: First task

To help us identify key parts of the story, number every fifth line of the story (line 5, 10, 15 etc)

A paragraph break does not count as a line

There should be 56 lines in total

This extract

In this extract Dr Watson (Holmes’ sidekick) is journeying to Baskerville Hall with Henry Baskerville (who has inherited the property from his uncle) and Dr Mortimer, who we met last week

The extract considers the journey to Baskerville Hall, and the reactions of characters as they get closer then arrive

Setting is significant in this extract

Understanding the extract

• As you read make a note of the following:-

• What the focus of the extract is

• How the narrative unfolds

• Is there a turning point?

• How does the extract end?

• How do characters behave?

• What is the mood/atmosphere throughout the extract

• Highlight key language/structure features

Analysis Question

Analyse how Conan Doyle uses language and structure in lines 18-21 to engage the reader

Analysis Question

Analyse how Conan Doyle uses language and structure in lines 18-21 to engage the reader

Note:

• Both language and structure need to be covered – max 2/6 if you only do one or the other

• Stick to lines specified – nothing outside it will get any credit

• Link to specific impact on reader. Be precise – include the longer quotation if necessary then refer to the shorter one that will advance your point

• Don’t begin with anything like “in this extract Conan Doyle tries to engage the reader by using language and structure to” – waste of time and no marks

• In the quotation, “(include reference)” Conan Doyle’s use of (include technique) emphasises (include explanation). This impacts the reader by (include effect)

Analysis Question – have a go at answering the question first on your own – 10 minutes

Analyse how Conan Doyle uses language and structure in lines 18-21 to present the setting.

A cold wind swept down from it and set us shivering. Somewhere there, on that desolate plain, was lurking this fiendish man, hiding in a burrow like a wild beast, his heart full of malignancy against the whole race which had cast him out. It needed but this to complete the grim suggestiveness of the barren waste, the chilling wind, and the darkling sky

A cold wind swept down from it and set us shivering. Somewhere there, on that desolate plain, was lurking this fiendish man, hiding in a burrow like a wild beast, his heart full of malignancy against the whole race which had cast him out. It needed but this to complete the grim suggestiveness of the barren waste, the chilling wind, and the darkling sky.

The inhospitable weather is the immediate focus with the verb phrase ‘swept down’ suggesting the weather has powerful agency to control and assert itself over visitors to the moor. Additionally, the verb ‘shivering’ accentuates the feeling of the cold the visitors feel but also carries gothic foreboding of unknown dangers.

Complex sentence switches focus from the harsh weather to the unnerving presence of a mysterious and dangerous convict, with the embedded clauses “on that desolate plain” and “hiding in a burrow like a wild beast,” both adding to the mystery and the threat posed by the convict. Furthermore, the simile comparing him to a ‘wild beast’ suggests his animalistic qualities and that he may be at home in the wild moors, able to evade capture and remain a threat during Watson and Sir Henry’s visit.The main focus of the harsh

and unwelcoming landscape is returned to with the list of three noun phrases which effectively combine the emptiness of the scenery (“the barren waste”) with the hostility of the weather (“the chilling wind”) and the image of the “darkling sky” , which further suggests something ominous may be about to happen in this bleak, gothic setting.

Analysis Question – have another go at answering the question after the feedback, or analyse a different section. 10 minutes

Analyse how Conan Doyle uses language and structure in lines 18-21 to present the setting.

OR

Analyse how Conan Doyle uses language and structure in lines 1-13 to present startling information?

Peer assess both versions of the question – has your partner improved?

Evaluation Question

In the extract Conan Doyle attempts to create an atmosphere of unease.

Evaluate how effectively he does this.

Split the extract into three/four parts (beginning, middle, turning point, end)

Where is the turning point

Evaluation Question: Annotation development 1. How is setting used to convey uneasiness in lines 2-4, 17-22, 23-29,

45-51? (setting)

2. How does the story of the escaped convict contribute to unease in lines 6-17? How is the dialogue effective? Which theme does this introduce? (events/themes)

3. How do the reactions of Baskerville when arriving at Baskerville Hall reflect a sense of unease in lines 36-44? (ideas)

4. How does the dialogue in lines 52- the end contribute to a sense of uncertainty and mystery? (events/ideas)

Unease

Keep a focus on the question: ‘atmosphere of unease’ but do this without constantly repeating the word ‘unease’. Demonstrate you understand what this means by referring to similar words.

Synonyms for unease:-

Agitation Anxiety Disquiet Edginess Nervousness Dread

Other words give a slightly different meaning

Turbulence Instability Restiveness Mystery

In the extract Conan Doyle attempts to create an atmosphere of unease.Evaluate how effectively he does this

Remember to use evaluative language (think about the beginning of the lesson)

Remember to comment on how well something has been done

Do not comment on language and structure in any level of detail

Refer to Conan Doyle and reader impact throughout the answer

Aim for one detailed paragraph on each of the following:-

1. How the setting creates unease at various points (the location and later, the appearance of the house)

2. How the story of the escaped convict (and the reveal that he is a murderer) creates added alarm

3. How Baskerville’s behaviour contributes to the tension he is experiencing (asking about the place of his uncle’s death/balanced by him wanting to fix the problem by putting in lights).

4. The impact of the appearance of new characters at the end of the extract and the departure of Dr Mortimer.

Peer assess both versions of the question – has your partner improved?

Starter: Creative Task

Write a paragraph long description, using a range of sentence starters and structures, of what you can see. You can include further imaginative details, but you are not telling a story

Starter: Creative Task

The dismal land spread out in dreary undulations, with mist striking the horizon from all directions. A single tree, alone in its bareness, gave testament to a once thriving land of vegetation. Coarse grass and sharp thorn covered, the landscape spoke only of vast, inhospitable emptiness, and a propensity for danger.