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To understand the differences between ‘informal’ and ‘formal’ language

To write a formal letter to gain financial support and raise awareness for Disaster Day.

Excuse me, could you possibly pass the

salt, please?(FORMAL)

Can you pass me the salt?(INFORMAL)

• Write one paragraph to your ‘mate’ in text language. (You might like to report on some gossip!)

• Write one paragraph to Mrs Hannaford in formal language to thank her for her allowing this Friday’s mufti day funds to be given to Shelter Box.

Annotate this postcard, explaining how you can tell it is informally written.

Hi Katie,

Hello!! U alrite? I’m fab. Weather here is great!!! Yesterday I went to a water pk with some mates I’ve made – it was SOOO cool! I wish I didn’t have to come home (no offence). Well I better go coz I have sunbathing to do. Luv 2 Felix (meow!) Sian xxx

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Random Street Crime is Rising A national survey conducted by the Police Federation, reveals that we really are less safe on the streets than we were ten years ago. The recent, well-publicised attack on an elderly pensioner, Mrs Mary Evans, aged 86 of Devenish, brought the issue of street muggings back to the public’s attention. The publication of this report will simply confirm what many ordinary people have felt for some time: that police efforts to control street crime have failed. “It is now a matter of urgency that the government should recognise that it is its responsibility to tackle this issue. It cannot be right that the elderly should have to take their lives in their hands every time they step beyond their own front doors,” said Help The Aged’s spokesperson Helen Smith. “We claim to be a civilised country, yet it seems that our streets are not as safe as we should like to think. Perhaps it is time to reassess the priorities of the police force and target the unglamorous side of community policing: drugs seizures are undoubtedly important, but so is the day to day safety of vulnerable members of the community.”

Formal languageFormal language

No contracted words (can’t - can not) No abbreviations (fridge - refrigerator

T.V - television) Standard English (where’s that to? - where is that?) No colloquial/slang (it’s out of order! - That is not fair!)

No contracted words (can’t - can not) No abbreviations (fridge - refrigerator

T.V - television) Standard English (where’s that to? - where is that?) No colloquial/slang (it’s out of order! - That is not fair!)

DA FOREST

D = Direct languageA = Alliteration/AnecdoteF = FactsO = OpinionsR = Repetition/ Rhetorical QuestionE = Emotive languageS = StatisticsT = The Rule of Three

Purpose – why?

Audience – who? language style?

Layout – form?

Formal lettersFormal letters

In small groups, we must now plan and write a series of letters to local retailers, parents and fellow students to raise prizes and awareness for Disaster Day at SDCC!

Can we remember how to ensure that we structure (shape) our

writing effectively by planning?

Can we remember how to ensure that we structure (shape) our

writing effectively by planning?

FIVE STEPS PLANFIVE STEPS PLAN

1. PAL

2. Five points

3. Order

4. A FOREST

5. Proofread

1. PAL

2. Five points

3. Order

4. A FOREST

5. Proofread

Using connectives when writing to persuade…

EXPLAINING IDEAS

namely     

such as

as already stated 

for example

in other words 

PUTTING IDEAS IN ORDER

firstly    

  further

most  importantly 

secondly 

finally

lastly

ADDING TO IDEAS

in addition   

also       

   likewise       

 moreover

furthermore 

similarly

CONCLUSION therefore

    all this evidence  points to 

 

in conclusion 

finally

all in all  

Group work time…Group work time… You will be given some sugar paper and must plan

a formal letter.

Then you are going to write it as a group and share it with the others.

By the end of the lesson, we will have peer assessed our letters and typed them up onto SDCC headed paper to send off to our desired readerships.

You will be given some sugar paper and must plan a formal letter.

Then you are going to write it as a group and share it with the others.

By the end of the lesson, we will have peer assessed our letters and typed them up onto SDCC headed paper to send off to our desired readerships.