Social Networking Essay Feedback

•Students take notes on feedback. Teacher will use ELMO and the

PowerPoint to explain.

Do you have a title?• Social Networking Essay

• Communication Erosion

Introduction1. EXPOSITORY vs. PERSUASIVE: know the

difference. • It affects your thesis!• Have a THESIS! • Discuss pro’s + cons of this thesis:• Ex: Technology affects today’s world in a good

and nasty way.

Introduction sample• Intro: Social Networking has become a very

popular way of communicating, but it has had quite a few negative effects on society. People’s lives are affected by social networking whether they like it or not. (What’s wrong here?)

• THESIS = While some think otherwise, social networking is a menace just waiting to shatter the next generation.

Introduction Nowadays, there are various forms of

communication. There are texts, emails, the good ol’ phone call, letters through the mail, and then there are social networks. Communication methods have really evolved, and society has adapted to these social networking sites. Many speak about these sites with negative connotations, whereas Generation Y can’t seem to have enough of them. There are many reasons why these sites are sinister, although they really contribute to the growth of society and technology.

Body A (2 violations?)TS= First, you can talk and catch up with old friends that you haven’t seen in a long time. …

• 3rd person = formal. Do not use the 1st or 2nd person (I, me, my, our, we, us, your, you)

• TS is not your EX!• TS = There are many benefits to social

networking. In ___’s article, it states that “…” (Ham 6) + CM, EX2 + CM, CS

• note: Don’t end paragraph w/ a quote. (Add CM and explain).

Body B: The Counter-argument1. Acknowledge and refute the counter-

argument. 2. Use proper transitions (However, On the

other hand,….)3. TS = On the other hand, some feel that

certain drawbacks exist to engaging in the use of social networks. EX1+CM, EX2+CM, CS