Introduction Professional Writing: Introduction to stylistic editing (sentence- level correction)
Sentence Level Revisions
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Sentence Level Revisions
Oh, and 2.2 Workshop 1/2
Essay Check
Thesis Organizational Sentence (if you need one) Topic Sentence 1 Topic Sentence 2 Topic Sentence 3 Counterargument
integrated into paragraphs, placed at the end, or placed at the beginning
✔ Thesis
Does the thesis clearly identify the position of the argument?
Is the thesis arguable? Would anyone argue against you?
Is the thesis focused on a narrow topic?
✔ Organizational Sentence/Introduction
A statement telling the reader what major points you are going to cover
Do your topic sentences CLEARLY relate to your organizational statement and/or the thesis? Are they built off of it?
Do you set a clear structure for your paper? Do you set a clear scope (focus) for your paper? Do you follow the order of the topics you set up?
✔ Topic Sentences 1-3
Each topic is a mini thesis Each paragraph is a mini essay
Contains Opening Main idea Support Closing
ASK: does each sentence in the paragraph directly support this topic sentence? The thesis?
Body Sentences…
All of the information in each sentence needs to be relevant
Cut fluff Check that all your sentences answer the
question “so what?”
Body Sentences…
Find your pronouns: “it,” “they, “these,” “them”; can you fill that space with a better word or phrase?
Make stronger sentences by removing “to be” verbs
Still stuck? Try removing as many articles (a, an, the) as possible (and reasonable)
Sentence Level Revision
5 R’s { Restructure sentences or p.graph
Reword concepts Reorder sentences or
comp’s Remove sentences and
fluff Readdress thesis/topic
Try this!
Make sure you have a thesis that is Arguable Strong Clear Focused
Take a paragraph, at least 6-8 sentences, and revise it using 3-5 of the 5 R’s
You have 10-15 minutes
Now Trade!
1. Evaluate their thesis: Is the thesis
arguable? (would anyone disagree or argue against them?)
Is the thesis strong? Is the thesis clear? Is the thesis
focused?
2. Look at their revision compared to their original:
What R’s did they use? Is the revision stronger?
Why? Why not?
Would you change anything?
Give their revision a grade: A: no change required B: some change required C: much change required
5-10 minutes
BA8
Revise a substantial body paragraph from 2.1 (at least 6-8 sentences)
Write a short summary and evaluation of your revisions. Explain the revisions you have made and their impact
on the audience, purpose, and meaning of your draft as a whole.
No length requirement, but make sure you have at least 6-8 sentences to revise
BA8 Deliverables
Statement of thesis Original paragraph Revised paragraph Summary of Revisions
DUE TuesDAY Apr
19TH= Before
Wednesday
Helpful Readings
Chapter 42 in the E-handbook