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Description of conflict: Inc and

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Please give the author 5 suggestions on how to improve their story.Remember that you can give them ideas, or explain that some partswere confusing to you. Please remember to be specific.

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CORRECTIONS

1) Circle all missing or extra capital letters. (Remember there should

be capital letters at the beginning of every sentence, and for people

and place names. There should not be capital letters in the middle of

sentences or words for no reason.)

2) Underline any spelling mistakes that you find.

3) Draw a squiggle line under any sentence that does not make

sense or is confusing. (For example if it does not contain a verb or

starts with and, if, but)

Please remember that you will be marked on the quality

of the corrections, suggestions and compliments that

you give during the peer editing process.

Brainstorm

Name: AnYlDrJQ Sro;K? i Group: 52

Get some story ideas onto paper. You can start with any of the following:

Character: think of interesting people. (Physical and personality)

Conflict: a problem to be solved.

Theme: something you want your reader to learn from your story.

Random Story ideas and thoughts

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CRITERION C: STYLE AND LANGUAGE MECHANICS

How well can you:S use appropriate and varied register, vocabulary and idiom?

V use correct grammar and syntax?•S use appropriate and varied sentence structure?

•/ use correct spelling/writing (in a standard form of English)?

•/ use language to narrate, describe, analyse, explain, argue, persuade, inform, entertain and express feelings?

S use language accurately?

Notes: "Oratory technique" refers to a combination of pronunciation (clarity not accent) intonation, tone, pitch, inflection, pace,

pausing, voice control, volume, projection, body language, gesture, eye contact, as applicable to English.

.This criterion can be applied to oral, written and visual work.

Achievement level Level descriptor

I do not reach a standard described by any of the descriptors below

1-2

I employ a very limited and repetitive range of appropriate vocabulary, idiom and sentence

structure. There are very frequent errors in grammar and syntax, which persistently hinder

communication. There is very little or no evidence of a register and style that serve the

context and intention. There are very frequent errors in punctuation and spelling/writing,

which persistently hinder communication. In oral/presentation work there is little or no

competence in oratory technique.

3-4

I employ a limited range of occasionally appropriate vocabulary, idiom and sentence

structure. There are frequent errors and/or a lack of variety in grammar and syntax, which

hinder communication. I make an attempt to use register and style that serve context and

intention. There are regular errors in punctuation and spelling/writing, which hinder

communication. In oral/presentation work there is limited competence in oratory

technique.

I sometimes employ a range of appropriate and somewhat varied vocabulary, idiom and

sentence structure. Grammar and syntax are usually varied and correct; some errors may

sometimes hinder communication. I sometimes use a register and style that serve the

context and intention. Punctuation and spelling/writing are largely correct, but contain

some errors, which sometimes hinder communication. In oral/presentation work there is

adequate competence in oratory technique.

IB Standardized Assessments

LCCHS 2011-2012

7-8

i employ a range of generally appropriate use of vocabulary, idiom and sentence structure.

Grammar and syntax are generally accurate; occasional errors rarely hinder communication.

I use a generally appropriate register and style that serve the context and intention.

Punctuation and spelling/writing are largely correct; infrequent errors rarely hinder

communication. In oral/presentation work there is a good level of competence in oratory

technique.

9-10

I employ an appropriate and effective range of vocabulary, idiom and sentence structure.

Grammar and syntax are accurate; very infrequent errors do not hinder communication. I

demonstrate excellent choice of a register and style that serve the context and intention.

Punctuation and spelling/writing are accurate; very infrequent errors do not hinder

communication. In oral/presentation work there is a high level of competence in oratory

technique.

o IB Standardized Assessments

LCCHS 2011-2012