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Essay Plan Feedback


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Our Number One Concern

Are you addressing the essay question.

Evaluating all three ethics models

Evaluating the situation from the Managers

perspective (Sporting Store/Mining Manager)

This is not an issue of the ethical practices of Nike.

This is not an issue of whether the mine site should go

ahead.


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Identification of issues

effective introduction

Introduction is integral to the structure of your argument argument.

Background Information (Nike/Whitehaven)

The ethical dilemma the manager is

facing

The three ethicalmodels/thesis

statement

Why the selectedmodel is the most

appropriate


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Thesis Statement

Your proposition statement is the most important sentence in

your essay. It sets out what you are going to do and what

position you are taking in the essay. Not only does the

proposition give you direction, but it also gives the reader

direction.Example: This essay will explore the impact of a range of

staffing problems on the hospitality and catering

industry and suggest some possible solutions.

Each paragraph you write must add to, or be related to, your

proposition in some way and should propel the argument

forward.


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Relevant Information

How grades were lost

Not addressing all three ethics models adequately

Not developing an argument that was related to

management/ethics/academic information

Having off topic information

Examples: Discussing other companies

Discussing Nikes past in too greater detail

Having an environmental rant, discussing the validity of the Coal

Mines.


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Terminology

You must acknowledge the author of

management terminology.

The knowledge regarding the different

ethics models is NOT common knowledge.

Therefore you MUST acknowledge the

source


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Critical Analysis

How marks were lost:

Arguments were opinion based

Arguments were irrelevant

Argument was taken from the incorrect perspective

No academic journals to support the arguments

A great reliance on biased or dodgy websites


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Critical Analysis

Each paragraph should:

discuss one main idea;

have a topic sentence that relates to the thesis statement in

some way;

have internal organisation (paragraphs need to define,

describe, explain, give examples, analyse and conclude a

particular aspect of the essay topic); and

be clearly and logically linked to the preceding and/or

following paragraphs with appropriate connecting expressionssuch as:As a result.; Another key aspect of this question

is.....


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Critical Analysis

Your essay discussion should evaluate and analyse the

information from journal articles and other sources you have

consulted. Reading material is used as evidence to promote

your own ideas - your voice within the essay.


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Examples of Failing to Critically

Analyse the Situation - Stakeholders Sporting Store

Using , the sporting store will decided not

stock Nike products.

What about the Stakeholders?

Customers? The sporting stores shareholders, could this affect how many

employees you can continue to hire. Etc.

Using , the manager will decided not take

the job.

(The manager already works for Whitehaven) What about the stakeholders?

Will this impact the environment? How will this affect the individual? Are

you the most suited individual for the job, will you be letting your

company down?


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Conclusion

The conclusion summarises the findings of the essay, that is, the

main points and the results. Although it does not introduce newinformation, the conclusion can look at the consequences

and/or impact on the future.

The conclusion should reiterate why the ethical model you have

selected is the most appropriate to use. The conclusion should

reiterate the benefits/harms the stakeholders could face as a

result of that decision.


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Referencing Conventions

Alphabetical Order

Indentation

Missing informationDoi and Urls etc.

Incorrect Order of Information

Authors first names are always expected.


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In-Text References

Only surnames are required

Full stop after in-text references

Quotes require page numbers

All of the authors surnames are required.

Only the first three words of an article with no author are

required.


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Sources

Two-thirds of the sources need to be from scholarly journals

and scholarly books.

If you are chasing a D or HD, for the final essay you will be

required to have a surplus of academic journal articles

WWW sources should be minimal.


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Credibility of Resources

i.e.

www.hoow.com

http://www.tutor2u.net/

http://www.mightystudents.com/

www.ehow.com

Wordpress

Any website that uses numerals instead of expanded words.

i.e. www.essayhelp4u.comThis website is not suitable

Do not use websites with incorrect spelling, or essay sample websites.
http://www.hoow.com/http://www.hoow.com/http://www.tutor2u.net/http://www.mightystudents.com/http://www.ehow.com/http://www.essayhelp4u.com/http://www.essayhelp4u.com/http://www.ehow.com/http://www.mightystudents.com/http://www.tutor2u.net/http://www.hoow.com/http://www.hoow.com/http://www.hoow.com/http://www.hoow.com/


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Definitions

Definitions for academic terminology MUST come from an

academic book.

An www.dictionary.comis not appropriate.
http://www.dictionary.com/http://www.dictionary.com/


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Control of Syntax

Ensure your essay has a structure, that you argument flows. A

cohesive argument should be apparent when reading the essay.


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Introduction and Conclusions

Do Not Match The essays introduction should therefore have a few

sentences setting out the background or current situation of

the topic to be discussed. You then need to indicate the

approach you are going to take in a proposition statement:

that is, what you are specifically going to discuss, examine orargue and what evidence you intend to provide.

The conclusion summarises the findings of the essay, that is,

the main points and the results. Although it does not

introduce new information, the conclusion can look at the

consequences and/or impact on the future.


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Leading In

When referencing, it is important to lead in to quotes or

paraphrasing. The lead-in allows the reader to follow the

reasoning of the up-coming information.

Examples of leading-in:

Jones (2005, 4) states that company managers must regulate

office procedures.

Jones and Watson (2007) believe teamwork issues must be

carefully considered and


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Leading Out

Leading out concludes an idea.

Example of leading-out:

In conclusion, the views expressed by Johnson (2006) would

indicate that successful cross-cultural interactions are

necessary for business success.


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First-Person v Third-Person

NarrativeFirst person narrative is applicable in such situation where you

are telling a story or writing a reflective essay. However in this

situation you are writing an academic paper critically analysing

the situation. Your argument will be constructed with academic

sources, not your own personal stories; therefore third personnarrative is expected.


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Abusing Quote Usage

Quotes should be used to supplement your argument not

write your argument

You cannot just insert a quote into the text and expect the

reader to know.


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EXAMPLE: Inappropriate

quote usage Meindl & Ehrlich (1987, 3) argued the actual influence of

leaders on organizational outcomes is overrated and

romanticized as a result of biased attributions about leaders .

However, Day and Lord (1988, 56) argued it is largely

recognised and accepted by practitioners and researchers thatleadership is important, and research supports the notion that

leaders do contribute to key organizational outcomes.

The authors voice is not present!

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