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ENG 368By: Christine Kelly Due: December 6, 2013
Table of Contents
#1. Parallel Structure [Written Reflection ENG 305]……………………………………………Pg. 3-4
#2. Types of Phrases [Descriptive Piece]………………………………………………………..Pg.5
#3. Conciseness [Review- ENG 305]………………………………………………………Pg.6-7
#4. Tenses [Grammar in Context]……………………………………………………Pg. 8-9
#5. Conciseness, Pronoun Ambiguity, Attention to tone [Letter- ENG 305]]……………………………………………………….Pg.10-11
#6. Lengthening Sentences [Exercise 7H]]………………………………………………………..……Pg.12
#7. Appositive Phrases, Parallel Structure [Exercise 8F]]………………………………………………….…………Pg. 13
#8. Sentence Patterns, Parallel Structures [Assignment on Moodle]]……………………………………………..…Pg.14
#9. Comma Placement, Sentence Variety [Narrative Vignette]]…………………………………………………..…Pg.15
#10. Cumulative- Grammar Strategies [Exercise 5E]]……………………………………………………….……Pg.16
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# 1. Written Reflection- REVISION
After reading My Grandfather as Teacher and Creating Relationships with
Students, common themes between the two pieces illustrate the necessary qualities of a
great teacher. Both pieces reveal the importance of reflection. In My Grandfather as
Teacher, the author describes his grandfather as his “very best teacher ever,” and goes on
to explain, “my grandfather was like a sculptor who carved and molded my imagination.
His teaching made me think, question, and reflect.” Here the author is suggesting that his
grandfather was a great teacher because he taught him how to reflect on what he was
learning. In Creating Relationships with Students, the author shows his thought process
as he “reflects back” on his experience in a practice teaching session. This is effective
because it allows the reader to see how this teacher bettered his methods and practice by
looking back and analyzing. Both pre-service teacher journals show me, as a prospective
teacher, the value and self-discovery that lie in the act of reflecting.
A moment of such reflection occurred for me during my first semester as a
college freshman. Being away from my family and my hometown really made me reflect
on my life and discover myself. The reflecting I’ve done has helped me to establish my
identity. I was able to realize that family is the most important aspect of my life. Being so
far from home made me think about how I acted when I was home with family. As a
result, I realized that I spent too much time trying to hang out with friend and too little
time enjoying and spending time with my family. This is normal for most teenagers to do,
but I think that this internal reflection made me a better person. By this I mean that I
realized how lucky I am to have the family and support system that I do. My classes in
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college have helped me to think more critically, and I feel grateful that this thought
process led to a reflection on my life.
Another moment of reflection occurred for me during my sophomore year of
college when I was taking EDU 280. In this class, my fellow classmates and I went to
NCCS and shadowed middle and high school teachers. During this experience, our
teachers encouraged our involvement in their classrooms. After each week, we completed
reflections about our observations in the school. Each week, I spent hours writing these
reflections because I found that through my writing process, I was discovering more
meaning than I ever could have thought possible. Through these reflections, I reassured
myself that teaching was what I wanted to do with my life. My teachers have taught me
the value of reflecting as both a student and as a teacher. Reflection shows the true value
of recursive thinking in teaching. In my classroom, I want to put an emphasis on
reflection in order to give students a better understanding of their own purpose in
learning.
REFLECTION #1
After re-reading this draft, I realized that this piece had been written before I had
begun to conceptualize and apply the material I learned in grammar class. Parallel
structure, wordiness, and improper use of tenses are three concepts that needed to be
addressed. Parallel structure adds fluidity and balance to my reflection, while the deletion
of extra words allows for less confusion on behalf of the reader. By revising this piece, I
also realized that in some cases where I used the past tense, I really should have used the
present perfect. Present Perfect tense is more appropriate because the feelings and events
discussed are carried over into the present.
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#2. Descriptive Piece
Noun Phrases- ____________________
Prepositional Phrases- _________________
Adjectives- word
Adjective Phrases- [ ]
My bedroom is [colorful and bright.] There are posters and pictures on my wall.
Under my bed, there are a million pairs of shoes; [comfortable and fancy]. My bed,
across from my desk, is small, but not uncomfortable. The pillows; [fluffy and new], are
clouds for my head to rest upon. My desk, [spacious and brown], gives me a lot of room
to work with. Folders and notebooks are spread across the area, could use some
organization. My fan cools me down from this late September heat wave. [Tall and
white], it definitely helps me sleep at night. Laundry baskets, wooden dressers, and
binders aren’t as bright as the rest of my décor. My calendar of pictures, memories and
dates, continues to remind me. My alarm clock, with the never-ending beeping and
flashing blue, takes me out of my dreams. The walk- in closet behind the door holds a
year’s worth of options.
REFLECTION #2
Not only did this descriptive piece help me learn to describe objects in a creative
way, but also it taught me exactly what types of devices I was using to do so. This
exercise allowed me to use fragments in order to play around more stylistically with my
writing. In this piece, I used many linking verbs without thinking twice. By learning what
these type of verbs were called, I was able to use them more effectively in order to get
my point across.
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#3. Review
Megan Palevich serves as a role model to all pre service teachers, especially
through the creation of her eighth grade blog, Down the Digital Rabbit Hall. Palevich
begins her assignment by creating a theme, “Identity- who are you?” By setting this
theme early on, Mrs. Palevich was able to shape her assignment in a way that allows
students to understand the purpose of the assignment in a technologically creative way.
Through the use of her feedback, a variety of resources, and motivation through personal
connection, Palevich was able to reach her teacher objectives for her assignment. These
objectives include preparing students for high school along with making students “better
writers, thinkers, and creators of digital content.”
The assignment itself is very detailed and specific, letting students know exactly
what Mrs. Palevich is looking for in her final exam. The assignment takes the most
fundamental of elements such as character and setting, and challenges students to analyze
these elements by thinking in a critical way. Critical thinking and analysis will not only
help prepare students for high school, but will also help to better them as readers and
writers. Each section of this assignment requires students to provide evidentiary support
from the text in order to back up their claims, therefore teaching students the importance
of close reading and detailed evidence. Each section gives students an approximation of
how long each paragraph should be, leaving nothing for the students to be confused
about.
The final product created by these eighth grade student bloggers is representative
of how much each student has learned. Corrine’s example is given as an exemplary blog
and exhibits how interested students can become in an assignment that is meshed with
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technology. The variety of resources used in preparing students for this final project
allowed students to understand the elements that make up a story without overwhelming
them. After completing this section and assignment on Alice and Wonderland, the
students in Mrs. Palevich’s 8th grade class have learned how to use technology to make
them better readers and writers, therefore better preparing them for high school.
REFLECTION #3
This piece is one I had written in my Teaching Writing to Adolescents class.
When re-writing this review, I became aware of the diction I was using. When using
words like “basic,” I could have been using words like “fundamental,” which better
portrays the message I was trying to send to my readers. I also noticed that there were
places within this review where I could have been more concise by taking out
unnecessary words. These words only created extra confusion and wordiness. This was
challenging for me because of all of the years spent adding extra words to my writing.
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#4. Grammar in Context
Present Tense- red
Present Continuous- yellow
Present Perfect- green
Past- blue
Passive Voice- purple
Past Perfect- orange
Past Perfect Continuous- maroon
Future- pink
I am in the tenth grade and it is my first year playing Varsity soccer. I am so
nervous about my first home game this afternoon against South Kortright. My parents,
friends, and teachers are going to be here to watch. These pre-game jitters fade away as I
begin to focus on my warm up. Running around the field puts me in my comfort zone. I
am ready to play. The whistle blows and we are off.
There were five minutes left in the first half of the game and the score was tied 1-
1. Amanda had taken a shot on goal but missed. Erica trapped the goalie’s punt and we
took off down the field. We had been playing poorly up until this point. Erica had made a
beautiful pass across the field, I kicked it in the back corner of the net, and the crowd
erupted. Our defense held strong and South Kortright could not put another goal in the
net. I had just scored the winning goal of the game.
After I scored the first goal of my varsity career, Erica carried me across the field.
Our team surrounded us in a huge hug and I don’t think I will ever forget this moment.
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Erica’s mother had taken a picture of her carrying me across the field, and it is still one of
my favorite pictures. While in college, I have missed being a part of a sport’s team.
REFLECTION #4
This exercise helped to teach me the tenses by reinforcing them through use and
recognition. Not only am I now able to recognize each tense, but also I am able to
logically switch between them. This exercise also taught me the difference between past
tense and passive voice, which is something I didn’t know before taking this course. This
exercise is one that I may be able to use with my future students to make them more
aware of the tenses that they are using in their writing.
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#5. Letter
To Mr. Smith,
My name is Christine Kelly. I am a resident of Wilson Hall, living on the 6 th floor.
I am writing because I desperately need your help resolving issues with my roommate.
The problem includes a major disregard for cleanliness, theft of personal property, and
action that defies the pre-signed roommate agreement. My roommate’s actions don’t only
make me uncomfortable, but also pose a risk to the livability of this room for future
residents.
My roommate’s name is Nikki Carson. There are numerous obstacles holding us
back from being compatible roommates. Her side of the room is a disaster at all times and
smells terrible. A horrendous odor emanates from the two month supply of garbage she
has held hostage inside of her closet. The mold is building up in the closet to the point
where the entire unit may need to be replaced. Also, upon coming into the room, Nikki’s
clothing and notebooks are all over my bed, leaving me with very little space or privacy.
She proceeds to wear all of my clothing and steal my food without asking my permission.
It is impossible for me to study and finish my assignments because she continues blasting
the music, even when I request that she turn it down. She also goes out very often on
school nights, while I go to bed. She then returns home early in the morning, turns the
light on, and wakes me up. I can’t truly dedicate myself to my schoolwork with this
amount of unnecessary stress.
I appreciate any effort you may be able to take in addressing this issue. Action is
necessary for my success as a college student as well as for the reputation of your dorm
building. Incoming freshman would not be interested in living in Wilson Hall if they
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knew that this type of property damage had occurred in their room prior to their arrival.
Thank you so much for your time.
Sincerely,
Christine Kelly
Room 60 D Wilson Hall
(845) 901-3664
REFLECTION #5
Writing this letter in ENG 305 helped me learn to write a specific audience while
allowing me to practice my newly learned grammar skills. Looking back on this piece, I
can see that I could have made many of my sentences more concise and to the point. I
also noticed some pronoun ambiguity that could be fixed by adding the subject to its
description. Without this grammar class, I don’t think I would have been able to fix these
errors so easily. Knowing the terms for these errors I’m making also helps me to be more
conscious of structure and less likely to make these errors to begin with.
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#6- Exercise 7H
1, To train for a half marathon, I used a twelve-week training schedule. The trick was
drinking plenty of water, stretching out before and after each run, and taking care of my
body to keep it in the best condition.
2. Scrubbing hard, she used the worn sponge to remove grease from the pan, cursing
under her breath, hands clenched.
3. I remember going to my grandfather’s funeral, sobbing into my father’s shoulder,
accepting that my life would never be the same.
4. I remember holding my nephew for the first time, staring into his eyes, wondering if
he’ll ever love me as much as I love him.
REFLECTION #6
Exercise 7H taught me how to use verbal phrases and modifiers to lengthen
sentences and add variety. Before this exercise, I used to consider such sentences as
either fragments or run-ons, but I now understand that these sentences can be used to a
writer’s advantage. What I really like about this exercise is that in order to learn these
strategies I was mimicking famous writers such as Tim O’Brien. By mimicking Tim
O’Brien, I now know that practicing replicating the works of renowned writers can teach
me sentence structures that will add variety to my own work.
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#7. Exercise 8F
1. I was prepared for my new job, hair styled, makeup applied, confidence checked.
2. The vampire enters the bedroom, sniffing the air, scoping out his surroundings,
thirsting for blood.
3. The cottage appeared to be uninhabited, mice scurrying across the floor, cobwebs
forming in every corner, must air filling my nose.
4. The waiter brought us a hamburger, cheese melting, onion topping, mouth watering.
5. The waiter brought us a hamburger, mold building, grease leaking, fries burning.
REFLECTION #7
This exercise taught me how to create absolute phrases, which is another way to
lengthen and add variety to my sentences. By doing so, I also realized the importance of
parallel structure in such sentences. Adding balance and repetition to sentences that
contain absolute phrases makes sentences have more fluidity and cohesion. Forming
parallel structure was difficult for me prior to this class, in that it was something I never
really paid much attention to in my writing. As a result, professors would always correct
this in my essays, but I didn’t understand what I was doing wrong. Awareness of parallel
structure has changed my perspective in both editing and writing.
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#8. Moodle Assignment
1.) I know that I wanted to go out tonight, that all of my friends were, and that drinks
were only two dollars.
2.) Home to me is a comfortable, cozy place where I can play with my nephew, hike
mountains, and have family dinner every Sunday.
3.) My boss told me to fill the saltshakers, to light the candles, to fold the napkins and to
put them on the table.
4.) Chad plays the drums all around the world, surfs in Montauk and fundraises for
charity.
5.) The old bicycle, rusty and worn, made its way around the path, switched gears, and
climbed the hill.
6.) Evan works hard in school, attends his honor society meetings, reads his assignments
with ever-growing interest.
7.) I walked out of the door, brushed my hair out of my eyes, and ran into the tall, dark
pole.
8.) Tyler was an intelligent person with a Colgate smile, big heart, and a big future ahead
of him.
REFLECTION #8
Similarly to the previous exercise, this assignment from our Moodle site taught
me the benefits of parallel structure. Without balance in each sentence, its meaning could
be compromised. This assignment helped me to practice creating parallel structure in my
sentences so that I can use it in my every day writing. The Moodle assignment continued
to expose me to a variety of sentence patterns that I can also use in my writing.
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#9. Narrative Vignette
As a twin, I had to learn to share much earlier than the average child. Sharing a
room, our toys, and our parents was the hardest for us to deal with. One day, after I had
lost my doll, I decided to claim Emily’s doll as my own. Screaming and crying, she
latched onto her doll with every fiber of her being. Unfortunately for her, I grabbed onto
the doll’s head with my tiny little fingers and vowed to never let go. Tugging with all of
my might, I braced my feet and the doll’s head separated from its body. Now, no one got
to have the doll.
REFLECTION #9
As one of the last activities of our class, this activity put numerous of my newly
acquired grammar skills to work. Firstly, I paid attention to comma placement, which is
something I am still working on, but is also an aspect of my writing where I’ve seen great
improvement. This exercise made me think about many of the comma rules and place
them in the correct positions. This activity also helped me to continue using the past
participle in a way that enhances my writing. Another aspect that this exercise helped me
to practice was using adjective phrases. I used adjective phrases unknowingly prior to this
class, and now can use them to better describe the nouns in my sentences.
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#10. Exercise 5E
During the last week of May, I drove my packed car to Montauk, NY, the very
end of Long Island. By the end of this drive, I arrived at my destination, hugging my
sister, who opened the back of my car and began to help unpack. I was so thankful to my
sister for getting me this job as I took a tour of the beautiful establishment, which was
right on the water, looking out at a different sunset each night. My managers welcomed
me with hugs and introduced me—a bunch of employees smiling at me as I joined their
team. Bright-eyed and outgoing, they showed me the ropes while I stood taking it all in,
thinking of my family, and wondering if this great opportunity in front of me might
alleviate some of my homesickness.
REFLECTION #10
Exercise 5E is the most cumulative activity of the semester. This exercise shows
an abundance of skills I learned in grammar class, while allowing me to be creative as
well. Techniques such as fragments, dashes, and early modifiers are great additions to
sentences that lengthen sentences, add variety, and add clarity. I never realized that
adverb phrases were also early modifiers that give the reader a sense of time. I think that
this technique is very effective and makes paragraphs a lot more cohesive. I will continue
to practice many of these skills so that they can remain prominent in both my teaching
and in my writing.
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