Coursework Marking Task

YR 12 Media AFL Activity Print

AFL

Evaluating Peer Work

Eleanor Guiver

AS Print Level Descriptors Level awarded


Activity 1

Use the mark scheme below and work in pairs to grade the 4 exemplar pieces of work. You must try and place the work into the correct level. Wherever possible you should use a ‘best fit’ model, this means that you take an overall view rather than harshly penalising for one fault. Use the space provided to give specific examples and write a summary comment at the bottom of the page. You are examining the ENTIRE MAGAZINE

NON STOP POP

Minimal Level 110 – 23 marks

Basic Level 2 24–35 marks

ProficiencyLevel 3 36–47 marks

ExcellenceLevel 448–60 marks

framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate

Some have shadows behind the model and most are not centre framed.

using a variety of shot distances as appropriate

There is some variety of shot distances but most are mid shots.

shooting material appropriate to the task set

Model has a decent look. Make up matches genre of magazine but some outfits do not suit. E.g knitted jumper.

selecting mise-en-scène including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting

Appropriate colours chosen to match the genre of the magazine. Variety of different outfits used although some do not really suit genre of magazine (knitted jumpers.) Use of a mirror as a prop.

manipulating photographs as appropriate to the context for presentation, including cropping and resizing

Photoshopping is good with little noticeability of the use of editing. Resizing onto the page is also very good.

accurately using language and register

Language is very poorly constructed e.g ‘How was you discovered’ However it is very suitable to its genre e.g ‘Hey girls’ and ‘girly gossip’

appropriately integrating illustration and text

Poor measurements. Columns on contents page and



double page are different widths. Some text does not fit fully onto the front page.

showing understanding of conventions of layout and page design

Cover page is busy which is suited to pop magazines. Contents page and double page spread also have a decent layout although the photos all being crammed in one corner of the double page is not appealing at all.

showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text size

Large variety of fonts and good variety of different sizes as well.

using ICT appropriately for the task set

Photoshop is used well as well as other ICT options being taken advantage of.

Summary Comment

Overall I would grade this magazine in the Level 3 Proficiency boundary as it has a lot of the elements present that make a good magazine and is very suited to both the chosen music genre it is and the target market.



FLAWD






Adequate framing but some angles are not appealing.


Close up, mid-long shot, and mid shot used. Good variation.


Model has a good look for the genre of magazine and has appropriate positions as well.


Colours are appropriate but backgrounds of photos are a bit messy and unprofessional. Use of guitar as a prop.


Contents page photo is blurred. The small photo on the front page looks stretched. It is obvious that the main photo on the double page is cropped onto the page.


Informal interview used which is more appropriate than formal.


Can’t read masthead properly on contents page. Cover page is too busy for the genre that the magazine is. Font on contents is unattractive. Double page spread has a quote that is not equally spaced out between paragraphs around it.


Front page is too busy for the genre. Contents page is easy to follow but looks a bit



cramped. Equally spaced columns on the double page. However, other half of page is not laid out very well.


Little size variation but good amount of font variation.


Front page and double page photos are not smoothly cut out and so becomes evident that ict has been used to do so.

Summary CommentOverall I would put this magazine in the Basic boundary level as it could do with quite a few improvements but does have potential.



STACK






Very good framing of shots. Makes the photos seem like they were done professionally.


Large variety of shot distances, including landscape shots and photos of objects to give variety.


Model looks the part and poses very well. It looks very good in the magazine.


Choice of mise en scene is also excellent. The props and sets used are very suited to the genre of magazine.


Resizing of photos is done very well. Cropping round the cover page photo also very good.


Informal interview conducted. Informal and taboo text used throughout magazine, which is well suited to the indie rock genre it is. Quotes used are effective.


Some text is written on top of photos (double page) but looks good and is still readable. Contents page has exact aligned boxes and photos.


Cover page is very well laid out and is simplistic. Layout of contents page is slightly difficult to follow. Double page grabs my attention and layout is well



done with equal width colums.


Large variety of text size but no variety in fonts.


Very good use of ict. Can be seen in the transparent text boxes, the cropping on the cover page photo, and the manipulated photo on the left hand page of the double page spread. All done very well and is effective.

Summary Comment I would grade this magazine in the level 4 ‘Excellent’ boundary as it looks almost like a real magazine and has very good use of images.



DUBZONE






Basic framing, nothing stands out.


Mid shot, close up and mid-long shot used.


Models do not look the part and the poses are very boring.


Guitar being used for a dubstep magazine. No variety in backgrounds of photos.


Photos cut off in places. No cropping. Resizing is okay.


Language and register is very poor. It does not suit the genre of music magazine that t is supposed to be and some sentences are poorly constructed.


Text box on front page cuts off top of persons head. Double page spread has writing going over box lines and photos. Text boxes also cover a photo.


Boxes placed incorrectly. Barcode too big. Masthead for contents and cover are different fonts. Contents page is boring and text layout is uneven. No structure at all to double page spread. Not enough photos used



throughout magazine. No page numbers used.


Very little size variation and no font variation. Chosen font is unattractive and hard to read.


ICT poorly used and maker of this magazine clearly has not taken advantage of possible ICT that could have been used e.g. Photoshop.

Summary CommentVery poorly made magazine and needs massive improvements. It does not look like a real magazine and I would not pick it up let alone buy it.



Task 2Now using the skills you’ve acquired in task 1, evaluate your own work and then two pieces of work from classmates. Use the space provided to give specific examples and write a summary comment at the bottom of the page.

Magazine title: Instinct






Photos are framed in the centre, but don’t really make the photos stand out.


Minimal shot distances used throughout the magazine. Too many mid-shots.


Models have an indie look but the photos do not bring the look out very much.


No props used, backgrounds are plain with shadow in some. Needs more colour.


The cropping of the photo on the contents page is done okay but there are some areas where it is obvious. Resizing is done well.


Informal register but use of a formal interview.


The text is clear and easy to read on double page and cover page. On the contents page there is some overlap that is not done well and is hard to read.


Barcode is too big and probably could make everything central. Should make contents subheadings in bold. Columns are equally spaced on



contents and double page. Not too much text on double page spread. Drop capital used. But, last column on double page is not good – one sentence of the interview looks bad.


Some variety in fonts but only small. Larger variety of sizes used.


There is clear good use of ICT to crop photos and size columns.

Summary CommentI would put this magazine in the higher marks of basic level as the contents page let’s the magazine down a bit and the cover and double page spread could also do with some small improvements.



Magazine title: Libertie






Good framing of photos. They are all at slightly different angles which makes the images look more interesting.


Some variety but only small. Use of a mid-shot on cover and a mid-long shot on the contents. Use of four mid-shots on double page but it is a good look.


Very good model. Very indie look and the use of make up highlights the genre of the magazine.


Very good use of colour for the front cover. Contents page looks quite plain. The use of a black shirt in all the photos makes the double page spread look very polished but it could use some colour or a background to make it look more interesting.


Very good use of cropping out photos, especially on the double page spread. Resizing is also good – no stretched or blurred images.


Register and language comes off quite formal overall which is unsuited to the indie/alternative genre of the magazine but small sentences such as ‘keep a mellow and chilled theme



throughout’ and ‘maybe that’s just being a girl haha’ gives it a slight more indie edge.


Some text on the cover is hard to read because of the background colour. The number 26 on the contents page is also hard to read. Double page spread is very good.


Front page could be a little busier. Contents page is very structured and easy to follow. Double page spread has slight column width difference and space between each column is also slightly different.


Good variety of fonts (at least 4) and there is also a variety of text size.


Very good use of ICT, especially the cutting out of photos. Clearly took advantage of the stuff available to use.

Summary CommentOverall I would give this magazine a proficiency level mark as it has a lot of potential. Some elements of the magazine are very good but others need some work e.g. the contents page background/image.



Magazine title: Phoenix






Some variety of framing used instead of having the same throughout.


Only a small variety used (mid shot and mid-long shot.) Use a larger variety to make it more interesting.


Models look well suited to your magazine genre.


Outfits are well chosen. None look out of place or don’t match the genre of your magazine. Good lighting but there are shadows in almost all your photos. No props used.


Contents photo and main photo of double page are stretched – resizing not done properly. No cropping used.


Good language and register that fits well with the genre of your magazine, indie/alternative.

appropriately integrating illustration and textshowing understanding of conventions of layout and page design

Cover is good but good be a bit busier. Barcode is too big. Contents page looks a bit odd having some subtexts to the side and then some centred, would look better if they were either all to the side or all centred. Double page spread has different width



columns and has same issue as contents page; some text is centred and some is to the side. I would go with one or the other but not both. Other than that the double page is good.


Good variety of fonts and also some variety of text size but not a lot.


Good use of ICT but could have taken full advantage e.g using the spot healer and rulers (to make measurements of the columns even)

Summary CommentI would place this magazine in the higher marks of the Basic level 2. This is because there are quite a few improvements needed, especially with the smaller aspects (columns and resizing)



Task 3 – Target setting

Use the feedback from your classmates to set targets to improve your work. Use the grid below to focus your areas for improvement. Try to be as specific as possible and where possible create one target for each area of the mark scheme. Remember to be realistic, that means making sure your targets are achievable and realistic for your ability.

Magazine title:






Use different frames to add variety to the photos.


Have at least 3 different distances. Preferably more.


Choose better outfits more suited to the genre and do the female models more ‘indie’ looking.


Use a prop to add a more interesting feature into the photos.Add more colour to the magazine as a whole. Maybe use a different setting.


Make images more appropriate to the context of the magazine to make it look more music related.


Possibly change the interview to an informal structure.Could possibly add humour to make it more chilled and relaxed.


Use a clearer font to the contents page to make it easier to read and change the photo and maybe don’t crop it out to give a more interesting background.




Make the barcode smaller.Add more images to the magazine as a whole. Either add more text to the last column on the double page or remove the last sentence.Make everything central on the cover page.


Add more variety in both areas. At the moment there is only 2 or 3 different fonts.


Take full opportunity of ICT programs available for editing of photos, colour scheme etc.


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