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At a loss for words?
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Writing Clearly and Concisely
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Writing Clearly
The great enemy of clear language is insincerity.
—George Orwell
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Delete or revise ambiguous words, especially those too informal for the situation.
Whatever!
Sort of
Absolutely
ReallyVery
Good
Kind ofMaybe
Could have
awesome
Basically
SO
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Clarity and Complexity
Complex: Lincoln’s claim that the Civil War was God’s punishment of both North and South for slavery appears in the last part of the speech.
Revised: In the last part of his speech, Lincoln claims that God gave the Civil War to both North and South as a punishment for slavery.
Complex phrases and clauses, new information, and technical terms are easier to process when placed at the end of sentences.
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Complex: Questions about the ethics of withdrawing intravenous feeding are the most difficult.Revised: Most difficult are questions about the ethics of withdrawing intravenous feeding.
Clarity and ComplexityHere is another example—the more complex phrase is easier for the reader to process when it comes at the end of the sentence.
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Check for Repeated Words
Become aware of words you overuse. When revising, identify any these and other instances of unnecessary repetition.
Using a thesaurus and a dictionary, replace repeated words that might distract readers.
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Eliminate Repetition
A class of beacon mounts has been designed to allow for all three tracking system beacons to be attached to the rig in a global manner. This consists of machining all of the mounting holes on the rig the same and having a method for each beacon type to mount onto the rig using the holes.
Repetition of key words, however, can create coherence.
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Key Words: Most difficult are questions about the ethics of withdrawing intravenous feeding. Intravenous feeding can prolong life to an indefinite extent, but it cannot always preserve its quality. Without quality, many would argue, life is worthless.
Varied Word Choice: Most difficult are questions about the ethics of withdrawing intravenous feeding. Tube sustenance can prolong existence to an indefinite extent, but it cannot always preserve its quality. Without that, many would argue, living is worthless.
Create Coherence
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Don’t Dangle ModifiersA dangling modifier describes someone or something that is not in the sentence.
• Incorrect: Plump and juicy, Aunt Gertrude won first prize at the fair.
Plump and juicy, Aunt Gertrude’s roasted pig won first prize at the fair.
• Incorrect: As a teacher, it is important to stay patient.
As a teacher, I need to stay patient.
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Or Misplace Modifiers A misplaced modifier is too far away from the word it’s trying to describe.
• Incorrect: Plump and juicy, Aunt Gertrude makes the best roasted pig in south Texas.
Plump and juicy, Aunt Gertrude’s roasted pig is the best in south Texas.
• Incorrect: Rotting in the cellar, my brother found the five-year-old potatoes.
My brother found the five year old potatoes rotting in the cellar.
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Active vs. Passive Voice
Active: We have determined the target market to be adults between the ages of 30 and 45.
Passive: The target market was determined to be adults between the ages of 30 and 45.
Who’s doing what to whom?•Active voice identifies the actor.•Passive puts the thing being acted on first.
Check which style your professor prefers.
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Writing ConciselyThis report, by its very length, defends itself against the risk of being read.
—Winston Churchill
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Check for Wordiness
Doubles
Redundancies
Wordy phrases
Negatives
Sentence sprawl
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Delete doubles
Delete redundancies
full and completetried and trueeach and every
true factsfree giftin a wise mannerred in colorseven in numberlong in duration
Remove Excess Words
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Arrived at the decision decidedIs able to can
A majority of most In order to to
Despite the fact that althoughAre of the same opinion agree
A small number of few For the purpose of to
Revise Wordy Phrases
From Successful Scientific Writing by Janice R. Matthews, John M. Brown, and Robert W. Matthews
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not different similar
not the same different
not allow prevent
not notice overlook
not many few
not often rarely
not stop continue
not include omit
Change Negatives to Affirmatives
From Style: Ten Lessons in Clarity and Grace by Joseph Williams
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A sentence sprawls when there are many clauses or phrases after the verb. One way to reduce sprawl is by cutting or revising who/that/which clauses.
Ex: Teachers should remember that students are vulnerable and uncertain about those everyday, ego-bruising moments that adults ignore, and that they do not understand that one day…
Ex: Teachers should remember students are vulnerable and uncertain about those everyday, ego-bruising moments adults ignore, and they do not understand that one day…
Remove Sentence Sprawl
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Paramedic Method
1. Circle the prepositions.2. Circle the “is” forms.3. Find the action.4. Put this action in a simple (not
compound) active verb.5. Start fast—no slow windups.6. Read the passage aloud with
emphasis and feeling.7. Mark off sentence’s basic
rhythmic units.8. Mark sentence lengths.
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The Official Style
The National Research Council Space Studies Board, in cooperation with the Aeronautics and Space Engineering Board, is in the process of organizing a decadal survey to establish priorities and provide recommendations for life and physical sciences research in microgravity and partial gravity for the 2010-2020 decade.Source: Aeronautics and Space Engineering Board of the National Academies (http://sites.nationalacademies.org/DEPS/ASEB/index.htm)
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Find the prepositions and “to be” verbs.
The National Research Council Space Studies Board, cooperation the Aeronautics and Space Engineering Board, the process a decadal survey and co life and physical sciences research microgravity and partial gravity the 2010-2020 decade.
Paramedic Method
Find the action and simplify:
Start fast—no slow wind-ups.
in
inwithof
tofor
infor
isorganizing establish
priorities provide recommendations
• is in the process of organizing is organizing
• establish priorities prioritize
• provide recommendations recommend
in cooperation with and
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The National Research Council Space Studies Board and the Aeronautics and Space Engineering Board are organizing a 2010-2020 survey to prioritize concerns and recommend life and physical sciences research in microgravity and partial gravity.
Revision
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The Lard Factor
Divide the difference between the number of words in the original and the number in the revised version by the number in the original.
Original (46) minus Revision (34) = 12 12÷ 46 = .26 or 26%
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