THOU ART TOO WORDY Cutting the Clutter and Needless Verbiage.

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THOU ART TOO WORDY Cutting the Clutter and Needless Verbiage

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THOU ART TOO WORDY

Cutting the Clutter and Needless Verbiage

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IMPRECISE & WORDY VERBS

Be in agreement

Be capable of

Draw a conclusion

Have knowledge of

Hold a meeting

Make a proposal

Provide assistance

Show improvement

agree Can Conclude Know Meet Propose Help improve

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AVOID AMBIGUITY

As

As long as

May

Once

On the other hand

Since

While

Because If Can After However Because Although

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ROUNDAB OUT (& OVERLY WORDY) EXPRESSIONS

At present

A variety of

Due to the fact that

For the most part

In case of a

In order for

In the event that

With regards to

Now Various, several Because Usually In a For If, when about

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In the cellar there are

wooden type crates with

nothing in them that

might perhaps be used by

us for storing paint cans

inside of.

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This morning at 6:30

a.m., I woke up out of

sleep to hear my alarm go

off, but the alarm was

turned off by me, and I

returned back to a

sleeping state.

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The reason that Merdine

was not able to be in

attendance at the hockey

game was because she

had jury duty.

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Omar and I, we returned

back to the hometown

where we both grew up to

attend a reunion of the

people that we went to

high school with ten years

ago in the past.

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Melba has designed a very

unique kind of shirt that is

made out of a polyester type

of material that never creases

into wrinkles when it rains

and the shirt gets wet.

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She used her money to

purchase a large-type

desk made of mahogany

wood that is dark brown

in color and handsome to

look at.

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In view of the fact that it

was raining down, orders

were given that the game

be canceled.

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Some sort of

identification that would

show how old we were

was requested of us by

the man that collects

tickets from people at the

movie theater.

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There is a possibility that

one of the causes of so many

teenagers running away from

home is the fact that many of

them have indifferent parents

who don't really care about

them.

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A major company maintains a large personnel

database that it basically makes use of for many

kinds of employee-related applications such as

payroll and benefits. The company now has some

plans to extend the database significantly to include

current photographs of employees and use the

photographs as the basis for a very modern security

system. The system is specifically designed to

protect secure areas of the company’s building from

access by any people who really do not have

authorization to be there.

3 sentences. 82 words.

The student record? 18 words. (I’ll show it

when you’re done)

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A company's personnel

database is expanding to use

photos for a new security

system to protect secure

areas.