THE GENTLE ART OF SENTENCE COMBINING

How to graduate from

Dick & Jane

to College Writing

• To get to my house you go left. You pass by these town houses. They all look the same. A couple of blocks down you will see a big yellow sign with bold, black letters. It says Dead End. You pass that sign and you’ll see where I live. There are two buildings. They look like gray shoe boxes. Outside the houses there is a total of about eight cars. Some are trucks, some old, some new. The thing is only half of the vehicles work.

Dick & Jane vs. College Writing

• To get to my house you go left. You pass by these town houses. They all look the same.

• To get to my house you go left, passing by town houses that all look the same.

• A couple of blocks down you will see a big yellow sign with bold, black letters. It says Dead End. You pass that sign and you’ll see where I live. There are two buildings. They look like gray shoe boxes.

• A couple of blocks down you will see a big yellow sign with bold, black letters saying Dead End. As you pass that sign, you’ll see two buildings that look like gray shoe boxes. This is where I live.

• Outside the houses there is a total of about eight cars. Some are trucks, some old, some new. The thing is that only half of the vehicles work.

• Outside the houses are about eight cars and trucks, old and new, but only half of them actually run.

Source: http://wc.pima.edu/