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Supporting boy
writerS
an initial diSSemination report from an emC projeCtwith mayfield, Seven kingS and wanStead SChoolS
funded by the teaCher development agenCy
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ContentS
Ac k n o w l e d g e m e n t s
b b
es m C, 18 C tc,
l, n1 2un 2009
C o n t e n t sf
ic 3
j as 5
m mch 11
a ds 19
f C 34
as b 47
j ws 53
Reections on the project 62
Boys and writing an overview 64
Bibliography 68
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foreword
F o r e w o r dA ty a J Ya fm
Ii f ecai
The research undertaken in this project is
cs:
a commitment to improving ones own
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understanding how an improvement
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understanding of childrens learning
a willingness to consider alternatives to
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the importance of a framework for
researching practice, guiding reection
and analysing ndings.
The kind of learning community that this group
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and the supporting of writing. The questions
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csss
and from the teachers desire to meet the needs
of specic individuals with difculties. From the
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sharing of their ndings, the teachers are feeling
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and outside the discourses of schooling. They
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as targets, levels and ability; but there are alsos qss cs
that have come to be seen as supportive for all
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collaborative writing; talk and writing.
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complexity of what they are investigating. Theirccs s c ss
struggling boy writers must always attend to
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may not work for another (p.28). In considering
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tasks are set and supported, the teachers
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as well as of teachers and pupils. They are able
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class (p.28). Its possible that some teachers feel
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in their accounts of a developing condence in
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cs s ss
to themselves and to each other. When they meet
they are able to share and sharpen their ndings
(John Hickman, p.63) and this process allows
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discussed in potentially fruitful ways. There is little
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>cure trajectory.
t cs specically the kinds of reection and enquiry that
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pressures and excesses of everyday teaching
have reduced the opportunities for this. Where are
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within English studies at this time. We think that
this project could be seen as a model for the ways
c cs cs sslead the research while at the same time work
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with professional bodies, subject associations
and advisers. The project is a strong argument for
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from teachers practice and are supported and
sustained over time.
A ty a J Ya
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introduCtion
t h e
P r o J e C tIntroduCtIon
i j 2008 es m
C s tc d
Agency (TDA) to set up a short CPD project for
teachers on Struggling Boy Writers, with the
ss s cs sc css c
manageable personalised learning with specic
reference to low achieving boys in years 7 and 8.
The project was born out of EMCs sense that this
s s c cs
cs c c s
s ss s
cc s s
whole class routines and procedures. The skillsof sensitive ne-tuning of the teaching of writing,
to meet the needs of individuals with difculties,
seemed to have been eroded. We wanted to
cs
s cs s c
x s
cc c
of writing in the light of these tensions. A pair of
cs r scs
participate.
For the project each teacher selected two
cs s ss y 7
Year 8 class. Initially the teachers interviewed
ss cc ss
, sss
underachievement in writing. They then met
cc es m
C , c cs ss, s
experiences and nd out about recent research
on struggling writers (see Boys and writing on
page 62 for a brief list of some key ndings from
a literature search conducted by EMC staff). They
xc ss
getting students started on writing (a set of ideas
, sc
cs sc s s
cs c sstrategies and role-play as well as free writing.)
t c c
ss c
their case studies.
o cs , cs,
supported by John Hickman (a Redbridge
LEA consultant) and EMC staff, tried out the
cs cs c
s c, cs s s s csss s
help struggling writers. They maintained contact
with EMC and each other via basecamp,
a web-based tool that allows projects to be
managed and tracked. Lessons were observed
, cs cs ss,
cs cs- c
ss ss
strategies.
i j, r,
cs c
had been doing to share with the whole group.
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c scss, s
observations. Sharing their experiences not only
cs s c
c s s
to try out each others approaches as well.
i j, cc ,
met for a nal conference at EMC. John Hickman
presented his reections and observations about
the impact of the Project on the participants and
the outcomes in terms of CPD. The teachers
scss s cs ss
csss, s cs s
struggling writers and the project as a process of
CPD.
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introduCtion
S scs cs :
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sc sss
writing and create a writing workshop
atmosphere.
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vs cs
s s?
Finding out more about students work in
other subjects what light can this throw s s es sss?
b sc cs
sccss c
w s css? h
cs s
writers t the needs of other students?
w c s
ss css s ?
Css s s Cpd
how does reecting about your practice,
cs ss,
c? C s
kind of reection help you become more
exible, attuned to students individual
s ss sc?
g s c
s os s s
good practice.
d S s, cs
began to write up their projects as the reports
which form the basis of this booklet. They held
ss s ds,
c s sc
most signicant new approaches to offer to theircolleagues. They raised important new ideas
cs s
about how the project had impacted on them as
reective practitioners.
t s s c sc
accounts of six teachers work with twelve boys
s s
writers. We hope that their approaches as well as
the processes of trialling and reecting that theysc s cs
c s
of students.
t cs s s s s
c :
Jill Anderson, Mayeld School
Matt McHugh, Mayeld School
f C, ws
Sc, Q ks
a ds, ws
Sc, S ks h Sc
as b, S ks h Sc
j ws, S ks h Sc
w S m ts
scs s j
hc s c
project.
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jill anderSon, mayfield
J I l l
A n d e r s o nMel School College
ov e r v i e w
This was a project about struggling boy writers. I
s s s y 7 css
who were underachieving in their writing. After
cs ss,
s sss sboys writing. At the workshop we also explored
ss c s
teaching writing. On the same day we were asked
to identify strategies to use with our students.
Towards the end of the project, the students were
interviewed again.
MY CAse studIes
a b q ss css ,
outspoken boys. The boys are both well behaved
css
dominating assertive boys. A is a Black English
s C es s s
rst language. His KS2 English SATs score at
the beginning of the project was 3.5, although
his writing score was lower than his reading.
Bs ethnic background is Indian and his rst
language is Panjabi. His KS2 SAT score was 4.3,
however his writing again is lower. Evidence of
writing in both of the boys English books showed
consistent level 3 work. Both boys conveyed a
s sccss, b c
s ss s c
s s ss s
expectations for him. At the start of the project I
s
ss s c css, i
would be good candidates for the project.
Iiia ii a am
At the start of the project we were encouraged to
interview our students individually. The interviews
were lmed and transcripts made. The initial
s s ss positive attitudes towards writing and English.
b a xss c
ss s, ss s
s ,
i s ss ,
of the students were able to provide me with this.
b ss s s
s s, s
their writing.
a b xss s s
s s s
where they need to improve their writing. Although
s c s
s s , i s
s s
c cs s ss
ss s s
writing.
The boys writing initially seemed to sharesimilar weaknesses. When looking at A and Bs
i s ss , s
sc s x s s
problems. As a result, I identied shaping and
sc s i cs
s , s
project began to unfold, providing opportunities
for sustained writing became more important.
os s
c ssc , ss s
ss c
sustained piece.
The extracts from A and Bs exercise books (see
page 6) highlight the issues of structuring and
ss s s sss s
c, c
student interview.
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one sunny day there was a family the lived
on albert rode so the day started usually but
thir was one quit boy when ever he gos to
school he gets piked on his name was Jacob
people would pick on him and all Jacob wouldsay in his mind I wish I had a comic book that
characters would come to life
A, Story draft, 17th November, 2007
I am scared and fritened of my new home there
are lots of people here and I hope to see you
soon. How are you doing
B, Empathetic letter home from a character in a
flm, 28th March, 2008
strAtegIes
Over the course of the project I decided to
incorporate several new strategies. First I used
s cs
ss s
to sustain their writing. Another strategy was toprovide opportunities for paired work. I was hoping
s c cs ss
be forced to reect on their writing through the
discussions that would occur. I also felt I wanted to
nd out more about their writing in other subjects
s c
their writing.
col l Abor At i ve wr i t i n g
i c s c cs
s scss cs
place at the initial workshop at the EMC. A range
cs ,
c ,
visual approaches and collaborative writing. In the
cs scss s i
that collaborative writing might be benecial to A
and B. Although paired work is frequently used in
sss s s, i s students were writing a sustained piece of work.
b s s s s
as a question of making choices. They wrote
s ,
often putting down the rst idea that struck them.
i c c
s ccs s s
evaluate them.
i, i a b cs q
c s i cs
s
ss
the discussion about writing. Without intervening
i s s
and I found that the more condent student, B,was dominating. Students were asked to write the
i
c s
the strongest section of writing in the piece. B
c ss s
s
together in comparison with the rest of As writing.
t s :
The rabbit proof fence is a moving lm aboutthree brave girls who get taken away from their
mother by mr. riggs, mr nevilles assitant. But
then the three girls try to ascape travilling over
1500 miles the girls face hard times together.
Following this paragraph the boys nished the
piece on their own. Bs subsequent writing on
s cs c s ss
powerful.
.This lm is rated at 5 star..
Again, As writing in comparison does not sustain
the purpose of the writing (to review) and he
essentially retells the story.
then molly and grasy went Back But then mr
Neville came and took daisey away and they
never saw her again
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o, xc s c
by the boys reects a strong sense of purpose
cs ss
vocabulary. There is also a more powerful and
engaging voice in the collaborative piece.
f s s xcs c
writing, the benets are evident in the writing.
t s q
s c c , s
compared with what they could do on their own.
t x i
ss c, i c a
student who was a much stronger writer. This did
s s
able student was eager to just start writing and
get on with his work whilst A lacked condence in
expressing and sharing ideas.
Towards the end of the project, when I interviewed
the students, B said that he did not enjoy writing
s cs s
cc s s s
s s s s s
writing more. In contrast, A said he enjoyed the
s s sideas. When asked what kind of partner he enjoys
s, s,
helps me a lot.
Reecig o collborive wriig
This work highlighted a few worthwhile points.
The rst thing I noticed from this collaborative
s ss
s, s cc
collaboratively. Prior to working on this project
I overestimated the students ability to work in
s ss ss
acquired the skills in primary school. In addition,
as Bs comments reect, students with writing
difculty might not respond in the same way
to the same strategy. However, the sample of
c a b ss
s c
s ss s
, s
s sss scss
writing. In a short project like this and with so
many different strategies being used its difcult to
judge the impact of just one.
su st Ai n ed wr i t i n g us i n g
v i s u A l Ap p r o A c h e s
Towards the end of the project I decided to ensure
i ss ,
s s sc c
work. The students were placed in mixed ability
s ss c
story around. Each group had to complete a story
board that told the story around their picture. The
story board would form the basis of their planning.
Ssq sss s
story. Following each writing lesson my planning
was informed by the students work.
bcs s
s, a b c
i
able to write for a sustained period of time. After
s s s
s s scs,
ccs sentences. This was an area that several students
css , i
s x sss ss
ss scs c
a more shaped and structured piece of writing.
The impact this had on the boys writing was
, s s ss
c cs s s
s cs s s
can be taught and learned in couple of lessons.
in vest i gAt i n g th e i r wr i t i n g
i n ot h e r su b j e c t s
i c s
picture of what was happening with B and As
writing in other subjects. I found it very interesting
that when I looked at a sample of Bs writing (As
was unavailable) from his Science lessons, hiswriting style seemed different. It seemed more
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condent as it included detail and the sentences
were complex and used a variety of connectives.
Overall, it was well structured and more uid.
ts ss s
describing a process. The samples also included
diagrams. In the nal interview however, B saidthat he prefers writing stories.
The following extract from Bs Science book
ss ss c s
structure. In addition he uses complex sentences,
connectives and punctuation more condently.
is xc s
s s xc c
letter included above. The extract also included
diagrams of the processes being described.
When you have
indigestion pain is cased
by your stomach acid
rising up your gullet.
This is cased by acid
reacting with your body.
To solve this pain you
will have to take antacid
because in this tablet it
has alkali. When acid
and akali is together the
chemical react and then
when heated up it turns
to crystel of salt abd the
water evaporates.
B, 28th March
Analysing Bs writing from a different subject
s s s
c b s s s
interesting questions.
ts css s s s
c ss s
skills from one subject to the next. It would be
s s , s
s ss c s
s s c cs
s ss, s cs
c s sc, s
cs scc - s s s
s cs b s s the subject.
Appendix 1
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wAtching th e m wr i t i n g
e a
cs c s s
ss , c ss
in this particular piece of writing. During one ofs sss j hc s
s sc ,
A writes and the way he holds his pen. He is
cs c
s, s cs
difcult for him to see what he has just written
c s sss s
punctuation in his writing.
F i n A l in t e r v i e wDuring the nal interview with the boys I asked
s
nished to read the entire piece over. Interestingly
a s s c
check for his mistakes when he is nished a piece
of writing. B also responded that he waited until
he was nished. I think this, in addition to the way
a s s s, s cfactor to his struggle to improve in writing. This
s , c c
discussing with students the process of reecting
and reading over as they write instead of just
when they nish their work.
In the nal interview I also spoke to the boys
s
given. Despite giving the boys a variety of targets,
s s s s
with their writing. Through the discussion I had
b, s
s s, s s
exactly what to do about them. Not surprisingly,
s xss
comments from their teachers and enjoy having
their work read and commented on by peers.
the IMPACt oF
the ProJeCt
th e impAc t o n t h e bo y s
In the nal interview, I asked the boys if they
felt their writing had improved. A was positive
and felt he was improving. B however did not
feel that his writing had improved over the year.
a i c s ss cs
writing, as mentioned earlier I think As condence
improved and both boys seemed to enjoy being
a focus throughout the course of the project. Thes s ss cc
about and reect on their writing which I feel has
been a positive outcome for the boys and myself.
tim imiai
as i s sss i s
s
ss, i s
cs s
s ss s ss
available to undertake sustained writing. I did not
s ss q ss,
s, s c s s ss
i s ss
c s
students had an opportunity to write. Despite this,
c s sss s s
ss
when they were given the opportunity. In the nal
, a c s
he enjoyed it because he felt he had lots of ideas
s sc s
writing.
th e impAc t o n me
Professionally, the project had a great impact
on me and encouraged critical reection on the
impact my teaching has on students writing.
fs, s s cs ss ss b a,
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css cs
quietly and are undemanding of attention. In
addition, my perception of both As and Bs
condence in the lessons was that they seemed to
develop and to enjoy the extra attention they were
receiving.
Furthermore, I have enjoyed the experience as I
i ss
s c c s
c s ss
to be made in developing writing skills. There
s ss
ss sccss s
ss s
c s writing and analyse it over a period of time. This
project has also made me reect critically on the
amount of time actually spent in lessons writing. In
s i -s
provided for students to do sustained writing.
The project has also made me aware that if
c s sccss
reective discussions, it must be practised and
modelled. Finally, it has also highlighted for me
ss s reect on and read over their writing as they
produce it.
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M A t t
M C h u g hMel School College
ch o o s i n g t h e cAse st u d i e s
i i s sc ss
i
project. Many of the boys in the group were
achieving Level 4 or above and those that werent
were identied as being EAL or SEN students.e i s C , s
l 4 s Sats c l 3
, d, s
working at a very high Level 2.
Irocig he cse sies
C s s s,
slowly as the project has progressed. At the
i c
c cs s q
cs s
work. Early pieces of writing that he completed
s s ss cs
c cqs s c,
any writing produced was very short in length.
m s s c
C. Even at the beginning of the year he seemed
to be switched off identifying what he described
as easy work like watching videos as hisfavourite part of English.
i s s c cs, s s
s , C s
s s ss
was unmotivated. He complained about producing
x cs sc s ss
scs, s s
tired. He also expressed frustration at being
dictated topics for writing. When asked how writing ss:
Dont make us all do the same story let us
change the teachers ideas. This was one aspect
of boys motivation presented in an overview of
research of boys underachievement at EMC.
D was far more optimistic (or perhaps just lessdiscerning) than C in his outlook to English.
i c c s
ss , s
identify any parts of English that he didnt enjoy.
is, s c
s c s c
s c s
s! ds
student, D seemed to be quite vague (blissfully
unaware?) in regards to any problems with hiswriting. He identied punctuation and vocabulary
s ss s cc,
interviews it became apparent that he didnt really
understand what these words meant. In general
he felt alright about writing.
By comparing the two boys writing it became quite
s ss s
to produce sustained and developed writing. Ds
c s s
paragraph produced in a space of thirty minutes.
a, s
sss s, c
s c cs
more able students.
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Eviece of he bos wriig he
a f pjc
Below are extracts from each of the boys books
cs c s s
of a story based on the short lm Between Us.as , css
s , s d
c -- s lSa
much of this time. The class were also provided
s sc
which D has used.
It was so boring there was so much trafc.
There was so much smoke comming out of the
exhaust pipe. As I opened the window I couldsmell nasty petrol and cigaretz, It was cold
outside and I could hear loads of horns like
people were swearin at each other. The rain
made me feel stuffy.
C
the morning suns light struggled to break
throught the thick huddle of grey clouds. Below
on the motorway you could hear the roaringsound of the car engine. On the long motorway
you can hear beeping. I can feel the rain driping
in my arms.
D
ts s qs cs
inuencing this lack of stamina. C had expressed
s :
h ss i
sc?
i s, s c
the students had was thirty minutes.
ws s ss
x cs?
ws i s, s,
their creativity with objective driven pre-
ss ?
ex t e n d e d wr i t i n g le s s o n s
At some point during the projects rst meeting
x sss s
forward. Given the boys struggle with time and
sc ss, i ssswhich would overcome these problems. The
css s ccs
reading lessons and seemed to enjoy the
regularity and independence that these brought.
t css , sc
the rst ten minutes, and then spend the rest of
the lesson reading.
i s c
s ss s
c s s s
ss c c
with. I decided that I would designate one period a
sc ss,
rules to accompany these. These were:
There would be no talking. Like a reading
ss, q s c,
ss, q
take place.
Ss sc s
the end of the lesson.
Rafe tickets would be distributed to
students who worked well. At the end of
ss
chocolate as the prize.
Qss ss
limited to the start of the lesson. I
c ss c,
c cs
checking if they were getting it right.
For the reason above, I wouldnt check
s
working.
Cssc sc s s
wrote.
Ss c
wanted (story, report, blog, poem
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anything!) as long as it somehow related
to the topic/s for that lesson (the rst
topics were War and The First Day
based on the novel were reading in
class).
i cc ss
ss
c s x
writing lesson.
Exee wriig lessos wh
app
The rst lesson was an undoubted success
in regards to its execution. Despite my feeling
s ss -
the day, the classs behaviour was impeccable and
s s s
of writing.
D almost lled a complete A4 sheet of writing
with a rather dramatic story about his rst day
of school. C produced a rap about the rst day
sc: w s,
cafes.
e s sccss i
the point of marking. At this point, I realised for the
ss sccss i -
one pieces of writing each fortnight. This became
q sc i
spent marking the rst round. On Cs piece alone
I took at least fteen minutes deliberating over my
comments and ended up lling the remaining half
of the A4 page he had written on.
f, sc
, i c s c j
Hickman, our mentor in the project. He pointed out
two things to me: rstly that in trying to develop the
students independence in regards to their writing,
s css c ss
s , qs cs
could be used to help elicit the students own
s ss sss
writing. Secondly, I could lessen my burden by
restricting the space I used to write my comments.
w scss s ,
i c c i s
students second round of writing (see appendix
1). This proved to be an asset to the lessons. Not
ss s ,
s ss s
chronological record of each others musings onthe writing taking place.
Perhaps a point of interest thats worth discussing
s s c
a certain element of ceremony. When I decided
ss, i s cc
s c , s
might effect the students behaviour. Perhaps
s s, i s ssc sc
, s i ss c sc ,
s cs
reecting. This meant that I would plan the lessons
s
beginning of the lesson. I knew that being Year
7s, the students would have difculty not talking
s , s i
s ss
s cs
s csswas settled and silent. Again, my main aim in
doing this was ensuring that students wouldnt be
distracted while they were reading the comments.
h, j c s ss
he noticed another interesting effect this had.
m ss s
ss c ss, s
c ss, s s
ss c c
more. This point of the lesson had become almostxc ss, s s
for them to look forward to the lesson.
a s , ss
seemed to be a success. The kids were enjoying
sss; s-s s s
;
been taken care of. It was time to shift the focus
c s s
lesson format in the rst place.
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CaSE Study 1 C
C s ss ss
he seemed to enjoy the lessons. However the
sss
wrote poetry or raps. This was frustrating in the
ss s
what he was capable of as a writer. My reection
on his rst piece of work had focused on his
s c, s s c
understood the errors he was making. Beyond
s , cs s
cs cx c
something other than poetry. Interestingly, in one
s s C s
poetry because it usually meant that he didnt
s c s s
story for example. In his mind, poetry involved
careful consideration (particularly when thinking
about rhymes) but didnt require length.
To me, Cs insistence on writing poetry seemed
s s, s i s
stopped him from developing as a writer. However,
upon reection I realise that the writing lesson andmy tracking of him did have a positive impact. For
the rst time all year, C appeared to be genuinely
engaged with his work. He enjoyed the writing
lessons and he was proud of his work. Whenever
i ss s s s
i s , s
of feedback. And even though I found it difcult to
c s , i s
s s scs s , s
s s c s towards English. I feel perhaps that if the lessons
s ,
x C s
, s s
poetry.
Cs nal piece of work allowed me to question
his understanding of audience and purpose. He
c ss
lessons theme, revenge.
All of you people are wasting your time,
running around and starting crime,
If you hate someone dont mean you have to
shoot your Hater,
you know your Brain is much more greater,
stop the guns if you want to breath with your
lungs,
Your more likely to get stabbed if your carrying
a knife,
It will take away your life, That means no job,
no money,
no wife, unless you run away your more likely
to survive,your meant to be home an hour ago But you
never arrive,
your mum gets worried she calls the cops,
every bodys
shouts his heart beat stops, he is dead, they
reveal his body
bleeding in a hospital bed. He had his death his
head got slayed
off like Macbeath
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CaSE Study 2 d
d, C, s ss ss
sss s es
something to look forward to. Prior to these
sss s s d s
ss , s
one lesson was little more than four lines. Clearly,
cc
css d s s
expressed in interviews. It also evident in the
increase in length of his writing.
Ds last piece of work entitled Revenge At
Teachers!!!! was a narrative he wrote in responseto, again, the theme of revenge. As the following
extract shows, while the work wasnt of the highest
quality, in just two lessons D was able to write
a4 s,
s
scs s
structure and paragraphs. Previously his writing
s s sc
dialogue about it, or intervention from me.
Once there was a group of boys called the
Revengers. And they do lots of stuff they
revenge on people. And may be teachers
asswell. They were the only boys that can
reveng. People they picture of them stick it
up on the wall. On the middle of the night
the group join together to look on teachers.
They get inside school. They be spies and
look for the teacher and see what they do
or rob something. They have all there spiesequipment. So they are all around to start
3 2 1 go go go. The revengers get in with
a big action. Every thing when bang and
broken.
the imporce of feebck
l C, d s s
guarantee of regular feedback. On his second
c ,
Teachers Comment at the bottom of his work,
encouraging me to write something.
h, s s ss c
this feedback, D didnt seem to benet from it the
s C , s s
to. D struggled with responding to prompts and I
feel as though written comments werent enough
to help him reect on his writing. For example, s c w
an interesting ending for the reader?, D wrote,
I will have a good ending to my story. And to
Why do we need paragraphs when we write?
he responded, ill make about two paragraphs.
After the third lesson D (and C) responded very
s c
after school and briey discussing his writing in
a one-on-one appointment. Although I did have
-- s s ss sss, s s cs
c c s
students were writing. Unfortunately, while the
boys expressed interest in them, I didnt organise
the after-school appointments perhaps its only
now on reection that I realise how benecial they
c ss d
c x s s qc
cs s
can progress in their learning. This is something
Im determined to try next year with my new
classes.
i s s d
wasnt making the progress he may have been
capable of, this didnt effect his enthusiasm
towards the lessons. At the end of each lesson, D
always reected positively:
I enjoyed the writting this lessons and ss
punctuation.
i s ss cs c
music and I can cosatrate with m work.
I liked it and i was joing very well what i
need to write i can image it.
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the IMPACt on
the ClAss As A
whole
Importantly, the benets from these lessons were
s C d, s
positive impact on the rest of the class. The class
s s s s
ss cc s
met with a collective groan. And, like D and C,
students who normally wouldnt write very much
c s , ssof their ability. In fact, ability seemed to be non-
issue for the students. Perhaps the freedom of
s s s
c ,
s c s ss
enjoyment, not to please the teacher. At one point
i s ss q
s , s
never became a point of interest. What particularly
s s ss
talented students in these lessons. I often feel this
s i c,
sss ss
, g&t ss s
to benet from the comments and reection more
than any of the other students in the class.
t s s
particular benet in allowing me to give highly
personalised comments to students. Prior tos , c i
ss c s
, s c s c
as the questioning used in writing lessons. Unlike
s, c s cs
students, questioning required more reection
on the students part for areas to improve. It was
this reection that put the topic at the front of the
students minds while they continued to write.
ps s s qss x s
of their writing. To one student, Sha, who was
s -ss, i s:
d s -ss
everywhere you should be?
Sha touched on this in his response:
i i s
more full-stops.
i s c s s -ss
s s s
continued to write.
as c s c
s, qs s sc
students understanding of particular aspects of
their writing. Another student, Janet, was making
unnecessary use of apostrophes. When I asked
s s s , s c: o
yeh I use a () because its easier to read because
it looks like one word! Whereas a target wouldnt
j cc c c,
ss qs c s
didnt have sound understanding of apostrophes, s c ss
continued dialogue.
Qs s
ss s s s
academic progress. Milan, a student who was
css s qss
ss c s
c: i s c s
cs s
stop or capital leters.
Students use of questioning also proved
benecial for me in helping them to progress. One
of my rst comments on Justines story (one of my
G&T students) focused on the idea of verb tense.
S c :
Thankyou for the comment Mr McHugh.
What does verb tense mean?
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i ss, i c s xs
s s s, s
:
o, S, i s s
means now. And I like giving descriptions!
i s s q sss
marking the kids folders such a pleasure. Another
g&t s, d, cs
s :
I went ne with new great ideas this time.
Cant wait till next writing lesson. I love it!
(Responding to my comparison of his writing tothe style of an episodic TV series):
I think it is a good thing. Also I made up a
theme tune for it! IT RYHMES!!!
It went ne and Thomas got a robot arm.
AWESOME!!!
t c i s s
ss s -- i c
s, ss s c c s
sc cs
way. For many students, I touched on simple
s sc s c
the technical accuracy of their writing. However,
g&t ss, i s cs
cx s, sc,
purpose and audience.
ConClusIon
f s c, s ss
being in the project, apart from feeling a closer
cc ss, s
scs c s c
s c x,
reected on. Too often I feel much of the effort I
s c s cs
results. In some ways, perhaps quite cynically,
teaching can feel like working in a factory. As
c s cs s
c s, css,
xs, css szs ss
curriculum objectives means that teaching turns
into something resembling a production line. We
cs s s
process and quality. Focusing on the two boys felt
s s css:
s,
s q c
than something which serves a purpose for data.
f , s s c s
completing the job with passion so that both
myself and the students can enjoy not just the
results, but the process as well.
t x s s sss
cs x
with them. Next year I plan to have a writing
lesson with all of my classes, both KS3 and KS4.
Im particularly interested in how this Year 7
groups enthusiasm towards writing might translate
kS4 csss , , s
s csss csof the exam. I would also like to experiment with
the format of the lessons. Can pair and group work
sss? h c i
q c scss
ss, s s ? ts
s qss c i ss
in the coming academic year.
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Appendix 1
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A l b A n Y
d A v I e swaa sc
ov e r v i e w
This project was about struggling boy writers,
l 3 c
their potential. The idea was to identify two
ss y 7 y 8 css x
ways of supporting and motivating them. A by-c s x cs
ss c
about whole classes, to nd ways of integrating
any strategies developed into future teaching. The
project was investigative and we were encouraged
sc
s c s s
cs
have an impact on our boys.
CaSE Study 1 E
ra f ci
When I started the project E was working at
l 3 s s s
around writing was poor. E is a vocal character in
css s s s s
imaginative ideas. There was a clear gap betweenhis spoken ability and his writing. I wanted to focus
on E for the project, as he was clearly enthusiastic
xss s
s s s ss
within written tasks.
hs sss s
s s s ,
often a bit whacky and lacking any attempts to
use suitable vocabulary or structure. For example,he would create obscure scenarios for ctional
ccs x s sc s
John Boynes The Boy in the Striped Pyjamas.
h s s
cc s js c
s
strong London dialect without any punctuation. Atthe start of the project I conducted an interview
with him about his reading and writing. During
s , sc s s n
type of thing but he does read a lot of non-ction
such as Horrible Science. I thought it might be
interesting to see how this thirst for non-ction
c s css
particularly in the context of writing.
h s c sscs c cc
c
amount of effort so that it was out of the way. He
c c s
poor self-image and his views of his inadequacies.
Although he often expressed this in a jovial
manner (Ha, ha I know my spelling is bad Miss!),
i s s s c s
failure. This attitude was somewhat explained at
a Parents Evening where his mother expressed ss s
c s s s s s
has passed on to her son. Several weeks later,
s s s sc s
- !
e s xss s c
xs s
s sss x s
Primary School had not helped him. Research
s s emC
c c
struggling boy writer. I felt that his attitude towards
s c s cc ;
however, I wanted to focus more specically on his
self-perception and organisation. He is very willing
s i i c, ,
ss , cs
ss s c s
writing.
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wa I a im aci
1. For E to have enough motivation to
c ss c
s
in his work.
E would regularly lose work and forget to
complete written homework. When I spoke
s
interview, he clearly felt that it was not very good.
t s cc
was getting it wrong especially when using
paragraphs, commas or when writing essays. I
s s
s s cc c s
about expressing ideas and developing skills.
ec c cs
c c s
be essential. This would ideally manifest itself
in an increased amount of class work and nal
assessed pieces of writing.
2. For E to organise his writing clearly and
appropriately.
e s c s sc
stories and exploring ideas within essays. His
s c
another without explanation or development. I
e s s
cs s
should go in. This would be in direct contrast to
s c s s
complete it or to simply ignore it.
i s
s
c cs s
s, s c s
self-image and motivation.
ps s
s c s
s s
thoughts. During the interviews, he did express
s sss s c cs s s,
Its your answer. It isnt right and it isnt wrong.
ts s ss
more freedom to express ideas (another theme
identied in research on what makes a difference
to boys). I have attached an example of a frame
that I had used with him in the past (see appendix1) and on reection, it is clear why he follows it
unquestioningly and does not challenge it. The
s s sc s s
and uncondent student to assume that it is the
onlyway to write the essay. I needed to nd an
alternative method of developing his skills. This
sc s
emC c ss
sc s c s
c sc c ss
independent ideas. I posed myself the question,
e?
w scss s cs,
c c :
frames often serve as evidence to other teaching
sss s c
c
students themselves. I wanted to move away froms cc c s cs
for my work with E in this project, to explore what
difference it might make to him.
eay ic
The following question from the student
c s s s
:
Q: w cs with ideas?
F: Asking a teacher gives you more ideas.
h s c ss p
One and Paragraph Two also helps
especially when beginning my sentences.
Throughout the year, the students
c ssss cs
work, each consolidating a unit of study.
e s s cs
s s, ss
simple indifference. This clearly indicates
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s s
assessments.
His class book was messy and lacking in
organisation (see example in appendix
2). Writing was often left incomplete or s c l
Objectives over that of the work itself.
This made me realise that students in Es
s c s c
board, using it as a way of staying safe
within the classroom. I began to question
cc s ss
down the days objective. Realising this
c i
s css c ss
a pointless copying activity that caused
more harm that good. I felt that this linked
s
frames as proof of teacher support; was
I using L.O.s as proof that lessons were
? w s cs
parents checked students books so that
s ss
c s c ss s c
tackled the work.
My pa ii
In the light of my reections on E, the student
c
s , i c cs ss
improve his writing.
1. Using oral work (whole class, group andpaired) to develop appropriate ideas and
to prioritise information.
2. The use of rewards with specic emphasis
on oral praise and postcards home.
3. Implementing strategies to structure ideas
s sc
writing frames.
o , ss cs c
the question of writing frames.
in t e r v e n t i o n 1
Mrch 2008 the rs emp
t css s s
cc cc The Boyin the Striped Pyjamas. Everyone was provided
/ s
was made clear that this was optional. The rst
s c css css
discussion and mind map. The class was asked
to write up their work as a nal draft and submit
during the following week.
f s s s sccss
e s s s splan most of which were appropriate. Although
i s s e cs s xc
s i s x,
he did hit all the success criteria. Why did he
cs xc s c
c x? i ss
e
c s s c
was too much for him. In future work, I decided to
s s s : s
s e, sc
s s c
more able students in the class.
i s /s s, i
s i s c s s
the next step did not undermine his work so far.
When the rst draft was complete, I modelled
the process of proof-reading using his work. Es c c s
- s
c ! ts
c/ e
identied all the errors which he promptly altered.
He even began marking other peoples books!
The method clearly energised E as the cloak of
the teacher gave him the added condence to
make judgments that he would otherwise have
ignored or thought may be incorrect. He enjoyed c i s
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factual/ opinion work that he claims cant be right
or wrong or where The answer is clear.
Unfortunately, E failed to complete his nal
s
the plan. When asked why, he avoided thequestion and dismissed it as forgetfulness. I
s s s
c cs
progress that he had made in the rst draft
stage. He did not appear to be able to make the
cc ss
an essay. Only when I warned that I would need
s , e cqsc
work was submitted. In addition, he had evidently
ss s c s -css
writing. This had a detrimental affect on accuracy.
w i s ss, s
c s s
s c s
til 10 oclock nishing that for you Miss. The nal
sc
on his second target: taking pride in his work. He
c s s c
of his work, but simply to avoid trouble. While this
s e c
opinion to make this nal push, I must admit that I
felt very disheartened by this end result. Initially, I
felt that I had given a lot of extra attention to E (to
the detriment of others?) but he seemed to have
s x ss
supportive and positive opportunity. However, I
cs s e
s s
my approval may be a reasonable rst step
towards nding his own motivation. On the ip
side, the former-school nerd within me nds it
ss
ss x s s
c ss s cs
they are quiet and get on with what is expected. I
felt that I needed to nd a way to encourage the
s s ss ssc
from completing work that doesnt revolve aroundthe teachers praise.
smmay
us sc
information for writing was successful.
Sccss - ss
developed. There was a need to continue
c s
accuracy.
w css
accuracy of his spelling etc. He obviously
cc -
in class with the nal write-up using a
computer.
S css s c c
work was needed. It is difcult to get the
balance correct. How can I use more able
ss s s css?
C sc s
feel successful.
p s/ ss
ss s
any independent improvement.
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in t e r v e n t i o n 2
april 2008 Seco ssessme
t ssss s s
ss sThe Boy is the Striped Pyjamas
children under 12 years old. The students
s
s ss
book is/is not suitable for under 12s. In class,
sc c sss
s s ys n cs
onto the IWB. Each student then had to
c sc
c c them of their argument. Using the feedback
on the IWB, each student had to select ve
s c
essay, based on their opinion and argument.
ts s s s-
s , S c
how to structure ideas (including counter
arguments), the class had to organise their
s- s c
writing frame.
As previous use of oral work had beneted E and
sc
I wished to continue this. However, the use of
s c
in his work so I decided to abandon their use.
t sccss c css s
inuenced by Es targets. E contributed well to
the class feedback of homework ideas. Once thes- s cs , s
had to justify their organisation. E had made one
potential error (counter-argument was his nal
s scsss s
be inappropriate in an argumentative essay).
When questioned, he identied this and moved it.
t ss s s- c
ss cs
they had to include: Point (post-it notes), Evidence
(quote or close reference), Link to the Question
(How this proves my argument). E was happy
s -s c
and completed the rst draft on time. We had
c s s sc
c c e s
reected this with it factual and scientic analysis
of the book.
Success! E handed in the nal draft on time and
to a good standard. It was typed and had a few
s s c s
work. I was surprised to see that he had moved
s c- back s s
s scss s
made him move it. This suggests that E moved it
within the rst draft without really understanding
why. I awarded the essay a secure level 4,c s s
assessment.
The whole class thoroughly enjoyed the new
css sc g
t ss
own ideas and express them with condence.
The project was inevitably having a positive effect
on the class and my overall teaching. This was
s sc s i
s sss cs s c
boys. Even GCSE and A Level classes I have
used this with have ourished whilst using this
approach to planning. This reafrms my belief that
teachers should be given more time for reective
study and build in time to study specic aspects of
tc l s
during their PGCE study. The pressures (and
excesses) of everyday teaching have inevitably
c cs
can dedicate to such work.
smmay
us sc
information for writing was successful.
o s s ss
ss s, es s
subject for this. How can we promote oral
css cc
s ss?
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t c s
sccss ss sc
made students condent to experiment.
S css s s
e
responding well to increased condence
s s c, c s
consolidated through praise.
t s c c
s s ss
(factual, opinions etc). Will this continue
y 8 c?
t sc ssss e s
s s s s c
information (see Reasons for Selection) to
formulate his essay. The kinesthetic approach to
s s c css
and his sometimes haphazard approach to
writing. Surprisingly, the removal of writing frames
had a very benecial affect on the whole class
and all ranges of abilities. Even the more able
students beneted from the ability to branch out
, c
c cc c xideas. As this was done at the end of Year the
ss s ss
cc y 7
ss
to me.
It has undoubtedly affected my future teaching. I
-c
on writing frames for all ages and abilities. It has
c cs
sc
ccs s
enough. I denitely felt this way. However, we
cc s a l
ss sc ss
xc? ts s s css
-: ss
s
? e s c
ss s
know why.
CaSE Study 2 F
ra f ci
f s q s css s c css scsss
ss s 100% s cc
reluctant to complete written work of any form. His
sss c z, s
and often unrelated to the task at hand. Accuracy
is poor (sentence structures can be very confused,
s c s s cc,
punctuation is rare) and he is unwilling to proof-
read work that he has completed. During the
s s cc the project, he confessed to being Someone that
is lazy and doesnt put effort into work whilst
, s c ss
make me feel stupid. He had not expressed or
s s css s
covered it with a look of indifference and boredom.
ts s s
css lSa s c
naughty in most of his other classes. When she
s s s c, css s, f s sc mss ds
so he behaves for her. While initially a potentially
s ss, s
ss , sss s
, ss c
and tolerant teacher in his eyes. Obviously, this
needed to be addressed.
Fs feelings of frustration and stupidness about
spelling sheds some signicant light on his lackof motivation and effort. He also mentioned in
s c
s s x c s
i s s s
s i ?
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f c ss cs
c cc /
or motivation. Discussions with other teachers
s s s s s
s
feedback on the matter. This is surprising asf c cs
motivation from his parents at home. During
s s, c s s
c s c
j as! h c
s c s s
writing.
I wanted to focus on F for this writing project as
ss rst few months of Year 7 yet he seemed to have
ss ss
x s s, s ccs
spelling.
b css , f s
c c
before. However, it soon became apparent that he
i s s
ss s s csss,
perhaps trying to cover up insecurities. This shows
s s css,
c s s
knowledge to his peers. I wanted to build upon this
during the period of the project.
Q: w ?
f: S s z, s
doesnt put effort into work. Doesnt do
homework.Q: i i s ss s
are doing writing what is the rst thing
cs ?
f: l Ss
whole term.
Q: w i s
s?
f: n c, i s ss
might be boring.
wa I a aci
1. For F to understand and focus on the task
s s c
work.
f s sc
s c c ,
whether it is a written task or not. This obviously
cs s cssc
c s
or studying a subject. I wanted to encourage F
ss s s
c s , c
assist him when engaging in specic tasks. If this
failed, I thought that the use of a Classroom Only
xcs s s
rst EMC project day would be a good idea. I
also wanted him to be more condent to ask for
s s
improve the appropriateness of his responses.
2. For F to begin to express his ideas
c
f - s ,
xs errors. He did not enjoy writing tasks and would
s s c s
minute without any consideration. This inevitably
resulted in a large number of errors. F often
s xss s s ss
thinking time and conversations with him were
s s s xss
himself without becoming muddled. I felt that this
needed to be addressed in order to inuence his
writing.
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His exercise book was messy, disjointed
and had a lot of incomplete work in it.
e s s
dates were neglected. There were manydoodles within the book.
t s sss ssss
pieces of work due to lost books or
homework, forgetfulness or indifference.
The LSA allocated to the class identied
cs s s
subjects outside of English especially
when completing written work.
My pa ii
Providing him with a Classroom Only
xcs s s
promote consistent class work. I would
c css, s
that nothing was lost.
tc - cqs
c
s c ss
m s s
c sc
his ideas.
in t e r v e n t i o n 1
Mrch 2008 the Firs aemp
t css s s
cc cc The Boyin the Striped Pyjamas. Everyone was provided
/ s
was made clear that this was optional. The rst
s c css css
discussion and mind map. The class was asked
s
week.
f s ss s c s
s sc cc c simagination. He decided to stick with the format
that I had given to him at rst but then made
small adjustments. His ideas were original and
appropriate although accuracy was very poor.
I repeated the teacher role play proof-reading
technique that I had used with E. F completed
- s ssc c s
get on with it. Evidently, he was unable to see
s
discussion. I asked him to ensure that he repeated
the task when he completed the work at home. He
was very keen to complete the work at home.
t s s s s
least one draft of his work. I felt very disappointed
c c ss s sss
to explain what had happened. F was given a
sc cs ss
lSa c s s
skills. We made it very clear what his targets
: s , s
accurately. These clear boundaries obviously had
s c s
s rstpiece of assessed work in Year 7. The
ssss s cc s c s c cs
worked hard at proof-reading within the classroom.
h, s ssss
c
punctuation etc. F seemed unable to connect
css sc
his independent work. At this point I wondered
ss s
c x
in the future.
t s ssss s s
cc x
s s c
his writing did. His interpretation of the character
s sc s s c
s ss s x
illustrate his points, for instance the Star of David.
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t s -
ss s sccss
s ss s css
s c accuracy. It left me questioning how we
ss s s -
going skill? I think teachers modelling
cs - s q
consistently across the curriculum.
dc s css c s
c
c s
be needed.
p s/ ss
s
ss
would see any independent improvement.
The need to focus on students individual
ss, css c
s c i
s s
ss?
in t e r v e n t i o n 2
april 2008 Seco assessme
t ssss s s
ss s The Boy is the
Striped Pyjamas for children under 12 years old.
(For full details see page 23.)
Q: w s s
?
F: Essays. Its long. Takes an hour or
two just to do it. Its hard. You have to
count the words.
F denitely maintained this view of writing,
despite all planned interventions. However one
s s s
difference, the use of the book that didnt leave theclassroom.
Fs Classroom Only book meant that he nally
s c s
help him nalise his ideas for the activity. He
enjoyed collecting the book at the start of each
ss c s
css his book, had nally disappeared. This highlighted
ss s
adapting to Secondary school could benet from
this provision.
f , , s s-
s c s c s cs,
c, s s-s sc
peoples backs. He didnt understand why the
s s s s ss , c s
that of the LSA. This problem generated difcult
qss
s cs ss; s
c s
s, s ss ?
i s s f
c s css
to weigh up the benets. Due to the experimental
nature of the activity, I felt that I was unjustied s f s
point, as he was refusing to work. There were
outside factors inuencing his behaviour he
c xc s
closely monitored by his Head of Year. I felt that
f s x
i s s cc s
punishment. The research we looked at when at
emC ss s s c
sometimes benet purely from having attention s s
who cares, watching over what they are doing. In
the case of F, the opposite seemed to be the case.
h s
supportive.
He progressed very slowly and the nal draft
s s
encouragement. I felt annoyed with myself (and
rightly or not, with him) that he had not made asmuch progress as E. However, it does highlight
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c s ss ss s s
below the average. It highlights for me the
cx ss s
boy writers and shows how individual the process
s s s
for another. It also made me think hard aboutc s s s
needs of the class.
smmay
The use of the Class Only book was the
i
s s c, s
f s s
s
x ss z s
ex s cs
sss s
students and not others. Individual
students prejudices can be hard to break
down, as was evidenced by Fs reluctance
c -
approach to essay planning.
dc s css c s
can be helpful, depending on the students
state of mind but this is also inuenced by
external factors and inuences, beyond
the individual classroom. How do we offer
s ss
s c ss
?
Motivation for F is a major difculty.
Making use of Fs artistic skills is often
s s
task. This could have contributed to his
reluctance to engage with it. But I wonder
if I can justify changing every task on
s ss? ts ss
would poorly equip him for future tasks.
This is a signicant dilemma in addressing
ss , s cs
of F.
f sc
level and this did not seem to upset him. I have
discovered a strange conict between my dislike
for students over-enthusiasm/ obsession for their
levels and others disregard for their academic
progress, like F.
i s c c s s cs
ss ss f
ss c s
s s
sure that over a long period of time (and with
changes of teacher) the student is developing fully,
rather than being allowed to remain unchallenged.
t s lSas s c c
when supporting F. I believe that the attention
from two separate teachers diluted his sense
s sss
s css ss
the role of the LSA very difcult. However simply
sc f s
c sss
sc s sc
his achievements in writing in English.
m s xcs f x s
unwillingness to work. In some ways, not
ss s s s s
c ss , s cx s
problems means that there is no quick x or easy
solution. Focusing attention on a student with such
cx s sss ss
from other students. This project has forced me to
ask myself the difcult question that if F had not
been targeted for this project, would I have been cc s
s?
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th e impAc t o F t h e pr o j e c t
t impac my ca
m css s s cs c
meant that time was a huge factor. It was difcult
to juggle he needs of the class and the focus of
the project. CPD and professional research is
s s, c
s s, s cs s cs
reecting on their work without it becoming a
chore. I am very grateful for the support of the
emC lSa
easier. Again, it highlights the need for teachers to
c scs
their support properly. I dont believe that teachers
s
in terms of outside resources such as the EMC.
Simple encouragement and objective ideas about
the issue was incredibly helpful. In my experience,
I think that a lot of teachers (especially recently
qualied teachers who feel the need to prove
their independence) can resist outside intervention
cs s s xcss sss
and workload of everyday teaching.
t s lSa s cagain, I dont feel that new teachers in particular
are taught how to use LSAs. I very rarely quiz
s ssss ss
in other classes why? Why shouldnt LSAs
be involved in CPD projects that help their own
understanding of the children and their inuence
? h lSa
day at EMC was one small step towards this. The
project has made me realise that I am wasting a
very useful resource.
Whs vle i wriig
ac, ppi a
mke jgemes o echers
w cs s ?
t s c c
ss ss s
of this becoming entirely associated with levels.
t c c cs of value on tests and levels but is this benecial?
This project focused on underachieving boys
3 s
s c s
xc ss
time. Therefore, how valuable is it to continually
s s s? ts s s , cc
ss - ss
improving their writing.
o sc s s s
sc s
cs s s
skill and interest in. E displayed a talent for non-
ction reading and when this was tapped into,
s s style. His essay had a distinctly scientic and
c s c cs
of the girls essays which had a much more
expansive and almost sentimental mood. As a
c, i ssss s
and what I consider to be the correct approach. I
s
c s cs
ss, sc f s
c sc-based learning.
f s s
judge us as teachers, for instance, Senior
Management or OFSTED. I found myself
ofSted c ss
ss
frame. Positive? Suspicious? Interestingly, through
scss emC cs i
qs sss
ofSted xc, c
c c S s
cc s minimum
sc ss c s,
than the maximum. The climate in which we
cc s sc s
ss, s c c
promotes this.
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the bees of he projec for m
whole clss echig
ps ss, cs s
s c c
whole class. For example, I asked the children tos ssss,
the intention of using E and Fs answers, and the
results were interesting. Three to four students
expressed confusion at the term proof-reading
s
meant or involved. It is easy to forget as an adult
- s s s
to develop. Many boys simply responded to the
grade (thanks for my good level) which is a pet
hate of mine and conrms the mixed benets ofconstantly referring to levels. Further investigation
c- s
to my own development as a professional.
f s d w
ss s afl c-
s
me.
He also highlighted the way that a lot of teachers
duties are made more difcult thanks to thepressure of appearing to be supportive and
fullling what are perceived to be the correct
responsibilities of a teacher. This links clearly
s cs s
frames as evidence of supporting our children.
Beig reecive prciioer
as c i scs
during the project that I know I will implement
s c c, c -c s
c ss-
on the fact that other more exible strategies
can be offered. However, from the perspective
ss i cs , i
c css ss
c
writing frames (as I was) and then the class will
s ss
developed with me. I feel very strongly that I now
ss cc
encourage people to experiment as I have. The
scs c cs s
, , ssss
however make it difcult for everyone to reect
and improve their teaching. This is something
that stands in the way of teachers ability tobecome reective practitioners. I am hopeful that
sc, S ks,
teachers were involved in the Project, we will be
s s
c s s
strategies that seemed most useful.
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Ap p e n d i c e s
a ess how o pl or
cmpai f Pi Pip a
t lay f sa.t p p t l S
w s ?
w
ccs
sc?
pc s
particularly effective.
w s
?
pc
s s
sc s
onomatopoeia. How
s s
?
h c y ay
Ici
You will need an introduction. This will say what
a ballad is and what they try to do to the reader.
Introduce the poems that you will be studying.
pss sc ss:
A ballad is a poem that tells us .
I will be comparing the two poems ..
Firs prgrph:
Look at the moral behind The Pied Piper. Explain
what it is and how we can learn from it. Use a
quote to support your ideas.
Seco prgrph:
Look at The Lady of Shallot: what is the moral
c ?
pss sc ss:
I think the moral of the poem is . because.
The reader is warned that .
thir prgrph:
Look at the way that The Pied Piper uses
imagery to describe what is going on. You must
say WHY its effective. You may use this model to
:
P- The poet uses imagery to describe the .
E- We can see this in the line
e- ts s c cs s s c
the . And forces us to feel
Forh prgrph:
Look at the way that The Lady of Shallot uses
imagery to describe the events. You can use the
same model if you wish.
Appendix 1
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Fifh prgrph
l s s t
Pied Piper. For example, we have studied
onomatopoeia, repetition and emotive words. Pick
one of these and explain why it is good.
pss sc ss:
t ss sc
b s , ss s
..
Sixh prgrph
l s s t
Lady of Shallot. We looked at emotive words and
adjectives. Pick one of these and explain why it isgood.
pss sc ss
The poet describes the ? using adjectives.
ts s c cs c s
the
Cci
ts s s s
what you have learned from them.
us pee c :
Point is a statement that you must prove (The
ss s
us feel sorry for the character)
Evidence: this is a quote from the text (We can
see this in the line the distraught woman)
Explanation explains your idea- says how or why.
The word distraught is very strong and it makes
us realise that she is incredibly upset. This makes
us feel bad that she lost her true love.)
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Appendix 2a
Appendix 2b
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F A t I M A
C o n t e hFmy waa scCy Qii Kya, wmi
Aimt s s s
between the identication of boys perceiving
ss s sccss s c
of motivation towards writing.
t s s s cc,
s s s
writing.
stAge 1
d i A g n o s i n g t h e p r o b l e m s
Cse s 1 G
G is a lively character in class. He is very vocal
and imaginative in expressing his ideas orally.
The main issue that I identied in his writing was
s c s s
css scsss,
c s s s s,
if anything at all (appendices 1and 1b). He also
has poor handwriting and doesnt like the physical
process of writing. At the start of the academic
year (October 2007), before starting the project, I
s css c w pc
Survey (appendix 2). Some responses that stood
out are included here.
a c c
s sss, s c s
c s
c s lSa sc
the remainder of his responses for him. Before
s i
c s
cs s, s s
perfect case study.
Q: Do you enjoy writing? Why?/Why not?
G: No because I cant be bothered.
Q: Is there anything you dont like about
?
G: Yes I hate it is so boring.
Q: a ?
G: No
Q: C c
c ? w
s ?
G: No.
Q: w c
says: Today were going to do somewriting.?
G: Oh crap. I hate writing.
Cse s 2 H
h s c s g: s, ss
and very serious. The responses to the writing
perception survey didnt show a negative attitude
to writing but more the perception that he wasnt a
good writer. Another interesting thing I picked outwas his focus on levels. This immediately made
cs c
has in motivating boys to write. Some responses
that stood out are included here.
Q: a ?
H: Im not that a good a writer
Q: C c
c ? ws ?
H: Yes. I did a test and got a high level
mark in it.
Q: w c
says: Today were going to do some
writing?
H: I thought that I couldnt wait to nish it
to try to get a high level mark.
The main issue I had identied in his writing is
his struggle with structure. He has difculties in
shaping ideas, paragraphing and demarcation.
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stAge 2
th e be g i n n i n g o F t h e
jo u r n e y
The rst meeting of the EMC TDA Writing project
s s s
s i cs
studies. Sharing knowledge and understanding
about the difculties of writing for struggling boys
cs s
case studies more focused.
p , i s - emC, c ss
factors identied as accounting for the poor
performance of boys in writing. There were several
s s ,
cs i c cc
s s
struggling with.
t ss s
s cc s; ss
sssss , s
g, s
substantial amount of writing to be produced. The
s s s
marginalised made a lot of sense; it encouraged
me to be more condent in focusing on the
process ss
their ideas more independently, rather than just
the outcome.
i s c s ICT to enhance boys writing interesting. Again,
c g, cs s
, -c -css
s
i c cs
: s s
of the physical process of writing.
ls, s
was also intriguing. The idea of boys perceiving s cs
s c ss
it is important to plan. I began thinking about the
cs i i c
css
students to independently nd strategies that suit
them best. The importance of avoiding over-csc c c c,
s cs
process.
a scss ccs
, i cc s
two case studies. This was videoed by the EMC
to help study the ndings closely. The following
sss s :
g
Q: w i ,
?
g: y cs
assessment..(on his handwriting)
Oh yeah its actually quite bad not
that good. Im not very good at writing.
My familys not very good at writing
neatly. Its got a bad reputation for
writing
h
Q: What are you not so good at or nd
cs?
h: pc cs,
put them. Nothing else. It makes my
grades go lower than they should be
Says he likes writing in maths: Its easier to
write than English. You have to think less about
it
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stAge 3
id e n t i F y i n g ne w st r At egi es
After reecting on what the students had said
s s s
s, x s s
strategies that I hadnt already tried, or wanted
to try in different ways. A follow-up meeting was
sc emC s, scss
reect ndings with the other teachers involved in
the project. Once more, it was very useful to share
ccs c c
cs ss the writing of the targeted boys in our studies.
digosis iiil sregies
g
ps: a s sc css
, s c
produce substantial pieces of writing.
Ss
Re-writing for display/presenting to
s
Model good handwriting
Use 2 books, one for notes and rough
work, the other for polished writing.
h
ps: a s sc s
ideas.
Ss Experiment with a variety of writing
s/s cs
Model proof-reading (highlighting
sentences that lack clarity)
Follow-up marking
b s c c s-s
, c s cc
and perhaps the most signicant problem to try toovercome.
stAge 4
An obser vAt i on lo g28.04.08
I spoke to G at the beginning o the lesson today
about the act that I would be monitoring the
amount o writing he produces at the end o
every lesson and that I would be ocussing on his
handwriting presentation. He accepted this act
and ocussed all through the lesson.
It was interesting watching him write as he had one
hand supporting his orehead and was ocussed
or the whole lesson.
At the end o the lesson he voluntarily came to show
me his book and I wrote an encouraging comment
at the bottom o the page and a target to ocus on
or the next lesson (appendix 5). It was interesting
to see how positively G responded to this extra
attention, and the eort he put in knowing that his
work would be immediately discussed at the end
o the lesson.
12.05.08
Having checked Gs book at the end o the lessonagain today, he is surprisingly still on track! He is
making a real eort to make his work neat and tidy
(appendix 6) .
13.05.08
I set up the end o unit assessment in todays
lesson. I usually give all the students a support
sheet to prompt ideas, and the weaker students
a writing rame to structure their writing/motivate
them to write.G would normally have been given a writing rame
and usually asks i he can ll in the gaps on the
worksheet as this means less writing. On this
occasion I only gave G the prompt sheet, which has
a list o questions to generate ideas. He surprisingly
wrote a lot more than usual and really got stuck in.
Giving him this independence really encouraged
him, as I made a point o telling him I didnt eel
he needed it because he had demonstrated a lot
o mature ideas about the novel we had been
studying. I explained that I wanted him to have
more reedom with his writing.
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Perhaps writing rames are not as useul as we
think especially the guess what I want you
to write next ones, which appear to limit the
students in thinking or themselves (and in the
process rustrating them) rather than aiding the
composition process! This was a concern I hadduring the initial stages o the project, ater looking
at actors identied as accounting or the poor
perormance o boys in writing.
19.05.08
I had the opportunity to mark Gs and Hs end
o unit assessment with them during the lesson,
whilst other students were working. Both boys
had produced a signicant amount o writing in
the previous lesson.
G usually word processes his assessment piece
with an LSA as he lacks motivation to physically
write his ideas, so this piece o writing has been
a real achievement (see appendix 7a). Beore we
started going through his work he told me he was
eeling unwell and that he wanted to go to the
medical room an excuse he usually gives when
becoming tired o writing. I convinced him to stay
and he actually seemed to enjoy the dialogue we
were able to have and the attention he was given.
I marked the rst two paragraphs with him andgave him a pencil to mark the rest using the targets
I had given him, which he did very well. Again, this
highlighted the benets o giving extra attention to
struggling students: positive relationships, trusting
relationships are built.
H appeared to nd the dialogue we had about his
work helpul, as he has a problem with structuring
his ideas. I used the same process I used with G,
giving him targets to improve the rest o his work.
The other students accepted the act that I spent asignicant part o the lesson with the two boys and
ocussed on their work, as guided writing has been
regularly integrated into lessons.
Guided writing provides an additional supported
step towards independent writing. Through guided
writing, children are supported during the dierent
stages o the writing process. It allows the teacher
to work closely with a small number o students to
develop dierent areas o writing at a personalised
level.
20.05.08
Meeting with Albany and John Hickman was
really encouraging as it was a chance to really
refect on progress made. I eel that perhaps I am
ocusing more on G than I am on H however. It
was interesting looking back at the boys WritingPerception Survey responses G starts o stating
how much he hates writing and then towards
the end the LSA which supports the class had to
complete his responses or him!! Hs responses
reminded me that we really need to do more
creative writing. I plan to have un ater hal term
with a creative writing unit. It is important to ensure
that students enjoy writing and not only view
writing as something to be judged and assessed. I
cant wait in act I think I will join them and get
my creative juices fowing too!
Also, I ound out that G was sent home ill yesterday
ater my lesson. It wasnt an excuse ater all! I eel
slightly bad, however the act that he chose to
persevere in my lesson does say a lot. Perhaps it is
because o the attention given and the relationship
we have built throughout the year. Or maybe, just
maybe, he now loves writing so much he wanted
to stay to nish his piece!!!
9.06.08G volunteered to work in the library so that he could
ocus on re-drating his literature essay without
distraction. I have told him that he doesnt have to
re-write all o it, and that he should select his best
bits (I dont want to kill motivation to write as
pointed out by John in our last meeting). I gave
him a handwriting rame (a sheet o plain paper
with guidelines to help him orm his letters properly
see appendix 7b) , which has really helped his
presentation perhaps it is worth investing inexercise books which oer this support.
14.07.08
To ocus on Hs diculty with structure and his
diculties in shaping ideas, Michael Simons
rom EMC worked with him and another student
on Movie Power. This sotware oers the
opportunity or students to create short moving
image sequences, with scripted voice-over. The
genre the pair ocussed on was documentary,
combining movie clips and a script reporting on
the environment (see appendix 8)
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Watching the video clip was very interesting. The
ollowing observations were made:
H is a little less passive than usual, but still appears
to need prompting or modelling o how to drat
ideas. He appears to lean back in his seat at times
and put his head in his hand happy or X (not parto case study) to take the lead. H has to invite him to
negotiate his ideas/write ideas down. Perhaps I am
reading too much into this, but his body language
suggests that the task o having to structure ideas
is too much to handle. It is only when X begins to
break the sections down/suggest possible ideas or
them to negotiate that he appears more relaxed.
Post-its spring to mind, as perhaps an eective tool
to help a student like H structure ideas oering
limited space to write and the option to move ideasaround. Also, it is interesting that when H is typing,
he accepts exactly what X dictates he should type,
however, when X is typing, he re-drats their initial
ideas beore noting down their nal script. This is
interesting as H tends to write exactly what pops
into his head he doesnt appear to stop and edit
his thoughts to make them clear. This I believe to be
part o the problem preventing H rom struct