SW WEEK OF DEC. 9

Finish Unit 1Personal Narrative

Monday • Opening – Please copy down the following

quotation –

• “Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world.”o Nelson Mandela

Article• Take out your article from Friday.

o Write out a Works Cited entry for it.• (Author. “Title.” Title of Source. Date of publication. Web. Access

Date. URL [short form].o Write a 3-5 sentence summary of the article.o Skip a line.o Write a 3-5 sentence commentary on how useful, accurate, and/or

interesting the article is or is not.• When finished, submit with your article

• Learning Target: I can summarize information and evaluate the source and its content.

Grammar• Check rest of lesson 1• Lesson 2 – Punctuation – Commas

• Learning Target: I can edit for comma use.

Improving Writing• Improving sentences• Adding Variety

• Learning Target: I can add detail and change sentence order around so to add variety in my writing.

TuesdayOpenings• Active and Passive Voice –

o Active Voice occurs when the subject performs the action. In Passive Voice, the subject of the sentence is acted on by another agent.

• Exampleo Passive: Snuffles was taken to the vet by

my mom.o Active: My mom took Snuffles to the vet.

• Rewrite in Active Voiceo Chrissy’s dress for the dance was chosen by her mom.

Grammar• Correct Improving Sentences• Colons and Semi-colons

o Semi-colon rules – these are rarely used ones. o Colons – a couple very common ones – the list, business letter, intro quotation.

• Complete Lesson 2.

• Learning Target: • I can edit for colons and semi-colons and commas.• I can combine sentences for variety and emphasis.

Semi-Colons• Special uses – both due to many commas already

in the word item.

• Christina had the opportunity to tour several places in Europe as part of her internship this summer, including Prague, Czeckalovokia, Yakutsk, Russia, Kazakhstan, and Irkutsk, Siberia.

• How many places did Christina visit?

Semi-Colons• Try this version – might make it easier to tell –

• Christina had the opportunity to tour several places in Europe as part of her internship this summer, including Prague, Czeckalovokia; Yakutsk, Russia; Kazakhstan; and Irkutsk, Siberia.

Journal• Opening – do Journal 2 – Word Choice

• Review the Top Ten Word Choice Mistakes list.

• Write a paragraph about a friend, a class, or your job. Use a word from each of the 1-10 word choice items. Please highlight each and put the number next to it corresponding to the list.

• Learning Target: I can monitor my own correct use of word choice items.

Introduction to Personal Narrative

• The assignment• Thesis statement• Body paragraphs

Thesis• Thesis will be centered around a specific career,

internship, apprenticeship, military program, or college goal.

• Part of the thesis needs to identify why this is a viable option for you – o Why you think you would be good at thiso What experiences you have had that make you settle on this particular

choice.

Thesis• Not a thesis

o Sam, Steve, and my mom.o Everything influenced my

choice of careero I plan to go to college at

MCC; then I will transfer to GVSU.

• Will work as a thesis• My love of the

outdoors and my family have influenced me to pursue a career as a conversation officer.

• From my experiences in CTC and my family members who already work in construction, I have decided I want to study to be an engineer.

Compose your thesis• Once approved, begin outlining your body

paragraphs. o What can you use as examples?o What story can you tell to illustrate this about you?o What specifics are in your background that you can talk about?

• Learning Target: I can write a clear precise thesis that incorporates two key points.

Wednesday• No Opening

o Please get out Lesson 2 – • Have me stamp it if I did not yesterday.• Correct it.

• We will start by making our thesis statements I talked about yesterday.

• Make notes for body paragraph• After approved, may work on computer

Wednesday• Correct Lesson 2• Review Body paragraphs• Type up body paragraphs

• Print off for work tomorrow.

• Learning Targetso I can edit for errors in commas, semi-colons, and colons.o I can explain my career goal and support it with specific relevant

details.

ThursdayOPENING – Please take out Lesson 2 – I should have already stamped it – I will put answers up as soon as the bell rings.

Wait to get computer until directed – you will use same number as when we have COWS.

Agenda• Correct Les. 2• Do Lesson 3• Complete Body Paragraphs• Compose Conclusion• Turn in Improving Sentence Assignment

Learning Target: I can communicate my goals and plans in writing.I can edit and revise for quotation marks.

Apostrophes – mean possession

• Add ‘s – car of Max• Add ‘s – wallet of the tourist• Add ‘ after the s – dressing

room of the girls (dressing room of more than one girl)

• Add ‘ after the s – bonuses are for all the employees.

• Do Lesson 3. When finished, get your computer – and turn in the Improving Sentences assignment.

• Max’s car• The tourist’s wallet• The girls’ dressing

room• The employees’

bonuses.

Body Paragraphs• State with a statement of focus – • Develop

o Tell storieso Explain past experience that is relatedo Use specific people, places, events.

• Final Sentence o Tie back to thesis.

Conclusion• Bring reader/listener up to your present• What have you done in taking steps toward your

career/college goal?• What do you have left to do? • These will typically be very short – 3-4 sentences. (the

reverse of your intro)

• Learning Target: I can wrap up my career narrative and keep it focused on the topic.

Fridayo Opening – Write the corrected version of the

sentence below.

o Its to bad when it’s the weekend and their are so many things I want to do and only 48 hours too do them, so my dog did not get its bath unless you count walking in the rain.

o (This is all one sentence – but there are punctuation and word choice issues)

Journal 3• You have received a list of vocabulary words.

These are words that are 12th grade vocabulary. Many you know but may not use regularly.

• You will be required to use some in your final personal narrative.

• For now, select at least 5 of the words and use them correctly in sentences talking about yourself, your interests, and/or your skills. You are to write 3-5 sentneces.

• When finished, please grab your COW.

Friday• Correct Lesson 3• Journal 3• Review Introduction – look at my comments• Revise your introduction and tie in thesis to it.

• Assemble and submit essay to Turnitin.com

• Peer Revision on Monday – if you are absent, know that you will need to do this on your own during the day on Monday.

Introductions• Reread introduction• Remove any duplication so it does not repeat the body

paragraphs.• Add thesis

o Transition to it.o Ideas for transitions

• As I near the end of my senior year, I have begun to think about what I want to do after high school…..

• My family has all been asking me what I am going to do after high school, and I have decided…

• My friends and I have been working on making decisions about our futures. For me, ….

• Need to review my comments• Need to combine with your body and conclusion into

one essay and submit to Turnitin.com

Preview of next weeko Monday – Peer review o Tuesday – Review of feedback, Submission directionso Wednesday – Unit 1 Mastery Review – do and correcto Thursday – Revise, fill out submission sheet, and submit final draft of

essayo Friday – Unit 1 Test

Note: If you will be leaving early from vacation, you must still submit your

essay on time to Turnitin.com Also, I strongly advise you to take your Unit 1 Test prior to leaving as you

will not be as well prepared the day we return from class.