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SITUATIONAL WRITING

(SPEECH)

State the option you have chosen – do not ask your schoolmates to choose. PROPOSE your idea

Lack of background information provided PURPOSE – why are even having the flea market/ school concert in the fi rst place? Elaborate, not lift.

Recommend to you (x) Recommend ____ to you or suggest that you OPT for this option

No need to capitalize your events unless they are NAMES

Discuss the event; not discuss ABOUT (x) the event“I have decided..” (x) “I propose../ I

re1commend..”

INTRODUCTION

Need to use the criteria to decide which advantages should be highlighted!

Elaborate on why you think the criteria is important E.g. mass participation why? E.g. less preparation why?

PARA 2/3 – ADVANTAGES OF CHOICE

“I know some of you are concerned that..”

Possible problemProposed solution (be feasible)

PARAGRAPH 4 – PROBLEMS OF CHOICE EVENT

“I do not prefer the other one” (x) the other event is not as good/beneficial/not preferred

State advantages, then move on to disadvantages

PARAGRAPH 5 – THE OTHER EVENT

Restate your option clearlySummarize main advantages of option

Thanks

CONCLUSION

Do not begin sentence with But And Also So So as to

“and” only related ideas

OTHERS