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More and more students choose to go abroad to study, while others hold the view that the costs are too high, and we can also receive good education without attending a college in a foreign country…

What is your opinion?

Nowadays a growing number of students choose to go abroad to study.

First, they think by attending a college in a foreign country they can gain not only useful knowledge of science but also the culture and customs of other nations. Second, they can take advantage of this opportunity to gain a good command of language very quickly; moreover, they can meet different people and enjoy different culture, which may help to broaden their views.

Every coin has two sides. The negative aspects are also apparent. The costs are much higher than those in their native country. Most overseas students have to work for a living, which can’t allow them to pay all their attention to study. What’s more, they may feel very lonely.

Through above analysis, we can see that the positive aspects outweigh the negative ones. Therefore, I am in favor of going abroad to study.

Overseas Study (score 23, full score 25)

Nowadays a growing number of students choose to go abroad to study.

First, they think by attending a college in a foreign country they can gain not only useful knowledge of science but also the culture and customs of other nations. Second, they can take advantage of this opportunity to gain a good command of language very quickly; moreover, they can meet different people and enjoy different culture, which may help to broaden their views.

Every coin has two sides. The negative aspects are also apparent. The costs are much higher than those in their native country. Most overseas students have to work for a living, which can’t allow them to pay all their attention to study. What’s more, they may feel very lonely.

Through above analysis, we can see that the positive aspects outweigh the negative ones. Therefore, I am in favor of going abroad to study.

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language and structure

Nowadays a growing number of students choose to go abroad to study.

First, they think by attending a college in a foreign country they can gain not only useful knowledge of science but also the culture and customs of other nations. Second, they can take advantage of this opportunity to gain a good command of language very quickly; moreover, they can meet different people and enjoy different culture, which may help to broaden their views.

Every coin has two sides. The negative aspects are also apparent. The costs are much higher than those in their native country. Most overseas students have to work for a living, which can’t allow them to pay all their attention to study. What’s more, they may feel very lonely.

Through above analysis, we can see that the positive aspects outweigh the negative ones. Therefore, I am in favor of going abroad to study.

Beautiful structure

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First, …………………………………………………….. not only ……………………………………………....…… but also ………………………………… Second, ………..; moreover, …………………………………………..

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Through above analysis, we can see that……… Therefore………………………….

Nowadays a growing number of students choose to go abroad to study.

First, they think by attending a college in a foreign country they can gain not only useful knowledge of science but also the culture and customs of other nations. Second, they can take advantage of this opportunity to gain a good command of language very quickly; moreover, they can meet different people and enjoy different culture, which may help to broaden their views.

Every coin has two sides. The negative aspects are also apparent. The costs are much higher than those in their native country. Most overseas students have to work for a living, which can’t allow them to pay all their attention to study. What’s more, they may feel very lonely.

Through above analysis, we can see that the positive aspects outweigh the negative ones. Therefore, I am in favor of going abroad to study.

Overseas study

When they are asked about the attitude towards go abroad to study, people have different ideas. A vast majority of students choose to study abroad. Contrary to the widely held thought, I think differently. I think that there is no need for us to go abroad to study.

There’re several reasons leading to my choice. The costs are too high for most of our families. As far as we know, though the level of our lives is increasing, half the population still lives below the poverty line.

Another reason is that we can also receive good education without attending a college in a foreign country. As science and technology advances, the facilties in schools are becoming modern and teaching methods are greatly improved.

It is hardly too much to say that there is no point in going abroad to study, while in our native country you can also receive good education.

When they are asked about the attitude towards go abroad to study, people have different ideas. A vast majority of students choose to study abroad. Contrary to the widely held thought, I think differently. I think that there is no need for us to go abroad to study.

There’re several reasons leading to my choice. The costs are too high for most of our families. As far as we know, though the level of our lives is increasing, half the population still lives below the poverty line.

Another reason is that we can also receive good education without attending a college in a foreign country. As science and technology advances, the facilties in schools are becoming modern and teaching methods are greatly improved.

It is hardly too much to say that there is no point in going abroad to study, while in our native country you can also receive good education.

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A vast majority of students choose to study

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think differently. I think that there is no need for

us to go abroad to study.

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families. As far as we know, though the level of

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Another reason is that we can also receive good

education without attending a college in a

foreign country. As science and technology

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education without attending a college in a

foreign country. As science and technology

advances, the facilties in schools are becoming

modern and teaching methods are greatly

improved.

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It is hardly too much to say that there is no

point in going abroad to study, while in our

native country you can also receive good

education.

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point in going abroad to study, while in our

native country you can also receive good

education.

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When asked about the attitude towards going abroad to study, different people have different ideas. A vast majority of students choose to study abroad. Contrary to the widely held thought, I think differently. I am of the opinion that there is no need for us to go abroad to study.

There’re several reasons leading to my choice. To begin with, the costs are too high for most of our families. As far as we know, though our living standards are on the rise, half the population still lives below the poverty line. Another reason is that we can also receive good education without attending a college in a foreign country. As science and technology advance, the facilities in schools are becoming modern and teaching methods are greatly improved.

For all these reasons, it is hardly too much to say that there is no point in going abroad to study, while in our native country you can also receive good education.

Most commonly occurring errors

1. Grammatical errors When they are asked about the attitude towards

go(going) abroad to study, people have different ideas.

3. Spelling errors

2. Chinglish

The level of our lives is(Our living standards are ) increasing

Facilties(Facilities)

Writing beautiful sentences

1.using some expressions and idioms to make vivid what you intend to say.Eg.

2.Using repetition to create a sense of unity

Eg.

It is raining cats and dogs. It is raining heavily.

3.Using transitions wisely to structure your ideas or emphasize one of your points.

To show addition -- additionally, also, and, furthermore, moreover, equally important, etc.

To conclude or repeat -- finally, in conclusion, on the whole, in the end, etc

Writing beautiful sentences

He lay on the grass and counted the stars in the sky.

Eg.

4.Using main and subordinate clauses,participle to make your language ring

Writing beautiful sentences

He lay on the grass, counting the stars in the sky.

These days, we often hear that more and more students choose to go abroad to study. And quite a few people object that with some reasons. But is this really the case?

I do not think that this view can be true. The reasons are chiefly as follows. Once students go abroad to some worldwide famous college to study, they have more chances to get touch with some advanced technology and theories, which are not avilable in our country. Besides, what benefits students go abroad most does not only consist in what they have learned on campus, but also consist in the horizon broadened once one has got in foreign society and customs that can’t be offered in our country.

Thus, one thing is obvious, and that is one’s experiences of having gone abroad to study can expand their scope of knowledge and raise one’s value. (by Ji Chao, Class 4)

These days, we often hear that more and more students choose to go abroad to study. And quite a few people object that with some reasons. But is this really the case?

I do not think that this view can be true. The reasons are chiefly as follows. Once students go abroad to some worldwide famous college to study, they have more chances to get touch with some advanced technology and theories, which are not avilable in our country. Besides, what benefits students go abroad most does not only consist in what they have learned on campus, but also consist in the horizon broadened once one has got in foreign society and customs that can’t be offered in our country.

Thus, one thing is obvious, and that is one’s experiences of having gone abroad to study can expand their scope of knowledge and raise one’s value.

These days, we often hear that more and more students choose to go abroad to study. And quite a few people object to that with some reasons. But is this really the case?

revising

For my part, I do not think that this view can hold water. The reasons are chiefly as follows. For one thing, once students go abroad to some worldwide famous colleges to study, they have more chances to get in touch with some advanced technology and theories, which are not available in our country. For another, what benefits students going abroad most does not only consist in what they have learned on campus, but also consist in the horizon broadened once one has got further in foreign society and customs that can’t be offered in our country.

Thus, one thing is obvious, and that is one’s experiences of having gone abroad to study can expand one’s scope of knowledge and raise one’s value.

revising

These days, we often hear that more and more students choose to go abroad to study. And quite a few people object to that with some reasons. But is this really the case?

For my part, I do not think that this view can hold water. The reasons are chiefly as follows. For one thing, once students go abroad to some worldwide famous colleges to study, they have more chances to get in touch with some advanced technology and theories, which are not available in our country. For another, what benefits students going abroad most does not only consist in what they have learned on campus, but also consist in the horizon broadened once one has got further in foreign society and customs that can’t be offered in our country.

Thus, one thing is obvious, and that is one’s experiences of having gone abroad to study can expand one’s scope of knowledge and raise one’s value.

How to write a good composition

Grammatical errors , Chinglish , Spelling errors

1.write correctly

2.write beautifully Use some expressions, idioms, repetition, transitions, main and subordinate clauses, and participle to make your language effective and beautiful

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