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Practice annotation Mrs robinsonLay 1 04.06.09 Jun 410:48 AM McNab aims to show the danger posed by these groups to society. The use of the terms 'turf wars' linked with the words 'drugs' and 'guns' as well as 'outlaw' reinforce his contention that these are dangerous people. emphasis on 'families, quiet, Father's day celebrations and 'easygoing' groups emphasises the threat to public safety that these groups pose. including the fact that a 'teenage girl was caught in the crossfire' appeals to our sense of safety and concern for the welfare of our families. an attempt to look unbiased by including this disclaimer. discussion of recent attack serves to link the two episodes in the public mind. This makes the reader think that the problem is larger than it is. giving a history of violence and showing that these groups attract dangerous men again, linking the Milperra incident to recent events, this repetition serves to increase concern in the reader the alliteration of 'big men battering' is evocative tries to show that our previous image of them as people who do good in the community is no longer true. the writer now gives reasons for the current violence and shows the reader that these people are dangerous criminals elliptical sentences get straight to the point, short, sharp sentences emphasise the severity of the problem shows the readers that these people are dangerous criminals with little regard for society's rules and norms sarcastic reference to their illicit trade. Shows the reader the writer's contempt for these gangs. 'muscling in' reminds the reader that these are big, strong and dangerous men further emphasises his last point by reminding us that public safety is not on their agenda and reiterates that we are all at risk with the phrase 'anyone's guess' demonstrates that the regular forces of law and order are not sufficient to control this dangerous group further emphasising the danger to the public analogies from overseas show us even more graphically that our public safety is at risk. In showing us the violence in Canada and Copenhagen, both may be perceived as safe places thus if this violence can occur there then it could occur here

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Practice annotation

Mrs robinsonLay 1

04.06.09

Jun 410:48 AM

McNab aims to show the danger posed by these groups to society. The use of the terms 'turf wars' linked with the words 'drugs' and 'guns' as well as 'outlaw' reinforce his contention that these are dangerous people.

emphasis on 'families, quiet, Father's day celebrations and 'easygoing' groups emphasises the threat to public safety that these groups pose.

including the fact that a 'teenage girl was caught in the crossfire' appeals to our sense of safety and concern for the welfare of our families.

an attempt to look unbiased by including this disclaimer.

discussion of recent attack serves to link the two episodes in the public mind. This makes the reader think that the problem is larger than it is.

giving a history of violence and showing that these groups attract dangerous men

again, linking the Milperra incident to recent events, this repetition serves to increase concern in the reader

the alliteration of 'big men battering' is evocative

tries to show that our previous image of them as people who do good in the community is no longer true.

the writer now gives reasons for the current violence and shows the reader that these people are dangerous criminals

elliptical sentences get straight to the point, short, sharp sentences emphasise the severity of the problem

shows the readers that these people are dangerous criminals with little regard for society's rules and norms

sarcastic reference to their illicit trade. Shows the reader the writer's contempt for these gangs.

'muscling in' reminds the reader that these are big, strong and dangerous men

further emphasises his last point by reminding us that public safety is not on their agenda and reiterates that we are all at risk with the phrase 'anyone's guess'

demonstrates that the regular forces of law and order are not sufficient to control this dangerous group further emphasising the danger to the public

analogies from overseas show us even more graphically that our public safety is at risk. In showing us the violence in Canada and Copenhagen, both may be perceived as safe places thus if this violence can occur there then it could occur here