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POETRY REVISION From: Fooling with Words By: Bill Moyers
CLICHÉ Eliminate clichés, which are the vermin of imaginative writing. Initially fresh images, clichés have been taken over and made mundane by too frequent usage. They have lost their original authority, power, and beauty. They raise their predictable heads (aaah, a cliché!) in the early drafts of even the most experienced writers. Turning a cliché against itself by intentionally using it in an inverted form can revive it. Puns can give a cliché a renewed life. However, if a poem is merely going to repeat a cliché, cut it.
EXAMPLE CLICHÉS http://www.be-a-better-writer.com/cliches.html
CIRCLE CLICHÉS IN YOUR POEM
You will remove them, or rewrite them for your next draft.
HOW TO IMPROVE A CLICHÉ
I will take the cliché “as busy as a bee” and show how you can express the same idea without cliché.
Determine what the clichéd phrase is trying to say.In this case, I can see that “busy as a bee” is a way to describe the state of being busy.
Think of an original way to describe what the cliché is trying to describe.For this cliché, I started by thinking about busyness. I asked myself the question, “What things are associated with being busy?” I came up with: college, my friend Jessica, corporation bosses, old ladies making quilts and canning goods, and a computer, fiddlers fiddling. From this list, I selected a thing that is not as often used in association with busyness: violins.
Create a phrase using the non-clichéd way of description.I took my object associated with busyness and turned it into a phrase: “I feel like a bow fiddling an Irish reel.” This phrase communicates the idea of “busyness” much better than the worn-out, familiar cliché. The reader’s mind can picture the insane fury of the bow on the violin, and know that the poet is talking about a very frenzied sort of busyness. In fact, those readers who know what an Irish reel sounds like may even get a laugh out of this fresh way to describe “busyness.”
ABSTRACT VS CONCRETEABSTRACT NOUNS
Actions and events: childhood, Friday, September, war
Ideas: energy, freedom, ideas, luck
States of mind: anger, courage, depression, freedom
Qualities: beauty, truth, kindness, truth
Conditions: cancer, a cold, the flu, diabetes
CONCRETE NOUNS People: dentist, firefighter, man, Rita
Animals: barracuda, gorilla, puppy, tiger
Places: Empire State Building, island, mountain, Turkey
Objects: cake, fruit, keys, coffee cup
ABSTRACT Identify all abstract or general nouns and replace them with concrete or specific ones. Words like "love," "freedom," "pain," "sadness," "anger," and other emotions and ideas need to be channeled through the physical imagery of the five senses: Sight, Sound, Smell, Touch, Taste. Creating original metaphors is the most difficult part of poetry writing, not just for beginners, but for those who have been working with words for years. This, however, is what makes a poem distinctive and interesting.
UNDERLINE THE ABSTRACT NOUNS IN
YOUR POEMYou will rewrite them using concrete nouns.
VERBS Fortify the physical character of the poem by using strong action verbs instead of linking verbs in the passive voice. Because active verbs and concrete nouns are more visceral, dynamic, and persuasive, they reduce the need for modifiers. Avoid overusing the "-ing" form of verbs because it dilutes and reduces their strength. It is like driving a speedboat without raising the anchor.
VERBSAction Verb
An action verb is a verb that describes an action, like run, jump, kick, eat, break, cry, smile, or think.
Linking Verb
Linking Verbs are verbs that express a state of being. They are called "linking" verbs because they link the subject of the sentence to a word or phrase in the predicate that renames or describes the subject (tells us more about the subject's "state of being").
HIGHLIGHT THE LINKING VERBS IN
YOUR POEMYou will rework the verbs to be action verbs.
RISK Be daring in your writing. Experiment and take chances. Risk-taking adds originality and spontaneity to the poem, which leads to imaginative and linguistic breakthroughs. Read a wide variety of contemporary poets so that you will begin to understand the breadth of poetry's language and modern imagination. You will also become more conscious of its many voices. You cannot mature as a poet unless you read widely. If you refuse to read, you refuse to grow.