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March and April Warm UPs More sentences to correct…
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FossumEnglish 10/12
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Warm Up 52 March 22/23
carl waisted his 1st year at college by not studying enough and spending to much time at parties
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REVISEDCarl wasted his first year at college by studying too little and partying too much.
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WU # 53 March 26/27
the reason they were so eager to sell tickets is because their trying to re-furbish the old gymnasium
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Revised
They were so eager to sell tickets because they're trying to refurbish the old gymnasium.
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WU#55 March 28/29
there is a desire on the part of many of us to maintain a Spring Recess for the purpose of getting away from the demands of our Studies
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Avoid Clichés and Bloated Writing
http://www.canadianwriterspocketguide2e.nelson.com/includes/HED/buscomm/PDF/Module21.PDF
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Much BetterWe want a spring recess so we can get away from our studies.
OR We want a spring recess to escape our studies.
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WU #56 April 10/11
by changing the oil every three thousand miles the car was kept in excellent condition
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Revised for dangling modifier
Changing the oil every 3,000 miles, we kept the car in excellent condition.
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WU #57 April 12/13
he was really late to his English class due to the fact that he had to finish his Math test
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Revising for “bloat”
He was late for English because he had to finish his math test.
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Bloated Expressions To Avoid At this point in time . . .“
Meaning: Now. "It would be appreciated if . . .“
Meaning: Please. "In the month of December . . ."
Meaning: In December. "It has come to my attention that . . ."
Meaning: Whatever comes after "that." "In the eventuality that . . ."
Meaning: If. "At the present time . . .“ Now…
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More…Redundancies
"Bad mistakes" Use mistakes. All mistakes are bad.
"My personal opinion is that . . ." Use my opinion. All opinions are personal.
"Repeat again" Use repeat. Repeat means to do again.
"Visible to the eye" Use visible. Can anything be visible to
anything but the eye? "For the purpose of . . ."
Meaning: For.
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Warm Up # 58 April 16/17
noone on this bus seem to know they’re way around this part of the city of new york
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RevisionNo one on this bus seems to know his or her way around this part of New York City.
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Indefinite Pronoun agreement No one (person)----has? vs. have? the
answer People have
Everybody----has? Or have? their or his? Every (individual) body of us has his or
her answer All of us have Anyone will have their or his/her Any one (person) will have his/her
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WU #59 April 18/19
after reading the original study the article remains unconvincing
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After reading the original study, I remain unconvinced.
(The article did not read the study; a person — I did.)
Revision
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WU #60 April 20/23
7 children were injured in the accident only one required hospitalizing
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Revised for comma splice
Seven children were injured in the accident; only one required hospitalization.
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WU #61 April 24/25
do you want turkey spinach and cheese roast beef lettuce and cheese or ham tomato, and cheese asked jim
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Use semi-colons between items on a list already separated by commas
“Do you want turkey,
spinach, and cheese; roast beef, lettuce, and
cheese; or ham, tomato, and cheese?” asked Jim.
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Add the Semi-colonsI cannot decide if I want my room to be green, brown, and purple green, black, and brown or green, brown, and dark red.
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Semi-colons join items in listsI cannot decide if I want my room to be green, brown, and purple; green, black, and brown; or green, brown, and dark red.
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WU #62 April 26/27
atticus didn't want scout to fight, however she could not ignore injustices
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Correcting comma splice
Atticus didn’t want Scout to fight; however, he knew she could not ignore injustices.
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WU #63
3 reasons why some students drop out of college are problems of to much parting and if they run out of money and if they can’t meet deadlines
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Three reasons why some students drop out of college are problems of too much partying, and if they run out of money and if they can’t meet deadlines
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Revising for Better Parallelism
Some college students drop out because of academic, financial, or time management problems.
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WU #64
jeffersons thoughts that displayed his new support for the constitution were documented in one very unique letter to his friend james madison
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Revising for Active Voice:Jefferson documented his new support of the Constitution in a unique letter to his friend, James Madison.
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WU #65 Writers should spend a great deal of
time thinking about their arguments to make sure they are not superficial.
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Revision: Writers should spend a great deal of time thinking about their arguments to make sure that those arguments are not superficial.
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WU# 66
high school students face a double challenge in applying to college, they are often required to have extra curricular leadership experience, in addition to high SAT scores
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High school students face a double challenge in applying to college; they are often required to have extra curricular leadership experience, in addition to high SAT scores.
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Most important may be the bear's body temperature, it remains relatively constant compared to that of true hibernators
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Most important may be the bear's body temperature, which remains relatively constant compared to that of true hibernators
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