Magazine Table of Contents Feedback

By Evie Theodore

First Draft

First Draft Feedback- By Ezreen

• You have used the appropriate A4 dimensions for the front cover. You have thought about your colour scheme and kept it consistent with your front cover. There is a good mix of light and dark colours.

• Camera angles have also been used to show you have thought about the representation of the magazine. For example your use of a skater model may represent indie skaters that may be interested in that genre of music.

• You have included the key elements needed for the contents page. I like the additional use of the subscription which will attract and encourage a target audience.

• The eye flow is natural as the reader will look from left to right and top to bottom as your images and texts are conventionally placed with a large Masthead.

• Based on the colours and sizes chosen for the texts, the fonts should be legible and eye catching to the audience.

Changes I made

• I added a band index to show the possible content of the magazine.

• A news section was added so the reader will be able to identify a certain article more easily.

• The website was not placed with the date line, instead I put it in the subscription box information.

• I included a picture of a miniature magazine, showing the reader the next issue with the subscription plan to encourage them to purchase it.

Second Draft

Second Draft Feedback- By Ezreen • You have chosen clear and bold fonts that stand out to the reader. • However the overall text you have chosen is not consistent with the style of your front cover.• The colour scheme you have chosen is clear and consistent with your front cover. They are a

good blend of bright and dark. The white was a good choice as it contrasts the black and gives the page ‘breath’.

• The eye flow is good but could be improved by moving the information to the left and the picture to the right.

• Mise en scene:• The costumes the models are wearing are good as they are mainly black/ plain clothing which

is neutral enough to apply to readers that listen to all sub-genres of rock music.• The background of the main image is good as it seems urban as there is graffiti on the wall

which goes with the idea that this is the magazine’s ‘graffiti’ addition as said in your plug on the front cover. The graffiti wings on the wall also matches the pull quote you have used in an informal jokey way.

• The model’s poses are good. Looking at the second image of the rock band, they appear to be sitting down by another graffiti wall casually leaning against it and each other. The model on the left is pulling a typical rockstar pose and encouraging the camera while the other is making a rude gesture which is implied through your editing technique of pixilating the hand. This is representative of the target audience as it shows two different and common personalities: the positive encouraging model and the camera shy angry rockstar model that doesn’t want their picture taken.

• There are no spelling mistakes.• To improve try to change the text.

Changes I made

• I changed the overall text to ChineseRocks to match my Front Cover and retain consistency and ‘House Style’.

• The same graffiti background used in my front cover is now used as the background for my table of contents seem consistent and interesting.

Third Draft

Changes I made

• I changed the format of the single digit numbers e.g. from 5 to 05

• Another miniature magazine in the subscription offer section was added to show the reader a variety of front covers. Other conventions on the front covers have also been used such as the extreme close up of the eye and the close up of the face.

• I also changed the background to a graffiti wall that was spray painted to look cracked, to differentiate the contents page slightly from the front cover but stick to the graffiti theme.

Final Version