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Greeting:
Original Rewrite
Dr Helen Wu
South Melbourne Rehabilitation Services
123 Emerald St
South Melbourne 3205
20 January 2007
Re : Mr Jack Wojovski, 43 year old
Dear Dr Wu,
Dr Helen Wu
South Melbourne Rehabilitation Services
123 Emerald St
South Melbourne 3205
20 January 2007
Dear Dr Wu,
Re : Mr Jack Wojovski, age: 43 years
Goop points:
Almost ok
Weak points:
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Re : Mr Jack Wojovski, 43 year old
Dear Dr Wu,
(Remember we can write “Re: ……..” before and “Dear Dr …” after it,,,, but common style for
OET is to write “Dear Dr …, first and then write “Re:…..”
43 year old (it is ok to write in this way, but better would be age: 43 years
20 January 2007
(leave one blank line before and after this date, may be you have done this on your hand-
written letter)
Remember: there are different ways to writing greeting part, but if we stick to only one style, it
would save our time in our real exam. Our purpose is only to pass the exam.
Purpose:
Original Rewrite
I am writing to refer Mr. Wojovski, who has
got severe back injury not sufficiently
responding to treatment. Your assistance and
rehabilitation services will be greatly
appreciated.
I am writing to refer Mr. Wojovski, who has
got severe back injury not sufficiently
responding to treatment. Your assistance and
rehabilitation services will be greatly
appreciated.
Goop points:
You have selected relevant information for purpose, it is concise and to the point. Try to write
in a bit more formal and professional way.
Weak points:
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who has got severe back injury not sufficiently responding to treatment. (yours is not wrong, but
it can be improved to be more professional:
, whose features are consistent with work-related back injury unresponsive to the treatment.
or
whose features are consistent with work-related back injury. (end your first sentence here, and
add “unresponsive/not responding to the treat in second sentence. Or you can skip from
introduction as it is becoming long.
Your further assistance for his rehabilitation would be highly appreciated.
Look at this intro, it is smooth, formal , concise and professional:
I am writing to refer Mr. Wojovski, whose features are consistent with work-related back injury.
Your further assistance for his rehabilitation would be highly appreciated.
2nd Body Paragraph:
Original Rewrite
Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty
days ago with a lower back strain as a result
of lifting weights at work. He had no
neurological symptoms. However there was
tenderness in the paralumbar region of the
L4-L5 segment of the spine. Range of
movement was limited and straight leg
raising test was 45` bilaterally.
Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty days
ago with a lower back strain as a result of
lifting a heavy object at work. He had no
neurological symptoms. However, there was
tenderness in the paralumbar region of the
L4-L5 segment of the spine. His range of
movement was limited and Straight Leg
Raising test was at 45` bilaterally.
Goop points:
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Weak points:
Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty days ago with a lower back strain as a result of lifting a
heavy object at work. (this sentence is correct and ok, but we can improve it, if we put
“Initially” at the start it would look better, as the reader would immediately know that you are
writing about 1st visit. 2
nd thing here is that you calculated that first visit was 20 days ago, it is
not wrong, but in real exam we don’t have time to do so, and it does not look much better, better
put the date here”
Initially, Mr Wojovski presented on 28/12/06 with a complaint of a lower back strain after lifting
a heavy object at work.
Or
Initially, on 28/12/06, Mr …….
He had no neurological symptoms. However, there was tenderness in the paralumbar region of
the L4-L5 segment of the spine. Range of movement was limited and straight leg raising test was
45` bilaterally. (all of these sentence are related to the physical examination, try to organize
things, if we start with “On examination,” the reader would know now we are talking about
physical examination. + join related things.
On examination, tenderness in his paralumbar region was noted and his range of movement was
limited. Also, his Straight Leg Raising test was at 45`.
Bilaterally (as there is no mention of “bilateral”, avoid using it),
You should have mentioned here what was done at that visit, you wrote it at the start of next
paragraph, that is not good, write it at the end of this sentence, then in next paragraph talk about
next visit/visits.
3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph:
Original Rewrite
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He was advised to rest and was prescribed
analgesics. This however was not sufficient,
therefore Naprosyn and physiotherapy was
commenced after subsequent visit)
12/1/2007). He improved and returned to
work, but soon had exacerbation of pain and
return of previous clinical signs.
He was advised an X-ray of lumbar spine,
review consultation with a physiotherapist.
Three days later he still has persistent pain,
with reportedly little temporary relief from
physiotherapy.
He was advised to rest and to take analgesics.
This however was not sufficient, therefore
Naprosyn and physiotherapy were
commenced after subsequent visit)
12/1/2007). His condition was improved, and
he returned to his work, but soon had
exacerbation of pain and return of previous
clinical signs.
He was advised an X-ray of his lumbar spine
and a review consultation with a
physiotherapist. Three days later, he still has
persistent pain with a temporary relief
with/after physiotherapy.
Goop points:
Weak points:
He was advised to rest and to take analgesics. (yours is not wrong, but this one is better, ,, this
sentence should be at the end of the above paragraph)
This however was not sufficient, therefore Naprosyn (using “however”, and “therefore” in the
same sentence, does not look good, avoid it)
We would start with paragraph like this:
On 02/01/07 or On his next visit, Mr. Wojovski’s condition had deteriorated , and
physiotherapy and Naprosyn 500mg twice a day were advised. On his next visit, he was advised
to return to his work and continue on physiotherapy. However, his pain was exacerbated by his
return to work. There was reduced front flexion and extension, and his ROM was at 45
bilaterally.
Your next paragraph’s organization is also faulty, you are putting last visit’s things in next para.
You can start your next paragraph with Today’s visit or you can put this at the end of your last
paragraph:
Today, his symptoms still persist and he is unable to perform light duties. + (talk about
temporary physio relief)
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Closing:
Original Rewrite
Mr Wojovski is married, working as a
factory worker for the last 18 years, which
involves lifting heavy objects. Both his
marriage and performance at work are
getting seriously affected by his clinical
condition.
In view of the above, your expert advise and
management as a rehabilitation specialist are
very much required. I would be grateful for
your assistance regarding the same.
Yours sincerely
Doctor
Mr Wojovski is married and has been
working in a factory for the last 18 years,
which involves lifting heavy objects. Both
his marriage and performance at work are
getting seriously affected by his clinical
condition.
In view of the above, your expert advice and
management as a rehabilitation specialist are
very much required. I would be grateful for
your assistance regarding the same.
Yours sincerely
Doctor
Goop points:
Weak points:
working as a factory worker ( does not look good,
Both his marriage and performance at work are getting seriously affected by his clinical
condition.
(no need to mention this here again, we have already told in the letter that his working is being
affected)
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Just add one sentence here. He drinks 1 to 2 glasses of beer per night.
Advice is noun , and advise is a verb.
In view of the above, your expert advice and management as a rehabilitation specialist are very
much required. I would be grateful for your assistance regarding the same.
(make it only one sentence,
In view of the above, I would be grateful for your further advice and management of his
condition regarding his rehabilitation. ( or something like that you can think about )
Don’t forget to write this line at the end:
Should there be any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me.
Overall Score + Advice
Word count: 212
Overall Grade: C+ or hardly B-
Your English is good, but you should understand and write according to OET’s criteria. You can easily achieve grade B with a bit more supervised practice and keeping in mind all the points I mentioned.
Individual scores:
Purpose
Description Grade Your Score
Purpose of document is immediately apparent and sufficiently expanded as required
3
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Purpose of document is apparent but not sufficiently highlighted or expanded
2 2
Purpose of document is not immediately apparent and may show very limited expansion
1
Description Grade 2. Content
Description Grade Your Score
Content is appropriate to intended reader and addresses what is needed to continue care (key information is included; no important details missing); content from case notes is accurately represented
7
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Content is appropriate to intended reader and mostly addresses what is needed to continue care; content from case notes is generally accurately represented
5 5
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4
Content is mostly appropriate to intended reader; some key information (about case or to continue care) may be missing; there may be some inaccuracies in content
3
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Content does not provide intended reader sufficient information about the case and what is needed to continue care; key information is missing or inaccurate
1
Performance below Band 1 0
3. Conciseness & Clarity
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Description Grade Your Score
Length of document is appropriate to case and reader (no irrelevant information included); information is summarised effectively and presented clearly
7
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly
5 4 or 5
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4
Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only partially successful
3
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful
1
Performance below Band 1 0
4. Genre & Style Description Grade Your
Score Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient
7
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader with occasional, minor inappropriacies; technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies
5 4 or 5
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4
Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or target reader; over-reliance on technical language and
3
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abbreviations may distract reader
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
The writing shows inadequate understanding of the genre and target reader; mis- or over-use of technical language and abbreviations cause strain for the reader
1
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient
0
5. Organisation & Layout Description Grade Your
Score Organisation and paragraphing are appropriate, logical and clear key information is highlighted and sub-sections are well organized document is well laid out
7
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Organisation and paragraphing are generally appropriate, logical and clear; occasional lapses of organisation in sub-sections and/or highlighting of key information; layout is generally good language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies
5 4 or 5
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4
Organisation and paragraphing are not always logical, creating strain for the reader; key information may not be highlighted layout is mostly appropriate with some lapses
3
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Organisation not logical, putting strain on the reader; or heavy reliance on case note structure; key information is not well highlighted and the layout may not be appropriate
1
Performance below Band 1 0
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6. Language
Description Grade Your
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7
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with meaning
5 4 or 5
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4
Inaccuracies in language, in particular in complex structures, cause minor strain for the reader but do not interfere with meaning
3
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Inaccuracies in language cause considerable strain for the reader and may interfere with meaning
1
Performance below Band 1 0
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6. Language
Description Grade Your
Score Language features (spelling/punctuation/vocabulary/ grammar/sentence structure) are accurate and do not interfere with meaning
7
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with meaning
5 4 or 5
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4
Inaccuracies in language, in particular in complex structures, cause minor strain for the reader but do not interfere with meaning
3
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Inaccuracies in language cause considerable strain for the reader and may interfere with meaning
1
Performance below Band 1 0
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abbreviations may distract reader
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
The writing shows inadequate understanding of the genre and target reader; mis- or over-use of technical language and abbreviations cause strain for the reader
1
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient
0
5. Organisation & Layout Description Grade Your
Score Organisation and paragraphing are appropriate, logical and clear key information is highlighted and sub-sections are well organized document is well laid out
7
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Organisation and paragraphing are generally appropriate, logical and clear; occasional lapses of organisation in sub-sections and/or highlighting of key information; layout is generally good language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies
5 4 or 5
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4
Organisation and paragraphing are not always logical, creating strain for the reader; key information may not be highlighted layout is mostly appropriate with some lapses
3
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Organisation not logical, putting strain on the reader; or heavy reliance on case note structure; key information is not well highlighted and the layout may not be appropriate
1
Performance below Band 1 0
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Description Grade Your Score
Length of document is appropriate to case and reader (no irrelevant information included); information is summarised effectively and presented clearly
7
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly
5 4 or 5
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4
Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only partially successful
3
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful
1
Performance below Band 1 0
4. Genre & Style Description Grade Your
Score Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient
7
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader with occasional, minor inappropriacies; technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies
5 4 or 5
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4
Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or target reader; over-reliance on technical language and
3
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Purpose of document is apparent but not sufficiently highlighted or expanded
2 2
Purpose of document is not immediately apparent and may show very limited expansion
1
Description Grade 2. Content
Description Grade Your Score
Content is appropriate to intended reader and addresses what is needed to continue care (key information is included; no important details missing); content from case notes is accurately represented
7
Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6
Content is appropriate to intended reader and mostly addresses what is needed to continue care; content from case notes is generally accurately represented
5 5
Performance shares features of bands 3 and 5 4
Content is mostly appropriate to intended reader; some key information (about case or to continue care) may be missing; there may be some inaccuracies in content
3
Performance shares features of bands 1 and 3 2
Content does not provide intended reader sufficient information about the case and what is needed to continue care; key information is missing or inaccurate
1
Performance below Band 1 0
3. Conciseness & Clarity
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Just add one sentence here. He drinks 1 to 2 glasses of beer per night.
Advice is noun , and advise is a verb.
In view of the above, your expert advice and management as a rehabilitation specialist are very
much required. I would be grateful for your assistance regarding the same.
(make it only one sentence,
In view of the above, I would be grateful for your further advice and management of his
condition regarding his rehabilitation. ( or something like that you can think about )
Don’t forget to write this line at the end:
Should there be any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me.
Overall Score + Advice
Word count: 212
Overall Grade: C+ or hardly B-
Your English is good, but you should understand and write according to OET’s criteria. You can easily achieve grade B with a bit more supervised practice and keeping in mind all the points I mentioned.
Individual scores:
Purpose
Description Grade Your Score
Purpose of document is immediately apparent and sufficiently expanded as required
3
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Closing:
Original Rewrite
Mr Wojovski is married, working as a
factory worker for the last 18 years, which
involves lifting heavy objects. Both his
marriage and performance at work are
getting seriously affected by his clinical
condition.
In view of the above, your expert advise and
management as a rehabilitation specialist are
very much required. I would be grateful for
your assistance regarding the same.
Yours sincerely
Doctor
Mr Wojovski is married and has been
working in a factory for the last 18 years,
which involves lifting heavy objects. Both
his marriage and performance at work are
getting seriously affected by his clinical
condition.
In view of the above, your expert advice and
management as a rehabilitation specialist are
very much required. I would be grateful for
your assistance regarding the same.
Yours sincerely
Doctor
Goop points:
Weak points:
working as a factory worker ( does not look good,
Both his marriage and performance at work are getting seriously affected by his clinical
condition.
(no need to mention this here again, we have already told in the letter that his working is being
affected)
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He was advised to rest and was prescribed
analgesics. This however was not sufficient,
therefore Naprosyn and physiotherapy was
commenced after subsequent visit)
12/1/2007). He improved and returned to
work, but soon had exacerbation of pain and
return of previous clinical signs.
He was advised an X-ray of lumbar spine,
review consultation with a physiotherapist.
Three days later he still has persistent pain,
with reportedly little temporary relief from
physiotherapy.
He was advised to rest and to take analgesics.
This however was not sufficient, therefore
Naprosyn and physiotherapy were
commenced after subsequent visit)
12/1/2007). His condition was improved, and
he returned to his work, but soon had
exacerbation of pain and return of previous
clinical signs.
He was advised an X-ray of his lumbar spine
and a review consultation with a
physiotherapist. Three days later, he still has
persistent pain with a temporary relief
with/after physiotherapy.
Goop points:
Weak points:
He was advised to rest and to take analgesics. (yours is not wrong, but this one is better, ,, this
sentence should be at the end of the above paragraph)
This however was not sufficient, therefore Naprosyn (using “however”, and “therefore” in the
same sentence, does not look good, avoid it)
We would start with paragraph like this:
On 02/01/07 or On his next visit, Mr. Wojovski’s condition had deteriorated , and
physiotherapy and Naprosyn 500mg twice a day were advised. On his next visit, he was advised
to return to his work and continue on physiotherapy. However, his pain was exacerbated by his
return to work. There was reduced front flexion and extension, and his ROM was at 45
bilaterally.
Your next paragraph’s organization is also faulty, you are putting last visit’s things in next para.
You can start your next paragraph with Today’s visit or you can put this at the end of your last
paragraph:
Today, his symptoms still persist and he is unable to perform light duties. + (talk about
temporary physio relief)
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Weak points:
Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty days ago with a lower back strain as a result of lifting a
heavy object at work. (this sentence is correct and ok, but we can improve it, if we put
“Initially” at the start it would look better, as the reader would immediately know that you are
writing about 1st visit. 2
nd thing here is that you calculated that first visit was 20 days ago, it is
not wrong, but in real exam we don’t have time to do so, and it does not look much better, better
put the date here”
Initially, Mr Wojovski presented on 28/12/06 with a complaint of a lower back strain after lifting
a heavy object at work.
Or
Initially, on 28/12/06, Mr …….
He had no neurological symptoms. However, there was tenderness in the paralumbar region of
the L4-L5 segment of the spine. Range of movement was limited and straight leg raising test was
45` bilaterally. (all of these sentence are related to the physical examination, try to organize
things, if we start with “On examination,” the reader would know now we are talking about
physical examination. + join related things.
On examination, tenderness in his paralumbar region was noted and his range of movement was
limited. Also, his Straight Leg Raising test was at 45`.
Bilaterally (as there is no mention of “bilateral”, avoid using it),
You should have mentioned here what was done at that visit, you wrote it at the start of next
paragraph, that is not good, write it at the end of this sentence, then in next paragraph talk about
next visit/visits.
3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph:
Original Rewrite
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who has got severe back injury not sufficiently responding to treatment. (yours is not wrong, but
it can be improved to be more professional:
, whose features are consistent with work-related back injury unresponsive to the treatment.
or
whose features are consistent with work-related back injury. (end your first sentence here, and
add “unresponsive/not responding to the treat in second sentence. Or you can skip from
introduction as it is becoming long.
Your further assistance for his rehabilitation would be highly appreciated.
Look at this intro, it is smooth, formal , concise and professional:
I am writing to refer Mr. Wojovski, whose features are consistent with work-related back injury.
Your further assistance for his rehabilitation would be highly appreciated.
2nd Body Paragraph:
Original Rewrite
Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty
days ago with a lower back strain as a result
of lifting weights at work. He had no
neurological symptoms. However there was
tenderness in the paralumbar region of the
L4-L5 segment of the spine. Range of
movement was limited and straight leg
raising test was 45` bilaterally.
Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty days
ago with a lower back strain as a result of
lifting a heavy object at work. He had no
neurological symptoms. However, there was
tenderness in the paralumbar region of the
L4-L5 segment of the spine. His range of
movement was limited and Straight Leg
Raising test was at 45` bilaterally.
Goop points:
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Re : Mr Jack Wojovski, 43 year old
Dear Dr Wu,
(Remember we can write “Re: ……..” before and “Dear Dr …” after it,,,, but common style for
OET is to write “Dear Dr …, first and then write “Re:…..”
43 year old (it is ok to write in this way, but better would be age: 43 years
20 January 2007
(leave one blank line before and after this date, may be you have done this on your hand-
written letter)
Remember: there are different ways to writing greeting part, but if we stick to only one style, it
would save our time in our real exam. Our purpose is only to pass the exam.
Purpose:
Original Rewrite
I am writing to refer Mr. Wojovski, who has
got severe back injury not sufficiently
responding to treatment. Your assistance and
rehabilitation services will be greatly
appreciated.
I am writing to refer Mr. Wojovski, who has
got severe back injury not sufficiently
responding to treatment. Your assistance and
rehabilitation services will be greatly
appreciated.
Goop points:
You have selected relevant information for purpose, it is concise and to the point. Try to write
in a bit more formal and professional way.
Weak points:
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Greeting:
Original Rewrite
Dr Helen Wu
South Melbourne Rehabilitation Services
123 Emerald St
South Melbourne 3205
20 January 2007
Re : Mr Jack Wojovski, 43 year old
Dear Dr Wu,
Dr Helen Wu
South Melbourne Rehabilitation Services
123 Emerald St
South Melbourne 3205
20 January 2007
Dear Dr Wu,
Re : Mr Jack Wojovski, age: 43 years
Goop points:
Almost ok
Weak points:
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Dr Che OET writing correction (for Doctors and Nurses and others)
VIP package
( £ 4 / letter)
Premium package
( £ 2.5 / letter)
Time after receiving your letter Within hours (usually less than 24 hours, even earlier)
Takes more time than VIP (usually within 48 hours)
Proofreading Yes Yes
Grammar mistakes Yes Yes
Feedback on conciseness, clarity, content, Genre and style, Organization and layout
Yes Yes
Paragraph structure yes Yes
Estimated grade Yes Yes
Estimated score in each of 6 OET writing criteria
Yes Yes
Recommendations ( individual, not copy paste)
Yes Yes
Mention of your strong and weak points
Yes Yes
Feedback according to new 6 OET writing criteria
Yes Yes
Send letter in Word /text file (for pic form contact me if available)
Word /text file
Reason of your mistakes Yes (explained in detail) Yes/No (if explained , it is less detailed)
Feedback quality High and advanced level standard
Detailed feedback Yes (too much detailed) Yes ( but less than VIP)
Clarifications or questions after feedback
Unlimited (as many as you wish)
Limited (just a few and important only)
If your letter is too weak, after feedback you may need to rewrite and I will check rewritten letter again
Yes NO
Case notes selection Posted by me in my group(may be yours, if available)
Only Posted by me in my group
Individual focus on your weaknesses and individual coaching
Yes No
If your sentences or paragraphs or parts of letter is not good or advanced, you need real improvement, I will rewrite advanced model sentences or paragraphs for you
Yes No (may be a few only)
Apart from your letter correction, other tips to improve your OET writing
Yes NO
Join my group for writing correction and guidance: https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/
Join my group for detailed, comprehensive, high-quality and cheap OET writing correction service.
https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2/
I am Dr Che (MD). Apart from my own job as a doctor, I also teach OET. Unlike
many other OET writing correction services my service is quick, detailed, and
comprehensive. I not only correct grammar mistakes, but also, organization,
structure, genre and style, conciseness and clarity etc, every criterion is covered
in my letters. I not only correct your mistakes but also rewrite better sentences
for you to learn (you can see my sample corrections below). Moreover, unlike
many other OET teachers, I have a real experience of OET as I myself passed my
OET exam.
My correction service is very cheap in these days (VIP package only 4 pounds per
letter, Premium package only 2.5 pounds per letter). It may change in future.
Look at my sample corrections to see how my correction is the best in the market
at the moment and also to learn.
If you are interested in my correction service please inbox me.
Join my facebook group to contact and for more free guidance and materials and
for case notes of sample letters
https://web.facebook.com/groups/oetpreparation2