Guten Morgen! · Guten Morgen! • Please have out your beginnings sheet • Please write down your...
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Guten Morgen! • Please have out your beginnings sheet • Please write down your assignments: Due Mon. 10/11 South.; Tues. 10/12 CHS – Rough draE of travel story – “Self Edit Sheet” – Dialogue Sheet Wed. 10/20 South; Thurs. 10/21 CHS – Vocab. Test – All extra credit & late/missing work for Travel Lit due • Then, using one of the pictures to the leE, please write 5 – 7 sentences of meaningful dialogue at the top of your dialogue sheet.
Transcript of Guten Morgen! · Guten Morgen! • Please have out your beginnings sheet • Please write down your...
GutenMorgen!• Pleasehaveoutyourbeginningssheet• Pleasewritedownyourassignments:DueMon.10/11South.;Tues.10/12CHS– RoughdraEoftravelstory– “SelfEditSheet”– DialogueSheetWed.10/20South;Thurs.10/21CHS– Vocab.Test– Allextracredit&late/missingworkforTravelLitdue
• Then,usingoneofthepicturestotheleE,pleasewrite5–7sentencesofmeaningfuldialogueatthetopofyourdialoguesheet.
Guests
• JuliaStein• JonasKartheim
• GarryKonrath
WriYngEvaluaYon
• “Somepeoplearebornonthirdbaseandgothroughlifethinkingthey’vehitatriple.”
‐BarrySwitzer
• Personvs.WriYng
“TrackingWriYng”
• Folders– Ontab:Owens,Jackie– Stapletrackingsheetinside.
• TrackingSheets– Review– Pleasedon’tmakethesamemistakestwice!
MyStory
• Pleasefilloutyour“TrackingWriYng”chartforthe“MyStory”assignment.
WhatGoesinMyWriYngFolder?
• TrackingWriYngSheet• ProofreadingMarks
• GradedWriYngAssignments(theBIGones)– MyStory– TravelStory
Dialogue
“Might Be a Little Bit Painful”
Let’sreview….Agoodstoryhas……
• AnacYve,descripYvebeginning• Developedcharacters• Specific,developedsefng
• Conflict• Aclimax
• Detailsthat“show”
Dialoguerules
• DialogueisnotconversaYon.RealconversaYonisdeadboringtoread.CreatetheillusionofrealconversaYon.
• InterspersedescripYvenarraYonwithyourdialoguetogiveitdetailandcontext.
• Inotherwords,useittoshow,nottell.– Showacharacter– Showasefng
– Showsuspensebuilding
"Youdon'thavetoanswerthatquesYon!"saidtheJudge."I'llanswerthequesYon.Youwantanswers?”saidJessop."IthinkI'menYtledtothem,"saidKaffee."Youwantanswers?"saidJessop."Iwantthetruth!"saidKaffee."Youcan'thandlethetruth!"saidJessop.
TheJudgeturnedswiElytowardthewitnessanddeclared,"Youdon'thavetoanswerthatquesYon!""I'llanswerthequesYon,"Jessopsaidcoldly,fixinghiseyesonKaffee.Heaskedthedefenseamorney,"Youwantanswers?""IthinkI'menYtledtothem,"Kaffeereplied.Jessopaskedagain,moreforcefully,asifscoldinganerrantrecruit,"Youwantanswers?""Iwantthetruth!"Kaffeeshouted,banginghisfistonthecounseltableindefianceofJessop'sinYmidaYngpresence.Thecourtmemberssatinstunnedsilence.Thecolonelleanedforward,risingtohisfeet,andthundered,"Youcan'thandlethetruth!”
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Use“hesaid”or“shesaid”
ANDusethealternaYves:‐heshrieked‐hewhispered‐shegasped
Don’toverusedialoguetags
“Say,Joe,whatisthatyou’redoing”
“Well,Sam,I’mfixingmycar.”
“Ididn’tknowitwasbroken,Joe.”
“Youknowmycarisalwaysbreakingdown,Sam”
Dialogue
“Hey,whereareyougoinginsuchahurry?”Jamieasked.
“Yeah.What’sup?”Samanthaasked. “Ican’tbelieveit.I’mgoingtobetheleadinthemusical,”Karensaid.
“That’sgreat,”Jamiesaid. “Howintheworldareyougoingtoworkthatintoyourschedule?”Samanthaasked.
“I’llmanage,”Karensaid.“Justdon’tworry.”
Karencameboundingdownthestairswithasmileonherface.ShewasgoingsofastthatshepracYcallyranintoJamieandSamantha.“Hey,whereareyougoinginsuchahurry?”Jamieasked,puzzled.SamanthawasjustasconfusedasJamiewas.“Yeah.What’sup?”sheaskedimpaYently.Karen’sheartleaptasshesharedthenews.“Oh!Ijustgotthebestnews.I’mgoingtobetheleadinthemusical.”“That’sgreat.”saidJamie,tryingtosummonupsomeenthusiasm.Deepdown,shefeltastabofjealousy.Shehadwantedthepartsobadly,andnowherbestfriendhadgomenit.ShetriedtoimaginewhatKarenwouldlooklikeonstageintheleadrole,singingthesongsshewassupposedtohavesung.SamanthatappedonKaren’sbooksimpaYently.“Howintheworldareyougoingtoworkthatintoyourschedule?”sheasked.SamanthaknewfromexperiencethatKarenhadtroublemanagingherYme.Shecancelledtheirplanstostudytogethertwiceinoneweek.Karentookalonglookatherfriends.ThenshementallyreviewedherlistofacYviYes.“I’llmanage,”shesaid,withacasualnod.“Justdon’tworry.”
KarenwassoexcitedthatshepracYcallyflewdownthestairs.Shecouldn’twaittotellherfriendsthenews!ShewasgoingsofastthatshealmostranintoJamieandSamantha.
“Hey,whereareyougoinginsuchahurry?”Jamieasked.“Yeah,what’sup?”Samanthaasked.Karen’sheartleaptasshesharedthenews.“Ican’tbelieveit.I’mgoingtobethelead
inthemusical.”“That’sgreat,”Jamiesaid.KarenthoughtthatshecouldheararingofjealousyinJamie’svoice.Karenknewthat
shehadbeenupfortherole,too,butshe’dthoughtthatJamiewouldatleastbehappyforher.EspeciallyaEerwhathadhappenedatthepartylastweek.WasJamieturningonhertoo?
Samanthatappedonherbooks.“Howintheworldareyougoingtoworkthatintoyourschedule?”Samanthaasked.
Karenthoughtaboutthatoneforasecond.Shehadtoadmitshehadbeenabitoverbookedlately.Shehadevenhadtochangeherplanstostudywithherfriends.ButacYnginthisplaywasmoreimportantthananythingelseshehadeverdone.Thiswasherchancetogetoutofhere.
Karentookalonglookatherfriends.“I’llmanage,”shesaid,withacausalnod.ShesawthedoubqullooksonSamantha
andJamie’sfaces.“Justdon’tworry.”
WhatdoyounoYceaboutgrammar???
AddpunctuaYon
• Whereareyougoingaskedmam• I’mgoingtoschoolhesaidsoIcanlearn
• Learningsaidtheteacheristhekeytothefuture
1.Stevesaid,"Goodmorning."
2."Goodmorning,"saidSteve.
3.Stevesaid,"Goodmorning,"thensatdown.
4."Ladiesandgentlemen,"saidSteve,"goodmorning."
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Nowlet’s“trickout”ourdialogue• Adjust your previous dialogue to include correct punctuation.
• Substitute other words for “said”
• Make sure you’re not overusing dialogue tags.
• Add narration in between dialogue.
• Write down how/what this dialogue would ADD to a story.
