Giving evidence 5902© 2006 Achieving Level 5 Providing evidence in your writing.

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Giving evidence

Achieving Level 5

Providing evidence

in your writing


Giving evidence

It is crucial that you PEE in your writing to make it as accurate as possible.


Giving evidence

But what is the evidence?

The evidence you need to use is anything from the text. If you make a point then you need to refer back to the text to show where you’re getting your ideas from and that you’re not just making them up.

Look at the text on the next slide from Act 1, Scene 2. Find the phrases which show what Ariel will do for Prospero.


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Ariel All hail, great master! Grave sir, hail! I come

To answer thy best pleasure – be’t to fly,To swim, to dive into the fire, to rideOn the curled clouds. To thy strong

bidding taskAriel and all his quality.

You have thirty seconds.

Finding the evidence is one thing - but how do we write it?


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Paraphrasing

This means taking what is said in the text and putting it into your own words. You do need to make sure that you keep the meaning the same.

Hast thou, spirit,Performed to point the tempest that I bade thee?b

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Prospero asks Ariel whether the spirit has aimed the tempest as was instructed.


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Your turn …Not a hair perished:

On their sustaining garments not a blemish,But fresher than before.b

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Ariel reports to Prospero that, despite the tempest that they endured, all the crew and passengers are safe with not even a hair being damaged on their heads. The only change to them is that they are cleaner after their good wash!

Remember that the more information you include, the more you are showing that you understand the text.


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Quoting

This means taking the exact words that are used in the text. You must always use quotation marks (single speech marks). You must make sure that the sentence still makes sense.

Ariel describes how the tempest affected the passengers of the ship. They all ‘plunged in the foaming brine’; the King’s son, Ferdinand, was ‘the first man that leaped’ and as he jumped he shouted, ‘Hell is empty, And all the devils are here!’

The quotations are only short but make your point and link what you say back to the text. You do not have to include whole lines but should choose selected phrases.


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Your turn …Look at the extract below: Act 1, Scene 2, lines 226-229. Write a sentence, including quotations, which explains where Ariel has left the ship after the storm.

‘Safely in the harbourIs the King’s ship. In the deep nook, where onceThou call’dst me up at midnight to fetch dewFrom the still-vexed Bermudas, there she’s hid.’

Ariel has left the ship, with its crew locked inside, ‘safely in the harbour’. Ariel knew about this ‘deep nook’ as Prospero had, in the past, sent the spirit there to ‘fetch dew’.


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Long quotations

Sometimes your quotation will not fit into the sentence. This is usually true if you want to use a longer quotation.

If this is the case, you will put the quotation on a new line. Do try to avoid this as you don’t very often need to include the whole quotation.In Act 1, Scene 2, Prospero reminds Ariel of the time the spirit was trapped:

Thy groansDid make wolves howl, and penetrate the breastsOf ever-angry bears. It was a tormentTo lay upon the damned …

He reminds the spirit that he freed her from this misery and that, in return, she should do his bidding without question.


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Putting it all together

You’ve now looked at various extracts from the play and used the different ways of giving evidence.

If you want to achieve a Level 5 or higher in this year’s SATs, it is crucial that you remember to include quotations in your answers.

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