Formative feedback

Student name Jenny Student number 515903

Course/Unit Drawing 1 Assignment number 1

Type of tutorial (written)

Overall CommentsMany thanks for sending me your 1st Assignment. Congratulations on setting up your online blog, which I am sure, will prove to be very useful as you progress through the course. You are already capable of writing reflectively about your work and can give your opinions on art and research in general. The Harvard Referencing system you could try out as you progress so that it becomes more natural to do. However Art is what we are here to do and I like your enthusiasm for drawing on the beach and watching the sea rub out your drawing through the action of the waves. At present at Tate St Ives, Jessica Warboys is exhibiting paintings that have been created by the action of the waves on pigment she puts on the canvas - http://www.tate.org.uk/whats-on/tate-st-ives/exhibition/jessica-warboys

Jessica Warboys

If you read through the article you will have information on another artist to add to your logbook. It shows how mark making can be turned into art. Another older artist who works minimally and in an Abstract Expressionist way through drawing and graffiti is Cy Twombly. So the mark making exercises that encourages you to express emotion already exists as a major 20th century art movement and again being selective , a little research will give you greater insight into that for the art history side to your blog .

Cy Twombly

In your drawing of the two objects in Shadows and Reflected light the more abstract shapes used in the cocktail shaker gives the appearance of the metallic reflective surface and I think if you adopted the same approach to the teapot looking hard for the reflections it would have been more successful than the rounded appearance with the highlights picked out in putty rubber. Assignment 1 Assessment potentialYou may want to get credit for your hard work and achievements with the OCA by formally submitting your work for assessment at the end of the module. More and more people are taking the idea of lifelong learning seriously by submitting their work for assessment but it is entirely up to you. We are just as keen to support you whether you study for pleasure or to gain qualifications. Please consider whether you want to put your work forward for assessment and let me know your decision when you submit Assignment 2. I can then give you feedback on how well your work meets the assessment requirements.

Feedback on assignmentDemonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity When it comes to the assignment , that is the major part of the chapter where you can apply all the lessons taught in the exercises for your final piece. A still life does need to have a balanced group of objects so if you think that your composition is unbalanced that is because the one large object is dominating increasingly smaller items leaving a large open space at the back. The idea of a final assignment is that you should try out first in sketch form a number of different compositions to see which one is the best. A vertical format for example would have allowed you to have the smaller objects at the front and with the correct alignment a reflection in the mirror and it would have fitted the paper better. Then when you have decided on the composition, its time to try out different media. You could introduce colour for example and what surface would be the most interesting to use. It is also time to increase the size of your picture before settling on a larger size for your finished composition. If you decide to go in for assessment this is what the assessors would be looking for. As it is, you use of a ball point pen is brave and courageous. Mistakes have to be avoided or else disguised as best you can. Overall your drawing of ovals and ellipses are very good and the shading is confident and appropriate. The reflection in the mirror gives an added dimension and it is an idea that could be further explored. The shading around and under the tissue could be stronger as does the reflection in the mirror but I understand why you held back in these two areas.

Sketchbooks

Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity

You have made a good start on the sketchbooks and remember to use them as much as possible adding sketches of all sorts when you see fit and building up your range of interests. ResearchContext, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis Research is now underway and being put down in the online blog. Another artist you might like to look at is Seurat and his black and white drawings. He used Conte Crayon and rough paper to achieve his impressionistic drawings that are made up solely of tonal gradations.

Seurat

Another artist is Georgio Morandi whose etchings are also appropriate at this stage for their hatching and compositions,

Morandi

Learning Logs or Blogs/Critical essaysContext, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

The learning log is a good opportunity for you to record your artwork, opinions and research all in one place. It is

important that you analyse different artwork as well as you can, visit exhibitions if you have the change and

generally increase your knowledge of art.

Suggested reading/viewingContext

If London is easily reachable for a days visit there are lots of exhibitions you can visit from the Royal Academy Summer exhibition where there is much to see, to the specialist exhibitions at the Tate Gallery. Giacometti is there for example with a display of his paintings and sculpture as well as his distinctive drawings.

Giacometti

Pointers for the next assignment● Reflect on this feedback in your learning log.● Approach the final assignment in a more inclusive way. ● Try out different drawing media.

Well done, I look forward to your next assignment.

Tutor name James Cowan

Date 13.7.17

Next assignment due September 2017