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The Craft of Scientific WritingMichael Alley
3rd Ed., Springer, New York 1996
a review of
byKyle Jensen
12 December 2002
Science is built up with facts as a house is with stones. But a collection of facts is no more science than a heap of stones is a house.
J. H. Poincaré
“Eschew Obfuscation”
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Motivation
� Challenger disaster of 1986
� Caused by a failure in the O-ring of rocket boosters
� Engineers knew about the problem, but failed to communicate the risk effectively
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Document Titles
� Orients the reader to your work and separates your work from others'
Effects of Humidity on the Growth of Avalanches
Effects of Humidity on the Growth of ElectronAvalanches in Electrical Gas Discharges
Studies on the Electrodeposition of Lead on Copper
Effects of Rhodamine-B on the Electrodeposition ofLead on Copper
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Document Abstracts
� Two kinds of abstracts
Descriptive This paper describes a new inertial navigation system for
mapping oil and gas wells. In this paper, we will compare the mapping accuracy and speed for this new system against the accuracy and speed for conventional systems.
Informative This paper describes a new inertial navigation system that will increase the mapping accuracy of oil wells by a factor of ten. The new system uses three-axis navigation that protects sensors from high-spin rates. The system also processes its information by Kalman filtering (a statistical sampling technique) in an on-site computer. Test results show the three-dimensional location accuracy is within 0.1 meters for every 100 meters of well depth, an accuracy ten times greater than conventional systems.
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Document Bodies
� Narrative strategy
� chronological
� spatial
� flow
� Sectioning
Debris RecoveryCataloguingInterpretationResults
PlacementBomb Makeup
Work to Be DoneInterpretation
Completed WorkRecovering DebrisCataloguing DebrisInterpreting the Debris
Preliminary Results of WorkPlacement of BombConstruction of Bomb
Future Work
Pam Am Flight 103 Report
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Clarity in Language
� Avoid needless complexity
utilizefacilitateapproximatelyimplementfirstly, secondly,...hitherto
usecauseaboutcarry outfirst, second,...until now
Short words are best, and old words, when short, are best of all.Winston Churchill
� Avoid ambiguity“Because the receiver presented the radiometer with a high flux environment, it was mounted in a steel container.”
“T cells, rather than B cells, appeared as the lymphocytes migrated to the thymus gland.”
“In low water temperatures and high toxicity levels of oil, we tested how well the microorganisms survived.”
“The elevated temperatures of the liquid propellant fuel facilitated an unscheduled irrevocable disassembly.”
“The higher temperatures caused the liquid propellant to explode”
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Punctuation
� ColonWe studied five types of marsupials: opossums, bandicoots, koalas, wombats, and kangaroos.
Introduces a formal list, long quotation, equation, or definition.
� Semi-Colon Joins two independent clauses (closely linked in thought) or separates complex items in a list.
The reactor was cold; however, the reaction preceded as planned.
� Dash Acts as a parenthesis to separate items that can't be separated by commas.
� Comma Separates details in a sentence.
Because two isotopes of hydrogen—deuterium and tritium—are lightweight, can be produced easily, and require little energy, they are prime candidates to begin the fusion process.
X-ray backscatter systems, which are relatively inexpensive, require the operator’s attention.
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Style of Language
� Avoid common redundanciesalready (existing)alternative (choices)at (the) present (time)(completely) eliminate(currently) being
introduced (a new)mix (together)never (before)none (at all)period (of time)
� Use the active voiceThe voltage was displayed on the oscilloscope.The oscilloscope displayed the voltage.
� Use the first person judiciouslyIt was determined that...The authors assumed that..
We determined that...We assumed that...
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Other Readings
� Graphic designE. R. Tufte., The Visual Display of Quantitative Information. Graphics Press, Cheshire, CT (1983)
� TypesettingL. Lamport, LaTeX: A Document Preparation System. 2nd Ed., Addison-Wesley, Reading, MA (1994)
� Mechanics (grammar)W. Strunk, E. B. White, and R. Angell, The Elements of Style. 4th Ed.Allyn & Bacon, Boston, MA (2000)
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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The End
� Acknowledgements
� Bill, who reads everything I write
� Professor Stephanopoulos
� Dr. Rigoutsos
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Document Introductions
� Introductions answer four questions
� What exactly is the work?
� Why is the work important?
� What is needed to understand the work?
� How will the work be presented?
Readers should not reach the body of the document with these questions unanswered.
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Document Structure
� Beginning
� title
� abstract
� introduction
� Body
� Conclusion
Tell them what you will tell them.
Tell them.
Tell them what you told them.
K.L. Jensen12/12/02
Bioinformatics and Metabolic EngineeringLaboratory at MIT
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Document Endings
� Endings have two purposes
� analysis of the most important results from the document's discussion
� future perspectives on the work
� Common errors
� new evidence: “Perry Mason”