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Presenter’s IntroductionDoreen CaswellMary G. Montgomery High SchoolSemmes, Alabama
Script Supervisor –10 years: movie and television industryWriting/English Teacher – 18 years: composition and creative writing
Bachelor of Arts: English and LiteratureMasters in Fine Arts: Writing – screen and fiction
Email Address: [email protected] – or – [email protected]: http://montgomery.mcs.schoolinsites.com/ (powerpoint
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Teaching the Composition Quickly in the
English Classroom
By Doreen A. Caswell
The PacketThe Packet consists of all the handouts
needed to teach the 5 paragraph essay. Notes Worksheets Blank worksheets Explanations Sample writings Email support
The Packet
Each student receives a blank packet The packet can be used two ways:
Rough draft – used to write the essay Revision tool – take a previously written essay
and plug it into the packet.
BRAINSTORMINGGetting Started
Inverted PyramidClass activity
136 pounds
Chewed up
students’ papers
Plays ball
DifferentColors
Easy to Train
Pets
Dogs
Great Dane
Appearance
Temperament
Delila
Largest Breed
Clustering
School
students
teachers
classes
rules
Dress code
uniformsLg.
classes
strict
nice
behavior
gradeshomework
attendance
Listing
SchoolTeachersStudentsCliquesUniformsHomeworkClass workClubs
Peer pressure
8 hoursimportant
Waste of time
Fun afterschool
hard
honors
stupid
bosses
Activity IdeasFor Brainstorming
Bell Ringer Idea
One week do brainstorming Bell Ringers. Start with placing a picture on the board Finish the week with topics Set a timer for 5 minutes. Take 5 minutes to discuss the brainstorming –
Discuss one or two students brainstorming.
Brainstorming: Activity 1Using the following *picture, have students list
as many details as they can about the picture.
Consider making it a game – the student with the most details can win candy or points.
*use pictures from computer
Activity
Brainstorming
Brainstorming: Activity 2
Step 1: Have students list 20 things about themselves. Can be done as a Bell Ringer. Try topics covered in class.
Example: adverbs, commas, etc.
Step 2: Have students create “How to Be…” poem.
How to Be PoemHow to be Chelsea
Txt all the timeLove the color BlueEat pizza everyday
Hate mathLove horsesGo hunting
Ride a four wheeler
How to PoemHow to be an Expository Essay
Always explainHave 5 paragraphsUse a 3 point thesis
Have an opinionStart with a lead-in
Begin with an opening paragraphEnd with a concluding paragraph
Use transitionsDelete dead verbs
DEVELOPING AN OPINION STATEMENT
Beginning the Thesis Statement
Opinion vs. Fact
Opinion
The room is cold.
Fact
The room is 62 degrees
Review the difference between Fact and Opinion
Example Opinion Statement
Delila is the best dog.
Use previous brainstorming activities to create an opinion statement
School can be stressful for teenagers.
Practice Thesis Statement
Handout Thesis Statement Worksheet Use previous Brainstorming Bell Ringers Students pick one topic Students develop an opinion statement
Supporting IdeasDeveloping the road map
Opinion Statement
School can be stressful.
Brainstorming Supporting Ideas
Grades – getting good grades, keeping up with homework and schoolwork, trouble with certain subjects.
Rules – following rules, dress codes, in-school suspension, attendance, tardies
Classmates - bullies, arguments, cliques, rumors
Supporting Ideas
Class work is harder in high school. Rules are stricter. Getting along with classmates is difficult.
SAMPLE PRACTICEPutting it together
Sample Writing PracticeTopic: Select something from the past and explain how it
is still important today.
Objective: Brainstorm Develop an opinion statement Develop 3 supporting points
Brainstorming – Step 1
Horsestypesstrong
expensivehelp people
groomingride
spend a lot of time
Many
Handicapped
movies
parades
Rodeos
Therapy Horses
companionsHelp depression Care/responsibility
Entertainment
Seeing eye Horses
Opinion Statement – Step 2
Horses are still important today.
Creating the 3 Points – Step 3
Develop three supporting points for the thesis by revisiting the brainstorming.
BrainstormingHorsestypesstrongLarge
help people Hard to keep
ridespend a lot of time
Many Breeds
Handicapped
movies
parades
Rodeos
Seeing eye horses
Therapy Horses
companionslove
Care/responsibility
Entertainment
3 Points for Support – Step 3
1. Horses help the handicapped.2. They are used for entertainment.3. They make excellent companions.
Putting it together to make a Thesis Statement
Thesis Statement: Write an opinion about your topic followed with “because,” then write 3 points you are going to use to support your opinion. Use the format below. 1. Opinion/Statement: because
1. ,
2. ,
and 3. .
Completed Thesis
Thesis Statement: 1. Opinion/Statement: Horses are still important because
1. they help the handicapped ,
2. they are used for entertainment ,
and 3. they make great companions .
Opening Paragraph
D. Caswell 8/23/04
Step 1: Lead-In Sentence(s): Write a quote, statistic, unusual fact, exclamation, or anecdote (very short story – Tidbit) that pertains to your topic and grabs the reader’s attention.
Step 2: General Information/Background Sentences: Write 4 to 5 sentences giving your audience history or general facts about your topic to let your audience become familiar with what you are going to write about.
Step 3: Thesis Statement: Write an opinion about your topic followed with “because,” then write 3 points you are going to use to support your opinion. Use the format below. The thesis statement becomes one sentence. 1. Opinion Statement: Horses are still important
because
1. they help the handicapped
2. they are used for entertainment ,
3. and they make excellent companions .
OPENING PARAGRAPHStarting the
Lead – In Notes
Definition: The lead-in is an attention getter that starts the essay. It should catch the reader’s attention and make the reader want to read the essay. It is the beginning sentence(s) of your essay. There are numerous types of Lead-Ins. Here are a few.
1. Bold Statement 2. Quote 3. Question 4. Statistic 5. Unusual fact 6. Exclamation 7. A very short story 8. Tidbit
Lead – In Examples Examples:
Bold Statement: Contrary to what some people think, most of our learning takes place out of school.
Quotation: “I’ll get you my pretty,” Hurricane Katrina said to the Gulf Coast. Question: Was it the crash of a giant meteor or the relentless movement of ice? Statistic: Seven out of ten ninth graders beginning smoking cigarettes their first
year of high school. Unusual Fact: It’s only a stone, but it sits smoothly in your hand, as if you’d
caught a tiny rainbow. Exclamation: Crash! The Daytona 500 started out with a bang. Very Short Story: It was dark and the scratch of the twisted oak raked across the
screen door. Everyone’s breath stilled in fear as the wind whipped its way through the town. This was a hurricane no one would soon forget.
Tidbit: They approach on leathery wings and begin to eat.
Lead – In ActivitiesPractice 1 – Headlines: Give students a picture. Have students list details (brainstorm) Have students create a headline for the
picturePractice 2 – Lead-In: Have students use previous brainstorming
activities to create a Lead-In.
Lead-In Practice 1
Sample Student Lead-InsWonder if it taste like chicken?
“I thought I saw a puty-tat. I did, I did see a puty-tat.”
Hopefully, this isn’t a really good 3D flat screen TV.
Lead-In from Brainstorming
Topic: Select something from the past and explain how it is still important today.
Opinion : Today, horses are still important. Lead-In:
“A horse is a horse of course!”
Background SentencesBackground sentences give the reader general
information or history about the topic.
Example: Writing about one’s hero.
Background information tells some history about the hero -not what the hero did to become one’s hero.
*Give lots of examples
Practice Background Sentences
Topic: Today, horses are still important.
Background:Horses have been both friend and work animal for
humans. However, mostly they have been the “work horse” of our society. They have been used for thousands of years as work animals and war machines. Only recently horses have become more companions and escaped the “work horse” philosophy.
PUTTING THE PACKET TOGETHER
The 5 paragraph essay
Example Opening Paragraph
Step 1: Lead-In Sentence(s): Write a quote, question, statistic, unusual fact, exclamation, or anecdote (very short story – Tidbit) that pertains to your topic and grabs the reader’s attention.
“A horse is a horse of course!”
Step 2: General Information/Background Sentences: Write 4 to 5 sentences giving your audience history or general facts about your topic to let your audience become familiar with what you are going to write about. Horses have been both friend and work animal for humans. However, mostly they have been the “work
horse” of our society. They have been used for thousands of years as work animals and war machines. Only
recently horses have become more companions and escaped the “work horse” philosophy.
Step 3: Thesis Statement: Write an opinion about your topic followed with “because,” then write 3 points you are going to use to support your opinion. Use the format below. 1. Opinion: Today, horses are still important
2. because they help the handicapped, they are used for entertainment, and they make excellent companions.
Developing the Body Paragraphs
Use the 3 supporting points from the thesis statement.
Take one point at a time and brainstorm. Develop a topic sentence. Create supporting sentences. Make a concluding sentence.
1st point from Thesis Horses help the handicapped.
Horses shapeStretches bonesSeeing-eye horsesDepressionDeaf childrenBuilds self-esteem
Barrel shape
Deformed bones
Mini horses
Ride using hand signals
Stimulates the brain
The Body Paragraphs
Body Paragraph # Step 1: Topic Sentence: Write one of the main ideas from the thesis sentence here.
Step 2: Supporting Sentences: Write 4 to 5 sentences that give examples or prove your opinion. Do not discuss anything except your topic from your topic sentence. Step 3: Concluding Sentence: Rewrite your topic sentence or summarize your supporting sentences.
Process
1st supporting point from the thesis statement becomes the first body paragraph
Completed Body Paragraph
Body Paragraph Example Step 1: Topic Sentence: Write an opinion about our topic.
Horses help handicap people in many ways.
Step 2: Supporting Sentences: Write 4 to 5 sentences that give examples or prove your opinion. Do not discuss anything except your topic from your topic sentence.
For example, horses helps the handicap rider is by allowing the rider’s bones and muscles to gently be stretched.
Because of the “barrel” shape of the horse’s body, physically disabled riders can stretch their legs around the horse
in a careful manner. This makes the rider become more flexible. However, riders must have doctor’s approval
before riding. Another way is mentally. It is proven that mentally and physically challenged riders are mentally
stimulated by horses and depression decreases.
Step 3: Concluding Sentence: Rewrite your topic sentence or summarize your supporting sentences. These are just a few ways horses help the handicap.
Process
2nd supporting point from the thesis statement becomes the second body paragaph.
Completed 2nd Body Paragraph
Body Paragraph Example Step 1: Topic Sentence: Write an opinion about our topic. Another way that horses are still important is that they are used for different forms of entertainment.
Step 2: Supporting Sentences: Write 4 to 5 sentences that give examples or prove your opinion. Do not discuss anything except your topic from your topic sentence.
Horses are part of one of the greatest sports in America, horse racing. Many people spend a lot of time and money at race tracks.
Also, you can find horses in numerous movies. Every Western Movie has horses in it. There are even modern movies such as the
Horse Whisperer. The classic Black Beauty is a childhood favorite. Finally, horses are used for many entertainment events such
as Mardi Gras parades. Horses allow police officers to be above the crowd but still be part of it. Also, horses are taught to contain
and hold prisoners.
Step 3: Concluding Sentence: Rewrite your topic sentence or summarize your supporting sentences. As you can see, entertainment plays a huge role in our lives and horses have become an intricate part of that life.
Process
3rd supporting point from the thesis statement becomes the third body paragraph.
Completed 3rd Body Paragraph
Body Paragraph Example Step 1: Topic Sentence: Write an opinion about our topic. Finally, horses make great companions.
Step 2: Supporting Sentences: Write 4 to 5 sentences that give examples or prove your opinion. Do not discuss anything except your topic from your topic sentence. Many people have horses because of the companionship that they give. Horses are becoming a favorite “Pet” similarly like dogs and
cats. The miniature horse has even worked its way into the home. People have litter-trained these small horses, and the horses eat,
live and sleep in their owner’s home. However, the big horses have won over their owners even back in the 1800’s. Cowboys have
been quoted to saying they’d rather spend hours with their horse instead of people. Many horse riders take long trail rides by
themselves and bond with their horse, making the horse a close companion and friend.
Step 3: Concluding Sentence: Rewrite your topic sentence or summarize your supporting sentences. Like dogs and cats, horses too can become “mans” best friend and many have.
Summarizing: The Conclusion
Follow the concluding paragraph format. Remember no new information in the
concluding paragraph. Add a closing sentence
Concluding ParagraphConcluding Paragraph Format
Step 1: Insert a concluding transitional word: All in all (This transition will be attached using a comma to Step 2) Step 2: Rewrite your Opinion/Statement from the Thesis Statement. Horses play a very important role in today’s world. Step 3: Rewrite the main idea from the 1st body paragraph They can be seen at a show helping physically disabled riders overcome both mental and physical ailments. Step 4: Rewrite the main idea from the 2nd body paragraph In addition, by turning on the television a person can be entertained by watching a western movie or a televised rodeo. Step 5: Rewrite the main idea from the 3rd body paragraph Also, many people have come to find a strong bond to these large animals that once were used mainly for work or war. Step 6: Write a closing sentence. Horses have not disappeared from our society and probably never will.
Expository 1st rough draft “A horse is a horse of course!” Horses have been both friend and work animal for humans.
However, mostly they have been the “work horse” of our society. They have been used for thousands of
years as work animals and war machines. Only recently horses have become more companions and
escaped the “work horse” philosophy. Today, horses are still very important because they help the
handicapped, they are used for entertainment, and they make excellent companions.
Horses help handicap people in many ways. One of the ways horses helps the handicap rider is by
allowing the rider’s bones and muscles to gently be stretched. Because of the “barrel” shape of the horse’s
body, physically disabled riders can stretch their legs around the horse in a careful manner. This makes
the rider become more flexible. However, riders must have doctor’s approval before riding. Another way
is mentally. It is proven that mentally and physically challenged riders are mentally stimulated by horses
and depression decreases. These are just a few ways horses help the handicap.
Another way that horses are still important is that they are used for my different forms of
entertainment. Horses are part of one of the greatest sports in America, horse racing. Many people spend a
lot of time and money at race tracks. Also, you can find horses in numerous movies. Every Western
Movie has horses in it. There are even modern movies such as the Horse Whisperer. The classic Black
Beauty is a childhood favorite. Finally, horses are used for many entertainment events such as Mardi Gras
parades. Horses allow police officers to be above the crowd but still be part of it. Also, horses are taught
to contain and hold prisoners. As you can see, entertainment plays a huge role in our lives and horses have
become an intricate part of that life.
Finally, horses make great companions. Many people have horses because of the
companionship that they give. Horses are becoming a favorite “Pet” similarly like dogs and cats.
The miniature horse has even worked its way into the home. People have litter-trained these small
horses, and the horses eat, live and sleep in their owner’s home. However, the big horses have won
over their owners even back in the 1800’s. Cowboys have been quoted to saying they’d rather
spend hours with their horse instead of people. Many horse riders take long trail rides by
themselves and bond with their horse, making the horse a close companion and friend. Like dogs
and cats, horses too can become “mans” best friend and many have.
All in all, horses play a very important role in today’s world. They can be seen at a show helping
physically disabled riders overcome both mental and physical ailments. In addition, by turning on the
television a person can be entertained by watching a western movie or a televised rodeo. Also, many
people have come to find a strong bond to these large animals that once were used mainly for work or
war. Horses have not disappeared from our society and probably never will.
RevisionWorking with Checklists
Composition Checklist The “Break-down” of your writing: Number of Dead verbs in my writing Number of transitions Number of sentences in 1st Body paragraph Number of compound sentences Number of complex sentences Writing Content: Write your Lead-I n here. (Can it be improved?) Do you have a three point thesis? Write your three points. 1. 2. 3. Give an example of a simile, metaphor, or hyperbole that you used in your essay. What is the last sentence in your concluding paragraph? The last sentence: Conventions:
□ Did you indent all your paragraphs? □ Did you check your punctuation? □ Did you check your spelling?
Persuasive Checklist The “Break-down” of your writing: Number of transitions What word does most your sentences start with (more than 3 times) Number of compound/ complex sentences Writing Content: Write your Lead-I n here: Write your opinion f rom your Thesis: Write your three points f rom your Thesis: 1. 2. 3. Summarize what you are trying to convince/ persuade your reader about . Check f or Fallacies in your writing? List any fallacies f ound: What is your clincher sentence? Conventions:
□ Did you check your punctuation? □ Did you check f or dead verbs?