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ESL Scope and Scales
SENIOR YEARS BAND
June 2003
ESL Scope and Scales Moderated Evidence : Senior Years
CONTENTSIntroduction
About the proformas
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Scale 1 Sara Naming Visuals/Reading wordsLabelling
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Scale 2 Stefan Naming Visuals/Reading wordsLabelling
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 1 AND 2 24
Scale 3 RitaNick
DescriptionDescription
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 2 AND 3 36
Scale 4 Anna LetterNews Story Recount
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 3 AND 4 47
Scale 5 QuinPersonal RecountConversationLetter of Advice
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 4 AND 5 63
Scale 6 Aaron LetterReflection
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 5 AND 6 74
Scale 7 JimmyDescription 1Description 2Narrative
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 6 AND 7 91
Scale 8 Paul Persuasive Letter (Argument)Argument Essay
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 7 AND 8 103
Scale 9EgorPabloPablo
DiscussionLetterShort Answer Response
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 8 AND 9 120
Scale 10 Gretel Discussion EssayPersonal Reflection
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 9 AND 10 135
Scale 11 Sophie Discussion EssayPersonal Reflection
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 10 AND 11 146
Scale 12 Rose Discussion Essay 149
SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 11 AND 12
Scale 13 Kaio ReflectionPowerPoint Presentation
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 12 AND 13
Scale 14 Pieter Research EvaluationPowerPoint Presentation
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 13 AND 14
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INTRODUCTIONThis document, The ESL Scope and Scales Moderated Evidence: Senior Years Band is a resource to support the use of the ESL Scope and Scales to monitor the achievement of English as a Second Language (ESL) learners within the Senior Years (Year 10) Band, by providing sets of student evidence, with commentary, for each of the fourteen ESL Scales of this Band.
Senior Years BandYear level 6 7 8 9 10
ESL Scales 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14
The ESL Scope and Scales:
The ESL Scope and Scales is a programming, assessing and reporting document to support the English language development of ESL learners. The ESL Scope and Scales provides a detailed explanation of the model of language on which it is based.
The Scales within the ESL Scope and Scales is the assessment and reporting component. It contains a comprehensive set of examples of evidence for each Scale. The Scales was used as the basis of the analysis and commentary on the sets of student evidence.
It is recommended that you refer to the ESL Scope and Scales to access the explanation of the model of language and to enhance your understanding of the student texts.
The students:
The names used in this document are not the students’ own names. All the students are of non-English speaking background.
The moderation process used in the development of this document:
The writers analysed and assessed sets of student work in relation to the ESL Scope and Scales, using the proforma Evidence for Scaling.
The writers shared their understandings of the student texts, justifying their determination of a Scale level.
Based on feedback, changes were made to the analysis and commentary.
The project co-ordinators reviewed the analysis and commentary to ensure consistency of interpretation and accuracy of judgement.
Recommended processes for teachers:
a) Collecting the sets of evidence
Design and deliver teaching and learning programs which support students’ understandings of a required genre. Task requirements and assessment criteria should be explicit.
Collect evidence of student achievement which represents the students’ best independent effort. The forms of evidence may include spoken, written and multimedia texts and/or teacher observation notes on students’ texts.
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Select a range of student samples of evidence, preferably of different genres. The more restricted the set of evidence, the more difficult it will be to make an accurate determination of the Scale level. As a minimum, two texts should be selected, one of each of the story genre and the factual genre. The ESL Scope and Scales indicates an appropriate range for each band. For the Senior Years the range of texts for each genre type includes:
- the story genres - narrative, traditional story such as a fable or myth, personal recount
- the factual genres - description, information report (taxonomic and descriptive), practical report, recount (biographical and historical), historical account, explanation (sequential and causal), expository genres (argument, analytical, hortatory, discussion), procedure
- the response genres – personal response, review, interpretation, critical response.
b) Making a judgement of the ESL Scale level
Using the proforma, Evidence for Scaling, for each text record and/or consider the student examples of evidence, for each of genre, field, tenor and mode. Where appropriate determine an ESL Scale or ESL Scale range for each Outcome.
Consider the student examples of evidence for each Outcome from the complete set of evidence and make a judgement about the Scale or Scale range appropriate for each Outcome.
Make an on-balance judgement to assign the Scale that is most typical of the students’ language choices across all four Outcomes.
To support this process use both the ESL Scope and Scales and the ESL Scope and Scales Moderated Evidence: Senior Years Band.
Who requires ESL support?
The ESL Scale appropriate to a student’s year level defines the control of Standard Australian English required to achieve the Curriculum Standards. So, a non-English speaking background student in
Year 10 at Scale 14 does not require targeted ESL support.
Year level R 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10Standard 1 2 3 4 5
ESL Scales 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14Year 10
However, a student working at the appropriate ESL scale for the Year level will continue to need and benefit form explicit teaching of language. Ongoing monitoring and assessment is also necessary to ensure that a student of non-English speaking background will continue to achieve at the appropriate level.
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Acknowledgements:
The ESL Scope and Scales Moderated Evidence: Senior Years Band was collaboratively developed by the ESL Scope and Scales Officers of the Department of Education and Children’s Services, South Australia, and the ESL Consultants of Catholic Education, South Australia.
Project Co-ordinators: Rosie Antenucci and Karyl Martin DECS, South Australia.Bronwyn Dansie and Monica Williams Catholic Education, South Australia.
Key Writers for the Senior Years Band:Lina Russo Catholic Education, South AustraliaDick Doyle Seaview High SchoolStella Emberson Thebarton Senior CollegeRoss Hamilton Glenunga International High SchoolDeb Rees DECS, South Australia
With the support of :Juliana Martino Catholic Education, South Australia
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ABOUT THE PROFORMAS
Evidence for Scaling
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about
men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In
addition noun groups: Another reason, The
principle cause of the increase, One main argument,
The student has identified the people and objects in the visual stimulus and used sentences to list them.
noun groups: This
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ESL Scales Commentary
Scale 1
Sara texts provide evidence contributing mostly to Scale 1.As a Senior Year student assessed as working within Scale 1 Sara does require ESL support.
Text in context Language Key Teaching PointsGenre Outcome1.1Interacts in highly structured routine exchanges and, with support, responds to, copies and arranges a strictly limited range of written texts and a range of simple visual texts
Participates in very basic ‘formulaic’ spoken exchanges
Begins to write by copying very short, basic examples of Standard Australian English
Copies very short groups of words directly associated with a visual representation of the words
Copies the colours which resulted in the experiment.
Responds in basic spoken exchanges involving one or two turns:- greets in
‘formulaic’ ways (‘Good morning’) and responds with a non-verbal response (a smile or other facial movement) to the next turn (How are you?)
Good morning and a smile as a response to the question ‘Did you stay for the whole day?’
Copy very short written texts, which have been collaboratively constructed by teacher and student, to accompany visual representations of familiar contexts. (Scale 1)
Sequence a known text using pictures or other visual resources. (Scale 1)
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Key features and examples provides the main features of the Language Strand of each of genre, field, tenor and mode, as defined within the ESL Scope and Scales. They are a guide only to finding key features within a text. They are not descriptive of any particular genre or Scale level and not all key features and examples may be relevant to a specific text.
In Student examples of evidence the language items from the student text which are examples of the language features in Key features and examples, have been recorded.
Two versions of this proforma are used – one for a written text and the other for an oral text. The proformas are identical for each Scale.
The language items which have been recorded in Student examples of evidence indicate a tendency for a student to make choices from a Scale or a range of Scales. This Scale or Scale range for each of genre, field, tenor and mode is recorded in the Scale column. Where the language items provide insufficient information for such a determination, the Scale column is left blank.
Examples of evidence from the ESL Scales relevant to the student’s set of evidence have been recorded in both the Text in Context strand and the Language strand, as dot points. Comments and examples from the student’s texts reflecting the student’s achievements in relation to an example of evidence from the ESL Scales, have been written in italics.
This statement is a determination of the Scale based on the student’s set of evidence. The words, “contributing mostly to Scale 1” indicates that the student can be considered as working within that Scale rather than having achieved that Scale.
This statement clarifies whether the student requires ESL support.
Key Teaching Points recommends learning activities for the students, in relation to the text types provided in the set of evidence. These activities have been suggested in order to elicit additional evidence for the achievement of an Outcome and/or to extend the student.
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 1 AND 2
Scale 1 Scale 2
GENRE: Outcome 1.1 Interacts in highly structured routine exchanges and, with support, responds to, copies and arranges a strictly limited range of written texts and a range of simple visual texts.
Outcome 2.1Interacts in highly routine exchanges and responds to, copies and collaboratively constructs a strictly limited range of write texts and a range of simple visual texts.
Text in Context understands that signs can give commands
copies very short, basic examples of English
participates in very basic formulaic spoken exchange
understands that signs and packaging can give commands and copies most basic examples
understands some main ideas in a simple story read aloud
jointly constructs and copies short, basic examples of English
participates in basic highly formulaic spoken exchanges with memorised segments
SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALE 1 AND SCALE 2AS EVIDENT IN THE STUDENTS’ SETS OF EVIDENCE
GENRE:The sets of evidence of both Sara and Stefan reveal a very early understanding of the use of written Standard Australian English. Both students know that letters and words carry meaning. While Sara writes only words in the labelling activity, Stefan uses sentences with one or two examples of pronoun reference: this is a man he cut bread (Scale 2).
FIELD:Both Sara and Stefan are able to demonstrate a very limited use of concrete everyday vocabulary. Stefan is able to use most basic grammatical items: a, on, my (Scale 2).
TENOR:Both Sara and Stefan are able to participate in classroom routines (Scale 1). Stefan is able to participate in a spoken exchange with more than non verbal behaviour and key words, and answer questions simply (Scale 2). Stefan also pronounces words comprehensibly (Scale 2).
MODE:Both Sara and Stefan are able to copy words (Scale 1). Stefan is able to construct chunks of written text (Scale 2).
Sara : NAMING VISUALS / READING WORDS
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Each of the examples of evidence has been taken from the ESL Scope and Scales, however not all the examples in each Scale have been included. A full list of the examples of evidence is available in the ESL Scope and Scales.
The examples of evidence from the ESL Scope and Scales have been reordered to highlight the differences between the Scales.
For each Outcome, there is a comparison of the evidence for the ESL Scale assigned to students’ sets of evidence.
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Oral Test March 6th 2003 This was done after intensive class work on these words. Students responded to visual stimuli.
Teacher: What is your name?Student: Sara.
(The student was asked to say words by looking at pictures)Teacher: Can you please say these family words?
Student: Son correct word - daughter or sisterFatherMum correct word - mother or wifeBoy correct word - son or brother
Teacher: Please say these colour words
Student: YellowGreen correct word - redYellow correct word - greenYellow correct word - white
Teacher: Please say these fruit words
Student: OrangeEr correct word - pearLimon (lemon)Grapes
Teacher: Please say these verbs (pictures of the actions)
Student: SleepingWritingSittingShower (wash or washing)
Teacher: Please read these words (2 an 3 letter words on cards)
Student: Ah correct word - IGo correct word - youHeShes correct word - sheTe correct word - theAnAndIt correct word - aIsAir correct word - areYou correct word - weTea correct word - theyDon’t know correct word - yesAn correct word – noyou correct word - meyou correct word – myhish correct word – has
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Evidence for Scaling
Sara: NAMING VISUALS/READING WORDS
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence ScaleGenre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about the
students? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, One of the
main arguments, The principle cause of the increase
phrases and dependent clauses of time, place, manner: Born in 1898
phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a result of the rain..; Led by Nelson Mandela, South Africa..
non finite clauses action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil topic words: Antarctica, Pollution initiate and close interactions: less
formulaic, formulaic expressions, gestures ask and answer questions participate in song, rhyme, chorus, reading
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars,
premolars, incisors composition (whole part): tooth: enamel,
dentine, pulp, nerve. conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, or, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clause: The team, having seen the
results, felt…; Having seen the results, the team…
level of scaffolding
initiate and close: responds to formulaic initiation of exchange with one word answers
ask and answer: follows teacher’s verbal instructions
participate: reads words and responds verbally to visual stimuli
reference items: student reads from cards – he, shes (she), an
Student’s responses are scaffolded by the teacher’s questions and visual stimuli.
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, all day, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: subtract, divide, peered, scanned,
demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, shouted stated,
asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the weather
was bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is commonly thought, Studies
have shown
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited. understood/identified: father, yellow, orange, limon
(lemon), grapes, shower
used: son, father, mum, boy, yellow, green, orange, limon (lemon), grapes, shower
action: sleeping, writing, sitting (identified from visual stimuli)
relational: is, hish (has) (read from cards)
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Tenor: Language for
interacting with
others
speech functions: statements questions offers commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I
am sure, tend to, might be able to frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meaning: feelings, attitudes: unfortunately,
importance, outstanding idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms,
humour names to refer to people culturally specific references
verbal elements: intonation, volume, pace, word stress,
tone, pronunciation, and other sound patterns
pronunciation of foreign words
non verbal elements: body language, eye contact, physical
response
appropriate tenor for the context
Student is able to respond to a simple direct question: What is your name? and responds appropriately when the teacher uses a question to realise a command: Can you say these family words? The student also understands the teacher’s instructions when direct commands are used: Please say these colour words.
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Mode:
Language for
creating spoken
and written
texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on
the other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general
People action verbs: Draw appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, haven’t played, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused
by the heavy rain.
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual
images, sound, light, physical objects, layout, tables, print text and spoken text
human: Sara action verbs: Don’t know
primary: some present participles identified and used to name the actions represented by the visual stimuli: sleeping, writing, sitting
The student does not yet recognise all letters of the alphabet or the sounds that they can represent. Very few common two and three letter words are recognised.
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Sara : LABELLING
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bottle bread
seat
baby
??? bread
mother children
grandmother
book
barbecue
tea
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Evidence for Scaling Sara: LABELLING
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; non finite clauses topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Student has listed items identified in the visual stimulus.
layout: list with on or two words on each line, written on alternate lines and from left to right
Text was written independently after extensive scaffolding in a similar formative task.
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.botl (bottle), bredt (bread), silt (seat), bebe (baby), midre (mother), fidren (children, Grnmidre (grandmother), bok (book), bibekey (barbecue), tee (tea)
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Tenor: Language for
interacting with
others
speech functions: statements questions offers commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
Mode:
Language for
creating spoken
and written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
Handwriting is legible and student writes from left to right. Student recognises most beginning sounds of words and some end sounds. Spelling is phonetic and most words, though spelt incorrectly, are distinguishable.
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Stefan: NAMING VISUALS/READING WORDS
Oral Test March 6th 2003 This was done after intensive class work on these words. Students responded to visual stimuli.
Teacher What is your name?Stefan.
(The student was asked to say words by looking at pictures)Teacher Can you please say these family words?
StudentGirl (acceptable answer) correct word - daughter or sisterfathermotherboy (acceptable answer) correct word - son or brother
Teacher Please say these colour words
Student Yellowrid correct word - redgreenI don’t know correct word - white
Teacher Please say these fruit words
StudentI know correct word – orange In each case the student meant ‘I don’t know’I know correct word - pearI know correct word - lemonI know correct word - grapes
Teacher Please say these verbs (pictures of the actions)
StudentSleepingwriteSitEat correct word - wash or washing
Teacher Please read these words (2 an 3 letter words on cards)
Student
IYouHeSheTheAnAndaIsarewetheyyesnomemyhas
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Evidence for Scaling Stefan: NAMING VISUALS/READING WORDS
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about the
students? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, One of the
main arguments, The principle cause of the increase
phrases and dependent clauses of time, place, manner: Born in 1898
phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a result of the rain..; Led by Nelson Mandela, South Africa..
non finite clauses action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil topic words: Antarctica, Pollution initiate and close interactions: less formulaic,
formulaic expressions, gestures ask and answer questions participate in song, rhyme, chorus, reading
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars,
premolars, incisors composition (whole part): tooth: enamel,
dentine, pulp, nerve. conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, or, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clause: The team, having seen the
results, felt…; Having seen the results, the team…
level of scaffolding
initiate and close: responds to formulaic initiation of exchange with one word answers
ask and answer: follows teacher’s verbal instructions participate: reads words and responds verbally to
visual stimuli
reference items: I
Student’s responses are scaffolded by the teacher’s questions and visual stimuli.
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, all day, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: subtract, divide, peered, scanned,
demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, shouted stated,
asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the weather
was bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is commonly thought, Studies
have shown
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited. understood/identified: girl, father, mother, boy, yellow,
rid (red), green, I, you, he, she, the, an, a, we, they, me my
used: girl, father, mother, boy, yellow, rid (red), green, I, you, he, she, the, an, a, we, they, me my
action: sleeping, write, sit, eat mental (sensing): know
relational: is, has, are
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Tenor: Language for
interacting with
others
speech functions: statements questions offers commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I
am sure, tend to, might be able to frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meaning: feelings, attitudes: unfortunately,
importance, outstanding idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms,
humour names to refer to people culturally specific references
verbal elements: intonation, volume, pace, word stress,
tone, pronunciation, and other sound patterns
pronunciation of foreign words
non verbal elements: body language, eye contact, physical
response
appropriate tenor for the context
Student is able to respond to a simple direct question: What is your name? and responds appropriately when the teacher uses a question to realise a command: Can you say these family words? The student also understands the teacher’s instructions when direct commands are used: Please say these colour words.A basic understanding of the grammar of statements is evident in the student’s responses: I know and I don’t know.
The student is able to read aloud many common two and three letter words with accurate pronunciation.
2
Mode:
Language for
creating spoken
and written
texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, haven’t played, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused
by the heavy rain.
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual
images, sound, light, physical objects, layout, tables, print text and spoken text
human: Stefan, I
primary: simple present and present participles used to name the actions represented by the visual stimuli: sleeping, write, sit
The student is able to read aloud many common two and three letter words.
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Stefan: LABELLING
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Evidence for ScalingStefan: LABELLING
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; non finite clauses topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
The student has identified the people and objects in the visual stimulus and used sentences to list them.
noun groups: This layout: uses a new line for each sentence
reference items: This, a, the, a, he, my vocabulary patterns:
words that go together: read a book word sets: picnic rug, pleat (plate), bowl, table
(table), salat (salad), bread, basket, chear (chair); mother, son
linking: and
Text was written independently after extensive scaffolding in a similar formative task.
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.a bowl, the table (table), the salat (salad), a man, bread, the basket, the chear (chair), a book, My son, mother, a pleat (plate), the picnic rug, a tree
action: cut, sit, read relational: is
where: on the table (table), on the chear (chair), on
the picnic rug
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Tenor: Language for
interacting with
others
speech functions: statements questions offers commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I
am sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The text is a series of statements about what the student sees in the visual stimulus. The statements are expressed mainly in simple sentences and one compound sentence is used.
The text is objective and factual and this is appropriate. The vocabulary chosen indicates that the writer is a learner responding to a teacher’s request to demonstrate understandings about the concept of a picnic and the related language.
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Mode:
Language for
creating spoken
and written
texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused
by the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and
visual patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual
images, sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
non-human: This human: He
Most sentences are foregrounded with the demonstrative pronoun this. He is also used appropriately on one occasion. These choices are appropriate for a labelling task.
The text is cohesive in that all of the sentences are about the picture, although without the visual stimulus as part of the text, it would be difficult to understand the meanings being made.
primary: uses only primary tenses with limited accuracy
active voice used appropriately
The student uses separate lines for each sentence. Some spellings are phonetic eg. chear, tabel, salat; others are guesses eg. pleat for plate. There are seven sentences but only two capital letters to start sentences and only one full stop at end of fourth sentence.
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 1 AND 2Scale 1 Scale 2
GENRE: Outcome 1.1 Interacts in highly structured routine exchanges and, with support, responds to, copies and arranges a strictly limited range of written texts and a range of simple visual texts.
Outcome 2.1Interacts in highly routine exchanges and responds to, copies and collaboratively constructs a strictly limited range of write texts and a range of simple visual texts.
Text in Context
understands that signs can give commands copies very short, basic examples of English participates in very basic formulaic spoken
exchange
understands that signs and packaging can give commands and copies most basic examples
understands some main ideas in a simple story read aloud
jointly constructs and copies short, basic examples of English
participates in basic highly formulaic spoken exchanges with memorised segments
Language responds in basic spoken exchange involving one or two turns (makes a greeting and gives nonverbal response)
sequences pictures of a known text
responds in basic spoken exchange involving two or three turns (makes a greeting and responds)
draws pictures of the stages of a narrative uses one or two examples of pronoun reference
FIELD: Outcome 1.2Understands and uses isolated examples of concrete vocabulary ad the most elementary grammatical items constructing personally relevant fields.
Outcome 2.2Understands and uses a strictly limited range of vocabulary and grammatical items constructing personally relevant fields.
Text in Context
uses strictly limited range of concrete everyday vocabulary
uses mainly common sense, everyday vocabulary with isolated concrete technical vocabulary
Language understands narrow range of actions verbs understands small range of common noun groups and action verbs
understands very basic phrases of location uses basic grammatical items (a, on, in, my)
TENOR: Outcome 1.3Participates with limited accuracy and confidence in a strictly limited range of immediate, highly supportive contexts.
Outcome 2.3Participates with limited accuracy yet appropriately in a strictly limited range of familiar highly supportive contexts.
Text in Context
participates appropriately in classroom routines by copying others
uses single words and relies on actions to make meaning
participates appropriately in classroom routines participates in basic routine spoken exchanges
Language responds appropriately non verbally when meaning is clear from immediate context
expresses statements, questions, offers, commands using key word and gesture only
chooses a few formulaic expressions
responds appropriately to tone of voice and stress on key words
expresses statements, questions, offers, commands using key words, stress and gesture
chooses the most common formulaic expressions
MODE: Outcome 1.4Interacts in a strictly limited range of spoken texts located in the immediate context (face-to-face interactions and accompanying some action) and begins to copy segments of written text.
Outcome 2.3Constructs a strictly limited range of spoken texts located in the immediate context (face-to-face interactions usually accompanying some action) and begins to construct chunks of written text collaboratively.
Text in Context
relies on gesture to convey meaning in spoken mode
begins to write by copying words or groups of words
understands the general purpose of a limited range of school-based environmental print
relies on gesture to convey more complex meanings in spoken mode
relies on visual images to convey more complex meanings in writing
begins to write by copying groups of words or phrases or simple sentences
understands the general purpose of environmental print
Language can say aloud one or two examples of environmental print
begins to identify beginning sounds in words uses some conventions for printed English: writes
predominantly from left to right
can say aloud a few examples of environmental print
begins to identify most beginning and end sounds in words
uses some conventions for printed English: writes from left to right, top to bottom, some copied letters are identifiable
uses visual images and gestures to convey more complex meanings
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALE 1 AND SCALE 2AS EVIDENT IN THE STUDENTS’ SETS OF EVIDENCE
GENRE:The sets of evidence of both Sara and Stefan reveal a very early understanding of the use of written Standard Australian English. Both students know that letters and words carry meaning. While Sara writes only words in the labelling activity, Stefan uses sentences with one or two examples of pronoun reference: this is a man he cut bread (Scale 2).
FIELD:Both Sara and Stefan are able to demonstrate a very limited use of concrete everyday vocabulary. Stefan is able to use most basic grammatical items: a, on, my (Scale 2).
TENOR:Both Sara and Stefan are able to participate in classroom routines (Scale 1). Stefan is able to participate in a spoken exchange with more than non verbal behaviour and key words, and answer questions simply (Scale 2). Stefan also pronounces words comprehensibly (Scale 2).
MODE:Both Sara and Stefan are able to copy words (Scale 1). Stefan is able to construct chunks of written text (Scale 2).
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Rita : DESCRIPTION
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Rita
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Task: Write a short story about this picture.
Write 3 paragraphs(1) Write an introduction(2) Describe what is happening in the picture(3) Finish the story
Write 50 -100 words
My nem is Rita I wrat a Story abat My frends wot we daent on Sudrda.
Vvere Sudrda I have gud tam wet My, frends. We goin in the park we enjoy in the
park there a trees and wadre It is a suny dey
Mia and Jo,are swimming. Tom is riding on bacecyl. Kicha is fishing nexst to
trees. nexst to he we are plaing. AlesAndra is sleeping nexst to the trees on
grass. Mark and Selviya are Climing on the trees.
We oll have a fun day we enjoy in park we oll enjoy toking and joking.
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Evidence for ScalingRita : DESCRIPTION
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a
result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary, dominant,
recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since, when,
whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which was
completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The results
demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
The text begins with an introduction, followed by a recount, an invented description of what is happening in the stimulus picture and a conclusion.
noun groups: Mia and Jo, My nem time, place, manner: Evere Sudrda (Every
Saturday)
reference items: My, a, we, I , the, It, he (him), oll (all)
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: Have gud tom (a
good time)/enjoy
composition: park: trees, wadre (water),
grass
Student followed written instructions given on assessment task sheet and used visual text as a stimulus for writing.
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers: the
pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty, risk,
capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd, look it
up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.My nem (name), a story, My frends (friends), Evere Sudrda (Every Saturday), gud tam (a good time), the park, (a) trees and wadre (water), a suny dey (sunny day), a bacecyl (bicycle), the trees, a fun day, grass
action: wrat (wrote), daeng (do), goin (go), are swimming, is riding, is fishing, are playing, are climing (climbing), is sleeping
mental (sensing): we enjoy saying: toking (talking), joking relational: have, a (are), is
when: on Sudrda (on Saturday), Evere Sudrda (Every Saturday),
where: in the park, nexst (next) to the trees, on (the) grass, on bacecyl (on a bicycle), on (in) the trees
with whom, what: wet My, frends (with my friends)
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers, commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am sure,
might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they forced,
demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer, excellent,
naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour culturally specific references: dressed in
black names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The text is written as a series of statements.
frequency: Evere Sudrda (Every Saturday)
feelings, attitudes: we all have fun, we enjoy in park, we all enjoy toking (talking) and joking, have gud tam (have a good time), a fun day
names: Mia, Jo, Tom, Kicha, AlesAndra, Mark, Selviya.
Student has written this ‘story’ as a ‘description’ or ‘personal recount’ about a regularly activity. This is not the requested genre but the student shows an ability to reflect on what she might be doing with her friends at the weekend.
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Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the other
hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic sentences
and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was sleeping,
wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some minor
flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by the
heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, full-stops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
abstractions: My nem (name)
time, place, manner: Evere Sudrda (Every Saturday)
non-human elements: It (This Saturday)
human: I, We (my friends and I), Mia and Jo, Tom, Kicha, AlesAndra, Mark and Selviya
Human elements are generally foregrounded and this is appropriate for a simple description of what people are doing. Characters’ names need to be introduced in the first paragraph to foreground the description of what each one is doing in the second paragraph.
The paragraphs are not linked through the use of conjunctions but rather the fact that they describe the same field: Saturdays at the park with my friends.
primary: simple present and present continuous and simple past on one occasion
Demonstrates good control over present continuous tense. In the first paragraph, the student uses the simple present to recount a regular activity. This is an appropriate choice. The second paragraph is written in the present continuous as it is a description of events as they are happening. This is also appropriate. In the final paragraph, the student returns to recounting and changes appropriately to the simple present tense.
active
Does not use full stops regularlyUses capital letters for names and at the beginning of sentences but also uses capital letter in wrong place eg: ‘abat My frends’
Student is able to use are ‘doing’ when referring to two people and uses is ‘doing’ when referring to one person.
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Nick : DESCRIPTION
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Nick : DESCRIPTION
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Task: Write a short story about this picture.
Write 3 paragraphs(4) Write an introduction(5) Describe what is happening in the picture(6) Finish the story
Write 50 -100 words
John and his friend are swinimg in lakes near the hills
The are very compontble and Ejoy them sulf doing many thinks fishing and Playing.
Can you see what The are doing in picture. John is fishing and Tim Tom are swims
in side the lakes and Ali is riding the bicycal. and Three children are Playing Games
and some are sitting on the Trees.
So the friends are ejoy the Good day for swim and fishing.
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Evidence for ScalingNick : DESCRIPTION
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about
men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In
addition noun groups: Another reason, The
principle cause of the increase, One main argument,
phrases and dependent clauses of time, place, manner: Born in 1898
phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a result of the rain;
topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the,
this, these, all of the above, such examples
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a
complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth:
enamel. conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and
then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the
results,
level of scaffolding
The text is written as three paragraphs of description. The final paragraph is a one sentence summary of the events described.
rhetorical questions: Can you see what the are doing in picture.
conjunctions: So noun groups: John and his friend
reference items: The (they), his, the, them sulf (themselves), you, some
vocabulary patterns: words that go together: playing games word sets: lake, hills, fishing, trees, swim
linking: and
Student followed written instructions given on assessment task sheet and used visual text as a stimulus for writing.
3/4
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers,
qualifiers: the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned,
demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong
crowd, look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.lakes near the hills, the Good day for swim(swimming) and fishing, John and his friend, the hills, the bicycal (bicycle), three children, the friends, many thinks (things)
fishing, playing, swim (swimming)
action: swinimg (swimming), riding, playing, sitting, doing, fishing
mental (sensing): ejoy (enjoy), see relational: are compontble (comfortable)
where: in lakes, near the hills, in (the) picture, in side (in) the lakes (lake), on the Trees
bicycal (bicycle)
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I
am sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
Demonstrates ability to construct simple statements and a simple question using the appropriate word order.
feelings, attitudes: compontble (comfortable), ejoy (enjoy), good, Good day
names: John, Tim, Tom, Ali, his friend, three children
The writer has chosen the tenor of an older parental type figure reading to a younger child. This adult student may be picking up on the cultural way of telling stories or may have seen this pattern in some of the early readers.The text is written in third person with the writer inviting the reader to engage with the text through a question. This is a common device used in texts written for children.
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Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on
the other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general
People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
coherence of paragraph – topic sentence, elaboration, extension and or example
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused
by the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and
visual patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, full-stops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual
images, sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
human: John and his friend, The (they), John action verbs: Can you see
Human elements are foregrounded throughout the text and this is appropriate for a simple description of what people are doing.
The paragraphs are not linked through the use of conjunctions but rather the fact that they describe the same field.
primary: are swinimg (swimming), are very compontble (comfortable), can you see, is riding, are playing, are sitting, are ejoy (enjoying)
Student is aware that present continuous is used to describe what is occurring in the picture and this tense is used accurately in most instances.
Student uses phonetics to write some words eg: bicycal for bicycle and attempts the sound of comfortable with compontble.
Student understands the use of capital letters to begin a new sentence and uses full stops at the end of sentences.
Appears to have good control of subject/verb order.Has agreement between ‘they’ and ‘are’ and ‘them sulf’
3/4
SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 2 AND 3
Scale 2 Scale 3GENRE: Outcome 2.1
Interacts in highly routine exchanges and responds to, copies and collaboratively constructs a strictly limited range of written texts and a range of simple visual texts.
Outcome 3.1Interacts in routine spoken exchanges with some tentative experimenting and, with support, responds to and constructs a limited range of written texts.
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Text in Context
understands some main ideas in a simple story read aloud
understands that signs and packaging can give commands and copies most basic examples
participates in basic highly formulaic spoken exchanges with memorised segments
begins to write very short, basic texts by copying or jointly constructing examples
understands that several basic genres have different purposes and that the purposes are similar across cultures
understands the main ideas and characters of a well-illustrated story when read aloud
understands that certain texts give commands or information and constructs isolated examples copied from or closely modelled on printed texts
participates in short, almost formulaic exchanges and slightly longer spoken texts if memorised
participates in simple group activities based on shared texts (usually spoken language accompanying actions)
reads a small range of everyday and environmental texts and collaboratively constructs very brief examples of the most familiar
Language responds in basic spoken exchange involving two or three turns (makes a greeting and responds)
draws pictures of the stages of a narrative; matches pictures and words of a procedure
uses one or two examples of pronoun reference
understands the purpose of several basic genres and identifies the contexts in which they are used
understands the structure of several basic genres participates in texts such as songs beyond simply the
chorus or rhyme initiates basic spoken exchanges involving two or
three turns constructs elementary examples of basic genres by
speaking and writing components of them with a high degree of visual and teacher scaffolding
uses most basic reference items accurately most of the time: uses basic pronouns (I, you, my, here)
FIELD: Outcome 2.2Understands and uses a strictly limited range of vocabulary and grammatical items, constructing personally relevant fields.
Outcome 3.2Understands and uses a very narrow range of common, everyday vocabulary constructing personally relevant fields, and uses isolated examples of concrete technical vocabulary.
Text in Context
uses mainly common sense, everyday vocabulary with isolated concrete technical vocabulary
uses vocabulary that is developing their knowledge of the school and community, and other personally relevant topics
uses vocabulary that is mainly commonsense and everyday but chooses some concrete technical vocabulary
identifies some very familiar words in a variety of contexts
uses first language dictionary but has a limited understanding of appropriateness for a specific context
reads some environmental print (words on public signs, logos, numbers on posters)
Language understands small range of common noun groups and action verbs
understands very basic phrases of location uses basic grammatical items: a, on, in, my
uses very basic phrases of location but understands a slightly wider range
identifies some very familiar vocabulary in a variety of contexts e.g. can identify the names of their teachers and classmates from among other names
articulates in basic ways such as simple phrases the meanings made in visual materials
expands vocabulary by exploring how to classify and describe (classification: native/non-native animals; description: very small/small/big/very big/huge animal)
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TENOR: Outcome 2.3Participates with limited accuracy yet appropriately in a strictly limited range of familiar, highly supportive contexts.
Outcome 3.3Participates appropriately in a strictly limited range of familiar, highly supportive contexts, using with some accuracy a limited range of basic grammatical structures.
Text in Context
participates appropriately in classroom routines participates in basic routine spoken exchanges
chooses limited range of ways of expressing statements, questions, offers, commands, using predominantly modelled examples with limited accuracy in a limited range of familiar supportive contexts
takes on the roles of appropriately asking and answering questions and giving commands to peers as well as responding to commands
expresses statements and questions in basic ways follows instructions with less dependence on non-
verbal elements participates appropriately with increasingly more
language in group activities and classroom routines participates appropriately in highly supportive contexts
through basic, spoken exchanges that are increasingly less routine
begins to demonstrate critical awareness by identifying, with support, the appropriateness of a narrow range of behaviours (gaze, distance, gesture, touch)
Language responds appropriately to tone of voice and when key words are stressed
has a basic understanding of the grammar of statements, questions, offers, commands and expresses them in basic ways using key word, stress and gesture
chooses the most common formulaic expressions pronounces most frequently used words and phrases
comprehensibly
uses basic grammatical items: articles (a, the), narrow range of prepositions (on, in), conjunctions (and), narrow range of adverbs (very)
understands basic intonation patterns of statements and questions and responds accordingly
responds appropriately to routine commands when meaning is clear through gestures and/or key words are stressed
understands statements and basic yes / no questions and uses a limited range
expresses statements, questions, offers and commands in basic ways, choosing two or three key words and relying on tone, intonation and actions
chooses a narrow range of socially appropriate formulaic expressions at major stages of an exchange
uses a limited range of evaluative language pronounces most frequently used vocabulary
comprehensibly and begins to risk pronouncing less familiar words, repeating if necessary
MODE: Outcome 2.4Constructs a strictly limited range of spoken texts located in the immediate context (face-to-face interactions usually accompanying some action) and begins to construct chunks of written text collaboratively.
Outcome 3.4Constructs a strictly limited range of spoken texts located in the immediate context, reads a limited range of texts supported by visuals and begins to write a strictly limited range of very brief texts collaboratively.
Text in Context
relies on gesture to convey more complex meanings in spoken mode
relies on visual images to convey more complex meanings in writing
understands the general purpose of environmental print
begins to write by copying groups of words or phrases or simple sentences
chooses with some confidence to use more language relative to the number of gestures and visual resources
organises the meanings in brief written texts in a logical order, with intensive support and for one or two genres only
uses the basic print conventions appropriately writes simple sentences and begins to rely less on
copying texts reads with some confidence a small range of visual
texts and begins to draw basic examplesLanguage can say aloud a few examples of environmental print
begins to identify most beginning and end sounds in words
uses some conventions for printed English: writes from left to right, top to bottom, some copied letters are identifiable
reads aloud the crucial parts of a range of environmental print (labels in the classroom, days on the timetable)
identifies the prominent items of information in short spoken, written and visual texts (matches words to pictures)
chooses highly repetitive sentence beginnings in speech and writing (personal pronouns)
demonstrates limited control of the primary tenses begins to identify beginning and end sounds spells with some accuracy many common
monosyllabic words learned in class and spells others based on some of the sounds in the word
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALE 2 AND SCALE 3AS EVIDENT IN THE STUDENTS’ SETS OF EVIDENCE
GENRE:Stefan, Nick and Rita are able to construct brief written texts from visual stimuli. Stefan uses one or two examples of pronoun reference (Scale 2). Rita and Nick use basic pronnouns accurately most of the time (Scale 3).
FIELD:Stefan uses vocabulary that is mainly commonsense and everyday and he uses very basic phrases of location. (Scale 2) Nick and Rita understand and use a slightly wider range of basic phrases of location (Scale 3).
TENOR:Stefan participates appropriately in basic, routine spoken exchanges (Scale 2). He is able to answer questions with one or two key words. In written texts, Stefan, Rita and Nick all demonstrate a basic understanding of the grammar of statements (Scale 2). Nick and Rita use a limited range of evaluative vocabulary to express feelings and attitudes with some accuracy (Scale 3).
MODE:Stefan, Rita and Nick are all able to construct chunks of written text (Scale 2). Rita and Nick are able to organise the meanings in their texts in a logical order (Scale 3).
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Anna: LETTER
3/10 Francis
Brookly Park
Dear Mr Owen
IcOme from SUDAN.
The people from my country.We are bad .Because they are fighting a lot In country. But the wealther is good.
Because there ,s war in my country. Iwould like to playing basketball.
Ilook like my brother . My friend like me.My family is abig family,
Iwould ike to wached television in my free time.
Ilike Adelaide because it s small city. Ihave visited melbourne and moonta bay.
My favorite place is Adelaide. Iwould like to be adoctor.
Ilive in flat. has a back yard.
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Evidence for Scaling Anna: LETTER
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
The text is written in the form of a personal letter with address and salutation, a paragraph of personal information. The writer has not included a complimentary closing or identified him/herself.
noun groups: The people from my country
topic words: I
layout: Address and salutation are in the appropriate places.
reference items: I, we, they, my, it, me, The, a
synonyms/antonyms: good/ bad, SUDAN/my country, small city/Adelaide, fighting/war
words that go together: free time, back yard word sets: family, a big family, my brother; place,
Adelaide, melbourne, Moonta bay
linking conjunctions: But binding: Because
comment on level of independence – check with Mark Orr
4/5
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.The people from my country, bad people, country, the wealther (weather), my country, my brother, My friend, My family, a big family, television, my free time, Adelaide, small city, Melbourne, Moonta bay, My favorite (favourite) place, adoctor (a doctor), flat, a back yard.
action: fighting, visited, live mental (sensing): like relational: are, is, there,s (there’s), look like (means
“resemble”), has verbal groups: would like to playing (play), would
ike to wached (like to watch), would like to be phrasal verbs: come from
dependent clause: Because they are fighting a lot in country,(this is written incorrectly as a complete sentence)Because there,s a war in my country (this is written incorrectly as a complete sentence and does not bind to another clause), because its small city (because it’s a small city)
when: in my free time where: in (my) country, in (a) flat, in my country how: like my brother
small city, favorite place, doctor, flat, back yard, moonta bay
4
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
Uses very simple statements with varying degrees of accuracy.
frequency: a lot inclination: would like to playing (play), would ike (like)
to wached (watch), I like, would like to be a doctor
attitude, feelings: bad, fighting, good, like, favourite names: people, brother, friend, family
Gives personal information and expresses feelings and hopes in a very limited way. The writer is positioned as an expert on the topic which is appropriate for a letter revealing personal information.
4
Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
non-human: My favorite place human: I, My family, My friend, we, The people from
my country
Foregrounding of mostly human participants is appropriate for a very elementary recount.
Very simple introduction- IcOme from SUDAN: no evidence of topic sentences or conclusion . Limited use of cohesive devises to organise the text and link sentences.
primary: are, like, are fighting, is, live, has secondary: would like to playing, have visited, would
like, would like to wached (watch), would like to be Difficulties with subject/verb agreement and the construction of compound tenses are evident, although the choice of tense is generally appropriate.
Uses only active voice
written on the computer Irregular spacing, particularly lack of spacing
between I and verb Uses capitals at the beginning of sentences and
uses full stops at the end of sentences and sometimes after two dependent clauses
Uses comma instead of apostrophe
4/5
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Anna : NEWS STORY RECOUNT
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Behind the NewsStory
Life in IraqSchool – In Iraq students study
same subject Arabic.
Along ago the Islam Arabic prayers hundren time a day. But now the most of Muslim the Prayers few time a day.
Many years ago Iraq was the rich country in the Middle East. But now Iraq was the poor country because he used fighting. There’s no sewerage systems & electricity and it has 240000 population.The most of children the donn’t go to school.
Iraq it donn’t have missiles to attack america or Australia But it has smalls missiles that is he attack issrel in 1991 Gulf war.
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Evidence for Scaling Anna : NEWS STORY RECOUNT
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
A title and series of paragraphs are present. The text recounts and summarises a news item about “Life in Iraq” in Behind the News.
noun groups: School, Iraq time, place, manner: Along ago (A long time
ago), Many years ago
layout: a series of paragraphs
reference items: the, the (they), he (Iraq), it (Iraq), he (not used appropriately)
vocabulary patterns: antonyms: rich/poor word sets: Islam, prayers (prays), Muslim;
fighting, missiles, attack, 1991 Gulf War, classification: country: issrel (Israel),
America, Australia, Iraq conjunctions: But
linking: and, But binding: because relative clauses: But it has smalls missiles that
is he attack issrel (Israel)
4
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.same subject, The islam Arabic, the most of Muslim, hundred time a day, five time a day, Iraq, the rich country, the Middle East, the poor country, no sewerage systems, eletricity, population, most of children, school, missiles, America, Australia, smalls missiles, iisrel (Israel), 1991 Gulf War
the rich (richest) country, the poor (poorest) country
Life, sewerage systems, electricity, population, fighting
action: studies, prayers (prayed) used, donn’t (don’t) go, to attack
relational: was, there’s, has, is verbal groups: donn’t go, donn’t have:
dependent clause: because he used fighting
when: along ago, many years ago, now, in 1991 Gulf War, a hundren (hundred) time(s) a day
where: in Iraq, in the Middle East, to school,
Iraq, arabic, prayers (prays), Muslim, Middle East, no sewerage systems, electricity, population, children, school, missiles, America, Australia, issrel, 1991Gulf War
4/5
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements questions offers commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
This text is a series of mostly simple sentences and several compound sentences as statements. The grammatical accuracy of the statements is very limited.
attitude, feelings: rich, poor, fighting, attack, smalls missiles
The writer is recounting a television news item so the tenor is objective which is appropriate for this kind of text.
Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Drawappropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
time, place, manner: Along ago, Many years ago, But now, In Iraq
non-human: School, Iraq human: They most of children (Most of the children)
Foregrounding of time place and manner, human and non-human elements is appropriate for a recount of a news report.
There is no attempt to introduce the whole text through an introduction and paragraphs do not have topic sentences. Paragraphs are not linked.
primary: prayers (prayed), was, has, used, attack A limited use of primary tenses with varying accuracy.
No use of passive voice.
Handwriting legible, organised into paragraphs, accurate spelling of most common vocabulary used, appropriate use of full stops and capital letters.
5
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 3 AND 4
Scale 3 Scale 4GENRE: Outcome 3.1
Interacts in routine spoken exchanges with some tentative experimenting and, with support, responds to and constructs a limited range of written texts.
Outcome 4.1Interacts in predominantly routine exchanges and constructs a limited range of texts.
Text in Context
understands that several basic genres have different purposes and that the purposes are similar across cultures
understands the main ideas and characters of a well-illustrated story when read aloud
understands that certain texts give commands or information and constructs isolated examples copied from or closely modelled on printed texts
participates in short, almost formulaic exchanges and slightly longer spoken texts if memorised
participates in simple group activities based on shared texts (usually spoken language accompanying actions)
reads a small range of everyday and environmental texts and collaboratively constructs very brief examples of the most familiar
understands for several basic genres that they have different purposes
understands main ideas and characters in a short illustrated story read aloud
participates in short predictable spoken exchanges relying less on memorised segments
reads a small range of texts and collaboratively constructs very brief examples: very basic procedures, reports, descriptions, texts found in advertising and on packaging
organises the meanings in brief written texts in a logical order
Language understands the purpose of several basic genres and identifies the contexts in which they are used
understands the structure of several basic genres participates in texts such as songs beyond simply the
chorus or rhyme initiates basic spoken exchanges involving two or
three turns constructs elementary examples of basic genres by
speaking and writing components of them with a high degree of visual and teacher scaffolding
uses most basic reference items accurately most of the time: uses basic pronouns (I, you, my, here)
demonstrates understanding of the organisation and discriminating features of several basic genres: procedures, descriptive reports
constructs components of several basic genres with less dependence on scaffolding:
spoken exchanges involving three or four turns procedures, reports expands information using and, but uses small range of reference items: possessive
pronouns, third person pronouns and demonstrative pronouns
FIELD: Outcome 3.2Understands and uses a very narrow range of common, everyday vocabulary constructing personally relevant fields, and uses isolated examples of concrete technical vocabulary.
Outcome 4.2Understands and uses a very narrow range of vocabulary constructing personally relevant fields, and uses isolated examples of technical vocabulary.
Text in Context
uses vocabulary that is developing their knowledge of the school and community, and other personally relevant topics
uses vocabulary that is mainly commonsense and everyday but chooses some concrete technical vocabulary
identifies some very familiar words in a variety of contexts
uses first language dictionary but has a limited understanding of appropriateness for a specific context
reads some environmental print (words on public signs, logos, numbers on posters)
uses vocabulary for topics such as transport and amenities
uses vocabulary that is mainly common sense and everyday but begins to use some technical vocabulary for personally relevant topics
demonstrates understanding of technical vocabulary when constructing a very narrow range of educational topics
Language uses very basic phrases of location but understands a slightly wider range
identifies some very familiar vocabulary in a variety of contexts e.g. can identify the names of their teachers and classmates from among other names
articulates in basic ways such as simple phrases the meanings made in visual materials
expands vocabulary by exploring how to classify and describe (classification: native/non-native animals; description: very small/small/big/very big/huge animal)
uses small range of phrases of time and location and understands a slightly wider range
expands vocabulary by exploring numbers (eight), describers (very pretty, good-looking), classifiers (oil heater) , prepositions (on, under, in)
demonstrates understanding of technical and non technical vocabulary constructing a narrow range of educational fields
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 3 AND 4
Scale 3 Scale 4TENOR: Outcome 3.3
Participates appropriately in a strictly limited range of familiar, highly supportive contexts, using with some accuracy a limited range of basic grammatical structures.
Outcome 4.3Participates appropriately in a limited range of familiar, highly supportive contexts, using a limited range of basic grammatical structures with some accuracy.
Text in Context
chooses limited range of ways of expressing statements, questions, offers, commands, using predominantly modelled examples with limited accuracy in a limited range of familiar supportive contexts
takes on the roles of appropriately asking and answering questions and giving commands to peers as well as responding to commands
expresses statements and questions in basic ways follows instructions with less dependence on non-
verbal elements participates appropriately with increasingly more
language in group activities and classroom routines participates appropriately in highly supportive contexts
through basic, spoken exchanges that are increasingly less routine
begins to demonstrate critical awareness by identifying, with support, the appropriateness of a narrow range of behaviours (gaze, distance, gesture, touch)
chooses narrow range of ways of expressing statements, questions, offers, commands, using predominantly modelled examples when communicating independently
follows instructions with less dependence on non-verbal elements and begins to give commands
begins to experiment with new expressions in familiar, supportive contexts
Language uses basic grammatical items: articles (a, the), narrow range of prepositions (on, in), conjunctions (and), narrow range of adverbs (very)
understands basic intonation patterns of statements and questions and responds accordingly
responds appropriately to routine commands when meaning is clear through gestures and/or key words are stressed
understands statements and basic yes / no questions and uses a limited range
expresses statements, questions, offers and commands in basic ways, choosing two or three key words and relying on tone, intonation and actions
chooses a narrow range of socially appropriate formulaic expressions at major stages of an exchange
uses a limited range of evaluative language pronounces most frequently used vocabulary
comprehensibly and begins to risk pronouncing less familiar words, repeating if necessary
uses a small range of basic grammatical items: articles (a, an, the), auxiliaries (do, does, is, was), prepositions (out, under), adverbs (so, much)
good understanding of typical intonation patterns of basic statements, questions and offers
understands a small range of yes / no questions and uses a narrow range
responds to commands with uncommon vocabulary chooses a small range of socially appropriate
formulaic expressions and begins to use colloquial forms
uses a narrow range of evaluative language
MODE: Outcome 3.4Constructs a strictly limited range of spoken texts located in the immediate context, reads a limited range of texts supported by visuals and begins to write a strictly limited range of very brief texts collaboratively.
Outcome 4.4Constructs a limited range of spoken texts located in the immediate context, reads a limited range of texts and begins to shape a strictly limited range of written texts.
Text in Context
chooses with some confidence to use more language relative to the number of gestures and visual resources
organises the meanings in brief written texts in a logical order, with intensive support and for one or two genres only
uses the basic print conventions appropriately writes simple sentences and begins to rely less on
copying texts reads with some confidence a small range of visual
texts and begins to draw basic examples
participates confidently and appropriately in face to face interactions
chooses with increasing confidence to use more language relative to the number of actions, illustrations
reads with some success a small range of texts constructing basic technical topics
begins to write and draw a small range of basic examples of texts on technical fields
writes very brief examples of everyday texts
Language reads aloud the crucial parts of a range of environmental print (labels in the classroom, days on the timetable)
identifies the prominent items of information in short spoken, written and visual texts (matches words to pictures)
chooses highly repetitive sentence beginnings in speech and writing (personal pronouns)
demonstrates limited control of the primary tenses begins to identify beginning and end sounds spells with some accuracy many common
monosyllabic words learned in class and spells others based on some of the sounds in the word
reads along with simple text read aloud chooses repetitive beginnings of sentences demonstrates some control of primary tenses and their
formation for common regular verbs but a strictly limited control of secondary tenses
spells accurately most common monosyllabic words and spells others based on own pronunciation
experiments with punctuation
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALE 3 AND SCALE 4AS EVIDENT IN THE STUDENTS’ SETS OF EVIDENCE
GENRE:Nick, Rita and Anna are all able to construct elementary examples of basic genres (Scale 3). Anna demonstrates an understanding of the structure of at least two basic genres and begins to organise the texts in a logical order. (Scale 4)
FIELD:Nick and Rita use vocabulary that is mainly commonsense and everyday with some concrete technical vocabulary in their Descriptions. (Scale 3) Anna begins to use some technical vocabulary in her News Story Recount. (Scale 4)
TENOR:Nick and Rita use a limited range of vocabulary to express feelings and attitudes. (Scale 3) Anna’s range of evaluative language is slightly broader. (Scale 4)
MODE:Nick and Rita use only primary tenses and demonstrate limited control of these. (Scale 3) Anna uses primary tenses and begins to use secondary tenses with limited accuracy. (Scale 4)
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Quin : PERSONAL RECOUNT
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Quin : PERSONAL RECOUNT
I was born in a villager of the Vietnam. When I was nine years old, My family went to
the city. During I had coming in primary school for five year. After that I became at high
school to learning literature language, mathematics, history and science. That time my
country had violent of war, Because had command of government to lose all school and were
young man to go to defence country. from that time I became soldier for until 1975 that
changed government. Who Took my for three year. After that I was return villager to working
for farm.
1992 I escape leaved country Vietnam to go to Indonesia at stay refuge galang island.
1994 I came to the City Aderlaide for to now.
1994 I went to working for farm aple and grapes until 1999 I came Senior College to
learning English to now. I very happy because I know English, writing, speaking, reading. I
have teacher good and friendly school. but I feel not enough English. I can learning more
Now Im learning ESLB for to good write. I need a lot of English with my friend.
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Evidence for Scaling
Quin : PERSONAL RECOUNT
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about
men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In
addition noun groups: Another reason, The
principle cause of the increase, One main argument,
phrases and dependent clauses of time, place, manner: Born in 1898
phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a result of the rain;
topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a
complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth:
enamel. conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and
then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the
results,
level of scaffolding
The text has three paragraphs. Orientation, record of events and personal evaluation of the significance of events are present.
time, place, manner: (In)1992, (In) 1994
layout: correct paragraphing according to sequence of events; use of dates to start new paragraphs
reference items: I, a, the, My, that, all vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms: escape/leaved (left), not enough/more, Vietnam/country, villager (village)/city
words that go together: nine years old word sets: primary school, high school, teacher,
learning, literature, language, mathematics, history, science, teacher, Senior College, ESLB, write; Vietnam, Indonesia, galang island, Aderlaide (Adelaide); war, defence, command, government, soldier; villager (village), farm, grapes, aple (apples)
classification: English: ESLB composition: English: writing, speaking, reading.
linking: at (and), but binding: because, until relative clauses: attempts to use relative pronoun
‘who’ linking to government projection: non-finite clauses: attempts to use infinitive clauses
eg. To go to defence (defend) country, to learning (learn) literature....etc. to working (work) for farm.
Students were introduced to examples of text in past tense, present tense and future tense. Teacher with class help highlighted the varying language. A complete recount was examined and modelled. Students wrote independently in a supervised classroom.
5/6
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
Metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
a villager of the Vietnam (a village of Vietnam), nine years old, violent of war (a violent war), Senior College, a lot of English, command of Government.
command of the government
action: escape (escaped); leaved (left), born, took, to working (work), to learning (learn)
mental (sensing): know; feel, need relational: was , became, had, were, verbal groups: to go to defence (defend), went to
working (work)
dependent clause: because I know English, writing,
speaking, reading, because had command of government
when: When I was nine years old , That time, for five year(s), During, from that time, for three year(s), for to (until) now, for until 1975, (in) 1992, (in) 1994, until 1999, to now, now
where: in a village(r) of the Vietnem, to the city, in primary school, at high school,, to Indonesia, (in a) refuge, (on) galang island, (to) Thebarton Senior College
with whom, what: with my friend
Vietnam, escape, government, Indonesia, soldier.
reported: had command of government (the government had commanded)
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
Use of statements throughout text but with varying accuracy. Incorrect word order in many places.
certainty: I can learning more
feelings, attitudes: I feel not enough English, very happy, need a lot of English with my friend, Friendly school, violent of war.
In a supported learning environment the writer has chosen appropriate language for the context. The writer is positioned as an authority on the subject and the tenor is subjective which is appropriate for a personal recount.
4
Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused
by the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and
visual patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual
images, sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
cause: Because had command of government (the government had commanded)
time, place, manner: When I was nine years old, During, After that, (At) That time, After that, (In) 1992, (In) 1994, Now
human: I
Circumstances of location in time are foregrounded often and this is appropriate for a personal recount.
The text has been organised sequentially and the foregrounding of dates gives a clear indication of the content of each paragraph.
primary: Uses simple past with varying accuracy. Uses an example of present continuous I’m learning... Uses simple present tense, I feel, I know, I need.
secondary: had command
No use of passive which is appropriate in a simple recount
Uses paragraphs appropriately with indents, generally accurate spelling, uses punctuation with varying accuracy, inconsistent use of full stops
5/6
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Quin : CONVERSATION
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T: What opportunities do you get to talk? Do you talk in class?
S: Talking in class?
T: Do you talk much?
S: Little bit talking because a lot of students in class, In class I talk about one two three sentence? And different and another student talk read.
T: Do you want more time to do talking?
S: Yes I like to learn for talking and listen Yes I listen not good. Some teacher talk I explain I listen not enough and listen about half and three thirty percent and my listen about fifty percent and twenty percent I learn some . I don’t understand.
T: Do the teachers talk too quickly or do they need to say it more times ?Or both? Do they talk too quickly?
S: No no. Some some some quickly and some no quickly? But the lou I listen don’ understand ah the word the teacher talk I listen I don’t understand and I looking the word I understand.
T: Right so actually you can read the words in a book? And understand them? But when you hear the word you don’t always understand?
S: Yes
T: So we have got to put the visual and the sound together?
S: Yes?
T: so you can understand them
S: Yes, yes
T: Is it more difficult in science than ESL class? (pause) Or is it difficult in both classes? (pause) Are you doing science this year?
S: Science! NO no Because I before I learn in here, teacher explain I don’t understand, Sometime teacher call me to work in science and I don’t understand and I worked wrong.
T & S: laughter?
S I like to learn that that subject but English I listen very bad and I don’t learn to that. I think more time, I learn, I learn, English good I listen good and I come to there I learn. I learn maths maths, subject, maths subject. But I try before I try to class maths teacher talk a lot of quickly. I don’t understand. And science teacher explain quickly. I don’t understand. Maths. Yeah Maths and Science teacher quickly explain.
T: But if they write the word on the board that helps? Does it the help?
S: On the board? where?
T: Write the science word, the science word, on the whiteboard or the blackboard?
S: Yeah (student seems unsure)
T: Does it help when you can see the new word? When you can see the word written down does it help sometimes?
S: Yeah (student still seems unsure) The sentence write in the board and look in the story and in the paper some the sentence I understand. Some the sentence I er er understand half and little bit, I I I I I look in the ‘dictory’ (dictionary) and I understand it.
T: So you can read stories and understand stories? You can read them?
S: Yes. I read the story I understand sometime. I don’t understand I look in the dictiory
T: Dictionary
S: Dictionary. I little bit look in story. Now now I borrow library story and for weekend I read.
T: This is why you want a tape so that you can hear the story while you are reading it. This would help you.
S: Yes I like to have the tape and I listen the voice the the they talking the tape I listen the voice yeah for for I have, I have a long time to listen
T: To work at home
S: After that I think I I I would to listen good
T: Do you listen to any English at home on the television or on the radio?
S: I I At home I watching television. I no no I listen the the radio
T: When you watch television do you watch the news?
S: Yes news and now everyday I watch the news war, Iraq war.
T: What about in your family. Do you talk to anyone in your family in English?
S: No (laugh) Language Vietnamese
T: Only Vietnamese at home. Do you have children?
S: Four children, but stay my home two children.
T: Only two and how old are those two children at home?
S: The boy about 24, oh no 23, and the boy 15.
T: Two boys?
S: Yes
T: Right. Living at home. Where does the 15 year old boy go to school?
S: The boy 15 go to Croydon
T: Oh Croydon yes
S: And old boy
T: The older boy Is he working?
S: No he learn in the, in the Uni Australia, Mawson Lakes.
T: University of South Australia. In the City?
S: No No in the Mawson Lake
T: What is he studying
S: He learn Engineer, Robot. Robot Engineer. Boy little one
T: Young boy, Younger son
S: Young boy learn roydon level 12
T: Oh he is in year 12. He must be older than fifteen then?
S: Yes
T: Sixteen or seventeen?
S: No. He fifteen because he learn seven class and ten class. Eight, seven he no learn. He no learn seven and eight. He come in the Primary School and he go into ten class in High School. Ye He learn. Of seven and eight class.
T: So he is only 15 and he is in year 12? That’s amazing. He must be very clever. Is he a clever boy?
S: I don’t know. Because he learn Primary School and he learn at home he learn his brother. And when he learn High School he go to in the class ten. Yeah.
T: Do they ever use English at home? Do they talk in English at home?
S: No. Talk Language Vietnamese.
T: Do you ever ask them to help you with your English.
S: No I go - they help me - he he he talk with me he busy
T: Rude to his Dad
T & S (Much laughter)
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Evidence for Scaling Quin: CONVERSATION
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about the
students? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, One of the
main arguments, The principle cause of the increase
phrases and dependent clauses of time, place, manner: Born in 1898
phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a result of the rain..; Led by Nelson Mandela, South Africa..
non finite clauses action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil topic words: Antarctica, Pollution initiate and close interactions: less
formulaic, formulaic expressions, gestures ask and answer questions participate in song, rhyme, chorus, reading
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars,
premolars, incisors composition (whole part): tooth: enamel,
dentine, pulp, nerve. conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, or, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clause: The team, having seen the
results, felt…; Having seen the results, the team…
level of scaffolding
The text is a conversation between teacher and student. The teacher interviews the student about language needs, learning experiences and family. The student responds sometimes in one or two words and sometimes with elaboration.
ask and answer: teacher asks and student answers most questions except when clarification is required e.g. Talking in class? On the board? Where?
reference items: I, the, it, a, some, me, a lot, another student, my, that, there, they, he, his brother
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: school/home, quickly/no
quickly (slowly), talk/explain, good/bad words that go together: watching television word sets: learning, talk, listening, understand,
explain, class, sentence, students, read, teacher, work, science, board, English, Maths, subject, paper, story, dictionary, library, Uni Australia, Robot Engineer, level 12, seven class, ten class, Primary School, High School
classification: children: boy (son), boy 15 (15 year old son), old boy (older son), boy little one (younger son), young boy (younger son)
conjunctions: After that
linking: and, then binding: but, because
projection: I think (that) I would to listen good (my listening will improve)
Teacher’s questions provide scaffolding for the student’s responses.
4/5
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, all day, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: subtract, divide, peered, scanned,
demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, shouted stated,
asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the weather
was bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is commonly thought, Studies
have shown
For Scale 5 onward only longer noun groups are cited.(a) little bit (of) talking, a lot of students, one, two (or) three sentence(s), another student, some teacher(s), the word the teacher talk (says), (the) more time, maths subject, class maths teacher (the Maths teacher), (the) Maths and Science teacher(s), the dictory (dictionary), library story (book), a long time, the news war, Iraq war, Language Vietnamese, four children, The boy about 24(A son who is about 24), the boy 15 (a son who is 15) the boy 15 ( the fifteen year old), old boy (the older boy), Uni Australia Mawson Lakes, Engineer Robot, Robot Engineer, Boy little one (the younger boy/son), Young boy (my younger son), seven and eight class (Yr 7 and Yr 8), Primary School, his brother, High School, the class ten (Yr 10)
action: to work, worked, try, look, read, watching, stay, watch, go, come, help
mental (sensing): learning, listening, understand, think, know
saying: talk, explain, call relational: have verbal groups: like to have, like to learn
dependent clause: because (there are) a lot of students in (the) class, because I before I learn in here (because when I was learning Science here before), because he learn seven class and ten class, Because he learn Primary School
when: before, Sometime(s), for (on the) weekend, now, everyday, in (the) Primary School
where: in (the) class, in here, in Science, On the board, where?, in the board, in the story, in (on) the paper, in the dictory (dictionary), (on) the tape, At home, in the Uni Australia (University of South Australia), Mawson Lakes, to Croydon, (at) my home, into ten class (Yr 10) in High School, at home, to in the class ten (to Yr 10)
how: about one two (or) three sentence(s), not enough, about half and three, thirty percent, about fifty percent, twenty percent, quickly, no quickly (slowly), wrong, very bad (badly), good, a lot of quickly (very quickly), half and little bit, different
with whom, what: with me
reported: he talk with me he busy (he tells me that he is busy)
5
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Tenor: Language for
interacting with
others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, tend to, might be able to frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meaning: feelings, attitudes: unfortunately,
importance, outstanding idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms,
humour names to refer to people culturally specific references
verbal elements: intonation, volume, pace, word stress,
tone, pronunciation, and other sound patterns pronunciation of foreign words
non verbal elements: body language, eye contact, physical
response
appropriate tenor for the context
The student is able to construct simple statements using key participants, processes and circumstances although with limited use of articles or other reference items and with limited accuracy in word order. The student asks questions to seek clarification by repeating words used by the teacher that he has not understood. It appears from the punctuation in the transcript that the appropriate intonation is used to ask questions.
The tenor of the student’s language is appropriately subjective.
certainty: I don’t know frequency: Sometime(s), every day inclination: I want, I like
feelings, attitudes: wrong, very bad, good, busy
The student uses appropriate intonation to ask questions and make statements.
The student has used appropriately formal language for this conversation with his teacher.
5/6
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Mode:
Language for
creating spoken
and written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, haven’t played, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, physical objects, layout, tables, print text and spoken text
The student is able to identify the important information (the information being sought) in the teachers’ questions and often foregrounds this information in his response. As the student is being asked about himself in many cases, the responses are foregrounded with “I” and this is appropriate.
The student attempts to use reference items with limited accuracy.
primary: mainly simple present and some simple past secondary: no evidence of secondary tensesThe student tends to use the simple present tense, infinitive forms and present participles with varying degrees of accuracy.
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Quin: LETTER OF ADVICE
(Address)01/ 3 /03
Dear Nancy
Today, I would like to writing this letter to you. Because I have been reading about your story,
and I did understand in that your situation. Such as in both did not understand together.
There are different cultured, different Countories, because both sides different ideas, and
think to their relationship. So that I want to give my opinion to you and to help you more
understand betwen two people.
In my opinion if you want to stay with swiss man then you have to share, the relationship
betwen you and swiss man will be succeed fail. You and your love must be able to
communicate, learn both of cultures having a relationship in “English” and also you feeling
when you going to stay with him.
If you are understand everythings. Which means you can not difficult with each other then
your life become happiness with him and also swiss man need to understand you and your
culture.
I hope you understand my letter can help you to decide the way in your life, and hope you
and your love will be happiness
Yours truthfully
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Evidence for Scaling Quin: LETTER OF ADVICE
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; non finite clauses topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
The text is a letter to a character in a story. The letter has the sender’s address, date, salutation and complimentary closing. There are four paragraphs in which the writer gives personal opinions and advice.
noun groups: I time, place, manner: Today, In my opinion cause: If you are understand everythings layout: Handwritten with letter-writing conventions
used appropriately
reference items: I, this, you, your, Such as, both, their, my, your love, him, everything(s), each other, which
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: succeed/fail word sets: relationship, two people, love,
communicate, learn, happiness; Countories (countries), swiss, English
linking: and, so, also binding: Because, if, then, when relative clauses: If you are understand everything.
Which means you can not difficult with each other projection: I hope (that) you understand my letter non-finite clauses: to help you more understand
betwen (between) two people, having a relationship in “English,” to stay with (the) swiss man, to decide the way in your life
Written after extensive reading and discussion of the stimulus text.
5
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.this letter, your story, your situation, different cultured (cultures), different Countories (countries), both sides, different ideas, their relationship, my opinion, two people, (the) swiss man, the relationship, You and your love, both of cultures, your life, my letter
more understand
situation, relationship, opinion, happiness, your love, life
action: writing, reading, help, succeed, fail mental (sensing): understand, are, think, learn,
feeling, hope, decide relational: become, means, will be, having verbal groups: would like, want to give, want to
stay, have to share, must be able to communicate, going to stay, need to understand, can help
phrase: to you dependent clause: if you want to stay with swiss
man then …, If you are understanding everythings … then …
when: Today, when you going to stay where: in (that) your situation, in both, in your life how: together, more, in”English” with whom, what: betwen (between) two people,
with swiss man, with him, with each other what about: about your story
Nancy, swiss man, relationship, love, communicate, succeed, fail, understand
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Tenor: Language for
interacting with
others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The text is a series of statements expressed in simple, complex and compound sentences although many difficulties with the word order and linking of compound and complex sentences are evident.
subjective: In my opinion, I hopeThe text is appropriately subjective for a letter of advice.
certainty: will be succeed (successful), hope you understand, can help, hope … will be happiness (happy)
obligation: have to share, must be able to communicate, need(s) to understand
inclination: would like to writing (write), want to give, want to stay
feelings, attitudes: different, share, succeed, fail, love, communicate, feeling, understand, difficult, happiness
names: Nancy, swiss man
The writer is positioned as an empathic authority on the life of the character, Nancy. Advice is offered strongly through the use of modality expressing obligation, certainty and inclination. These choices are appropriate for a text offering advice to the reader.
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Mode:
Language for
creating spoken
and written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
abstractions: the relationship cause: If you are understand everythings, so (that) I
want to give my opinion time, place, manner: Today, In my opinion, Such as
human: You and your love, I
Sentences are foregrounded in a variety of ways, including dependent clauses, abstractions human elements and circumstances of time and place. These choices are appropriate for a letter of advice.
Topic sentences have not been used. There is an introduction and a conclusion and the conventions of letter-writing have been used effectively. Difficulties with structure of complex sentences are evident as the student foregrounds dependent clauses on a few occasions without supplying the information that the clause depends on.
primary: hope, think, learn secondary: have been reading, did understandPrimary tenses are used appropriately on most occasions. Difficulties with the selection and construction of secondary tenses are evident.
Active voice used appropriately.
Difficulties with the punctuation of compound and complex sentences are evident. The student uses commas in lists appropriately, capitals at the beginning of sentences and full stops at the end. Spelling of common, familiar vocabulary is accurate.
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 4 AND 5
Scale 4 Scale 5GENRE: Outcome 4.1
Interacts in predominantly routine exchanges and constructs a limited range of texts.
Outcome 5.1Communicates in a narrow range of situations, constructing very brief texts.
Text in Context
understands for several basic genres that they have different purposes
understands main ideas and characters in a short illustrated story read aloud
participates in short predictable spoken exchanges relying less on memorised segments
reads a small range of texts and collaboratively constructs very brief examples: very basic procedures, reports, descriptions, texts found in advertising and on packaging
organises the meanings in brief written texts in a logical order
begins to identify independently the purposes and common features of elementary genres
understands main ideas and characters in a short story read aloud clearly and begins to retell with some success
participates in short predictable spoken exchanges reads a range of everyday texts and writes very brief
examples of the most familiar: advertising posters begins to independently construct very brief recounts,
descriptions and procedures
Language demonstrates understanding of the organisation and discriminating features of several basic genres: procedures, descriptive reports
constructs components of several basic genres with less dependence on scaffolding: spoken exchanges involving three or four turns procedures, reports
expands information using and, but uses small range of reference items: possessive
pronouns, third person pronouns and demonstrative pronouns
demonstrates understanding of the organisation and discriminating features of a greater range of basic genres: narratives, recounts, procedures, reports
constructs elementary examples of logically organised genres with little dependence on scaffolding: uses proformas with some confidence
expands information using linking conjunctions - and, then, but, or so; binding conjunctions - because
uses small range of reference items (definite article and pronouns) accurately most of the time in spoken texts and with some accuracy in short written texts
FIELD: Outcome 4.2Understands and uses a very narrow range of vocabulary constructing personally relevant fields, and uses isolated examples of technical vocabulary.
Outcome 5.2Understands and uses a small range of vocabulary and grammatical items to form basic word groups and phrases constructing personally relevant fields, and uses a limited range of technical vocabulary.
Text in Context
uses vocabulary for topics such as transport and amenities
uses vocabulary that is mainly common sense and everyday but begins to use some technical vocabulary for personally relevant topics
demonstrates understanding of technical vocabulary when constructing a very narrow range of educational topics
uses vocabulary for topics such as leisure activities uses confidently a small range of commonsense,
vocabulary uses with some confidence a limited range of technical
vocabulary when constructing increasingly complex personally relevant topics
demonstrates understanding of technical vocabulary when constructing a narrow range of educational topics
Language uses small range of phrases of time and location and understands a slightly wider range
expands vocabulary by exploring numbers (eight), describers (very pretty, good-looking), classifiers (oil heater) , prepositions (on, under, in)
demonstrates understanding of technical and non technical vocabulary constructing a narrow range of educational fields
uses small range of phrases of time and location and understands wider range including how something happened
expands vocabulary by exploring numbers (first, a half of), describers (big, bright), classifiers (mountain bike), prepositions (beside, by)
uses a small range of comparatives of regular one syllable adjectives
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Scale 4 Scale 5
TENOR: Outcome 4.3Participates appropriately in a limited range of familiar, highly supportive contexts, using a limited range of basic grammatical structures with some accuracy.
Outcome 5.3Participates appropriately in a narrow range of familiar, supportive contexts, using with some accuracy a narrow range of basic grammatical structures.
Text in Context
chooses narrow range of ways of expressing statements, questions, offers, commands, using predominantly modelled examples when communicating independently
follows instructions with less dependence on non-verbal elements and begins to give commands
begins to experiment with new expressions in familiar, supportive contexts
chooses independently a narrow range of basic ways of expressing statements, questions, offers, commands and uses them with some accuracy
follows instructions with little dependence on non-verbal elements gives commands appropriately
experiments with some confidence with new expressions in familiar, supportive contexts, especially to play with language
Language uses a small range of basic grammatical items: articles (a, an, the), auxiliaries (do, does, is, was), prepositions (out, under), adverbs (so, much)
good understanding of typical intonation patterns of basic statements, questions and offers
understands a small range of yes / no questions and uses a narrow range
responds to commands with uncommon vocabulary chooses a small range of socially appropriate
formulaic expressions and begins to use colloquial forms
uses a narrow range of evaluative language
uses a range of grammatical items: auxiliaries (did, can, will), prepositions (out, under, above, between), adverbs (really, many)
good awareness of intonation patterns of basic spoken statements, questions and offers
uses a small range of yes / no questions and begins to use wh- questions
understands a wide range of commands chooses formulaic polite expressions appropriately uses a small range of evaluative vocabulary to express
feelings and attitudes plays with language in elementary ways for humorous
effects
MODE: Outcome 4.4Constructs a limited range of spoken texts located in the immediate context, reads a limited range of texts and begins to shape a strictly limited range of written texts.
Outcome 5.4Constructs a narrow range of spoken texts located in the immediate context and begins to construct very brief texts (spoken, written and visual) in the immediate context.
Text in Context
participates confidently and appropriately in face to face interactions
chooses with increasing confidence to use more language relative to the number of actions, illustrations
reads with some success a small range of texts constructing basic technical topics
begins to write and draw a small range of basic examples of texts on technical fields
writes very brief examples of everyday texts
begins to communicate appropriately some of the time when the situation involves another medium
reads with some confidence a wide range of visual texts and begins to draw a small range of examples
chooses simple sentence beginnings and, with support, an occasional phrase of time or place at the beginning of recounts or narratives
identifies the patterns in what is placed at the front in a genre and demonstrates a limited understanding that various grammatical elements can be foregrounded
Language reads along with simple text read aloud chooses repetitive beginnings of sentences demonstrates some control of primary tenses and their
formation for common regular verbs but a strictly limited control of secondary tenses
spells accurately most common monosyllabic words and spells others based on own pronunciation
experiments with punctuation
reads aloud own or collaboratively constructed writing and begins to read others’ texts with some confidence
chooses very short basic phrases of time and place at the beginning of recounts or narratives and action verbs at the beginning of the steps in procedures
demonstrates control of primary tenses and their formation for the most common regular verbs but inconsistent control of secondary tenses
spells accurately common words learned in the classroom and spells others based on their own pronunciation or other patterns
writes so that texts are generally legible and demonstrates understanding of basic punctuation
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALE 4 AND SCALE 5AS EVIDENT IN THE STUDENTS’ SETS OF EVIDENCE
GENRE:Anna and Quin are both able to write letters and recounts. Anna uses mainly simple linking conjunctions (Scale 4) Quin is able to use a greater range of linking conjunctions and some of the most common binding conjunctions to form complex sentences. (Scale 5)
FIELD:Anna uses mainly circumstances of time and location. (Scale 4) Quin uses a broader range of these circumstances as well as basic examples indicating how something happened. (Scale 5)
TENOR:Anna uses a small range of evaluative language. (Scale 4) Quin uses a more extended range of evaluative language. (Scale 5)
MODE:Anna has some control of simple present and past and limited control of secondary tenses. (Scale 4) Quin has better control of primary tenses. (Scale 5)
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Aaron: LETTER
Dear Mr Thomas,
How are you? My name is Aaron Pham. I’m 16 year old. My birthday is 20 th June. I was born in Malaysia. there
is five people in my family. There is my father, mother, brother, sister and me My father is a doctor Who work in
Malaysia, my mother is a housewife and my brother goes to Uni. My sister don’t goes to school yet my
weakness is in english. I have some problems with spelling words in english. In my free time I love to play
basketball and watching T.V. When I finish year 12 and finish Uni, I like to open my own shop and make a lot of
money. I thing the school is OK the way it is I thing the country should stop talking about the people you should
vote for. I don’t get well with brother just some things keep us fighting. If I earn a lot of money, I buy a new cars
and buy a new house for my father and mother I like to goes to the movies, I can speak chinese, english, Malay.
I am 183cm tall and I have brown eyes, my hair used to be black. I am trying to get a job at a fast food
restaurant. So I can make more money to buy a new sports car for myself. some time I put mp3 songs on CD,
so that I can listen to them I don’t play sport anymore, now and then I have a shot at baseketball.
Yours sincerity
Aaron
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Evidence for ScalingAaron : LETTER
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Simple personal letter with salutation, two paragraphs and a complimentary closing statement.
rhetorical questions: How are you?
layout: Dear Mr Thomas, Yours sincerity (sincerely)
reference items: you, my, I, who, it, the, things, a, myself, them
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: shop/restaurant words that go together: spelling words, play
basketball, play sport, free time word sets: Chinese, English and Malay classification: sport, basketball composition: : family: father, mother, brother,
sister
linking: and binding: if, when, so that, So relative clauses: who work in Malaysia projection: I thing (think)
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.five people, free time, a lot of money, my own shop, a new house, brown eyes, a fast food restaurant, a new sports car, MP3 songs, a shot at basketball, some problems with spelling words in english, the way it is, the people you should vote for
weakness
action: works, goes, finish, earned, buy, put, play, vote, watching, to open, stop
mental (sensing): think, like, listen saying: talking relational: is, are, am, have, used to be verbal groups: stop talking, am trying to get, have a
shot, keep fighting, love to play, can speak phrasal verbs: get on
phrase: for my mother and father, for myself dependent clause: So (so) that I can make more
money to buy a new sports car for myself, If I earn a lot of money
when: in my free time, some time, anymore, When I finish year 12 and finish Uni, now and then.
where: in Malaysia, to Uni, in my family, in English, at a fast food restaurant, on CD, to the movies.
how: well with whom, what: with brother
a shot at basketball
housewife, fast food restaurant, mp3 songs
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Tenor: Language for
interacting with
others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
Text is written as a series of statements and one question. More questions might have been expected of a letter
subjective: I think, I like
obligation: should stop, should vote inclination: love to play, like to open, like to goes (go)
feelings, attitudes: love, OK, just idioms, humour: I have a shot cultural references: mp3 songs names: Mr Traeger, father, mother, brother, sister
The language choices position the writer as an authority on his life, as is appropriate.
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Mode:
Language for
creating spoken
and written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
time, place, manner: In my free time, When I finish year 12 and finish Uni, If I earn a lot of money
non-human: My name, My birthday, there (There) human: I, My father, My sister
Foregrounding of time, place and human elements is appropriate for a simple personal letter.
There is an attempt at an introduction with the question ”How are you?” The rest of the text is a series statements which are related to the field but are not connected or organised in an effective manner for a written text.
primary: are, is, am, goes, have, earn, finish, secondary: was born, don’t goes (doesn’t go), can
speak, used to be uses primary tenses accurately and appropriately but
some errors with secondary tenses
mostly written in the active voice
no significant spelling issues with this range of familiar vocabulary however regularly writes “thing”instead of “think” and misspells sincerely Use of fullstops is inconsistent.
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Aaron : REFLECTION
RECOUNT AND REFLECT
Death it suck and is bad because the person you miss and like past away. I going to write to you and tell what
happened to Clementine when Harris was babysitting Clementine and Julius. It was Sunday before Harris
interview with the entrance traineeship ranger department of parks and widlife Julius want to play hide and seek
with Harris and Clementine Julius make Harris count to five hundred so that Julius and Clementine can go and
hide. Juluis think is funny he hides in the frigerator almost the time that Harris finds clementine in the frigerator it
was to late to save Clementine because clementine had die of coolness. Clementine Helen and Juius when to
the hospital, after they there at the hospital. The doctor said that Clementine was die. Harris was mad at himself
because it was his reprehensible to look after Clementine, I think death is a bad thing because the person you
miss and love is die but I think is not so bad after all. People have to die soon or later. it is all part of life. Most of
the people in the world have to die or pass away it so not bad. I think Harris should not blame him self for what
happen to Clementine because is was an miss furture thing to happen to Clemintine if Juluis did not play hide
and seek and Julius should tell Harris to count to five hundred. I hope that at the end of the story book Harris will
be better and not think about what happen to Clementine and that Helen McMillan will forgive him for what he
had done and that Juluis will be a good litter Kid. And he should learn to be nice to all the people and not be a
bad Kid that he is no in, maybe he should tell his mother that he put Clementine in the refigerator. Helen should
had listen to what Harris have to said to her and not get mad at him for putting Clementine in the frigerator. I
don’t think it was Harris Fork that Clementine death. Harris did not like it to happen to him either because he like
Clemetine very much.
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Evidence for Scaling Aaron – REFLECTION
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
noun groups: Most of the people in the world time, place, manner: It was Sunday before Harris
interview, almost the time that Harris finds clementine in the frigerator (refrigerator)
topic words: Death
layout: One paragraph
reference items: he, himself, the person, people, you, I, who, it, the, an, they, there
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: death/past away, suck/bad,
nice/bad words that go together: parks and wildlife, sooner
or later, hide and seek, doctor/hospital
linking: and, but binding: so, because, if, when
projection: I think, I hope
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited. Harris interview, the entrance traineeship ranger department of parks and wildlife, five hundred, bad thing, Most of the people in the world, an miss furture (unfortunate) thing, a good litter (little) Kid, all part of life
so bad, better
death, coolness, reprehensible (responsible), life, no in (known)
action: write, play, count, go, hide, save, die, find, save, put
mental (sensing): miss, like, blame, want to, hope, think, blame, learn, forgive, get mad, listen, love, suck
saying: tell, said relational: is, was, have, happened verbal groups: look after, past away
dependent clause: if Julius did not play hide and seek, because clementine had die of coolness, because it was his reprehensible (responsibility) to look after Clementine, because the person you miss and love is die, because it was an miss furture (unfortunate) thing to happen, because he like Clementine very much
when: when Harris was babysitting, almost the time, to (too) late, soon (sooner) or later
where: in the frigerator (refrigerator), at the hospital
how: of coolness with whom, what: with Harris and Clementine
suck, mad at
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The student’s text is a series of statements recounting the events in the original text and expressing the student’s reflections on the theme of death. The choice of speech functions is appropriate for the task.
subjective: I think, I hope objective: Julius think, Harris did not like, Death it suck
certainty: have to, I hope frequency: most obligation: should, maybe he should, have to die inclination: like, want
feelings, attitudes: bad, funny, mad, miss furture, (unfortunate), nice
idioms, humour: past away, suck, kid, soon(er) or later names: Harris, Clementine, Julius
The use of informal language (suck, kid) is not appropriate for this genre, as formal language is expected. The student uses modality and mental processes to speculate on the events in the original text and to reflect and respond personally. These choices are appropriate in this context.
Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
abstractions: Death
time, place, manner: It was Sunday before Harris interview, almost the time
non-human: Death human: I, Julius, Clementine Helen and Julius, The
doctor, Harris, People
The first two sentences foreground the topic of the text and introduce the content of the rest of the text.
A basic understanding of the schematic structure of this genre is evident although this is not reflected in the layout i.e. no paragraphs, one topic sentence.
primary: mainly simple present and past: is, was, secondary: had died, is die
active: appropriate for the context
spelling: generally accurate although some difficulties with nominalisations is evident: coolness, reprehensible, miss furture
punctuation: generally accurate although some difficulties with punctuation of compound and complex sentences is evident
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Scale 5 Scale 6
GENRE: Outcome 5.1Communicates in a narrow range of situations, constructing very brief texts.
Outcome 6.1Communicates in a small range of contexts, constructing brief texts and showing some ability to reflect on genres ion a very elementary way.
Text in Context
begins to identify independently the purposes and common features of elementary genres
participates in short predictable spoken exchanges begins to construct independently very brief recounts,
descriptions and procedures reads a range of everyday texts and writes very brief
examples of the most familiar: advertising posters reads clearly illustrated sequential explanations and
draws short examples with simple labelling
begins to reflect on the purposes, structure and common features of a small range of elementary genres
participates in casual conversation about familiar topics with familiar people
constructs collaboratively short oral and written texts organises with some confidence brief written texts in a
logical order begins to independently construct very brief examples
of elementary genres reads longer clearly illustrated sequential explanations
and begins to write and draw brief examples
Language demonstrates understanding of the organisation and discriminating features of a greater range of basic genres: narratives, recounts, procedures, reports
constructs elementary examples of logically organised genres with little dependence on scaffolding: uses proformas with some confidence
expands information using linking conjunctions - and, then, but, or so; binding conjunctions - because
uses small range of reference items (definite article and pronouns) accurately most of the time in spoken texts and with some accuracy in short written texts
identifies a range of discriminating features of a small range of elementary genres
uses a limited range of significant language features that organise a text
expands information using linking conjunctions - and, then, but, or so; binding conjunctions – because, when, before, after
uses a range of reference items (definite article and pronouns) accurately most of the time in spoken texts and written texts
FIELD: Outcome 5.2Understands and uses a small range of vocabulary and grammatical items to form basic word groups and phrases constructing personally relevant fields, and uses a limited range of technical vocabulary.
Outcome 6.2Understands and uses a wide range of vocabulary and grammatical items to form short word groups and phrases constructing fields beyond the personally relevant, and uses a narrow range of technical vocabulary.
Text in Context
uses confidently a small range of commonsense, vocabulary
uses vocabulary that is developing knowledge of the community and other personally relevant topics such as leisure activities
uses with some confidence a limited range of technical vocabulary when constructing increasingly complex personally relevant topics
demonstrates understanding of technical vocabulary when constructing a narrow range of educational topics
uses commonsense everyday vocabulary confidently with peers
uses with some confidence a narrow range of vocabulary that develops their knowledge of the community and other personally relevant topics
begins to use a limited range of technical vocabulary constructing a small range of educational fields
demonstrates a tentative understanding of vocabulary beyond immediate personal and school experiences
Language uses small range of phrases of location and understands wider range including how something happened
expands vocabulary by exploring numbers (first, a half of), describers (big, bright), classifiers (mountain bike), prepositions (beside, by)
uses a small range of comparatives of one syllable adjectives
uses a small range of vocabulary expressing actions, feelings and attitudes, phrases giving circumstances
expands short noun groups using numbers (a quarter of), describers (big, beautiful), classifiers (state government), short prepositional phrases as qualifiers
uses a range of comparative of regular two syllable adjectives ending in y and chooses isolated three syllable and irregular examples
uses a narrow range of technical vocabulary uses a limited range of common nominalizations begins to use simple direct speech and the simplest
reported speech
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Scale 5 Scale 6
TENOR: Outcome 5.3Participates appropriately in a narrow range of familiar, supportive contexts, using with some accuracy a narrow range of basic grammatical structures.
Outcome 6.3 Recognises that communication varies according to context and participates appropriately in a narrow range of familiar, supportive contexts using with some accuracy a small range of basic grammatical structures.
Text in Context
participates in classroom discourse conventions: raising hand, takes turn, speaks at appropriate volume
chooses independently a narrow range of basic ways of expressing statements, questions, offers, commands and uses them with some accuracy
follows instructions with little dependence on non-verbal elements gives commands appropriately
experiments with some confidence with new expressions in familiar, supportive contexts, especially to play with language
participates appropriately in classroom conventions: stands to present views and responds appropriately to views different from own
demonstrates a basic understanding of variation according to context: reflects with increased confidence on the language choices appropriate in a letter to a friend or when speaking to a younger child
maintains the appropriate degree of formality in a limited range of more formal less supportive contexts
begins to explore critically how interpersonal meanings can be made in different situations
Language understands a wide range of commands good awareness of intonation patterns of basic spoken
statements, questions and offers chooses formulaic polite expressions appropriately uses a small range of evaluative vocabulary to express
feelings and attitudes plays with language in elementary ways for humorous
effects uses a range of grammatical items: auxiliaries (did,
can, will), prepositions (out, under, above, between), adverbs (really, many)
recognises a variety of statements, questions, offers and commands
uses appropriate intonation patterns of basic statements, questions and offers when speaking and reading aloud, drawing on knowledge of punctuation marks
uses a range of evaluative language to express feelings and attitudes
explores how vocabulary is linked to the tenor of a context plays with language in a narrow range of ways for humorous effects
understands a small range of language elements expressing certainty and obligation and uses appropriately a limited range
MODE: Outcome 5.4Constructs a narrow range of spoken texts located in the immediate context and begins to construct very brief texts (spoken, written and visual) in the immediate context.
Outcome 6.4Identifies and compares in elementary ways, the features of spoken, written and visual texts, and constructs a narrow range of brief written and visual texts that generally unfold coherently through their simplicity.
Text in Context
begins to communicate appropriately some of the time when the situation involves another medium
reads with some confidence a wide range of visual texts and begins to draw a small range of examples
chooses simple sentence beginnings and, with support, an occasional phrase of time or place at the beginning of recounts or narratives
identifies the patterns in what is placed at the front in a genre and demonstrates a limited understanding that various grammatical elements can be foregrounded
communicates appropriately some of the time using various media
reads with confidence a range of handwritten texts identifies the patterns in what is placed at the front in a
genre and demonstrates an elementary understanding of which grammatical elements can be foregrounded in a given genre
identifies and discusses in elementary ways the meanings made in a range of multimodal texts
Language reads aloud own or collaboratively constructed writing and begins to read others’ texts with some confidence
chooses very short basic phrases of time and place at the beginning of recounts or narratives and action verbs at the beginning of the steps in procedures
demonstrates control of primary tenses and their formation for the most common regular verbs but inconsistent control of secondary tenses
spells accurately common words learned in the classroom and spells others based on their own pronunciation or other patterns
writes so that texts are generally legible and demonstrates understanding of basic punctuation
reads texts with different handwriting, font and case and basic dialogue appropriately
chooses short, basic phrases of time and place at the beginning of recounts or narratives
demonstrates control of primary tenses and past tense form of most common irregular verbs and begins to gain control of secondary tenses
spells with greater accuracy most words learned in the classroom and spells others based less on their own pronunciation and more on visual patterns
writes so that texts are clearly legible begins to use basic punctuation appropriately
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALE 5 AND SCALE 6AS EVIDENT IN THE STUDENTS’ SETS OF EVIDENCE
GENRE:Quin’s sets of evidence show that he is able to expand sentences using a range of linking and binding conjunctions. (Scale 5) Aaron uses a greater range of binding conjunctions. (Scale 6)
FIELD:Quin and Aaron both expand nominal groups by using describers and classifiers. (Scale 5) Aaron uses some short prepositional phrases as qualifiers in nominal groups more often and with greater accuracy. (Scale 6)
TENOR:The development of Quin’s understanding of tenor is evident in his sets of evidence. He uses a narrow range of evaluative language in his personal recount (Scale 4), a slightly broader range in his conversation with his teacher (Scale 5) and a broader range again in his letter of advice (Scale 6). Aaron and Quin are both able to use a small range of language elements expressing modality. (Scale 6)
MODE:Quin uses primary tenses with some accuracy but demonstrates inconsistent control of secondary tenses. (Scale 5) Aaron has better control of primary tenses and uses more secondary tense with some success. (Scale 6)
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Jimmy : DESCRIPTION 1
The room which I’m living in Adelaide is very comfortable. Every morning the sunshine can cover the whole
room through the window. The single bed are located in the centre of room. There are two lamps at the each
side of bed. The desk is behind my bed. On my desk, there are several books on it. There’re no more things in
my room, because it’s not too large to have a capacity of other things.
In hometown, my room is very large, but also very disorderly. I am not good at organized my things. So furniture
in my room is simple. in order to afraid me braking or destroying bed. A bed is in the corner. As a student the
most important things are books so the most of room belongs to them. They are stocked in a big bookstore.
Although they’re located in different conntries, I like both of them still.
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Evidence for ScalingJimmy Description 1
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
conjunctions: Although
time, place, manner: The room which I’m living in Adelaide, In home town
reference items: it, my, I, they, both of them, the, me
vocabulary patterns: synonyms: bed/desk/Furniture,
destroying/braking- antonyms: disorderly/organized composition: room: window, bed, desk,
bookstore (bookshelf)
linking: but, so, or binding: because, Although, in order to
Followed a model to structure the task into paragraphs.
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.no more things in my room, The room which I’m living in Adelaide, the whole room, the centre of room, a capacity of other things, the most important things
most important, different conntries (countries)
capacity
action: living, cover, located, organized, braking, destroying, to afraid (avoid), stocked (stacked)
mental (sensing): like relational: is, are, to have, belongs
phrase: in order to, as a student dependent clause: because it’s not too large,
Although they’re located in different conntries (countries), So furniture in my room is simple, in order to afraid (avoid) me braking or destroying bed
when: Every morning where: through the window, in the centre of the
room, on it, in the corner, in different countries, at the each side of bed, behind, on my desk, in my room, In hometown, in a big bookstore
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I
am sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The text is a series of statements about the field, as appropriate for the genre.
subjective: I like both, I am not good at, As a student
objective: The room which I’m living in, There’s no more things
frequency: still inclination: like
feelings, attitudes: comfortable, very large, very disorderly, not good, afraid, simple
names: Adelaide
Student is positioned as expert in the field and this is appropriate for the context.
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Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused
by the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and
visual patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual
images, sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
cause: As a student, Although, So time, place, manner: On my desk, In home town,
Every morning non-human: The room which I’m living in, furniture, A
bed, the most of room The single bed, The desk, They (books)
human: I
Circumstances of location and items within the room are foregrounded. The foregrounding is appropriate in this context.
The foregrounding gives a reasonable indication of each paragraph’s content. The opening sentences in the first two paragraphs are really elaboration and not topic sentences.
primary: mainly simple present tense secondary: I’m living, are located, are stocked
(stacked)Some difficulties with subject/verb agreement are
evident.
Passive voice used on three occasions, but inaccurately once. “The single bed are located”
spelling: generally accurate, misspelt two common words (countries/stacked)
punctuation: commas used inconsistently, some difficulties punctuating compound and complex sentences
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Jimmy : DESCRIPTION 2
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Jimmy : DESCRIPTION 2
Now I’m sitting at the corner of the classroom beside the window. The first thing I can see is the white board
and the black board. Several gramma words on it many notices on the notice board at the right side of black
board. A world map is located at the left side of the white board. Not like China, desks and chairs are divided
into several groups. Four people are grouped in one group. There at large number of people, no many noisy
sounds. On the contrary, the environment is not only comfortable but also quiet. The classroom’s floor is
covered with the various colour. On the wall, there are some beautiful posters which describe the different
country’s people. There’re sevreal lights and one fan on the roof because air conditioning instead of the fan.
We don’t have to afraid feeling hot. This is a small but beautiful classroom.
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Evidence for ScalingJimmy Description 2
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Although written as one paragraph, the text could be read as three paragraphs: Description of physical environment; comparison with Chinese classroom; return to description of physical environment.
noun groups: The classroom’s floor time, place, manner: Now, Not like China
layout: Handwritten as one paragraph
reference items: I, we, This, it, the, a
vocabulary patterns: synonyms: classroom/environment,
divided/grouped antonyms: noisy/quiet composition: window, blackboard, floor, wall classification: air conditioning, fan
conjunctions: Not like, On the contrary
linking: and, but, instead of binding: because relative clauses: posters which describe projection: We don’t have to (be) afraid (of) non-finite: feeling hot
Used most of vocabulary for the parts of the room on a diagram which was provided to the class.
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Field:Language
for
expressin
g ideas
and
experienc
es
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has, consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.the corner of the classroom beside the window, Several gramma(r) words, many notices, the noticeboard at the right side of (the) black board, A world map, the left side of the white board, several groups, (a) large number of people, no(t) many noisy sounds, The classroom’s floor, the various colour(s), some beautiful posters which describe the different country’s people, a small but beautiful classroom
Not like China, no(t) many, not only comfortable but also quiet
action: sitting, located, divided, covered, describe mental (sensing): see, feeling relational: are, is, have
verbal groups: don’t have to phrasal verbs: are on it, are divided into, (be) afraid
(of)
dependent clause: because (there is) air conditioning instead of the fan
when: now where: at the corner of the classroom, beside the
window, on it, on the notice board, at the right side of (the) black board, at the left side of the white board, on the wall, on the roof
how: into several groups, not like China, with the various colour
classroom, blackboard, whiteboard, gramma(r), notices, notice board, desks, environment
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The text is a series of statements to describe the room. Appropriate in this context.
subjective: The first thing I can see objective: Several grammar words, Not like (Unlike)
China, A world map is located,
obligation: don’t have to
feelings, attitudes: noisy, comfortable, quiet, beautiful, not only, small but beautiful
The text moves between subjective and objective descriptions and includes some reflection based on personal experience. Objective tenor is more appropriate for a factual text.
7/8
Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
time, place, manner: Now, On the wall, Not like China, On the contrary
non-human: The first thing I can see, Several grammar words, A world map, The classroom’s floor, This (classroom)
human: Four people, We
Sentences were foregrounded in a variety of ways that are appropriate to the task. Place could have been foregrounded more often.
The text needs paragraphing and clearer topic sentences that guide the reader. The description of the various physical elements of the rooms is interspersed with appraisal of the room’s conduciveness to learning. It ends with an overall, but brief, final statement.
primary: am sitting, can see, are divided, is, are, describe
Generally accurate use of primary tenses although there are some omissions. Secondary tenses have not been used, as appropriate for this context.
Used passive voice accurately on several occasions. This was appropriate to the task.
The handwriting is not immediately clear. In particular the formation of “u” and “n” and “I” and “r” are confusing to the reader. Spelling is accurate with the exception of “several” on one occasion. Full stops, commas and apostrophes are used correctly.
7/8
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Jimmy : NARRATIVE
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Jimmy: Narrative
Ant’s Story
Have you heard ant’s world? Let me introduce a person “Harry”. A funny ant, he can show you the life about
himself and his story.
Unlike on the ground the environment doesn’t have fresh air, no sunshine, without rapid stream. So Harry
always like staying on the ground and far away his friends and family.
One day, he sat under the tree to be in a daze. He won’t be a common people like his friend which everyday
just do the same thing in whole day He hate doing that. He always said. “If I were Human being. I’m willing to
do everything”
Suddenly a strange idea occured in his brain, “Right go to the city in which people worked in. To see how the
human beings to live and do.” Said he. Yes, he is successful.
When he arrived in the city he change his mind quickly. Because wherever he went, he can’t dodge people’s
feet. Despite trying his best, he can’t hear everything still. There’re so many cars and endless noisy.
During the trip, he realize which one is better between his country and human’s. Unfortunately he was injured.
He lost one of his arm and another one is in plaster.
He feel sorry, not only his family but also for all over the people. He said he loves his family and his own
country whatever it is rich or poor, big or small, interesting or boring. “It’s the sure life”. said he.
I think he right. You should respect the surroundings, because it belongs to you. Thank you for reading.
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Evidence for ScalingJimmy Narrative
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Title, orientation, complication, resolution, evaluation and coda present.
rhetorical questions: Have you heard ant’s world? conjunctions: When noun groups: Ant’s Story (title), He, I time, place, manner: Unlike on the ground, One day,
Suddenly, During the trip,
layout: title, paragraphs
reference items: you, me, he, himself, his, I, it vocabulary patterns:
synonyms: a person/a funny ant people/friends and family/human beings, environment/surroundings/country, realize/think
- antonyms: hate/loves, rich/poor, big/small, interesting/boring
- composition: the environment, fresh air, sunshine, rapid stream
linking: and, but also, so binding: because, when, despite, if relative clauses: his friend which everyday just do
the same thing, the city in which people worked in
projection: I think (that) non-finite clauses: Despite trying his best,
Minimal scaffolding apart from conversation about structure.
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.a funny ant, the life about himself and his story, his friend which everyday just do the same thing, a human being, the city in which people worked in, a strange idea, so many cars, endless noisy (noise), the sure life
better, like his friends, best, no sunshine, without rapid stream, not only … but also …
the surroundings, the environment, rapid stream, endless noisy (noise)
action: introduce, show, sat, do, go, to live, arrived, dodged, injured, trying, lost, staying, reading
mental (sensing): heard, like, hate, change, realize, hear, feel, think, love, respect, occur(r)ed
saying: said relational: is, was, have, belongs verbal groups: have you heard, let me introduce,
willing to do phrasal verbs: to be in a daze
dependent clause: Because wherever he went, because it belongs, Despite trying his best
when: always, One day, suddenly, still, During the trip
where: on the ground, under the tree, in his brain, to the city in which people worked in, far away (from) his friends and family, in plaster, wherever
how: unlike, quickly, like his friend which every day just do the same thing in whole day
environment, sunshine, stream, city, surroundings
direct: He always said. ”If I were …to do everything”, “Right go to the city in which people … to live and do.” Said he., “It’s the sure life”. Said he.
reported: He said he loves his own family
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The narrative begins with a rhetorical question followed by an offer. There follows a series of statements. Direct speech is used to convey Harry’s thoughts and decisions which are realised by a command: “Right go to the city … live and do.” Said he.
subjective: I think
certainty: Right, can’t dodge, can’t hear, the sure life frequency: always obligation: should respect inclination: willing
feelings, attitudes: funny, strange, successful, endless, Unfortunately, not only
names: Harry
Vocabulary begins to build some sympathy for the character. Use of a narrator is a simple and appropriate device. There is a change in tenor in final paragraph – the writer has stepped out of the role of narrator, given a personal opinion and thanked the reader. The text would be more successful without the final paragraph.
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Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
cause: Because where ever he went, time, place, manner: Unlike on the ground, One day,
Suddenly, When he arrived, Despite trying his best, During the trip
non-human: a strange idea, It’s (his family and his own country)
human: He, I, You action verbs: Let me, go, Said, Thank you
Foregrounding of temporal conjunctions and human elements is appropriate. Circumstances of location in time and manner used at the beginning of paragraphs effectively sequence the events and this is appropriate for a narrative text. The use of “said he” on two occasions demonstrates an elementary understanding of the effect of marked theme in literary texts.
Rhetorical question was a simplistic way to begin the narrative. Temporal conjunctions helped link the series of events that worked towards a resolution.Text unfolds with orientation, complication, resolution and coda present.
primary: heard, introduce, show, sat, hate(d), said secondary: hate(d) doing that, was injuredPrimary tenses are accurately constructed although difficulties with appropriate choice and use of tenses in narrative genre are evident.
Handwriting was sometimes difficult to read, direct speech was not correctly punctuated or set out
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 6 AND 7
Scale 6 Scale 7
GENRE: Outcome 6.1Communicates in a small range of contexts, constructing brief texts and showing some ability to reflect on genres ion a very elementary way.
Outcome 7.1Communicates in a range of social situations and a narrow range of educational genres, and reflects on these in an elementary way.
Text in Context
begins to reflect on the purposes, structure and common features of a small range of elementary genres
participates in casual conversation about familiar topics with familiar people
constructs collaboratively short oral and written texts organises with some confidence brief written texts in a
logical order begins to independently construct very brief examples
of elementary genres reads longer clearly illustrated sequential explanations
and begins to write and draw brief examples
begins to reflect on the purposes, structure and common features of a range of elementary genres
participates with some confidence in casual conversation about familiar topics with familiar people
constructs with some confidence oral and written examples of elementary genres having a number of stages or a series of events
reads longer, more complex illustrated sequential explanations and begins to write and draw brief examples with confidence
constructs brief oral and written arguments organises the meanings in short, simple paragraphs writes wimple, repetitive poems based less on
modelled language
Language identifies a range of discriminating features of a small range of elementary genres
uses a limited range of significant language features that organise a text
expands information using linking conjunctions - and, then, but, or so; binding conjunctions – because, when, before, after
uses a range of reference items (definite article and pronouns) accurately most of the time in spoken texts and written texts
identifies a wide range of discriminating features of elementary features
identifies and uses a limited range of significant linguistic features that organises a text
expands information using linking conjunctions – and, but, or, so and then; binding conjunctions – if, when, after
uses a range of reference items accurately most of the time in spoken texts and reads reference items accurately in longer texts
FIELD: Outcome 6.2Understands and uses a wide range of vocabulary and grammatical items to form short word groups and phrases constructing fields beyond the personally relevant, and uses a narrow range of technical vocabulary.
Outcome 7.2Understands and uses common vocabulary that constructs everyday, non-technical fields and has a tentative control of a narrow range of technical fields.
Text in Context
uses commonsense everyday vocabulary confidently with peers
uses with some confidence a narrow range of vocabulary that develops their knowledge of the community and other personally relevant topics
begins to use a limited range of technical vocabulary constructing a small range of educational fields
demonstrates a tentative understanding of vocabulary beyond immediate personal and school experiences
communicates confidently with peers in informal contexts about a range of personally relevant topics
demonstrates a limited understanding of vocabulary that develops their knowledge beyond personal and school experiences
begins to use a narrow range of technical vocabulary constructing a range of educational fields
demonstrates understanding of more than one meaning of a wide range of familiar words
uses English student dictionaries and begins to use a thesaurus
Language uses a small range of vocabulary expressing actions, feelings and attitudes, phrases giving circumstances
expands short noun groups using numbers (a quarter of), describers (big, beautiful), classifiers (state government), short prepositional phrases as qualifiers
uses a range of comparative of regular two syllable adjectives ending in y and chooses isolated three syllable and irregular examples
uses a narrow range of technical vocabulary uses a limited range of common nominalisations begins to use simple direct speech and the simplest
reported speech
uses a range of vocabulary expressing actions, participants within noun groups and phrases giving circumstances
constructs noun groups using a narrow range of describers (new man) classifiers (new security man) and short prepositional phrases as qualifiers
uses a wide range of comparatives of regular two syllable adjectives ending in y, a small range of three syllable examples and irregular examples
uses a small range of common technical vocabulary understands and uses a narrow range of common
nominalisations uses with some accuracy, simple direct and reported
speech understands the idea of acronyms such as Qantas
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Scale 6 Scale 7
TENOR: Outcome 6.3 Recognises that communication varies according to context and participates appropriately in a narrow range of familiar, supportive contexts using with some accuracy a small range of basic grammatical structures.
Outcome 7.3Participates with some measure of confidence and critical awareness in a small range of familiar contexts, using a small range of grammatical structures accurately.
Text in Context
participates appropriately in classroom conventions: stands to present views and responds appropriately to views different from own
demonstrates a basic understanding of variation according to context: reflects with increased confidence on the language choices appropriate in a letter to a friend or when speaking to a younger child
maintains the appropriate degree of formality in a limited range of more formal less supportive contexts
begins to explore critically how interpersonal meanings can be made in different situations
begins to take on the role of welcoming, introducing and thanking speakers and reads aloud simple, formal language
chooses and uses accurately a small range of basic ways of expressing questions, offers and commands
understands and uses a range of language elements that express modality in a narrow range of formal and informal situations
begins to use a strictly limited range of idioms with some confidence
demonstrates with increased confidence a critical awareness of variation according to context.
Language recognises a variety of statements, questions, offers and commands
uses appropriate intonation patterns of basic statements, questions and offers when speaking and reading aloud, drawing on knowledge of punctuation marks
uses a range of evaluative language to express feelings and attitudes
explores how vocabulary is linked to the tenor of a context plays with language in a narrow range of ways for humorous effects
understands a small range of language elements expressing certainty and obligation and uses appropriately a limited range
experiments with how meanings are varied by changing intonation, meaning and volume when reading aloud
uses a range of yes / no questions and wh- questions (Who did you go on the boat with?) with some accuracy
chooses with some accuracy elementary expressions of modality such as could, may perhaps
begins to understand how vocabulary choice is linked to context, such as abdomen, stomach, tummy, belly
chooses a strictly limited range of colloquial and idiomatic language
plays with the language in a small range of ways for humorous effect
uses a small range of evaluative vocabulary to express feelings and attitudes
MODE: Outcome 6.4Identifies and compares in elementary ways, the features of spoken, written and visual texts, and constructs a narrow range of brief written and visual texts that generally unfold coherently through their simplicity.
Outcome 7.4Identifies and compares in elementary ways the features of spoken, written and visual texts and constructs a small range of short written and visual texts that unfold coherently through their simplicity.
Text in Context
communicates appropriately some of the time using various media
reads with confidence a range of handwritten texts identifies the patterns in what is placed at the front in a
genre and demonstrates an elementary understanding of which grammatical elements can be foregrounded in a given genre
identifies and discusses in elementary ways the meanings made in a range of multimodal texts
identifies what is placed at the front or foregrounded in a genre and begins to use foregrounding independently and appropriately in a limited way
communicates appropriately some of the time using another medium such as a telephone
identifies and discusses in elementary ways the meanings made in a range of multimodal texts, discussing for example the links between illustrations and verbal texts
Language reads texts with different handwriting, font and case and basic dialogue appropriately
chooses short, basic phrases of time and place at the beginning of recounts or narratives
demonstrates control of primary tenses and past tense form of most common irregular verbs and begins to gain control of secondary tenses
spells with greater accuracy most words learned in the classroom and spells others based less on their own pronunciation and more on visual patterns
writes so that texts are clearly legible
begins to use phrases of time at the beginning of recounts, actions at the beginning of procedures and personal pronouns in practical reports
demonstrates understanding of spoken language being presented in texts as quoted or reported speech
shows control of primary tenses and past tense of the most common irregular verbs
spells accurately most words learned in the classroom and uses a range of strategies such as visual pattern and word lists
demonstrates understanding of the common punctuation marks
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GENRE:Aaron uses a range of linking conjunctions to form compound sentences and the most common binding conjunctions to form complex sentences. (Scale 6) Jimmy uses a greater range of binding conjunctions. (Scale 7)
FIELD:Aaron uses comparatives and nominalisations. (Scale 6) Jimmy uses a greater range of nominalisation more accurately (Scale 7).
TENOR:Aaron has some inconsistency of tenor in his reflection, choosing informal language inappropriately. (Scale 6) Jimmy is better able to maintain the appropriate tenor in his texts and chooses vocabulary for humourous effect in his narrative. (Scale 7)
MODE:Aaron and Jimmy both use basic punctuation appropriately. (Scale 6) Jimmy understands that spoken language can be presented in texts using direct and reported speech and experiments with speech marks . (Scale 7)
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WHAT’S YOUR POINT OF VIEW?
Write a persuasive letter to your classmates in which you express your point of view about the benefits of playing sport and exercise. Support your logical argument with reasons and evidence.
To Class Mates
I think that sports/Exercise is a big part of a persons life and that every
body should play or exercise more then 3 times a week.
The reason is because I known a couple of people they did sport
about 2-3 times a week and they were not over weight, they could
run fast. So if you don’t do sport or exercise all the Food you eat
you will not be able to burn of the fat in the food.
The other reason is because you might like the Sport and what to
get good at the sport. That sport might need 2 times a week
training. So that will be all you need.
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Evidence for Scaling
Paul: PERSUASIVE LETTER (ARGUMENT)
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; non finite clauses topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
The text is an argument in favour of the benefits of sport and exercise. The student has introduced the topic in one sentence and given two reasons in favour of his point of view, each of which is written in paragraph form. The text is written as a letter to classmates and therefore begins with a salutation.
noun groups: I, The reason, The other reason
layout: Salutation present, paragraphs clearly separated
reference items: I, a, every body (everybody), the, they, you, That sport, that, all
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: sports/exercise words that go together: 3 times a week, 2-3
times a week word sets: sport, exercise, play, run, training,
burn … fat
linking: and, or binding: because, so, if
projection: I think that
Written independently
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
a big part of a persons life, The reason, a couple of people, all the food you eat, The other reason, the fat in the food
more then (than)
exercise, over weight (overweight), training
action: play, exercise, run, do, need, did mental (sensing): think, known (know), like, what
(want) relational: is, were verbal groups: will be, will not be able phrasal verbs: to burn of (off), to get good at
nouns: The reason, The other reason dependent clause: So if you don’t do sport or
exercise, So that will be all you need, because I know(n) a couple of people, because you might like the sport
when: more then (than) 3 times a week, 2-3 times a week, 2 times a week
where: in the food how: fast
sport, exercise, over weight (overweight), training, fat
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Tenor: Language for
interacting with
others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The texts is a series of statements expressed in simple and compound sentences.
subjective: I think, I known (know), If you don’t do sport
objective: The reason is, The other reason isThe statements made about the topic are expressed subjectively in most instances.
certainty: think, will not be able, might, will be frequency: more then (than) 3 times a week, 2-3 times
a week, 2 times a week obligation: should play, need inclination: like, what (want)
feelings, attitudes: fast, good idioms, humour: to burn of (off) the fat
The writer is positioned as an authority on the topic, however subjective examples are used to support the argument.
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Mode:
Language for
creating spoken
and written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
abstractions: The reason, The other reason
cause: So if you don’t do sport, So that will be
non-human: That sport human: I
The student has begun to use abstractions to foreground the argument in each paragraph and used a sentence to introduce the argument. Text lacks a conclusion.
Although statement of position is present, the reasons elaborated on in the paragraphs are not signalled in the introduction. The student is able to support the argument with reasons and evidence and makes simple links between the arguments, reasons and evidence.
primary: is, did, will, like, will bePrimary tenses are used accurately and appropriately in most cases.
Active voice
Handwriting is legible and spelling of everyday vocabulary is accurate. Full stop and commas are used, although some difficulties punctuating compound sentences are evident. A limited understanding and use of letter-writing conventions is evident.
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Paul: ARGUMENT ESSAY
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Essay
Australia would be better off as a Republic
I believe Australia would be better off as a Republic. If we were to become a Republic we would need an Australian leader like a Aboriginal because they were the first/original culture to roam the whole of Australia.
Yes I believe that Australian’s should stand on our own two feet. We should not be ruled by the Queen who lives in Britain.
“… we have progressed and Grown.”(The case of voting Yes)
The Queen has got to much on her hands looking after Britain and Australia + her family. The Queen should only look after Britain.
“Its time to have owr own head of state”(IBid)
because we have grown up and our own people should have the right to vote for a Australian leader.
Lots of Australian families think that they will loss
“It would not change the number of public holidays”
but nothing will change only the way people look at us as a Republic Nation. Australia will also continue to compete in the commonwealth Games. That is why most the time when Australia’s vote they vote for it to stay like it is now.
Yes I think Australia would be better of as a Republic. The Queen would not take us first if we were introuble and Britain would come first not us.
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Evidence for Scaling Paul: ARGUMENT ESSAY
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; non finite clauses topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars.
composition (whole part): tooth: enamel. conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Text has a title which states the argument, followed by paragraphs that support the statement of position. A conclusion is also present.
noun groups: Australia, I, The Queen, Lots of Australian families
layout: The text is handwritten with title and line spaces between paragraphs. The student has left a line space between topic sentences and the rest of the paragraph and is not yet clear about the conventions for including quotations in texts.
reference items: I, we, a, an, they, the, our, her, it, our own, that, us
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: Aboriginal/first/original
culture, leader/the Queen/head of state/Australian leader
words that go together: head of state, too much on her hands, better off, looking after, grown up
word sets: Republic, head of state, leader, vote, change, ruled, the Queen, Republic(an) Nation; Britain, the Queen
classification: Britain, Australia
linking: and, also, but binding: if, when, because, like, only relative clauses: the Queen who lives in Britain projection: I believe that Australian’s should stand,
Lots of Australian families think that they will loss (lose)
non-finite clauses: to roam the whole of Australia, looking after Britain and Australia + her family, the right to vote for a (an) Australian leader, to compete in the commonwealth Games
Student copied note on how to write an essay and appears to have used those notes to construct this text.
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
an Australian leader like a (an) Aboriginal, the first/original culture, the whole of Australia, our own two feet, the Queen who lives in Britain, owr (our) own head of state, the right to vote for a (an) Australian leader, Lots of Australian families, the number of public holidays, the way people look at us, The case of voting Yes
better, most, the case
leader
action: roam, lives, progressed, grown, mental (sensing): believe, need, think relational: become, were, has (got), have, stay, is verbal groups: were to become, would need,
should stand, should not be ruled, should have, will loss (lose), would not change, will change, continue to compete, would not take, would come
phrasal verbs: look after, be better off, have grown up, to vote for
phrase: That is why dependent clause: If we were to become a
Republic, because they were the first/original culture…, because we have grown up, when Australia’s vote, if we were introuble (in trouble)
when: most (of) the time, when Australia’s vote, now, first
where: on our own two feet, in Britain, in the commonwealth Games, in trouble
how: as a Republic, like a (an) Aboriginal, as a Republic Nation
stand on our own two feet, too much on her hands
Australia, Republic, leader, Aboriginal, first/original culture, ruled, the Queen, Britain, head of state, the right to vote, public holidays, Republic Nation, commonwealth Games
direct: Three direct quotes are used although referencing does not clearly indicate the original source of the quoted text
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Tenor: Language for
interacting with
others
speech functions: statements, question, offers, commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The text is a series of statements arguing the case. The use of rhetorical questions would be appropriate in this context.
subjective: I believe, Yes I think, Lots of Australian families think
objective: Australia will also continue to compete
certainty: believe, think, would be, were to become, will change, would not change, would not take us, would come first
frequency: most (of) the time obligation: would need, should stand, should not be
ruled, should have
feelings, attitudes: yes, better off, first/original culture, our own two feet, too much, only, nothing, change, loss (lose), trouble
idioms, colloquialisms: stand on our own two feet, to (too) much on her hands
cultural references: Commonwealth Games names: The Queen
The tenor is subjective and inclusive of the reader as a fellow Australian. This is appropriate for an argument of this kind, although the use of Yes, is more appropriate for a speech (where there is less distance between the speaker and the audience), than it is for a written text.
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Mode:
Language for
creating spoken
and written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
cause: If we were to become a Republic, That is why non-human: Australia human: I, We, The Queen, Lots of Australian families
The sentences are foregrounded mainly with human participants and on two occasions the sentences begin with Yes. This choice is less appropriate for a written text than it is for a spoken text.
The statement of position clearly signals the writer’s point of view and allows the reader to predict the content of the paragraphs that follow. The arguments are signalled through the use of simple topic sentences, although the formatting used by the student separates these from the rest of the paragraph.
primary: primary tenses used accurately and appropriately
secondary: secondary tenses are used accurately and appropriately
mainly active voice – passive voice constructed accurately and used appropriately on one occasion
Basic punctuation is used accurately most of the time. The student uses apostrophes inaccurately and there is no use of commas. The student spells most words accurately and uses quotations with close to accurate punctuation.
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 7 AND 8
Scale 7 Scale 8
GENRE: Outcome 7.1Communicates in a range of social situations and a narrow range of educational genres, and reflects on these in an elementary way.
Outcome 8.1Communicates in a wide range of social situations and a narrow range of educational genres, and reflects on these in an elementary way.
Text in Context
begins to reflect on the purposes, structure and common features of a range of elementary genres
participates with some confidence in casual conversation about familiar topics with familiar people
constructs with some confidence oral and written examples of elementary genres having a number of stages or a series of events
reads longer, more complex illustrated sequential explanations and begins to write and draw brief examples with confidence
constructs brief oral and written arguments organises the meanings in short, simple paragraphs writes simple, repetitive poems based less on modeled
language
reflects with support on the purposes, structure and common features of a range of elementary genres
participates with greater confidence in casual conversations about familiar topics with familiar people
constructs oral and written examples of the elementary genres having a number of stages or series of events
reads long sequential explanations such as life-cycles and writes and draws simple examples with confidence
constructs oral and written recounts, short oral and written narratives, summaries and arguments
independently constructs story genres with a storyline and events related to the resolution of a problem
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Language identifies a wide range of discriminating features of elementary features, such as action verbs in narratives and reports
identifies and uses a limited range of significant linguistic features that organise a text
expands information using linking conjunctions - and, but, or, so and then; binding conjunctions – if, when, after
understands and uses a range of reference items accurately most of the time in spoken texts and reads reference items accurately in longer texts
identifies and uses a limited range of features that organise a text, such as sub headings in a report, a new line for a change of speaker or phrases of time and place
identifies clauses and expands the information in a text by joining the clauses using common binding conjunctions such as because, if, since, when and a small range of relative pronouns
understands and uses a range of reference items appropriately and accurately most of the time in spoken and short written texts, reading reference items accurately in longer texts
FIELD: Outcome 7.2Understands and uses common vocabulary that constructs everyday, non-technical fields and has a tentative control of a narrow range of technical fields.
Outcome 8.2Understands and uses common vocabulary that constructs everyday, non-technical fields of personal and community interest and has a tentative control of a small range of technical fields.
Text in Context
communicates confidently with peers in informal contexts about a range of personally relevant topics
demonstrates a limited understanding of vocabulary that develops their knowledge beyond personal and school experiences
begins to use a narrow range of technical vocabulary constructing a range of educational fields
demonstrates understanding of more than one meaning of a wide range of familiar words
uses English student dictionaries and begins to use a thesaurus
communicates confidently about familiar fields with peers informal contexts, remaining unsure of some field-specific vocabulary
demonstrates a tentative control of vocabulary beyond personal and school experiences
chooses appropriately from a narrow range of vocabulary to make delicate meanings
writes and retells simple descriptive texts chooses to use direct or reported speech appropriately uses a thesaurus with some confidence
Language uses a range of vocabulary expressing actions, participants within noun groups and phrases giving circumstances
constructs noun groups using a narrow range of describers ( new man) classifiers (new security man) and short prepositional phrases as qualifiers
uses a wide range of comparatives of regular two syllable adjectives ending in y , a small range of three syllable examples and irregular examples
uses a small range of common technical vocabulary understands and uses a narrow range of common
nominalisations uses with some accuracy, simple direct and reported
speech understands the idea of acronyms such as Qantas
uses a range of vocabulary patterns for a range of writing genres from recounts to reports
uses slightly more varied vocabulary such as verbs expressing mental process, noun groups with classifiers and describers
understands a range of common nominalisations and uses a small range of common examples
uses a range of common technical vocabulary identifies key vocabulary in spoken, written and simple
visual texts to construct a simple summary uses direct speech and simple reported speech with a
greater degree of accuracy
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TENOR: Outcome 7.3Participates with some measure of confidence and critical awareness in a small range of familiar contexts, using a small range of grammatical structures accurately.
Outcome 8.3Participates with increasing confidence and critical awareness in a range of familiar contexts using a wider range of basic grammatical structures accurately and begins to participate appropriately in a narrow range of more formal contexts.
Text in Context
begins to take on the role of welcoming, introducing and thanking speakers and reads aloud simple, formal language
chooses and uses accurately a small range of basic ways of expressing questions, offers and commands
understands and uses a range of language elements that express modality appropriately in a narrow range of formal and informal situations
begins to use a strictly limited range of idioms with some confidence
demonstrates with increased confidence a critical awareness of variation according to context.
begins to understand more clearly how interpersonal meanings can be made in varying ways , for example adjusts speaking to communicate with a known adult on a serious matter
invites, welcomes, introduces and thanks visiting speakers appropriately, relying heavily on collaboratively constructed models of formal oral language
chooses appropriately a small range of language expressing modality (degrees of certainty or obligation) when responding to a point of view in informal contexts
begins to use with some confidence a limited range of common colloquialisms or idioms
demonstrates critical awareness by identifying and reflecting with increased confidence on the appropriateness of linguistic choices, for example, identifies stereotypes in television commercials.
Language experiments with how meanings are varied by changing intonation, meaning and volume when reading aloud
uses a range of yes/no questions and wh-questions (Who did you go on the boat with?) with some accuracy
chooses with some accuracy elementary expressions of modality such as could, may perhaps
begins to understand how vocabulary choice is linked to context, such as abdomen, stomach, tummy, belly
chooses a strictly limited range of colloquial and idiomatic language
plays with the language in a small range of ways for humorous effect
uses a small range of evaluative vocabulary to express feelings and attitudes
begins to understand appropriate choice of questions and commands and language expressing modality when considering classroom and school behaviour, using ‘Could you come over here please’ instead of ’Come here’ with known adults
uses simple forms of modality with varying degrees of accuracy such as should, could, just, only
chooses with some confidence vocabulary appropriate for the tenor of the context
begins to understand how meanings are varied by changing intonation, tone, volume and emphasis when speaking and reading aloud
uses a range of evaluative vocabulary to express feelings and attitudes
MODE: Outcome 7.4Identifies and compares in elementary ways the features of spoken, written and visual texts and constructs a small range of short written and visual texts that unfold coherently through their simplicity.
Outcome 8.4Identifies and compares the major features of spoken, written and visual texts, and constructs a range of short spoken and written texts that unfold coherently most of the time.
Text in Context
identifies what is placed at the front or foregrounded in a genre and begins to use foregrounding independently and appropriately in a limited way
communicates appropriately some of the time using another medium such as a telephone
identifies and discusses in elementary ways the meanings made in a range of multimodal texts, discussing for example the links between illustrations and verbal texts
discusses and understands the patterns in what is foregrounded in a genre and uses this understanding most of the time
communicates simply, appropriately and accurately in general when using another medium such as a telephone
identifies and discusses with slightly more confidence in elementary ways the meanings made in a range of multimodal texts, such as in discussing made in a pie graph
demonstrates a tentative critical understanding of a range of multimodal texts, for example discussing the relationship between a visual text and an accompanying verbal text
Language begins to use phrases of time at the beginning of recounts, actions at the beginning of procedures and personal pronouns in practical reports
demonstrates understanding of spoken language being presented in texts as quoted or reported speech
shows control of primary tenses and past tense of the most common irregular verbs
spells accurately most words learned in the classroom and uses a range of strategies such as visual pattern and word lists
demonstrates understanding of the common punctuation marks
organises texts in simple logically ordered paragraphs with a topic sentence for each one
foregrounds simple repetitive patterns most of the time, ‘draw the eyes’, ‘with a fine brush, draw the eyes’ or ‘the leaf was put in the sun’
demonstrates limited control with support of punctuation marks beyond the most basic, such as speech marks, commas and apostrophes
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALE 7 AND SCALE 8AS EVIDENT IN THE STUDENTS’ SETS OF EVIDENCE
GENRE:Jimmy and Paul both use a range of binding and linking conjunctions to join clauses and expand information. (Scale 7) Both students begin to use a small range of relative pronouns with varying accuracy. (Scale 8)
FIELD:Jimmy uses and understands common vocabulary and uses a narrow range of technical vocabulary. (Scale 7) Paul uses more technical vocabulary beyond immediate personal and school experiences. (Scale 8)
TENOR:Jimmy experiments with language for humorous effect. (Scale 7) Paul demonstrates understanding of non-literal meanings and uses a limited range of non-literal expressions. (Scale 8)
MODE:Jimmy’s texts unfold coherently through their simplicity. (Scale 7) Paul organises his texts in simple, logically ordered paragraphs on the basis of a change of topic and begins to use topic sentences. (Scale 8)
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Egor : DISCUSSION
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Egor: DISCUSSION
ESL Studies
This whole essay is about a discussion the discussion is about Technology. The fact that’s being discussed in
this essay is :,,Technology will destroy the human race.”
Technology is one thing that in todays society we can’t live without. It is around us 24/7 we can’t do anything
and not need the technology. In the mornings when we stand up we turn on the light to see our way around our
houses, so basicly that means that from the first thing we do in the morning to the last thing in the evening we
require the use of technology.
There are places or people on the world that not affected by technology in any way. Those people are
indeginous people who live in rural places like in the Amazon or the Aboriginals in the desert areas of Australia.
That is imbossible for us people who live in the cities or any civilised people.
So at the moment we still controll technology but slowly the technology is taken the humans places. Factories
used to be operated only by people but at the moment more and more mashines and roboters are replacing the
people.
Scientist are trying to build roboters that replacing the humans, they could be quicker no questions and they can
do the work forever. The fear of that is that those A.I. (Artificial Intelegant) will replace and destroy the humans.
So that in the future there will be a nation of humans and A.I.
Overall the future for humans is not great the fear of robotors and A.I. is huge. To conclude the factors that are
given it is possible that technology will destroy the human race. It is not know how the future will be but there
are many factors whose the technology is taking over the humans and there positions.
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Evidence for ScalingEgor : DISCUSSION
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Discussion genre with an introduction followed by four paragraphs of discussion and a concluding paragraph.
noun groups: This whole essay conjunctions: So, Overall time, place, manner: So at the moment, To
conclude topic words: Technology, Scientist(s)
layout: handwritten as 6 paragraphs
reference items: This, a, The fact that’s being discussed in this essay, one thing, we, it, our, that, Those people, they, The factors (facts) that are given, there (their) positions
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms:morning/evening,
need/require, rural places/cities, taken(taking)/replacing, will destroy/is taking over, people/the human race, indeginous (indigenous) people/civilised people
classification: Technology: mashines (machines), roboters (robots), Artificial Intelegant (Intelligence); Indeginous (indigenous) people: Aboriginals; rural places: the Amazon, the desert areas of Australia
linking: and, but, so binding: when, so that relative clauses: indeginous (indigenous) people
who live in rural places, us people who live in the cities, many factors whose the technology is taking over the humans
projection: That means that non-finite clauses: To conclude, to see our way
around
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives:funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
The fact that’s being discussed in this essay, one thing that in today’s society we can’t live without, the first thing we do in the morning, the last thing in the evening, the use of technology, places or people on the world that are not affected by technology, indeginous (indigenous) people who live in rural places like in the Amazon, a nation of humans and A.I.
like in the Amazon, not great, huge
the use of technology, indeginous (indigenous) people, civilised people, The fear A.I. (Artificial Intelegant (Intelligence)), the factors
action: destroy, live, do, need, control(l), are replacing, can do, destroy, are given, affected
mental (sensing): to see saying: discussed relational: is, are, means, Will…be verbal groups: is taken (taking), used to be
operated, are trying to build, phrasal verbs: stand up, turn on, to conclude, is
taking over, is not know(n)
verbs: will destroy, affected, will replace
when: In the mornings, from the first thing we do in the morning to the last thing in the evening, slowly, at the moment, forever, 24/7, in the future, still
where: around us, in this essay, around our houses, in rural places, in the desert areas of Australia,
how: only by people, quicker
technology, Factories, mashines (machines), roboters (robots), Scientist, A.I. (Artificial Intelegant (Intelligence))
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The text is a series of statements which is appropriate for this genre.
subjective: we can’t live without, we require, etc objective: This whole essay, The fact that’s being
discussed
certainty: is possible, will destroy, can’t live without, can’t do anything, could be quicker, no questions, will replace and destroy, it is not know(n), impossible
frequency: forever, still obligation: require, need
feelings, attitudes: the fear, not great, huge, taking over
idioms, humour: 24/7
The writer is positioned as an authority on the topic and the topic is discussed from and objective point of view. The use of “we” is an appropriate choice as the discussion is about the relationship between technology and human beings. It is also an effective device for engaging the reader and maintaining the interest of the audience.
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Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
abstractions: This whole essay, The fact that’s being discussed, The fear of that
conjunctions: In the mornings, when we stand up time, place, manner: So at the moment, So that in the
future, To conclude non-human: Technology, Factories, the future for
humans, human: we, Those people, Scientist(s)
Introduction and conclusion are present and introduction foregrounds the topic of discussion.
Paragraphs require topic sentences. Only one side of the discussion has been put forward.
primary: mainly simple present, present continuous, some future
secondary: some past continuousTense construction is accurate in most cases.Predominantly simple present tense although other tenses are used effectively. The choices here are appropriate for the context.
Most of the text is in active voice although passive voice has been used effectively to highlight how humans are affected by technology: There are places or people on the world that (are) not affected by technology in any way.Factories used to be operated only by people.
handwriting: some letters are difficult to read abbreviations: A.I. spelling: generally accurate, though some
words misspelled: basicly, indeginous, imbossible, controll, mashines, roboters/robotors, intelegant,
punctuation: Uses capitals appropriately, some difficulties punctuating compound and complex sentences, commas need to be used
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Pablo : LETTERSection A : Radio Station
Manager of SAFM
Dear Sir/Madam,
I would like to make a few suggestions to improve your radio station.
firstly your station plays the same songs every 5 minutes of the day. Secondly your station plays too many
commercials.
The Radio D.J that you have there, (Amanda Blair) has to go. Her material old and it isn’t even funny. She
harasses people and singers about their behind when she doesn’t look at her own.
Also the games and the competition they do should be cut down and the constant blabbering should be cut
down aswell.
The way I think you can solve this problem is by having one hour of uninterrupted music. then after the hour has
pasted put some commercials and then put another one hour of music, and continue this process.
Please take this letter into consideration, for your sake.
Your Sincerely
Pablo Picas
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Evidence for ScalingPablo : LETTER
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Letter with salutation, statement of opinions and supporting evidence, suggestions for improvement and complimentary closing statement
conjunctions: Firstly, Secondly, Also noun groups: The radio DJ,
action verbs: Please take layout: Letter: Manager of SAFM, Dear Sir/Madam,
Your (Yours) Sincerely
reference items: your, I, their, it, she, they, you, her, one, another, the, this, a, there, your(s), her own
vocabulary patterns: words that go together: cut down, solve this
problem, for your sake word sets: radio station, songs, commercials,
games and competition, music, singers, uninterrupted music, one hour of music
conjunctions: then
linking: and, then binding: when, by, after relative clauses: The Radio D.J. that you have
there, (Amanda Blair) projection: I think (that) you can non-finite clauses: by having
Students were provided with questions to scaffold their writing.
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
A few suggestions, your radio station, every 5 minutes of the day, too many commercials, her material, The Radio DJ that you have there, the constant blabbering, one hour of uninterrupted music, one hour of music
too many commercials
suggestions, material, problem, consideration, process, the constant blabbering
action: to improve, plays, harasses, doesn’t look, has pasted (passed), take, continue, put, cut down
mental (sensing): think, solve relational: have, is, isn’t verbal groups: like to make, has to go, be cut down phrasal verbs: to be cut down, look at, take into
consideration
when: every 5 minutes of the day, after the hour has pasted (passed)
where: there, at her own how: even, about their behind, by having one hour
of uninterrupted music
Radio station, songs, commercials, material, singers, games and competitions, uninterrupted music, Radio DJ
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
Text is written as a series of statements and concludes with a polite command (Please take …) Questions might have been expected of a letter.
subjective: I think, I would like objective: Also the games and competitions
certainty: it isn’t even funny, , can solve.
obligation: has to, should be cut inclination: like to make
feelings, attitudes: old, isn’t even funny, harasses idioms, humour: blabbering, behind
names: Sir/Madam, Amanda Blair, Manager of SAFM
The language choices position the writer as some authority as a listener as is appropriate.
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Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
abstractions: Her material, The way I think you can solve this problem
conjunctions: then after the hour has pasted (passed)
non-human: Her material human: I, The radio DJ, She, action verbs: Please take
Foregrounding of human and non-human elements is appropriate for a persuasive letter. Issues are stated and elaboration is present as well as suggestions for improvement.
The second and 5th paragraphs should be combined as they are about the same point. Similarly, the two paragraphs about the D.J. and the games and competitions could also be combined. Topic sentences do not adequately introduce points that are being made.
primary: plays, have, is, harasses, think secondary: has pasted (passed)Primary tenses are used accurately and some difficulties with secondary tenses are evident.
Mostly written in the active voice passive: should be cut down
There are no significant spelling issues with this range of familiar vocabulary.
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Pablo : SHORT ANSWER RESPONSE
They’re a weird mob (VIDEO STUDY)
Questions
1. Nino Culotta is an Italian migrant, Nino is a good-hearted gentleman and he is polite, well mannered
but he is a bit ignorant. He came to Australia because he came to work on a newspaper as a sports
editor for a relative.
2. Nino found work as a brick labourer which is a very difficult job considering you would be working out
in the heat all day on a building site. He was working in the suburbs of Sydney, this was when the new
housing developments had started in the 1960’s.
3. The people that Nino worked with were typical Assies. They were hard working, they loved to swear
and carry on, they were easy to get along with and they loved their beer and rollie cigarettes.
4. There were outlying suburbs being built and Sydney was starting to expand. The harbour site was
finished by then and the suburbs were inhabited by ordinary average income families. The inner city
sydney was established and bustling.
5. In the 1960’s there were plenty of racism towards migrants because of what they looked like or
because they had different customs or beliefs. Also at that time migrants had started opening
restaurants and shops which of non Australia involvements.
6. The Australian males were portray as the typical aussie in the movie. They were easy-going, beer
drinkers, funny and sometimes on the lazy side. The Australian females were putrayed as these
beautiful beach babes with blonde hair and they all had perfect bodies.
7. In the movie you saw Iconic thinks like the hills hoist and Quantas and the harbour bridge. I also
noticed that all the brickie men were wearing the good old footy shorts and the blue flanalet singlets.
8. Some of the slangs used in the film were, Your shout, King’s blood Cross, blood hell and Good day
mate. Some of these slang are still used today and even though these words were considered as rude
today they are less ofencive.
9. Some things that are still the same are the mens attitudes, and some sites of Sydney. Some things
that have changes is Kings Cross, The way men and woman dress different and today they have
different acsent.
10. I believe that Crocidile Dundee was over done and the men from the movie
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Evidence for Scaling Pablo : SHORT ANSWER RESPONSE
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
As this is a series of short answer questions that are not extended prose, it is not appropriate to look at text organization to any degree.
reference items: he, you, this, they, their, these, Some of these, I
vocabulary patterns: synonyms: polite/well-mannered, brick
labourer/difficult job words that go together: easy to get along with,
hard working, rollie cigarettes, outlying suburbs, inner city, easy-going, blonde hair, hills hoist, harbour bridge, footy shorts, Good day mate, building site, housing developments, average income families, brick labourer
word sets: well mannered/polite,/good hearted, customs/beliefs
classification: people: migrants; families: relative; males: gentleman, men, brickie men, typical Assies (Aussies), beer drinkers; woman(women): Australian females, beautiful beach babes, perfect bodies
composition: newspaper: sports editor, Sydney: inner city suburbs, new housing developments, outlying suburbs, the inner city Sydney, The harbour site, Kings Cross
conjunctions: Also,
linking: and, or, also, but. binding: because of, when, because, even though relative clauses: which is a very difficult job, which
of non Australia involvements projection: I believe that, I also noticed that non-finite clauses: considering (that) you would be
working
It appears that many answers are supported by the language and structure of the questions.
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives and similes: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
an Italian migrant, a good hearted gentleman, a sports editor, a brick labourer, a very difficult job, a building site, the suburbs of Sydney, the new housing developments, typical Assies (Aussies), outlying suburbs being built, The inner city Sydney, The harbour site, ordinary average income families, plenty of racism towards migrants, these beautiful beach babes with blonde hair, iconic things, the good old footy shorts, the blue flanalet (flannelette) singlets, the men’s attitudes, the people that Nino worked with, the way men and woman dress different, Some of the slangs used in the film, Some things that are still the same
less ofencive (offensive), different acsent (accent)
work, labourer, developments, involvements, drinkers, migrant, beliefs, racism
action: came, work, started, found, finished, inhabited, wearing, dress, used, changes(d)
mental (sensing): believe, considered, considering, noticed, saw
relational: is, was, were, had, are, have, were portrays(ed)
verbal groups: would be working, came to work, loved to swear, starting to expand, started opening, was overdone, being built
phrasal verbs: carry on, to get along with, worked with, looked like
phrase: for a relative dependent clause: considering you would be
working out in the heat all day on a building site, because he came to work on a newspaper, because of what they looked like, because they different customs or beliefs
when: when the new housing developments had started in the 1960’s, by then, all day, today
where: on a newspaper, in the suburbs of Sydney, in the movie, out in the hear
how: like the hills hoist, as a sports editor, as these beautiful beach babes with blonde hair
These beautiful beach babes, on the lazy side, carry on, Your shout
Iconic things, Italian migrant, newspaper, sports editor, relative, brick (brickies’) labourer, building site, suburbs, new housing developments, beer and rollie cigarettes, outlying suburbs, ordinary average income families, inner city Sydney, established and bustling, customs or beliefs, involvements, Australian males, iconic things, racism.
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
Text is written as a series of short answers. This is appropriate for this type of task.
subjective: I believe, I also noticed objective: The people that Nino worked with, Some of
the slangs used in the film
feelings, attitudes: good-hearted, polite, well mannered, ignorant, typical, hard-working, easy to get along with, ordinary average income, rude, over done
idioms, humour: easy going, Your shout, bloody hell, Good day mate.
cultural references: hills hoist, Quantas (QANTAS), harbour bridge, King’s blood Cross
names: Nino Culotta, Crocodile Dundee
The language choices position the writer as some authority as a viewer as is appropriate. Most of the answers to the questions foreground information and are therefore objective in tenor. This is appropriate for this task.
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Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
abstractions: Some of the slang(s) used in the film, Some things that are still the same, Some things that have changes(d)
time, place, manner: In the 1960’s, In the movie, Also at time
non-human: The harbour site, The inner city Sydney human: Nino Culotta, He, Nino, The people that Nino
worked with, They (The people that Nino worked with), The Australian males, The Australian females, I
Human elements are foregrounded in character descriptions, non-human elements are foregrounded to describe the setting and abstractions are foregrounded to comment on the use of language and to make comparisons between the past and present. Each of these choices is appropriate.
This is not an extended coherent text and therefore does not contain an introduction, topic sentences and conclusion. This is appropriate for short answer responses.
primary: full range of simple tenses used secondary: many examples of secondary tensesGenerally uses a wide range of primary and secondary tenses accurately. A variety of tenses is used appropriately within paragraph answers.
There is an appropriate balance between active and passive voice. The passive voice is used appropriately to foreground non-human elements such as harbour site and suburbs.
Hand writing is legible. Basic punctuation is used appropriately most of the time. There are some spelling errors of more technical language, restuarants, flanalet, ofencive, acsent and spelling of common vocabulary is accurate.
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 8 AND 9Scale 8 Scale 9
GENRE: Outcome 8.1Communicates in a wide range of social genres and a narrow range of educational genres, and reflects on these in an elementary way.
Outcome 9.1Communicates in a range of social situations and a narrow range of educational genres, and reflects on these in an informed way.
Text in Context
reflects with support on the purposes, structure and common features of a range of elementary genres
participates with greater confidence in casual conversations about familiar topics with familiar people
constructs oral and written examples of the elementary genres having a number of stages or series of events
reads long sequential explanations such as life-cycles and writes and draws simple examples with confidence
constructs oral and written recounts, short oral and written narratives, summaries and arguments
independently constructs story genres with a storyline and events related to the resolution of a problem
begins to reflect on possible variations of the structure of a genre
contrasts a texts of the same genre but different cultures in terms of structure but also in simple linguistic terms
constructs oral and written examples of a range of elementary genres having a number of stages or series of events, writing and drawing life cycles and simple flow charts which begin to incorporate casual meanings, writing short factual texts drawing from more than one source and using a range of simple cohesive resources, and constructs simple oral and written arguments, based on heavily modelled and collaboratively constructed texts
Language identifies and uses a limited range of features that organise a text, such as sub headings in a report
identifies clauses and expands the information in a text by joining the clauses using common binding conjunctions such as because, if, since, when and a small range of relative pronouns
uses a range of reference items appropriately and accurately most of the time in spoken and short written texts
reads reference items accurately in longer texts
forms complex sentences using a wide range of binding conjunctions: because, if, since
uses a small range of relative pronouns with varying accuracy, for example, ‘the boy which writes well is’
uses a small range of simple language elements that make a text hang together, such as a narrow range of conjunctions, reference items in complex factual genres, such as explanations and a small range of synonyms and antonyms
FIELD: Outcome 8.2Understands and uses a small range of vocabulary and grammatical items to form short word groups and phrases constructing fields beyond the personally relevant, and uses a narrow range of technical vocabulary.
Outcome 9.2Understands and uses common vocabulary that constructs everyday, non-technical fields and has a tentative control of a narrow range of technical fields.
Text in Context
communicates confidently about familiar fields with peers informal contexts, remaining unsure of some field-specific vocabulary
demonstrates a tentative control of vocabulary beyond personal and school experiences
chooses appropriately from a narrow range of vocabulary to make delicate meanings
writes and retells simple descriptive texts chooses to use direct or reported speech appropriately use a thesaurus with some confidence
communicates confidently about familiar fields with peers choosing a small range of field specific vocabulary
demonstrates a greater understanding of vocabulary beyond immediate personal and school experiences
writes and retells simple descriptive texts which construct less familiar topics, such as fantasy characters or creatures
demonstrates understanding of other perspectives and ideas when arguing although still draws on own perspectives
Language uses a range of vocabulary patters for a range of writing genres from recounts to reports
uses slightly more varied vocabulary such as verbs expressing mental process, noun groups with classifiers and describers
understands a range of common nominalisations uses a range of common technical vocabulary identifies key vocabulary in spoken, written and simple
visual texts to construct a simple summary uses direct speech and simple reported speech with a
greater degree of accuracy
expands noun groups by using a more delicate choice of describers (a nice comfortable flat) classifiers (a nice furnished flat) and some longer qualifiers (a nice furnished flat near the city)
understands a wide range of examples uses direct speech and simple reported speech with a
good degree of accuracy
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TENOR: Outcome 8.3Participates with increasing confidence and critical awareness in a range of familiar contexts using a wider range of basic grammatical structures accurately and begins to participate appropriately in a narrow range of more formal contexts.
Outcome 9.3Constructs spoken and written texts confidently in a small range of contexts, particularly familiar contexts, and is developing control in a small range of more formal contexts.
Text in Context
begins to understand more clearly how interpersonal meanings can be made in varying ways, for example adjusts speaking to communicate with a known adult on a serious matter
invites, welcomes, introduces and thanks visiting speakers appropriately, relying heavily on collaboratively constructed models of formal oral language
chooses a small range of language expressing modality (degrees of certainty or obligation) when responding to a point of view in informal contexts
begins to use with some confidence a limited range of common colloquialisms or idioms
demonstrates critical awareness by identifying and reflecting with increased confidence on the appropriateness of linguistic choices
identifies stereotypes in television commercials
relies on collaboratively constructed models in inviting, welcoming, introducing and thanking visiting speakers
uses a wide range of language choices appropriately when expressing a point of view
maintains appropriate tenor in short, simple written or spoken factual texts and can begin to make changes appropriate to the context
demonstrates understanding of non-literal meanings by beginning to use with some confidence a narrow range of common colloquialisms or idioms
discuses in simple ways and for a narrow range of text how visual images and language construct stereotypes, bias and prejudice, by analysing these elements in junk mail or television commercials
reflects in more explicitly ways on the choice of non verbal resources such as eye contact or use of gesture appropriate to the cultural or situational context
Language begins to understand appropriate choice of questions and commands and language expressing modality when considering classroom and school behaviour, using ‘Could you come over here please’ instead of ‘Come here’ with known adults
uses simple forms of modality with varying degrees of accuracy such as should, could, just, only
chooses with some confidence vocabulary appropriate for the tenor of the context
begins to understand how meanings are varied by changing intonation, tone, volume and emphasis when speaking and reading aloud
uses a range of evaluative vocabulary to express feelings and attitudes
interacts with peers confidently and with teachers or other known adults using a wider range of language expressing modality with a greater degree of success, but to a lesser degree when speaking with or writing to unknown adults
uses a range of simple forms of language expressing modality with a greater degree of accuracy in more formal contexts, for example, ‘Perhaps the government will change its mind’
begins to reflect critically on appropriate choice of commands and language expressing modality in various situations
chooses confidentiality from a range of vocabulary to main appropriate tenor in a text, for example chooses a narrow range of colloquialisms and idioms
understands more clearly how meanings are varied by changing intonation, tone, volume and emphasis when reading aloud a range of text
stresses the appropriate syllable in words that have been heard and can predict with some accuracy how new words are pronounced
MODE: Outcome 8.4Identifies and compares the major features of spoken, written and visual texts, and constructs a range of short spoken and written texts that unfold coherently most of the time.
Outcome 9.4Identifies and compares with some confidence a range of features of spoken, written and visual texts, and generally constructs a range of short coherent texts.
Text in Context
discusses and understands the patterns in what is foregrounded in a genre and uses this understanding most of the time
communicates simple, appropriately and accurately in general when using another medium such as a telephone
identifies and discusses with slightly more confidence in elementary ways the meanings made in a range of multimodal texts, such as in discussing made in a pie graph
demonstrates a tentative critical understanding of a range of multimodal texts, discussing the relationship between a visual texts and the accompanying verbal text
identifies the patterns in what is foregrounded in a genre and begins to identify and use appropriately a small range of alternative language elements in a narrow range of genres
communicates more confidently in situations involving other media if the texts is simple and there is support and time to plan. Fore example uses tables, diagrams or other visual texts when speaking, writing or following instructions
identifies and discusses with some confidence the meanings made in a range of multimodal texts and demonstrates a tentative critical understanding of cultural references
Language organises texts in simple logically ordered paragraphs with a topic sentence for each one
foregrounds simple repetitive patters most of the time, ‘draw the eyes’, with a fine brush, draw the eyes’ or ‘the leaf was put in the sun
demonstrates limited control with support of punctuation marks beyond the most basic, such as speech marks, commas and apostrophes
foregrounds less simple, repetitive patterns, such as when phrases of time and place are foregrounded in more than one place in a report or when non human elements are foregrounded with confidence in factual genres (‘The lathe was dismantled carefully’)
understands that a change is needed if choosing ‘The agents sold the houses’ rather than ‘The houses were sold by the agent’
organises the text in logically ordered paragraphs foregrounds appropriately in independent constructions of
explanations and arguments so that the text is coherent demonstrates developing a control, with support, of the
links between intonation patters and punctuation, for example when reading aloud, accounting for speech marks, commas for lists and apostrophes for basic contractions and possession
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GENRE:Paul, Egor and Pablo expand information in their texts by using common binding and linking conjunctions to join clauses, and use a small range of relative pronouns. (Scale 8) Egor and Pablo use a small range of conjunctions to organise their texts. (Scale 9)
FIELD:Paul uses a small range of simple nominalisations. (Scale 8) Egor and Pablo understand an use a wider range of more complex nominalisations. (Scale 9)
TENOR:Paul, Pablo and Egor all choose appropriate vocabulary to establish the tenor of their texts. (Scale 8) Pablo and Egor use simple forms of language expressing modality with a greater degree of accuracy (Scale 9) and a broader range of language expressing feelings and attitudes.
MODE:Paul organises his texts in simple, logically ordered paragraphs on the basis of a change of topic and begins to use topic sentences. (Scale 8) Pablo and Egor choose less simple, repetitive sentence beginnings, foregrounding non-human elements more often in their expository texts. (Scale 9)
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Gretel: DISCUSSION ESSAY
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Gretel: DISCUSSION ESSAY
Question 1
The classroom experiment in ‘the wave’ really showed the history class how the German
Nazis could dominate all Germans and carry out genocide in ‘the Jewish problem.’
Gordon High School was out of order and had no discipline at all. Students would come in
late and never did their homework. Because so many of them did it, even the teachers had
no control. Ben Ross decided to do an experiment in his history class to show how it really
felt and how Adolf Hitler had control. The students had no other choice to improve so they
tried this as their last option. For example, the football team kept loosing and they thought
they could give the wave a try since they ran out of ideas in improving and were hopeless. It
is just like ‘The Great Depression.’ People had no food and were unemployed and would do
anything to save themselves and their familie’s lives. And many thought joining Hitler was
their last choice in surviving.
Like the Nazis, the students got out of control because they were against non-wave
members. They tried to get people in the wave and the people that did not want to be in the
wave was disliked. But in the Nazi’s case, they were not only disliked, they were to killed.
‘ … You say it could never happen again, but look how close you came. Threatening those
who wouldn’t join you, preventing non-wave members from sitting with you at football games.
Fascism isn’t something those other people did, it is right here, in all of us.’ Ben Ross pg 104.
The students did not understand how the Nazi’s could just turn their backs on their friends
and neighbours and let them be persecuted. But since the students got them in that position
then they understood how it happened. They did not realized what they were doing. They
treated non-wave members like the Jews. Hitler didn’t like Jews because they were not
blonde and blue eyed but in this case, they didn’t like non-wave members because they
didn’t believe in the wave.
Therefore, the classroom experiment in ‘the wave’ really showed the history class how the
German Nazi’s could dominate all Germanns and carry out genocide on ‘the Jewish
problem.’
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Evidence for Scaling
Gretel: DISCUSSION ESSAY
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; non finite clauses topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Introduction, three paragraphs of discussion, a quote from the novel and a conclusion are present.
conjunctions: Therefore noun groups: The classroom experiment, Gordon High
School, The students time, place, manner: Like the Nazis
layout: Handwritten in paragraphs with a line space between paragraphs; quote is separated from the rest of the text through line spacing however no reference is made to the quote in the student’s discussion.
reference items: The, all, their, so many of them, it, an, his, they, this, themselves, many, Like the Nazis, them, that position
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: out of order/ no discipline/ no
control, control/dominate, loosing (losing)/hopeless, save themselves/surviving
words that go together: carry out word sets: ‘the Jewish problem’, German Nazis,
genocide, history, Adolf Hitler persecuted, Jews, blonde and blue eyed; ‘The Great Depression,’ no food, unemployed, surviving
conjunctions: Therefore, For example, And,
linking: and, so, but, then binding: But since, because, even, since relative clauses: the people that did not want to be in the
wave projection: The classroom experiment in ‘the wave’ really
showed the history class how the German Nazis could dominate all Germans, to show how it really felt, they thought (that) they could give the wave a try, And many thought (that) joining Hitler was their last choice, The students did not understand how the Nazi’s (Nazis) could just turn their backs…, They did not realized (realise) what they were doing
non-finite clauses: to do an experiment in his history class, to show how it really felt
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
The classroom experiment in ‘the wave’, the history class, the German Nazis, genocide, ‘the Jewish Problem’, Gordon High School, out of order, no discipline, their homework, so many of them, his history class, no other choice (but) to improve, their last option, ideas in (on) improving, unemployed, their last choice in surviving, the people that did not want to be in the wave, the Nazi’s case, non-wave members, not blonde and blue eyed
Like the Nazis
genocide, discipline, control, choice, last option, unemployed, blonde and blue eyed, non-wave members
action: showed, dominate, did, improve, tried, save, joining, got, killed, treated, let
mental (sensing): thought, disliked, understand, realized, like, believe, felt
relational: was, had, were, happened verbal groups: could dominate, decided to do, kept
loosing (losing), would do, tried to get, did not want to be, be persecuted
phrasal verbs: carry out, come in, give the wave a try, ran out of, turn their backs on, believe in
phrase: But in the Nazi’s case, but in this case dependent clause: Because so many of them did it, since
they ran out of ideas, But since the students got them in that position, because they were against non-wave members, because they were not blonde and blue eyed, because they didn’t believe in the wave
when: never where: in his history class, in the wave, in this case how: really, at all, late, as their last option, just like ‘The
Great Depression,’ Like the Nazis, out of control, against non-wave members, like the Jews
turn their backs on, ran out of, carry out
Nazis, the Jewish problem,’ ‘The Great Depression,’ Jews, persecuted, the wave, genocide, blonde and blue eyed, non-wave members, Gordon High School, Ben Ross
direct: Direct quote used and referenced by character and page number but this is not directly or indirectly referred to in the student’s discussion.
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Tenor: Language for
interacting with
others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The text contains statements expressed in simple and complex sentences. This is appropriate for a discussion essay.
subjective: objective: Objective tenor is maintained throughout the text.
certainty: could dominate, could give the wave a try, would do anything, could just turn their backs
frequency: never obligation: no other choice, let them be persecuted inclination: didn’t like, did not want to be
feelings, attitudes: really, even, hopeless, just, not only disliked, out of order, no discipline at all, no control, last choice
cultural references: the wave, The Great Depression, the Jewish problem, Adolf Hitler, Ben Ross, Gordon High School
idioms: turn their backs on, ran out of, carry out names: Adolf Hitler, Ben RossThe writer assumes that the reader has read The Wave and is familiar with the themes, characters, plot and setting. The writer also assumes that the reader understands cultural references such as The Great Depression and the Jewish problem.
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Mode:
Language for
creating spoken
and written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
abstractions: The classroom experiment in ‘the wave’ conjunctions: But since the students got them in that position cause: Because so many of them did it, But in the Nazi’s
case, Therefore, the classroom experiment in the ‘the wave’ time, place, manner: Like the Nazis non-human: Gordon High School, It (the wave) human: Students, Ben Ross, The students, People, They (the
students), Hitler
Sentences are foregrounded in a variety of ways which is appropriate for a discussion essay.
Topic sentences have been used appropriately to foreground the content of the discussion however the introduction requires more detail and “The Wave” needs to be clearly defined to allow the reader to understand the connections the student has made with German Nazism. Similarly, ‘the Jewish problem’ needs to be defined and the quote from the novel needs elaboration.
The connections the student has made are complex and sophisticated although the language used is less complex.
primary: showed, carry out, was, had secondary: would come in, were doingTense choices are appropriate in most cases and primary and secondary tenses are used accurately on most occasions.
active: mainly active voice passive: the people that did not want to be in the wave was
(were) disliked, they were not only disliked, they were (to) killed; let them be persecuted
Active and passive voices used appropriately. Student demonstrates an understanding of how to use the passive voice, although on two occasions, passive voice is not constructed accurately.
Handwriting is legible, spelling is generally accurate, commas used appropriately after rhetorical conjunctions and at the end of dependent clauses.
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Gretel: PERSONAL REFLECTION(Oral Presentation Script)
There are four gospels in the bible. Matthew, Mark, Luke and John. They all show a different
image of Jesus. Matthew, Luke and John are similar, while Mark is totally different.
In Mark they show a suffering Christ, for example, ‘The temptation of Jesus.’ He suffered
without nothing for forty days in the dessert. Even when the devil tempted him, he still didn’t
give in.
Also, in ‘The death of Jesus’ he died in the cross for us. He suffered just like us humans.
In my opinion, my image of Jesus in Mark is just a normal man. He does normal things like
work for his father, made friends and suffered. All humans suffer. He his showing us how to
get through our problems by going through it and doing something about it. For example,
‘Jesus stills a storm.’ The disciples all panicked and were afraid. Jesus then said ‘Why are
you afraid? Have you still no faith?’ To me Jesus is telling us to have faith in him and
everything would be alright.
Another example is ‘temptations to sin.’ He is telling us to cut our hand off if it causes you to
stumble. But he doesn’t mean it liturally. He his saying that if you do something bad, take it
away because its better having one hand than having two than go to hell. He his helping us
to live our life in a Christian way.
Therefore, my image of Jesus in the gospel of Mark is a normal man who suffered life like
humans. This shows in ‘the temptation of Jesus’ and ‘the death of Jesus’ It shows that Jesus
suffered in life and showed that we he got tnougth it which is how we should go through it.
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IMAGE OF JESUS Year 10 Religion
TASK: You are to present before the class your personal image of Jesus.
CRITERIA: Your presentation mustInclude references to Mark's Gospel /7
Show an understanding of Jesus' words and actions /7
Be interesting and clear /6
COMMENT:
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Evidence for Scaling Gretel: PERSONAL REFLECTION (Oral Presentation Script)
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about the
students? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, One of the
main arguments, The principle cause of the increase
phrases and dependent clauses of time, place, manner: Born in 1898
phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a result of the rain..; Led by Nelson Mandela, South Africa..
non finite clauses action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil topic words: Antarctica, Pollution initiate and close interactions: less formulaic,
formulaic expressions, gestures ask and answer questions participate in song, rhyme, chorus, reading
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars,
premolars, incisors composition (whole part): tooth: enamel,
dentine, pulp, nerve. conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, or, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which was
completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The results
demonstrate that… non-finite clause: The team, having seen the
results, felt…; Having seen the results, the team…
level of scaffolding
Text is written in paragraphs with an introduction, conclusion, and examples from the bible to support the author’s point of view.
conjunctions: Therefore, Also noun groups: Another example time, place, manner: In Mark, In my opinion
reference items: the, they, all, a, he, him, us, our, it, something, nothing, me, you, everything, another example, we
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: similar/different,
Jesus/Christ/a suffering Christ/a normal man word sets: bible, gospels, Jesus, suffering,
temptation, devil, died, cross, disciples, faith, sin, hell, Christian
classification: gospels: Matthew, Mark, Luke, John
composition: bible: gospels conjunctions: For example
linking: and binding: while, if, but, because, than, when, by, like relative clauses: a normal man who suffered life like
humans projection: It shows that…, and showed that …, He his
(is) saying that…, non-finite clause: to get through our problems by going
through it and doing something …, to have faith in him, to cut our hand off
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Field:Language for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, all day, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: subtract, divide, peered, scanned,
demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, shouted stated,
asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means
verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the weather was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is commonly thought, Studies
have shown
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
a different image of Jesus, a suffering Christ, a normal man, a Christian way, my image of Jesus in the gospel of Mark, a normal man who suffered life like humans, the temptation of Jesus, the death of Jesus
better
temptation, a suffering Christ, death, image
action: suffered, died, does, work, made, cut, take, go, stumble, helping, live
mental (sensing): tempted, panicked saying: telling, saying, said relational: are, show, is were, have, be, causes,
mean phrasal verbs: give in, get through, to have faith in
verbs: causes phrase: for us dependent clause: Even when the devil tempted him,
by going through it, because its (it’s) better, if you do something bad
when: for forty days, in life, Even when the devil tempted him, still, then
where: In Mark, in the dessert, in ‘The death of Jesus,’ in (on) the cross, off, to hell, away, in ‘the temptation of Jesus’
how: without nothing (anything), just like us humans, To me, alright, liturally (literally), better, in a Christian way, like humans
bible, gospels, the devil, Jesus, temptation, Christ, cross, disciples, hell, faith
direct: Jesus then said ‘Why are you afraid? Have you still no faith?
reported: Jesus is telling us to have faith, He is telling us to cut our hand off, He his (is) saying that if you do something bad
direct: for example, ‘The temptation of Christ,’ in ‘The death of Jesus,’ my image of Jesus in Mark, For example, ‘Jesus stills a storm,’ Another example is ‘temptations to sin’
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Tenor: Language for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers, commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, tend to, might be able to frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meaning: feelings, attitudes: unfortunately,
importance, outstanding idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms,
humour names to refer to people culturally specific references
verbal elements: intonation, volume, pace, word stress,
tone, pronunciation, and other sound patterns pronunciation of foreign words
non verbal elements: body language, eye contact, physical
response
appropriate tenor for the context
The text is written as a series of statements expressed in simple, compound and complex sentences. There are two questions which are quoted from the bible.
subjective: In my opinion, my image of Jesus, To me objective: a different image of Jesus, they show a
suffering Christ
certainty: would (will) be alright
obligation: we should go through it
feelings, attitudes: totally different, suffering, even, tempted, just, in my opinion, normal, panicked, afraid, still, faith, to me, better, bad
idioms, humour: to cut our hand off if it causes you to stumble, got tnougth (through)
names: Jesus, Christ, Matthew, Mark, Luke, John cultural references: the bible
Appropriately formal language is used consistently. There inconsistency in pronoun use. The student sometimes uses the inclusive pronouns we and us when referring to Jesus’ teachings and at other times chooses you e.g. “He is telling us to cut our hand off if it causes you to stumble.” The choice here needs to be consistent.
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Mode:
Language for
creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, haven’t played, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, physical objects, layout, tables, print text and spoken text
abstractions: There, In my opinion, This (my image of Jesus)
conjunctions: Even when cause: Even when the devil tempted him time, place, manner: In Mark, For example, To me, non-human: They (the gospels), Another example, It
(‘the temptation of Jesus’) human: He (Jesus), All humans, The disciples, Jesus
The student uses a variety of foregrounding techniques, with human participants used on many occasions.
The text has a definite conclusion which summarises the content of the previous paragraphs. The introduction needs to be more specific in identifying and defining the topic of the presentation. The student uses references to the Bible to support the point of view presented and this is done effectively. The text would be more cohesive with the use of topic sentences to introduce each new point.
primary: are, show, suffered, is showingThe student selects and constructs primary tenses accurately in most cases although some problems with the consistency of tenses are apparent. e.g. He does normal things like work for his father, made friends and suffered. Difficulties with the present continuous and future tense constructions are evident.
active voice used appropriately
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 9 AND 10
Scale 9 Scale 10
GENRE: Outcome 9.1Communicates in a wide range of social situations and small range of educational genres and reflects on these in an informed way.
Outcome 10.1Communicates in a wide range of social situations and a range of factual and literary genres and reflects on these in an elementary way.
Text in Context
reflects on purpose, structure and common features of personal and biographical recounts, narratives, procedures, descriptive reports, explanations, arguments and summaries
constructs elementary genres with number of stages or series of events: explanations, short factual texts, arguments, story genres
demonstrates understanding of link between purpose, structure and major language features of factual genres
constructs longer, more complex factual genres: arguments, recounts, explanations
constructs simple multimodal texts: webpage constructs longer story genres awareness of variations in story genres: evaluation and
coda stages in narratives compares folk tales with Dreaming stories
Language foregrounds time and place in recounts; time, place and manner in procedures
uses subheadings in a report uses a new line to indicate change of speaker in
dialogue uses a wide range of binding conjunctions to form
complex sentences uses a small range of relative pronouns uses narrow range of conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs uses reference items appropriately in longer, more
complex factual genres uses a small range of synonyms and antonyms
uses alternative grammatical elements to avoid repetitiveness
begins to use rhetorical questions in oral arguments forms complex sentences using wider range of binding
conjunctions uses relative pronouns with greater choice and
accuracy uses a wider range of conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs uses small sets of synonyms and antonyms chooses a wider range of vocabulary based on
composition chooses a wider range of vocabulary based on
classification
FIELD Outcome 9.2Understands and uses common vocabulary that constructs everyday, non-technical fields and is developing tentative control of technical fields.
Outcome 10.2Understands and uses a range of vocabulary that constructs everyday, non-technical fields and is developing greater control of technical fields.
Text in context
communicates confidently about familiar fields demonstrates greater understanding of vocabulary
beyond immediate personal and school experiences able to make more delicate meaning from a small range
of vocabulary constructs simple descriptive texts about less familiar
topics demonstrates understanding of other perspectives and
ideas when arguing
communicates confidently about less familiar fields maintains a consistent level of technicality, clumsy at
times, using a wider range of vocabulary begins to tell and write more elaborate and complex
narrative texts begins to incorporate other perspectives and ideas in
arguments deals with poems, allegories, legends and newspaper
articles mainly at literal level
Language uses verbs expressing mental processes extends noun groups uses phrases expressing the means used in an action expands noun groups by using a more delicate choice
of describer, classifier and qualifier identifies key vocabulary in unfamiliar texts, able to
construct simple summary understands a wide range of nominalisations and uses
a small range uses direct speech and simple reported speech with a
good degree of accuracy
begins to make more delicate choices in using verbs expressing action processes
begins to make more delicate choices in noun groups expressing the participants
uses phrases expressing the manner of an action expands noun groups by using more delicate choices of
describers, classifiers and qualifiers chooses from a wider range of vocabulary to recount,
summarise or paraphrase uses technical and everyday meanings of a small range
of common words uses a small range of technical nominalisations uses direct and reported speech confidently and
accurately
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TENOROutcome 9.3Constructs spoken and written texts confidently in a small range of contexts, particularly familiar contexts, and is developing control in a small range of more formal contexts.
Outcome 10.3Constructs texts confidently in a range of contexts, particularly familiar ones, is developing control in a range of more formal contexts and begins to reflect critically on the texts and contexts.
Text in context
uses a wider range of language choices for invitations, welcomings, introductions and thanking guest speakers
relies on collaboratively constructed models for formal language
uses a wide range of language elements when expressing a point of view
maintains appropriate tenor in short written or spoken factual texts
begins to use with some confidence a narrow range of common colloquialisms or idioms
able to adjust speaking to communicate with unfamiliar adults in a formal context
discusses in simple ways and for a narrow range of texts how visual images and language construct stereotypes, bias and prejudice
reflects in more explicit ways on the choice of non verbal resources
interacts confidently in casual conversation in a wide range of situations
understands more clearly how the same language choices vary interpersonally depending on the situation
chooses language beyond narrow formulaic models for more formal contexts
expresses an opinion appropriately begins to speak or write from another point of view maintains the appropriate tenor in longer texts uses with some confidence a small range of common
colloquialisms and idioms discuss in simple ways and for a small range of texts
how visual images and language construct stereotypes, bias and prejudice
Language uses a wider range of language expressing modality when interacting with peers and known adults with a greater degree of success
uses a range of simple forms of language expressing modality in more formal contexts, with a greater degree of accuracy
begins to reflect critically on appropriate choice of commands and language expressing modality
chooses confidently from a range of synonyms to maintain appropriate tenor
chooses a narrow range of colloquialisms and idioms understands how meanings are varied by changing
intonation, tone, volume and emphasis in a narrow range of texts
stresses the appropriate syllable in words
begins to reflect critically on interpersonal choices, being assertive rather than aggressive
aware that the degree of obligation depends on who says it to whom
uses a range of simple forms of language expressing modality with a greater degree of accuracy
chooses more delicately from a range of synonyms appropriate to the tenor of the context
begins to identify how meanings can be made either subjectively or objectively
identifies and uses variation in intonation, tone, volume, pacing and emphasis
pronounces most known words accurately and stresses appropriate syllable
can predict quite accurately how unfamiliar words are pronounced
MODE Outcome 9.4Identifies and compares with some confidence a range of features of spoken, written and visual texts, and generally constructs a range of short coherent texts.
Outcome 10.4Identifies and discusses confidently and critically a range of features of texts, and constructs a wide range of short coherent texts.
Text in context
identifies the patterns in what is foregrounded in a genre
uses a small range of alternative language elements to foreground in a narrow range of genres
communicates more confidently with other media for a simple text given support and time to plan
identifies and discusses with some confidence meanings made in a range of multimodal texts
demonstrates a tentative critical understanding of cultural references
begins to have control over what is foregrounded in a genre, and organises text accordingly
constructs longer and more complex texts using other media, still requiring scaffolding
identifies and discusses with some confidence meanings made in a range of multimodal texts
demonstrates a critical understanding of a narrow range of cultural references in multimodal texts
Language foregrounds less simple, repetitive patterns foregrounds phrases of time and place on more than
one occasion in a recount foregrounds not only the topic in a report foregrounds with some confidence non-human
elements in factual genres understands that changes in grammar may be required
when changing what is foregrounded organises texts in longer, logically ordered paragraphs foregrounds appropriately in independent constructions
of explanations and arguments demonstrates developing control, with support, of links
between intonation patterns and punctuation
foregrounds simple phrases of manner, place or time in genres such as procedures
foregrounds simple dependent clauses in narratives begins to foreground causal elements in explanations
and discussions foregrounds confidently non-human elements in factual
genres organises with some confidence in increasingly
complex, logically ordered paragraphs chooses correct grammar most of the time when what is
foregrounded requires it understands better the relationship between intonation
and punctuation uses commas appropriately some of the time
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GENRE:Egor and Pablo use a narrow range of conjunctions to join sentence or paragraphs in their texts. (Scale 9) Gretel uses a wider range of cohesive conjunctions as well as reference items that refer to large segments of text. (Scale 10)
FIELD:Egor, Pablo and Gretel all expand their noun groups using complex qualifiers. (Scale 10)
TENOR:Egor and Pablo use a range of simple forms of language expressing modality. (Scale 9) Gretel uses a greater range of language expressing modality (Scale 10) Egor, Pablo and Gretel all use subjective and objective language to express their points of view. (Scale 10)
MODE:Pablo demonstrates developing control of the links between intonation and punctuation and uses commas for lists. (Scale 9) Gretel understands better the relationship between intonation and punctuation and uses commas appropriately, when rhetorical conjunctions and dependent clauses are foregrounded. (Scale 10)
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Sophie : Discussion Essay
Question: Why did Amy and Laurie react differently to the Wave?
Amy and Laurie did react differently towards The Wave. Even though Amy and Laurie are
best friends there is a lot of competing with each other. Laurie has always been more popular and just
a little bit more smarter then Amy. Amy is a bit jelous of Laurie and she will do anything to be better
then her.
Laurie Sanders, a “pretty girl with light brown hair” is an individual. Amy Smith, a “petite girl
with thick curly hair” is a follower. As more then half the school join The Wave Amy thinks that this is
how she will become more popular. Laurie dosen’t. Laurie thinks that it is not individiual and that if you
join the wave you are not independent. The only thing that disturbs Laurie is that “so many kids in her
class are allowing themselves to get caught up in something so immature.” Laurie dosen’t understand
how Amy, “someone who is so bright” is taking The Wave seriously (pg59).
On the other hand, Amy thinks that The Wave is excellent. It is all about equality. Everyone
who is involved in the Wave is equal and everyone is treated the same. Amy who is trying to be better
then Laurie thinks that The Wave will make her more popular. Amy is the follower and because The
Wave is popular she thinks that she will be too. When Laurie approaches Amy (pg 79) to tell her the
truth about The Wave Amy thinks it is just because Laurie broke up with her boyfriend David. Laurie
does try to persuade Amy that The Wave is bad but Amy does not listen. Laurie asks Amy why she
wants to be a part of it, Amy answers “It means that nobody is better then anyone else for a change”.
This is the way Amy thinks.
In conclusion Amy and Laurie react differently to The Wave as Amy is a follower and thinks it
is better for the school. But Laurie is an individual and thinks that “the wave” is not independent, it just
takes over peoples minds.
Are you a follower or an individual? Would you turn against your best friend?
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Evidence for Scaling Sophie: DISCUSSION ESSAY
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; non finite clauses topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which was
completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The results
demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Text is written in paragraphs with an attempted introduction, two paragraphs of discussion and a conclusion present.
rhetorical questions: Are you a follower or an individual? Would you turn against your best friend?
conjunctions: On the other hand, In conclusion noun groups: Amy and Laurie, Laura Sanders, a
“pretty girl with light brown hair”
layout: Handwritten with essay question stated at the top of the page.
reference items: the, a, each other, she, her, an, this,it, you, thing, themselves, something so immature, someone, Everyone, your, nobody, anyone
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: individual/follower,
individual/independent, equal/equality/the same words that go together: turn against, take over,
react differently word sets: school, class
linking: and, but binding: Even though, because, when, if, as relative clauses: Amy, “someone who is so bright,”
Amy who is trying to be better then (than) Laurie non-finite clauses: to be better then (than) her, to tell
her the truth about The Wave projection: Amy thinks that this is how she will become
more popular, Laurie thinks that it is not individual and that if you join the wave you are not individual, The only thing that disturbs Laurie is that “ so many kids … immature,” Laurie dosen’t (doesn’t) understand how Amy … seriously, (frequent use of projection through mental processes)
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for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
Laura Sanders, a “pretty girl with light brown hair,” Amy Smith, a “petite girl with thick curly hair,” more then (than) half the school, The only thing that disturbs Laurie, the way Amy thinks, a bit jelous (jealous), all about equality, the truth about The Wave, Everyone who is involved in the Wave,
more popular, a little bit more smarter, better, excellent, more than half
individual, a follower, equality, a lot of competing (competition)
action: join, do, approaches, involved, treated, make mental (sensing): react, think, disturbs, understand,
listen saying: to tell, answers relational: are, has, been, to be, is, become, means verbal groups: trying to be, try to persuade, wants to
be phrasal verbs: to get caught up, broke up, takes over,
turn against
phrase: for the school dependent clause: Even though Amy and Laurie are
best friends, As more then(than) half the school join The Wave, if you join the wave, because The Wave is popular, But Laurie is an individual
when: When Laurie approaches Amy how: differently, against, seriously, for a change with whom: with each other, with her boyfriend David
get caught up in, broke up with
The Wave, equal, equality, Laurie, Amy, David, follower, individual, independent
direct: Amy answers “It means that nobody is better then (than) anyone else for a change”
indirect: “It means that … change,” This is the way Amy thinks.
Quotes from the novel are used appropriately and referenced by page number.
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Tenor: Language for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers, commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
Statements are used to discuss the essay question and two rhetorical questions are used in the conclusion.
consistently objective through the use of 3rd person
certainty: Would you frequency: always, a lot of
inclination: wants to be
feelings, attitudes: just, bad, better, excellent, best friends, popular, smarter, jealous, immature, bright, disturbs, only, truth, seriously
idioms: to get caught up in names: David, Amy, Laurie
The writer is positioned as an authority on the subject and this is appropriate. The third person has been used effectively to describe the characters’ thoughts and actions from an objective point of view and this is also appropriate for a discussion essay. The conclusion demonstrates that the student is beginning to understand how rhetorical questions can engage the interest of the audience.
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Mode:
Language for
creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
abstractions: The only thing that disturbs Laurie
cause: As more than half the school time, place, manner: When Laurie approaches Amy, But
Laurie is an individual non-human: This (the way Amy thinks), It (The Wave) human: Amy and Laurie, Laurie, Amy, Everyone who is
involved in the Wave
Human elements are foregrounded in most instances and this is appropriate for the genre and the specific essay question.
Introduction is present although it could introduce the discussion more clearly. Similarly, topic sentences only introduce the content of two paragraphs.
primary: mainly simple present, past and future secondary: some past continuousChoices and construction of tenses are accurate and appropriate for a discussion essay.
Active and passive voices used appropriately and accurately.
Handwriting legible, spelling and punctuation are accurate with some minor problems with punctuation of direct speech.
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Sophie: PERSONAL REFLECTION(Oral Presentation Script)
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IMAGE OF JESUS Year 10 Religion
TASK: You are to present before the class your personal image of Jesus.
CRITERIA: Your presentation mustInclude references to Mark's Gospel /7
Show an understanding of Jesus' words and actions /7
Be interesting and clear /6
COMMENT:
Religion OralHow I see Jesus
Everyone sees Jesus in a different way, physically and what he is like in the inside.Not he's guts and blood bus he's feelings and emotions. Today I am going to tell youwhat I think Jesus is like in the inside.To me Jesus is just like a normal man. Even though he may have different qualities Ibelieve that he is like an everyday man.
Jesus is a special man. Throughout the gospel of Mark He has achieved a greatnumber of things. Jesus was a helping man and even now after he has died and risenhe is still a huge help to many people. Today people turn to Jesus when times gettough. They ask Jesus for help and for forgiveness. Jesus does not directly give peoplehelp but he helps lead them to it.In the gospel of mark chapter 1: 29-34 " Jesus heals many at Simon's house". Duringthis section Jesus heals Simon's mother in-law who had a fever. Today if a loved oneis lying in hospital bed or if they are sick that person often turns to Jesus to help thesick persons get over or overcome their sickness no matter hoe serious it is.
Jesus was a very kind man. Kind enough to heal a paralytic, chapter 2: 1-12. WhenJesus was around people did not go near the sick people especially those who wereparalytics.
Even though Jesus was able to perform these miracles, I still believe that he was thesame as a normal man. I believe this as just before Jesus died, chapter 15: 33-41, heyells out " My God, My God, why have you forsaken me?" This truly means he wasnormal not a magical person that can save himself and others from anything bad thatmay happen in the world.In conclusion to me Jesus was a normal men, he was a kind man, a loving man, acaring man and a truthful man. Jesus is a man that will always be there for me throughthe good times and the bad times…
Thankyou.
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Evidence for Scaling
Sophie: PERSONAL REFLECTION (Oral Presentation Script
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about the
students? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, One of the
main arguments, The principle cause of the increase
phrases and dependent clauses of time, place, manner: Born in 1898
phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a result of the rain..; Led by Nelson Mandela, South Africa..
non finite clauses action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil topic words: Antarctica, Pollution initiate and close interactions: less
formulaic, formulaic expressions, gestures ask and answer questions participate in song, rhyme, chorus, reading
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars,
premolars, incisors composition (whole part): tooth: enamel,
dentine, pulp, nerve. conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, or, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clause: The team, having seen
the results, felt…; Having seen the results, the team…
level of scaffolding
The text is a script for an oral presentation that was submitted for assessment. It has a title which introduces the topic of the oral presentation and the first paragraph also performs this function. A series of statements about the topic follows with references to the Bible. Conclusion and thank you to the audience are also present.
conjunctions: Even though, In conclusion noun groups: Everyone time, place, manner: To me, In the gospel of Mark cause: Even though Jesus was able to perform these
miracles
topic words: Jesus
reference items: Everyone, a, he, the, he’s (his), I, you, they, them, it, many, a loved one, that person, the sick person(s), their, those, these, this, himself, others, anything, me, there
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: Jesus/a normal man/ an
everyday man/ a special man/ a helping man/ a very kind man/the same as a normal man/ a kind man/a loving man/ a caring man/a truthful man, physically/in the inside, feelings/emotions, think/believe, died/risen, good times/bad times
words that go together: no matter, the good times and the bad times
word sets: hospital bed, sick, sickness, serious, heal, paralytics, fever
classification: sick people: paralytics
linking: and, but, or binding: even though, after, when, if, as relative clauses: Simon’s mother in-law who had a
fever, those who were paralytics, not a magical person that can save himself, a man that will always be there for me
projection: I am going to tell you what, I believe that, I still believe that
non-finite clause: to help
Written assessment task provided with instructions and assessment criteria.
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, all day, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: subtract, divide, peered, scanned,
demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, shouted stated,
asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the weather
was bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is commonly thought, Studies
have shown
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
what he is like in the inside, Not he’s (his) guts and blood bus (but) he’s (his) feelings and emotions, different qualities, an everyday man, a special man, the gospel of Mark, a great number of things, a helping man, a huge help to many people, the gospel of mark chapter 1: 29-34, Simon’s mother in-law, a loved one, the sick person(s) their sickness, a very kind man, those who were paralytics, these miracles, the same as a normal man, a magical person that can save himself and others from anything bad that may happen in the world, a normal men (man), a kind man, a loving man, a caring man and a truthful man, a man that will always be there for me
just like, kind enough to heal a paralytic, the same
miracles, feelings, emotions, a loved one, sickness, paralytic, forgiveness
action: achieved, died, risen, turn, give, heals, lying, help, overcome, go, save
mental (sensing): sees, think, believe, forsaken saying: tell, ask relational: is, have, get, happen, means verbal groups: am going to tell, helps lead, able to
perform phrasal verbs: get over, yells out, be there for
phrase: for help and forgiveness dependent clause: when times get tough, if a loved one
is lying in a hospital bed or if they are sick, Even though Jesus was able to perform these miracles, as just before Jesus died
when: Today, even now, still, after he has died, During this section, often, When Jesus was around, just before, through the good times and the bad times
where: in (on) the inside, Throughout the gospel of Mark, to Jesus, to it, In the gospel of Mark, at Simon’s house, in (a) hospital bed, near the sick people
how: in a different way, physically, just like a normal man, like an everyday man, directly
gospel, Jesus, Mark, miracles, heal, died and risen, forgiveness, My God, paralytic
direct: he yells out “My God, My God, why have you forsaken me?”
reported: They ask Jesus for help and for forgiveness
direct: In the gospel of mark chapter 1: 29-34 “ Jesus heals many at Simon’s house”.
indirect: Throughout the gospel of Mark, Kind enough to heal a paralytic, chapter 2: 1-12
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Tenor: Language for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, tend to, might be able to frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they
forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meaning: feelings, attitudes: unfortunately,
importance, outstanding idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms,
humour names to refer to people culturally specific references
verbal elements: intonation, volume, pace, word stress,
tone, pronunciation, and other sound patterns pronunciation of foreign words
non verbal elements: body language, eye contact, physical
response
appropriate tenor for the context
The presentation script is a series of statements expressed in simple and complex sentences.
subjective: To me, I believe objective: Today people turn to Jesus
certainty: I think, may have, may happen frequency: still, often, through the good times and the bad
times, always
feelings, attitudes: just, normal, everyday, special, a great number of things, tough, still, even, help, forgiveness, directly, lying in (a) hospital bed, serious, kind enough, especially, truly, no matter, loving, caring, truthful
idioms, humour: the good times and the bad times, guts, a huge help, a loved one, be there for me
names: Jesus, Simon, Mark, My God cultural references: Jesus, the gospel of Mark, Simon’s
house, God
The student has used an informal and subjective tenor which is appropriate for a personal reflection although the use of ‘guts and blood’ is a less delicate choice for a formal presentation.
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Mode:
Language for
creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, haven’t played, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by
the heavy rain.
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, physical objects, layout, tables, print text and spoken text
abstractions: In conclusion cause: Even though he may have different qualities, Even
though Jesus was able to perform these miracles time, place, manner: Today, To me, Throughout the gospel
of Mark, In the gospel of mark chapter 1: 29-34, During this section, When Jesus was around
non-human: Not he’s (his) guts and blood, This (Jesus’ cry),
human: Everyone, Jesus, They (people), I
Sentences have been foregrounded in a variety of ways, though with limited foregrounding of abstractions which would be more appropriate. Circumstances of location in time are used appropriately to make comparisons between modern times and Jesus’ life and actions. Personal pronouns foreground the student’s personal opinion and references to sections of the Bible are appropriately introduced.
The text well organised with an elementary introduction and conclusion and appropriate elaboration of each statement made. The language is very simple and generally accurate. The text inappropriately moves between spoken and written modes
primary: mainly present, simple past and some future secondary: has achieved, has died, risen (not used
appropriately)Choice of tenses is accurate and appropriate in most cases although some difficulties with the use and construction of secondary tenses are evident.
Active voice used as is appropriate when describing actions giving personal opinions.
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALES 10 AND 11
Scale 10 Scale 11GENRE: Outcome 10.1
Communicates in a wide range of social situations and a range of factual and literary genres and reflects on these in an elementary way.
Outcome 11.1Communicates confidently in a range of social situations and a wide range of factual and literary genres and reflects on these in a more informed way.
Text in Context
demonstrates understanding of link between purpose, structure and major language features of factual genres
constructs longer, more complex factual genres: arguments, recounts, explanations
constructs simple multimodal texts: webpage constructs longer story genres awareness of variations in story genres: evaluation and
coda stages in narratives compares folk tales with Dreaming stories
demonstrates a good understanding of link between purpose, structure and major language features of factual genres
constructs a wide range of factual genres expected in the various learning areas
analyses and combines information from more than one source in constructing well organised, longer and complex examples of factual genres
begins to use variations in story genres incorporates evaluation and flashback in narratives constructs poetry and dialogue more independently
Language uses alternative grammatical elements to avoid repetitiveness
begins to use rhetorical questions in oral arguments forms complex sentences using wider range of binding
conjunctions uses relative pronouns with greater choice and
accuracy uses a wider range of conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs uses small sets of synonyms and antonyms chooses a wider range of vocabulary based on
composition chooses a wider range of vocabulary based on
classification
foregrounds phrases and dependent clauses in a range of genres
uses diagrams, pictures, headings and subheadings in reports
uses a small range of alternatives to conjunctions to organise formal oral and written texts
uses rhetorical questions in an argument forms complex sentences using the range of binding
conjunctions uses relative pronouns confidently and accurately uses confidently conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs uses with some confidence text reference items chooses from a wider range of synonyms chooses from a wider range of antonyms chooses a wider range of vocabulary based on
composition
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chooses a wider range of vocabulary based on classification
FIELD Outcome 10.2Understands and uses a range of vocabulary that constructs everyday, non-technical fields and is developing greater control of technical fields.
Outcome 11.2Understands and uses a wide range of vocabulary that constructs everyday, non-technical fields and has developed greater control of a small range of technical fields.
Text in context
communicates confidently about less familiar fields maintains a consistent level of technicality, clumsy at
times, using a wider range of vocabulary begins to tell and write more elaborate and complex
narrative texts begins to incorporate other perspectives and ideas in
arguments deals with poems, allegories, legends and newspaper
articles mainly at literal level
communicates with increasing confidence about a wider range of fields, both technical and non-technical
maintains a consistent level of technicality by choosing from a wider range of vocabulary
incorporates with some confidence other perspectives and ideas in arguments
begins to construct more confidently narrative texts which construct a more elaborate and complex world
understands a narrow range of texts making meanings beyond a literal level
Language begins to make more delicate choices in using verbs expressing action processes
begins to make more delicate choices in noun groups expressing the participants
uses phrases expressing the manner of an action expands noun groups by using more delicate choices of
describers, classifiers and qualifiers chooses from a wider range of vocabulary to recount,
summarise or paraphrase uses technical and everyday meanings of a small range
of common words uses a small range of technical nominalisations uses direct and reported speech confidently and
accurately
makes more delicate choices of verbs expressing action processes
makes more delicate choices in noun groups expressing the participants
uses phrases expressing the manner of an action expands noun groups by using more delicate choices of
describers, classifiers and qualifiers constructs technical fields by using technical verbs
expressing action processes constructs technical fields by using technical noun
groups expressing the participants uses technical phrases expressing the cause of an
action chooses from a wider range of vocabulary to recount,
summarise or paraphrase uses with some confidence the varied technical and
everyday meanings of a range of common words uses with accuracy verbs expressing cause
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Scale 10 Scale 11
TENOROutcome 10.3Constructs texts confidently in a range of contexts, particularly familiar ones, is developing control in a range of more formal contexts and begins to reflect critically on the texts and contexts.
Outcome 11.3Constructs texts confidently in familiar contexts, has increased control in a range of more formal contexts and reflects critically with some confidence on the texts and contexts.
Text in context
interacts confidently in casual conversation in a wide range of situations
understands more clearly how the same language choices vary interpersonally depending on the situation
chooses language beyond narrow formulaic models for more formal contexts
expresses an opinion appropriately begins to speak or write from another point of view maintains the appropriate tenor in longer texts uses with some confidence a small range of common
colloquialisms and idioms discuss in simple ways and for a small range of texts
how visual images and language construct stereotypes, bias and prejudice
chooses with some confidence a wider range of expressions, beyond the formulaic, for more formal contexts
expresses own viewpoint speaks or writes with limited confidence from another’s
viewpoint maintains the appropriate tenor in informal and a range
of more formal contexts uses with some confidence a range of common
colloquialisms or idioms
reflects critically, with some confidence and for a small range of texts, on how visual images and language construct stereotypes, bias and prejudice
Language begins to reflect critically on interpersonal choices, being assertive rather than aggressive
aware that the degree of obligation depends on who says it to whom
uses a range of simple forms of language expressing modality with a greater degree of accuracy
chooses more delicately from a range of synonyms appropriate to the tenor of the context
begins to identify how meanings can be made either subjectively or objectively
identifies and uses variation in intonation, tone, volume, pacing and emphasis
pronounces most known words accurately and stresses appropriate syllable
can predict quite accurately how unfamiliar words are pronounced
reflects critically, with some confidence, on interpersonal choices, taking into account body language, tone and volume
understands that the degree of obligation depends on who says it to whom
uses a greater range of simple forms of modality chooses with greater confidence, with known people, a
small range of more indirect language chooses more delicately from a range of synonyms
appropriate to the tenor of the context chooses a range of colloquialisms or idioms begins to use subjective and simple objective
expressions of modality identifies and uses intonation, tone, volume, pacing and
emphasis accurately and appropriately most of the time pronounces most known words clearly and stresses the
appropriate syllable can predict how unfamiliar words are pronounced
MODE Outcome 10.4Identifies and discusses confidently and critically a range of features of texts, and constructs a wide range of short coherent texts.
Outcome 11.4Identifies and discusses critically and technically the major features of a range of texts, and constructs a range of longer coherent texts.
Text in context
begins to have control over what is foregrounded in a genre, and organises text accordingly
constructs longer and more complex texts using other media, still requiring scaffolding
identifies and discusses with some confidence meanings made in a range of multimodal texts
demonstrates a critical understanding of a narrow range of cultural references in multimodal texts
understands clearly that what is foregrounded in a genre is meaningful, and organises text accordingly
uses more complex language elements to foreground in a small range of genres
constructs longer and more complex texts using other media
identifies and discusses critically and technically with some confidence the meanings made in a small range of multimodal texts
Language foregrounds simple phrases of manner, place or time in genres such as procedures
foregrounds simple dependent clauses in narratives begins to foreground causal elements in explanations
and discussions foregrounds confidently non-human elements in factual
genres organises with some confidence in increasingly
complex, logically ordered paragraphs chooses correct grammar most of the time when what is
foregrounded requires it understands better the relationship between intonation
and punctuation uses commas appropriately some of the time
foregrounds phrases of manner in procedures foregrounds phrases of place or time in narratives uses dependent clauses or phrases of cause foregrounds appropriately in explanations and
taxonomic reports foregrounds confidently generalised noun groups in
factual genres: explanations, arguments and reports constructs more complex topic sentences and
introduction in arguments and discussions begins to use rhetorical questions in written texts demonstrates with support greater control of speech
marks, commas and apostrophes for basic contractions and possession
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SOME KEY DIFFERENCES BETWEEN SCALE 10 AND SCALE 11AS EVIDENT IN THE STUDENTS’ SETS OF EVIDENCE
GENRE:Gretel and Sophie both appropriately use a range of cohesive resources in their reflections and discussions. Gretel uses small sets of synonyms and antonyms. (Scale 10) Sophie uses a wider range of synonyms and antonyms. (Scale 11)
FIELD:Gretel and Sophie both use a range of vocabulary, expanded nominal groups and phrases expressing the manner of actions. (Scale 10) Sophie makes more sophisticated choices in her use of action processes and circumstances of manner. (Scale 11)
TENOR:Both construct texts confidently and appropriately for the tenor. Gretel demonstrates understanding of non-literal meanings. (Scale 10) Sophie also demonstrates this understanding and uses more colloquialisms and idioms. (Scale 11)
MODE:Gretel and Sophie are both able to construct longer coherent texts. (Scale 11) Gretel chooses appropriately most of the time what to foreground in her texts so that they are coherent, (Scale 10) although she assumes that the reader understands some of her references, without making these explicit. Sophie demonstrates a greater control of foregrounding techniques, by constructing more complex introductions and topic sentences. (Scale 11)
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Rose : DISCUSSION ESSAY
Why did Amy and Laurie react differently to The wave? Refer to concepts such as equality and individualism in your response.
Although Laurie Saunders and Amy Smith are best friends they both have exteremly different
personalities. The two girls are competitive of each other to do and be better or to keep up to
the other’s level. They both have different values and views of life. Although they may have
some things in common such as being friends they also have many differences.
Laurie Saunders was against “the wave.” She dissaproved of it and choose not to take part.
Mainly this is because Laurie is more of an individual. She does not go along with things just
for the sake of it and because everyone else did it. She choose that instead of following the
wave to go against it because she followed her beliefs. On the other hand Amy choose to
follow the wave and go with the crowd. In a way Amy could have though of it as a way that
she could be better than Laurie. Amy strived to be better than Laurie although she was not as
much individual as Laurie was. An example of this is the fact that Amy chooses to smoke
where as Laurie is against it and instead chews on the end of her pen.
Although the two girls get along well there is alot that they do not have in common. One of
the reasons for this is because of the competition between each other. This is described in
the book. ‘Ever since Laurie had started dating David, Amy had wanted to date a football
player too. It sometimes bothered Laurie that underlying their friendship was a constant
competition for boys, grades, popularity, almost every thing one could compete for. Even
though they were best friends, that constant competition somehow prevented them from
being really close’ (p 22). This affected the different reactions from the girls of the wave
greatly.
In conclusion just because the two girls are best friends it does not mean they think or act
alike. They are two very different people which is why the wave affected them both in
different ways, they do not have the same mentality. In my opinion even the best of friends
will not always be there for you, Nevertheless Sometimes it is also an advantage of having
friends that are different to you because you can also see situations from thier point of view
and not only your own.
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Rose: DISCUSSION ESSAY
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a
result of the rain; non finite clauses topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary, dominant,
recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since, when,
whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which was
completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The results
demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Introduction, two paragraphs of discussion and conclusion present.
conjunctions: In conclusion noun groups: Laurie Saunders cause: Although the two girls get along well,
Although Laurie Saunders and Amy Smith are best friends
reference items: they, The two girls, each other, the other’s level, They both, some things, she, it, things, everyone else, her, this, her, One of the reasons for this, them both, my, you, thier (their), your own
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: follow/go against, in
common/differences, against/dissaproved (disapproved)/ not go along, follow/go with the crowd, different/alike/same
words that go together: best friends, follow the crowd, take part, go along, for the sake of it, get along, the best of friends, be there for, point of view
word sets: personalities, values, views of (on) life, individual, beliefs, mentality, competitive, competition
conjunctions: On the other hand, Nevertheless, An example of this
linking: and, or binding: Although, such as, because, instead, where
as (whereas), and because relative clauses: friends that are different to you, two
very different people which is why the wave affected them both in different ways, She choose (chose) that instead of following the wave, the fact that Amy chooses to smoke
non-finite clauses: to do and be better, to keep up with the other’s level, being friends, instead of following the wave, an advantage of having (to have) friends that are different to you, to be better than Laurie
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers: a
book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty, risk,
capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd, look
it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
exteremly (extremely) different personalities, the other’s level, different values and views of life, some things in common such as being friends, a way that she could be better than Laurie, not as much individual as Laurie, the fact that Amy chooses to smoke, the end of her pen, alot (a lot) that they do not have in common, One of the reasons for this, the competition between each other, the different reactions from the girls of (to) the wave
better, best, not as much … as, more
differences, beliefs, values, views, reasons, competition, reactions, mentality, point of view
action: do, followed, smoke, chew, affected, act, see mental (sensing): disapproved, choose (chose),
though (t), think relational: are, have, being, was, is, be, mean verbal groups: strived to be phrasal verbs: to keep up to (with), to take part, to
go along with, to go against, be there for
verbs: affected phrase: for you, for the sake of it, One of the
reasons for this dependent clause: Although Laurie Saunders and
Amy Smith are best friends, Although they may have some things in common such as being friends, because Laurie is more of an individual, and because everyone else did it, because she followed her beliefs, although she was not as much (of an) individual as Laurie was, Although the two girls get along well, because of the competition between each other, just because the two girls are best friends, because you can also see situations from thier (their) point of view
when: Sometimes, not always where: to the other’s level, on the end of her pen, in
the book how: better, in common, against, better than Laurie,
not as much (of an) individual as Laurie, In a way, well, greatly, alike, in different ways, different to you, from thier (their) point of view, (from) your own
with whom: with the crowd
go with the crowd, be there for you
The Wave, Laurie, Amy, individual, common, differences, competitive, competition
direct: This is described in the book. (Followed by long quote)
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Tenor: Language for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers, commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they forced,
demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer, excellent,
naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour culturally specific references: dressed in
black names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The text contains statements expressed in simple and complex sentences. This is appropriate for a discussion essay. subjective: In my opinion (only used once in the
conclusion – all other statements are made objectively)
certainty: may have, In a way, could be better, will not, can see
frequency: Mainly, always, sometimes
feelings, attitudes: not only, just, exteremly (extremely) different, better, against, disapproved, strived, get along, greatly, alike, advantage, even
idioms, humour: for the sake of it, go with the crowd cultural references: The wave names: Laurie Saunders, Amy Smith, David
The writer assumes that the teacher as the reader has contextual knowledge and consequently, “The Wave” is not defined or described. The writer is positioned as an authority on the text which is appropriate for a discussion essay.
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Mode:
Language for
creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the other
hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic sentences
and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was sleeping,
wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some minor
flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by the
heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
abstractions: An example of this, This (competition), This (referring to long quote)
conjunctions: In conclusion, just because cause: One of the reasons for this, Although Laurie
Saunders and Amy Smith are best friends, Although they may have some things in common such as being friends, Although the two girls get along well
time, place, manner: Mainly, In my opinion, In a way human: The two girls, They both, They, Laurie
Saunders, She, Amy
Sentences are foregrounded in a variety of ways. The choices are appropriate and the variety is successful in maintaining the reader’s interest.
Paragraphs are clearly defined through the use of topic sentences and the introduction clearly signals the content of the discussion. The conclusion summarises the content of the discussion. The student has successfully used abstractions, conjunctions and dependent clauses to construct a cohesive text.
primary: have, was, disapproved (mainly simple present and simple past)
secondary: could have though(t)Choice of tense is appropriate for a discussion essay and the student demonstrates only a few minor problems with consistency of tenses.
Active voice which is appropriate for the context.
Understanding of print conventions is well developed with only very minor spelling errors evident. Single inverted commas used for quote and apostrophe used appropriately. Elementary understanding of how to use commas is evident.
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Kaio : REFLECTION
CONSIDERED RESPONSE “ERIN BROCKOVICH”I still have the newspaper articles about Ed and I winning the PG and E case. I can not believe that back then I
looked so lean and beautiful, even with three children. I am cherishing them as my memories and so that my
children can look back and acknowledge my achievements that I accomplished during the years. Who would
have thought that a single mother of three would take on a multi million dollar company like PG and E out to
court and win! The PG and E case was the largest case I undertook. I was devastated while investigating that
the town people of Hinkley, even the young children were slowly suffering and dying for all these years without
knowing why.
It has been more than ten years since the last that I worked as a paraprofessional lawyer. I miss working with
people and especially, I miss working with Ed; my lawyer boss, who believed in me, guided me and gave me the
opportunity to reveal my talents, while overlooking my behaviour. I was also able to prove to the others that I
was more than just a pretty face. During the PG and E case, I achieved respect from the other workers and the
community, which made a huge impact on my life.
It is now two o’clock on a Sunday afternoon, as I watch outside my window, I can see young children playing
with their families. When I stop to think back, I realise that my children and I never had a family day, because I
was too involved with my work. I never made time to spend quality time with them. I was so committed to work
that I left my children in the care of my former lover, George. Am very grateful for his help, without him I would
not have been able to manage. However, our relationship deteriorated because of my work and selfish acts.
He now lives in California, but we are still good friends till this very day.
Looking back, I have no regrets on the things I chose and done. I was able to help people and at the same time
earn money. If I had not worked, I would not have been able to raise and provide for my children’s future. Even
though we were short of money we were lucky to be alive and happy.
Today, I live on my own in a small town. My children are all living overseas. Two of them are lawyers and the
other had just finished her final year in college. I am so proud of them, because of the work that I had done, it
has played a part in my children’s choices for their careers. Besides my family, I now only have a few people
who would consider as friends. Unlike back then, where I became friends with most of my PG and clients.
They were friendly and helpful people and we developed a trust in each other. Even though they were sick,
they did not let the problem stand in the way of their normal activities. Though it was heartbreaking for me to
gradually see them dying in the hospital beds, especially the young children. I start to weep when I think about
those who suffered. It makes me realise how precious life is and how easily it could be taken away from you.
I am happy and lucky to have lived for this long and to have accomplished what I have wanted in life. I achieved
success and respect from the community, and my family, who struggled with me and never doubted me, instead
showed me love and support during those times. Unlike those who died and were unable to fulfill their dreams.
Stage 2 ESL
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Evidence for Scaling Kaio - REFLECTION
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As
a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which was
completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The results
demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
The text has six paragraphs of reflection written from the point of view of the main character of the film. It moves from the present to the past and back to the present, incorporating feelings, thoughts, memories of the past.
time, place, manner: Looking back, Today
topic words: I
reference items: my, It, me, her, they, them, those, their, the other
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: achieved, accomplished words that go together: stand in the way; fulfill
their dreams; more than just a pretty face; quality time; paraprofessional lawyer
word sets: heartbreaking, weep; think back, memories, regrets; case, court, investigating, win
classification: careers: paraprofessional lawyer, lawyers, my lawyer boss; achievements: success, respect; families: children, young children, my children, relationship, my former lover, George;
conjunctions: However, Instead
linking: and, but binding: since, because, while, if, Even though,
Though, so that, When, even, Besides, without relative clauses: my family, who struggled with me,
Ed; my lawyer boss, who believed in me, guided me and gave me the opportunity to reveal my talents, I achieved respect from the other workers and the community, which made a huge impact on my life, Unlike those who died, I was devastated while investigating, that…
non-finite clauses: Looking back, …dying in hospital beds, while investigating, without knowing why, working with people, overlooking my behaviour
projection: I can not believe that back then, Who would have thought that a single mother; I realise that my children and I never had a family day, I miss working with…
There was class discussion about the achievements of ERIN BROCKOVICH and students were taught how to write a reflection.
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers: a
book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty, risk,
capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned, demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
The newspaper articles about Ed and I winning the PG and E case, a single mother of three, a multi million dollar company like PG an E, The town people of Hinkley, Ed; my lawyer boss, more than just a pretty face, my former lover, George, her final year in college; people, money, no regrets, the largest case I undertook, a family day, quality time, Sunday afternoon, young children playing with their families, our relationship, my children’s future, a part in my children’s choices for their careers a trust, normal activities
The largest case, former lover
Achievements, choices, work, regrets, relationship, selfish acts, opportunity, huge impact, the care of my former lover, George, my children’s choices, trust, love, support, success, respect
action: had finished, was involved, left, win, earn, are (all) living, guided, looked, developed, see, dying, weep, suffered, died, fulfill, accomplished, take on, win, undertook, worked, guided, to reveal, deteriorated, struggled, showed
mental (sensing): can not believe, cherishing would have thought, realise, think, was devastated, watch, look back, acknowledge, knowing, miss, doubted, overlooking, to prove, consider, wanted
relational: have, am, was, were, is, played, are, became, developed
verbal groups: start to weep, were unable to fulfill, was able to help, would not have been able to manage, stop to think back, to have lived, to have accomplished, makes me realise
phrasal verbs: look back, take on, believed in, could be taken away, stand in the way, provide for
phrase: because of the work, for his help, for their careers
dependent clause: because I was too involved with my work, I was so committed to work that…, because of my work and selfish acts, if I had not worked, because of the work I had done, If I had not worked, so that my children can look back
when: more than ten years, during the PG and E case When I stop to think back, at the same time, Today, on a Sunday afternoon, till this very day, Looking back, where I became friends, for this long
where: in a small town, in the care of my former lover, George, outside my window, overseas, in my children’s choices, in the hospital beds, from the community
how: slowly, easily, on my own, with my work, as friends, gradually
with whom/what: with my work, without him, with them, with most of my PG and E clients
paraprofessional lawyer, lawyer boss, community, clients, case, multi million dollar company
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Tenor: Language for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers, commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they forced,
demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer,
excellent, naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour
culturally specific references: dressed in black
names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
Uses a question for the purpose of making a statement with emphasis and set the genre as a reflection. The text unfolds as a series of statements recounting and reflecting on past and present events. subjective: I am happy and lucky, I achieved success
certainty: can not believe, would consider, who would have thought, would take on, able to prove, would not have been able
frequency: never; still, more than just, feelings, attitudes: grateful, happy, lucky, even, happy,
so proud, good friends, doubted, showed, too, so, devastated, cherishing, lucky, heartbreaking, very, all, especially
idioms, humour: short of money names: George, Ed
The writer has chosen reflective vocabulary in line with the genre of the text. The language used is emotive and events are presented from the point of view of the main character. These choices are appropriate for a personal reflection.
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Mode:
Language for
creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was sleeping,
wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by the
heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and visual
patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, layout, tables, spoken text and print text
conjunctions: Unlike back then, where …, cause : However, Even though, Though, Unlike those
who died time, place, manner: During the PG and E case,
Looking back, Today, As I watch outside my window, When I stop to think back, Besides my family
non-human: The PG and E case human: I, Who, He (George), My children, Two of them
(my children), They ( my PG and (E) clients)
In a reflection, it is expected that there would be human foregrounding and comparisons made with the past to the present. The dominance of human elements and in particular “I” is appropriate for a personal reflection.
The introduction effectively signals the text as reflection and relates it to the story line of the stimulus text, allowing the audience to predict what the content will be. The topic sentences are suitable and effectively introduce the content of each paragraph. The concluding paragraph returns to what was presented in the introduction – the achievements of the author.
primary: full range of primary tenses used secondary: accurately constructed and appropriately
usedThe student demonstrates a sound ability to choose appropriately from primary and secondary tenses.
active: active voice is used throughoutAs a reflection it is expected that the author would move in and out of the present using the active voice.
typewritten, 1 ½ line spacing, indenting of paragraphs inconsistent, title, appropriate punctuation.
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Kaio: GENRE Power Point PresentationEvidence for Scaling
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Kaio: GENRE Power Point PresentationABORTION
Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre: Text in
Context
interprets analyses and constructs multimodal genres compares choices for print and online
advertisements compares local and overseas multimodal genres writes short dialogues for sitcom constructs and presents a multimodal text writes and illustrates a causal explanation : sea
breezes includes charts and timelines in recounts enacts main events in a story reads and constructs environmental texts: road
signs, advertising
explores how texts are organised factual books: tables of contents, indexes,
alphabetical listings, titles, headings, sub-headings storybooks: front cover, title page, illustrations, text digital encyclopaedias: search or find, contents,
index
constructs multimodal text: power point presentation, using graphic visual images, charts and words to discuss the topic of abortion
digital encyclopaedias: used to research the topic of the presentation, as well as printed factual texts and online media
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Genre:Language
Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: What about the students? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, One of the main
arguments, The principle cause of the increase phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner: Born in 1898, When we had finished phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a
result of the rain..; As he struggled to survive,.. topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams, labels, font,
size, indentations initiate and close interactions: formulaic expressions,
gestures ask and answer questions participate in song, rhyme, chorus, reading
builds cohesion: reference items: my, they, him, this, there, the vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: make a complaint classification: teeth: canines, molars, premolars,
incisors composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel, dentine,
pulp, nerve conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, or, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since, when,
whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which was
completed in 1869,……… projection: Scientists believe that…, The results
show that….
level of scaffolding
The presentation unfolds as discussion of the issue of abortion, through the use of words, images, diagrams and illustrations.
rhetorical questions: used to organise the contents of the presentation and pose the question: “Are there suitable options available for pregnant women and how do they choose the one (alternative) that is right for them?” In the body of the presentation, two more questions are used: “ What is an Abortion?” and “How abortion is perceived by society?”
topic words: Trimesters of Pregnancy, Legalisation, Abortion in the third world, Religious Views, Side Effects, Alternatives, Bibliography
layout: Title slide with topic question and large graphic image. Each subsequent slide has the same background, a bold heading and sub-headings. Illustrations with titles are used on two slides. A labeled diagram is also used. The fonts, colours and sizes used for the written text are clear and easy to read.
reference items: they, the one, them, an, the vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms: options/alternatives, views/perceived, PRO LIFE/PRO CHOICE
words that go together: pregnancy, trimester, motherhood, family; Legalisation, Law
classification: Law: Church, State; Alternatives: Adoption, Keep the child
composition: Pregnancy: Trimesters: First, Second, Third
Presentation was constructed independently without any teacher input.
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Field:Text in Context
Meaning understands multimodal texts containing
challenging issues understands multimodal texts making
meaning beyond the literal: film, newspaper articles
key vocabulary in multimodal texts: environmental print: logos, signs, numbers visual texts: diagrams, illustrations,
photographs
issues: has accessed a range of online texts to research the topic of this presentation
non literal: uses graphic images, diagrams and illustrations, as well as words to make meanings
visual texts: has used photographs to convey the cruelty of animal experimentation and a chart with the title ‘Important uses of Animal Experimentation,’ however the meanings made by this chart are not clear
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Field:Language
Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, all day, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, government, capability
verbs: action: subtract, peered, scanned, demolish mental (sensing): knew, believe knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, shouted stated,
asserted relational: are, became, has, consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the weather
was bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, with a fine brush, like a
leopard with whom, what: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary: digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
visual meanings colour, symbols: logos, charts: timetables,
diagrams, illustrations
For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.Suitable options, pregnant women, the one (alternative) that is right, trimesters of Pregnancy, an Abortion, The State Law, the third world, Religious Views, The Church Law, Side Effects
Options, alternative, Abortion, Legislation, Religious Views, Side Effects, motherhood, choice, regret, adoption, faith, marriage, murder, death, pro life, pro choice
action: keepmental (sensing): choose, perceivedrelational: are, is
nouns: Side Effectsphrase: for pregnant women,, for them, by society
where: in the third world
Abortion, Legalisation, Pro Life, Pro Choice, Pregnancy, Trimesters, Adoption, Law
visual meanings: image of a foetus, diagram of trimesters of pregnancy, illustrations of pregnant women and a graphic that illustrates the pro life/pro choice debate have been used effectively; background image of scales effectively signals the text as a discussion of both sides of the question
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Tenor:Text in Context
non-verbal resources reflects on non-verbal resources: eye contact,
distance, gesture, touch
stereotypes and audience: explores how visual images and language construct
stereotypes, bias, and prejudice analyses the construction of a cartoon character reflects on the audience of a multimodal text identifies who gets represented in advertising and
who does not identifies how groups of people are represented in
television commercials suggests alternative representations chooses the appropriate tenor in a range of formal
and informal contexts
classroom discourse raises hand, takes turns, gaze, distance, gesture,
touch
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Tenor: LanguageLanguage
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements questions offers commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am sure, tend to,
might be able to frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meaning: feelings, attitudes: unfortunately idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour culturally specific references names to refer to people
verbal elements: intonation, volume, pace, word stress, tone,
pronunciation, and other sound patterns pronunciation of foreign words compares characters from multimodal texts use of
verbal elements
non verbal elements: body language, eye contact, physical response
appropriate tenor for the context
A complex question is posed at the beginning of the presentation and nominal groups are used to present the key issues. It is unclear if the student is posing a question or making a statement in: “How abortion is perceived by society?”
objective: Objective language has been used to establish the text as factual rather than personal.
The producer has strategically avoiding the use of modality or language expressing feelings and attitudes in the written text.
Visual images are used to express feelings and attitudes, particularly the illustrations of a pregnant woman surrounded by questions and the other illustration which shows a pregnant woman looking confused and distressed amongst a group of pro life/pro choice protesters.
The producer of the presentation is positioned as an expert through the use of academic and scientific language which is appropriate to the text. Factual objective presentation.
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Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Mode: Text in
Context
communicates using media and mediums PowerPoint, digital projector, webpage, radio,
CD- ROM, sketches, graphs, map, email, telephone, maps, computer
constructs and critically analyses multimodal texts constructs a written or spoken text with
images and sound interprets the use of effects in films discusses simulation software cultural reference: gender, inclusion/exclusion technical choices television/radio item links between illustrations and verbal text cross sections, pie graph, tables, diagrams reads and draws a text with print identifies keys and buttons on software
PowerPoint, graphs, computer, webpages
verbal, sound, images: constructs and reads multimodal texts
software: MS Powerpoint used to construct slide show
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Mode: Language
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: size and placement of visual images and
verbal text abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on the
other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic sentences
and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was sleeping,
wanted to go, haven’t played, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some minor
flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by the
heavy rain.
print conventions: handwriting, abbreviations, spelling,
punctuation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images, sound,
light, physical objects, layout, tables, print text and spoken text
makes meanings in visual material, shadows, line thickness, arrows, perspective in 2-D and 3-D cross-sections and drawings
mathematical and map symbols
placement: centred question and image on title slide, centred title on each slide,
abstract elements: Trimesters of Pregnancy, Legalisation, Abortion in the third world, Religious Views, Side Effects, Alternatives,
The hypothesis for investigation predicts the content of the PP. Sub headings are used to organise the text, along with the background image of the scales which is used to link all the ideas together and inform the audience that abortion in being discussed objectively and that both sides of the debate are being ‘weighed up.’ The picture of the foetus is large and in full colour and the illustrations presented are in cartoon format.
The discussion question is effectively foregrounded as well as the major issues on both sides of the debate. The text lacks elaboration of those issues and the meanings made about Legalisation, Church Law, State Law and Abortion in the third world are unclear because of this.
Only primary tenses are used – information is presented in note form and this is appropriate for a visual text
Active and Passive voice used appropriately.
The bibliography covered 2 pages and was not set out correctly. It was divided into source sections not listed alphabetically.
PP was very visual with pictures included in the background. The title page had a picture which was explicit and predicted the content of the PP. The use of the hypothesis identified exactly what the PP was to cover. The print was large and easily seen. The pictures showed where they were published.
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Pieter : RESEARCH EVALUATION
Starting the research process was a little complicated because of the review plan. This was time consuming
because it needed the important information for the issue and relevant facts for answering the questions.
Although writing the plan was a great help in organising myself to complete something systematically. The
abstract section was simple since it was the focus questions and hypothesis in sentence form and the first
sentences for the introduction were easy after knowing some of concerns and accomplishments of Animal
Experimentation.
Admittedly, the experiences encountered for this research favoured frustration more than success. Searching
for most of the information wasted time through photocopying and reading irrelevant information. The internet
was a great help because it contained a wide source of information from other countries but was time
consuming, considering that many sites were inappropriate and pointless. Consequently, the survey conducted
was overwhelming and difficult by not knowing if the questions would be answered. Furiously, computers
caused problems because work could not load, the printer constantly stopped, surveys were too big to save on
disks and the computer from time to time crashed. Sending letters, for the first time, was the most challenging
part of the project because receiving 5 out 6 replies was overwhelming. Not caring about the 6th, it gave the
feeling of importance. Thankfully, many organizations are willing to help by giving information and posters. The
folio was well organised and contained a sufficient amount of information important to the project. From the
finished product, a sense of accomplishing anything resulted in the end.
This experience has been fulfilling, providing fresh things to learn and developing many new skills and
techniques that can be used for future studies. In doing this project it improved time management skills, reading,
note taking, researching, self-confidence and independence. Techniques were learnt on how to construct
surveys, writing up questions, listening to interviews and requesting information by just asking. The whole
experience has made an impact on writing essays or other documents by understanding nominalisation. This
effective method will certainly be used because it is an advantage in writing a great report. The papers given by
the teacher, which consisted of paragraphing skills and essay writing, have helped enhanced the major project
and definitely contributed to the development of writing better.
The aim of this project was to investigate the fundamental issues of Animal Experimentation. Exploring the
study of animal experimentation, the use of animals, the various advantages and disadvantages and to study
the alternatives. This project was to understand if vivisection is cruel, unnecessary or beneficial. Ultimately
helping seek the answer to the hypothesis “Should Animal Experimentation be Eliminated?”
Choosing a topic was complicated because of two reasons, whether it was good enough to pursue of if there
was a sufficient amount of information for it to made a decent project. The choices were Olympic Games,
poverty, racism or animal cruelty. Each issue was investigated to find the problems the topic would have and the
outcomes that could have been achieved. Finally, animal cruelty was the choice, which provided numerous facts
and was an interesting issue to attempt. For the other topics, Olympic Games seemed boring, and surveying or
interviewing anyone about racism and poverty would have been hard on them.
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For the topic on animal cruelty, the exploration of such issues as animals kept in horrid confinements as slaves,
kept in zoos, slaughtered for food or body parts and course animal experimentation were my gaols for a project.
Afterwards the teacher explained that they could all be individual topics. From the choices, Animal
Experimentation was the finale decision because not only was it interesting, it was because of wanting expose
the reality of animals used for research to the unaware public. The first hypothesis was “Is Animal
Experimentation necessary” but changed to “Should Animal Experimentation be Eliminated?” to be more
specific in answering the hypothesis and focus questions.
The methods of research varied to borrowed books from school and public libraries, photocopied newspapers
and internet searched. These sources were used for general information that could help understand the use of
animals for research. Other sources came from answered letters comprised of fact sheets, brochures and old
newspapers containing different information. Statistical facts were from the surveys constructed and new
information from interviews conducted.
The process for this project was very pleasing. With the amount of time given, they were spent intelligently and
always kept the work up to date. Experiencing the experiments by observing and examining would certainly
make this project greater for a better look at the cruelty or the importance. From doing this project, it has helped
gain sufficient information in which to resolve the issue on Animal Experimentation.
The information in this project was logically related to the guiding questions and hypothesis. However it could
definitely be improved if it was carried out again by more time. All in all the result turned out great.
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Evidence for Scaling Pieter EVALUATION OF RESEARCH
Language Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre:Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: And what about men? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, The principle
cause of the increase, One main argument, non finite clauses: Choosing a topic phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner: Born in 1898 phrases and dependant clauses of cause:
As a result of the rain; topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagram
builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, they, him, the, this,
these, all of the above, such examples vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: lodge a complaint word sets: gene, inherit, hereditary,
dominant, recessive classification: teeth: canines, molars. composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel.
conjunctions to join sentences or paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence, Conversely, In fact
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, but, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since,
when, whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which
was completed in 1869. projection: Scientists claim that..; The
results demonstrate that… non-finite clauses: Having seen the results,
level of scaffolding
Report on a process: introduction, each paragraph deals with a different part of the process and there is a conclusion.
conjunctions: Admittedly noun groups: The aim of this project, The methods
of research, This experience, The process for this project, The information in this project
non finite clauses: Choosing a topic, Starting the research process
cause: For the topic on animal cruelty
reference items: them, it, each, this, they, other, these, myself, the, a, something
vocabulary patterns: synonyms/antonyms: project/ topic/research,
advantages/disadvantages, Animal Experimentation/vivisection/animal cruelty, necessary/unnecessary, beneficial/cruel
words that go together: choosing a topic, the methods of research, borrow books, surveys constructed, interviews conducted, internet searched, time consuming, animal cruelty
word sets: research- surveying, investigate, the study, interview, research, topic, exploration, statistical facts, constructed, conducted, techniques; animal experimentation-animals, vivisection, animal cruelty, slaughtered, body parts
classification: skills: time management, reading, note-taking, researching, self-confidence, paragraphing, nominalisation, essay writing, independence; techniques: construct surveys, writing up questions, listening to interviews, requesting information; libraries: public, school
conjunctions: Ultimately, Finally, Afterwards, Consequently, Admittedly, However, All in all
linking: and, but, of (or) binding: if, because, because of, although, since,
after relative clauses: animal cruelty was the choice,
which provided numerous facts; the papers given by the teacher, which consisted of paragraphing skills and essay writing
projection: the teacher explained that….. non-finite clauses: in doing this project…., from
doing this project…, not caring about the 6th
The student was informed of the different aspects to be covered in the evaluation and had practice at paragraphing, nominalisation and essay writing.
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Field:Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, capability, potential
verbs: action: divide, peered, scanned,
demolished mental (sensing): knew, believe, knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, stated, asserted relational: are, became, has consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong
crowd, look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the flood was
bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, like a leopard with whom: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
referencing: direct: according to, the manager said indirect: It is widely thought, Studies show
* For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.
The aim of this project, the fundamental issues of animal experimentation, a sufficient amount of information important to the project; a decent project, the exploration of such issues as animals kept in horrid confinements as slaves, kept in zoos, slaughtered for food or body parts and of course animal experimentation, the reality of animals used for research, the unaware public, statistical facts, the experiences encountered for this research, sufficient information in which to resolve the issue on animal experimentation
too big, most challenging, writing better, more specific, better look, more time, great
cruelty, poverty, choice, exploration, confinements, experimentation, research, reality, information, accomplishments, method, process, product, importance, independence, nominalisation, development, experiments
action: provided, kept, slaughtered, used, varied, came, encountered, save, crashed, sending, gave
mental (sensing): seemed, to understand, knowing, caring
saying: explained relational: was, were, are, has, is, have helped
enhanced, favoured, contained verbal groups: have helped enhanced (tho
enhance), could have been achieved, would have been, wanting (to) expose, could help understand
phrasal verbs: carried out, turned out
verbs: contributed to, caused, resulted, improved, stopped, changed
phrase: Because of the review plan, because of wanting to expose, because of two reasons, From the finished product, With the amount of time given, From doing this project
dependent clause: because it needed the important information for the issue, by not knowing if the questions would be answered
when: Afterwards, again, always, from time to time, for the first time, in the end
where: in zoos, on disks how: by just asking, finally, constantly, definitely,
intelligently, systematically, in horrid confinements as slaves, from the surveys, from interviews conducted
Good enough, to make a decent project, turned out great, kept the work up to date
vivisection, hypothesis, animal experimentation
reported: the teacher explained that …..
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Tenor: Language
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements, questions, offers,
commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am
sure, might be able to, possibility frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they forced,
demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meanings: attitude, feelings: beautiful, prefer, excellent,
naughty, just, only, luckily, unfortunately, importance, outstanding
idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour culturally specific references: dressed in
black names to refer to people
appropriate tenor for the context
The text is written as a series of statements expressed in simple and compound sentences. The choice and complexity of speech functions is appropriate for this context.
subjective: very pleasing objective: It could definitely be improved, The aim
of this project, The exploration of such issues
certainty: would have, could have, could be, certainly, would have been, could definitely, definitely
frequency: always, obligation: should inclination: willing to help, wanting to expose
feelings, attitudes: Furiously, Thankfully, just, logically, overwhelming, difficult, easy important, frustration, not caring, important, intelligently, cruel, unnecessary
The vocabulary used is formal, reflective and factual. It is appropriate to the task and maintains objectivity throughout. The student has used modal resources effectively to express degrees of certainty and inclination and structured sentences to express opinions as facts. The writer is positioned as an authority on the topic, which is appropriate for an evaluation of a research project.
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Mode:
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: abstractions: The destruction of the
habitat conjunction in second place: Success,
on the other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas
human elements: specific We, general People
action verbs: Draw
appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic
sentences and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was
sleeping, wanted to go, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some
minor flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused
by the heavy rain.
print conventions and layout: handwriting abbreviations representing sounds with letters spelling: link to pronunciation and
visual patterns, spelling common and uncommon words, using prefixes and suffixes
punctuation: capitals, full stops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, semicolons, dashes, links to intonation
multimedia / multimodal:
abstractions: This experience, The aim of this project, The first hypothesis, The process for this project, The information in this project,
cause: Consequently, the survey conducted was …, From doing this project, From the finished product
time, place, manner: With the amount of time given, Finally, Afterwards, From the choices
non-human: The abstract section, The internet, The folio, This project, The choices, Each issue, The methods of research, These sources, Other sources, Statistical facts
non-finite clauses: Starting the research process, Searching for most of the information, This (Starting the research process), Exploring the study of animal experimentation, Choosing a topic, Experiencing the experiments, Sending letters
personal comment: Furiously, Thankfully, Admittedly
The paragraphs and sentences are foregrounded in a variety of ways, including abstractions, and non-human elements. Dependent non-finite clauses are often used to foreground the stages of the research process. By beginning sentences with words like furiously, the writer is foregrounding personal judgement and this is appropriate. The foregrounding of human elements appears to have been strategically avoided, to create a text that logically and factually evaluates the research project.
There is an introduction that identifies the content of the essay and the conclusion reflects upon the success of the task. The paragraphs each have a topic sentence that allows the reader to predict the content and topic sentences are followed by elaboration. Each paragraph deals with a separate issue and there is no overlapping.
primary: was, was complicated, explained, came, encountered, conducted, is
secondary: would have been, would be answered, has been fulfilling, have helped enhanced, has helped gain, could be improved
Student has good control over the primary and secondary tenses, mostly constructing them accurately and using them appropriately.
Both active and passive voices are used in the text. This choice is appropriate and contributes to the factual nature of the evaluation.
Typed in 1 ½ line spacing for ease of audience reading, title page and each page numbered. The punctuation and the spelling were accurate. Full stops, commas, question marks and quotation marks were used accurately. The paragraphs were clearly identified with an extra line left between them.
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Pieter : POWER POINT
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Evidence for ScalingPieter: Power Point Presentation on ANIMAL EXPERIMENTATION
Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Genre: Text in
Context
interprets analyses and constructs multimodal genres compares choices for print and online
advertisements compares local and overseas multimodal genres writes short dialogues for sitcom constructs and presents a multimodal text writes and illustrates a causal explanation : sea
breezes includes charts and timelines in recounts enacts main events in a story reads and constructs environmental texts: road
signs, advertising
explores how texts are organised factual books: tables of contents, indexes,
alphabetical listings, titles, headings, sub-headings storybooks: front cover, title page, illustrations, text digital encyclopaedias: search or find, contents,
index
constructs multimodal text: power point presentation, using graphic visual images, charts and words to argue that animal experimentation should be eliminated
digital encyclopaedias: used to research the topic of the presentation, as well as printed factual texts and online media
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Genre:Language
Language
for
achieving
different
purposes
schematic structure
organises the text: rhetorical questions: What about the students? conjunctions: Secondly, Finally, In addition noun groups: Another reason, One of the main
arguments, The principle cause of the increase phrases and dependent clauses of time, place,
manner: Born in 1898, When we had finished phrases and dependant clauses of cause: As a
result of the rain..; As he struggled to survive,.. topic words: Antarctica, Pollution action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil layout: subheadings, pictures, diagrams, labels, font,
size, indentations initiate and close interactions: formulaic expressions,
gestures ask and answer questions participate in song, rhyme, chorus, reading
builds cohesion: reference items: my, they, him, this, there, the vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms words that go together: make a complaint classification: teeth: canines, molars, premolars,
incisors composition (whole-part): tooth: enamel, dentine,
pulp, nerve conjunctions to join sentences or
paragraphs of a text: However, Therefore, Hence
joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, or, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, since, when,
whenever, though relative clauses: The Suez Canal, which was
completed in 1869,……… projection: Scientists believe that…, The results
show that….
level of scaffolding
The presentation unfolds as an argument in favour of the elimination of animal testing, through the use of words, a chart and graphic images.
rhetorical questions: used to organise the contents of the presentation and pose the question: “Should animal experimentation be eliminated?”
noun groups: Questions, Types of Research, Important use of Animal Experimentation, Alternatives
topic words: Animal Experimentation, Vivisection, Bibliography
layout: Title slide has a bold heading and a graphic Each subsequent slide has the same background, a bold heading and dot points for sub-headings. Graphics appear with text on most slides. A labeled chart is also used. The fonts, colours and sizes used for the written text are clear and easy to read.
reference items: we, the, their, such as vocabulary patterns:
synonyms/antonyms: Animal Experimentation/ Vivisection/Non-Animal Methods, advantages/disadvantages, techniques/practices, determine/understand
words that go together: medical, surgery, life threatening diseases
classification: Types of Research: Biomedical Rresearch, Product Testing, Genetic Engineering, Psychology Research, Weapon Testing, Medical Research; products: cosmetics, detergents; weapon testing: atomic blasts, shooting practices; tests: Skin Irritancy Test, Eye test; Alternatives: Computer Models, Tissue and Cell Culture, Human Studies, Technical Imaging, Non-Animal Methods of Product Testing
Presentation was constructed independently without any teacher input.
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Field:Text in Context
Meaning understands multimodal texts containing
challenging issues understands multimodal texts making
meaning beyond the literal: film, newspaper articles
key vocabulary in multimodal texts: environmental print: logos, signs, numbers visual texts: diagrams, illustrations,
photographs
issues: has accessed a range of online texts to research the topic of this presentation
non literal: uses graphic images and charts as well as words to make meanings
visual texts: has used photographs to convey the cruelty of animal experimentation and a chart with the title ‘ Important uses of Animal Experimentation,’ however the meanings made by this chart are not clear
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Field:Language
Language
for
expressing
ideas and
experiences
noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers:
a book, the pencil*, all day, the children in the water, the children living in the city, The medical discovery that has had the most impact
comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best
abstract and technical nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty,
risk, government, capability
verbs: action: subtract, peered, scanned, demolish mental (sensing): knew, believe knew,
understood, enjoyed, hated saying: said, laughed, shouted stated,
asserted relational: are, became, has, consists of,
represents, means verbal groups: want to play phrasal verbs: fell in with the wrong crowd,
look it up, put up with, put off, put out
causal relations: verbs: led to, brought on nouns: the result of the floods phrase: because of the heat dependent clause: because the weather
was bad
circumstances and clauses: when: when he arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, with a fine brush, like a
leopard with whom: with his friend
metaphors: Get it off your chest
topic specific/technical vocabulary: digest, high sugar levels, niacin
direct and reported speech: direct: She said, “I am going home.” reported: She said she was going home.
visual meanings colour, symbols: logos, charts: timetables,
diagrams, illustrations
For Scale 5 onward only more complex noun groups cited.Animal Experimentation, effects of diseases, surgical practices, the safety of products, types of research (see vocabulary patterns), holding devices, Important use of Animal Experimentation, Non-Animal Methods for product testing
Experimentation, Vivisection, effects, surgical practices, animal production, human consumption, movements, thoughts, use, Human Studies, Technical Imaging, Product Testing, safety
action: reduce, improve, lock (locked), disposed, controlled mental (sensing): understand, determinerelational: is, have, are, be, develop, indicate, had
verbs: reduce, improvenouns: effectsphrase: Dead animals from tests, for human consumption,
ready for the Eye Test
when: previouslywhere: in holding devices, in bins
(see vocabulary patterns)
visual meanings: graphic images of animals used in experiments have been used effectively
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Tenor:Text in Context
non-verbal resources reflects on non-verbal resources: eye contact,
distance, gesture, touch
stereotypes and audience: explores how visual images and language construct
stereotypes, bias, and prejudice analyses the construction of a cartoon
character reflects on the audience of a multimodal text identifies who gets represented in advertising
and who does not identifies how groups of people are
represented in television commercials suggests alternative representations chooses the appropriate tenor in a range of
formal and informal contexts
classroom discourse raises hand, takes turns, gaze, distance, gesture,
touch
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Tenor: LanguageLanguage
for
interacting
with others
speech functions: statements questions offers commands
subjectivity/objectivity subjective: In my opinion objective: The response of the army
modality: certainty: will, possibly, it suggests, I am sure, tend to,
might be able to frequency: always, typical, tendency obligation: must, necessarily, they forced, demand inclination: like, willing, preference
interpersonal meaning: feelings, attitudes: unfortunately idioms, colloquialisms, euphemisms, humour culturally specific references names to refer to people
verbal elements: intonation, volume, pace, word stress, tone,
pronunciation, and other sound patterns pronunciation of foreign words compares characters from multimodal texts
use of verbal elements
non verbal elements: body language, eye contact, physical response
appropriate tenor for the context
The student is unclear about the structure of questions, using question marks at the end of statements that begin with what and why. A clear understanding of the construction of simple statements to express complex ideas is evident.
objective: Objective language has been used to establish the text as factual rather than personal.
The producer has effectively stated opinion as fact by strategically avoiding the use of modality or language expressing feelings and attitudes in the written text.
The producer of the presentation is positioned as an expert through the use of academic and scientific language which is appropriate to the text. Factual objective presentation.
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Key features and examples Student examples of evidence Scale
Mode: Text in
Context
communicates using media and mediums PowerPoint, digital projector, webpage,
radio, CD- ROM, sketches, graphs, map, email, telephone, maps, computer
constructs and critically analyses multimodal texts constructs a written or
spoken text with images and sound interprets the use of
effects in films discusses simulation
software cultural reference: gender,
inclusion/exclusion technical choices television/radio item links between illustrations and verbal text cross sections, pie graph, tables, diagrams reads and draws a text with print identifies keys and buttons on software
PowerPoint, graphs, computer, webpages
verbal, sound, images: constructs and reads multimodal texts
graphs: constructs a column graph with key, although meanings made by the graph are not clear in the context of the presentation
software: MS Powerpoint used to construct slide show
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Mode: Language
Language
for creating
spoken and
written texts
foregrounding: size and placement of visual images and
verbal text abstractions: The destruction of the habitat conjunction in second place: Success, on
the other hand, … phrases and dependant clauses of cause phrases and dependent clauses of time,
place, manner including consecutive phrases time, place
non-human elements: The lathe, Koalas human elements: specific We, general
People action verbs: Draw appropriateness of foregrounding
coherence: construction of introduction, topic sentences
and conclusion, and the links between them
primary and secondary tenses: primary: simple past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was sleeping,
wanted to go, haven’t played, was going to have to play
active/passive voice: active: The heavy rainfall led to some minor
flooding. passive: Minor flooding was caused by the
heavy rain.
print conventions: handwriting, abbreviations, spelling,
punctuation
multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images,
sound, light, physical objects, layout, tables, print text and spoken text
makes meanings in visual material, shadows, line thickness, arrows, perspective in 2-D and 3-D cross-sections and drawings
mathematical and map symbols
placement: centred title and image on title slide, centred title on each slide, some sub-headings with dot points on the left and elaboration on the right, numerous visual images, some labeled
abstract elements: Animal Experimentation, Questions, Vivisection, Important Uses of Animal Experimentation, Alternatives, Bibliography
The main idea is on the left with its meaning on the right. The audience reads from left to right and is given information only so that it is easily absorbed in the time the slide is visible. The questions organise and predict the content of each slide. The conclusion is the bibliography which covered 4 frames and became tedious in relation to the prior text. The bibliography was not alphabetically listed but classified according to the type of resource.
The student combines visual images and writing to create a cohesive text. One of the questions foregrounded at the beginning of the presentation was not elaborated on in the body of the presentation: What are the advantages and disadvantages? The foregrounding of the graph suggests that it represents the ‘Important use of Animal Experimentation,’ although the meaning of the graph is unclear.
Only primary tenses are used – information is presented in note form and this is appropriate for a visual text
Active and Passive voice used appropriately and effectively
PP was very visual with pictures included in the background. The title page had a picture which was explicit and predicted the content of the PP. The print was large and easily seen. The information was presented in 2 columns with dot points.The pictures were labelled too.Use was made of different coloured letters for extra effect.
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