Day 1 – The Thesis Writing Organization. TThe most important sentence in the paper (hear the...

Day 1 – The Thesis

The most important sentence in the paper (hear the echo?)

States what your whole paper’s about Gives a “road map” for the essay It’s in the INTRO paragraph- typically at

the end

Contains a SUBJECT, an OPINION/ INFERENCE, and LIMITERS

Example:

My father is a good man, because he coaches young kids, works hard as a father, and volunteers his time with at-risk youth.

The Earthquake Burger is the Puyallup Fair’s biggest disappointment, because it has shrunk from the size of a plate to that of my face, one has to pay for extra toppings, and despite all the promise, the ground has stood still with every bite.

Write a thesis statement relating to the topic below. Include the 3 parts of a thesis statement (SO/IL) and label each part.

Topic: Fair food

Write 5 thesis statements for the following questions (and label the subject, opinion/inference, and limiters):

1) What is your favorite time of day?2) “Teenagers should not speak unless

spoken to.” Do you agree or disagree?3) What is your favorite memory from

childhood?4) What is your favorite movie?5) Is Sumner/Bonney Lake a good place for

kids to grow up?

Day #2 Day #2 Topic Topic

SentencesSentences

Topic SentencesTopic Sentences

11stst sentence in a body paragraph sentence in a body paragraph Must have a Must have a subjectsubject and an and an

opinion/inferenceopinion/inference (sound familiar?) (sound familiar?) Tells the reader what that paragraph will Tells the reader what that paragraph will

be aboutbe about

Thesis = Road map for the paperThesis = Road map for the paper

Topic sentence = Road map for the Topic sentence = Road map for the paragraphparagraph

THESIS: THESIS: My fatherMy father is a good man, because is a good man, because he he coaches young kidscoaches young kids, , works hard as a fatherworks hard as a father, and , and volunteers his time with at-risk youthvolunteers his time with at-risk youth. .

Paragraph #1Paragraph #1

TS – One thing that makes TS – One thing that makes my dad a good man is that my dad a good man is that

he coaches soccer for little he coaches soccer for little kids.kids.


TS – Not only does he help other kids, TS – Not only does he help other kids, but my dad works hard to be a but my dad works hard to be a

good good father to me.father to me.


TS – One more thing that shows that my father is a good TS – One more thing that shows that my father is a good man is that he takes time from his week to help at-risk man is that he takes time from his week to help at-risk kids.kids.

New example . . .

Lady GaGa is the most influential person alive, because she is on the cutting-edge of fashion, performs catchy dance songs, and is constantly in the headlines for her outspoken political and social views.

TS - Paragraph #1

TS - Paragraph #2

TS - Paragraph #3

HomeworkHomework

1) Pick one of your theses from yesterday1) Pick one of your theses from yesterday

2) Write topic sentences for each of your 2) Write topic sentences for each of your limiters.limiters.

3) Repeat the process for two more thesis 3) Repeat the process for two more thesis sentences you wrote yesterday!sentences you wrote yesterday!

Good luck!...Due tomorrow.Good luck!...Due tomorrow.

Chunks

What’s a CHUNK?-smallest unified group of thoughts -ONE sentence of concrete detail + TWO sentences of commentary (1:2 RATIO)

Concrete Detail (CD)Commentary (CM) 1 CHUNKCommentary (CM)

TS

CD

CM

CM

CS

Concrete Details (CD)Specific details easy

to “see” or imagineThe “stuff” from the

storyPlay-by-play

announcerSynonyms: FACTS,

EXAMPLES, SUPPORT, EVIDENCE, QUOTATIONS

Concrete Details (CD)Examples:Both Romeo and Juliet die in

Act IV.

Ludacris is on a bowling team.

The school has 1,400 kids in it, and it was built for 1,200.

Commentary (CM)Your comment or inference about somethingStuff from your head (i.e. not CD)Color commentatorSynonyms: Analysis, insight, interpretation

Helper phrases for youTS

CD For example, . . .

CM (This shows that . . . )

CM (This also shows that . . .) OR(This is because . . .) OR(This is important because . . . )

CS

Example CHUNK:TSCD For example, Ludacris is on a

bowling team.

CM (This shows that) he likes to escape from the limelight sometimes.

CM (This is because) it must be hard for celebrities to find time for fun without cameras on them.

CS

Homework!1) Pick one TS from your homework last night

2) Create a CHUNK for that TS

3) Now write 2 more chunks for the rest of that THESIS (3 total)

Def: The method an author uses to reveal characters and their personalities

4 Methods What s/he does What s/he looks like What s/he says What others say about him/her

Watch the clip of “Beauty and the Beast”.

Track details of Belle’s APPEARANCE, ACTIONS, and WORDS

Then make inferences on the right of that page

THESIS:

In the movie, Beauty and the Beast, the filmmaker uses _____________________ to reveal that the main character is ____________, _________, and ________.

THESIS:

In the movie, Beauty and the Beast, the filmmaker uses Belle’s physical appearance to reveal that the main character is down to earth, joyous, and carefree.

TS: The animators uses what Belle looks like to reveal that the she is a humble girl.

*Note: You want to make sure the TS & Thesis Subject & Opinion/Inferences line up, but avoid repetition.

Using the limiters we discussed, construct your thesis sentence about the character of Belle.

Then, create a TS, CD, CM, CM, & CS for each limiter

“Priscilla and the Wimps”

by Richard Peck

Concluding sentences (cs) AND w.o.w.

Here are our steps so far…

TS Priscilla is brave to confront the thugs who are terrorizing her school.

CD

CM

CM

CS

We wrote our TS to describe our character:

She sent the Kobra to go get Monk Klutter so she could talk to him herself.

She “frog-marches” Monk into his own locker.

When the Kobra tries to take Melvin’s wallet, she hits him with her hand and makes him let go of her friend.

Then we listed cd TO PROVE SHE’S BRAVE…(CHOOSE ONE):


CD For example, when the Kobra tries to take Melvin’s wallet, she hits him with her hand and makes him let go of her friend.

CM

CM

CS

…And added it to our paragraph:

Powerful confident Hulk hero

MLKcourageChuck Norrisfearless

Protect defendstand up

Rescue bold unyielding

Then used W.O.W. to generate CM:



CM (This shows that) She wants to protect her friend from harassment and violence.

CM (This is important because) It’s that confidence and courage that enables her to stand up for what’s right.

CS

…Constructed our commentary:

Write this down: The last sentence in a body paragraph It’s all commentary Does not repeat key words Gives a finished feeling to the

paragraph

And now, finally…our closing sentence!:

For example, . . . (This shows that . . . ) (This also shows that . . .) (This is because . . .) (This is important because . . . )

As a result, . . .

TS

CD

CM

CM

CS

(Another Helper Phrase for you):



CM (This shows that) She wants to protect her friend from harassment and violence.

CM (This is important because) It’s that confidence and courage that enables her to stand up for what’s right.

CS As a result, Priscilla is the new hero on campus.

Now, add the cs:

TS

CD For example,

CM (This shows that)

CM (This is important because/ This also shows that/ This is because)

CS As a result,

Let’s try it for your first Beauty & The Beast Chunk:

Finish the second and third chunks on the Beauty and the Beast page in your packet

DUE: Tomorrow

Tonight’s Homework:

PREWRITING FOR ORGANIZATION

Spiders, Bubbles, Lists, Outlines, & Columns

PRE-WRITING

The process of getting your concrete details down on paper BEFORE you organize your essay into paragraphs

1) BUBBLE CLUSTER

1. The subject of the pre-writing goes in the middle circle

2. Each circle is numbered. The center bubble is #1 (=>THESIS)

3. You should have 2-3 bubbles that extend from the center bubble. These are #2’s (=>TS’s)

4. Then you should have 2 #3 bubbles extending from each of those (=>CD’s)

It should look like this . . .

PRE-WRITING

Bubble Cluster

Main Idea

#3=>CD

#2 => TS

#3=>CD

#2 => TS

#3=>CD

#3=>CD

2) SPIDER DIAGRAM

1. The subject of the pre-writing has a box around it.

2. Each idea is numbered3. This has 2-3 #2 ideas and 2 #3 ideas (just

like bubble clusters4. This way of pre-writing uses straight lines

instead of circles.

PRE-WRITING

Spider Diagram

Main Idea

#3#3

#3

#3

#2

#2

PINK & SAY

Write a pre-write and thesis for a 4-paragraph essay that uses 2-chunk paragraphs for the following prompt:

How does Pink show unconditional love for Say?

HOW DO I WRITE A 2-CHUNK PARAGRAPH?

IF A 1-CHUNK PARAGRAPH LOOKS LIKE THIS . . .

Concrete Detail (CD) Commentary (CM) 1 CHUNK Commentary (CM)

TS

CD

CM

CM

CS

THEN A 2-CHUNK PARAGRAPH LOOKS LIKE THIS.



TS

CD

CM

CM

CS

CD

CM

CM

NEW HELPER PHRASE!!!

For example,

In addition,

TS

CD

CM

CM

CS

CD

CM

CM

TONIGHT’S PRACTICE!

Write 2 2-chunk paragraphs for your Pink and Say pre-write.

PRE-WRITING– PHASE 2

Outlines & Line Clusters

3) OUTLINE

1. The title is the subject of the pre-writing (Thesis)

2. The lines that start with Roman numerals (I & II) are the same as your earlier #2 ideas (TS’s)

3. The lines that start with capital letters (A & B) are the same as the #3 ideas you did earlier (CD’s)

It should look like this . . .

3) OUTLINE

Subject (=>thesis)I. (TS/lim)

A. Example (CD) B. Example (CD)

II. (TS/lim) A. Example (CD) B. Example (CD)

PRE-WRITING

Line Clustering In line clustering you put the subject of the essay

you are working on at the top. You then complete three steps to do a line

cluster

LINE CLUSTERING

LISTList all of the ideas

that come into your mind regarding your subject

You should list SIX ideas Each IDEA should have

at least FIVE words in it

YOUR HOMEWORK!

How is the Wombles’ story an allegory for humans’ life on Earth?

Write a pre-write and a thesis for an essay with 2 2-chunk body paragraphs.

LINE CLUSTERING LIST (Example)

Subject: Dogs are my favorite kind of animals Very loyal and loveable all

of the time Fun to play with both

inside and outside the house

They take a lot of care and attention

Large dogs need much more space than small dogs

Small dogs can stay in your lap and in your bed

Small dogs can make neighbors more upset

LINE CLUSTERING After you list everything

you then think of ways you can CATEGORIZE the things in your list together Example from the left:

Categories can be: A: Benefits of Dogs B: Challenges of Caring for

Dogs

Subject: Dogs are my favorite kind of animals Very loyal and loveable

all of the time Fun to play with both






LINE CLUSTERING

STEP THREE: Label each of your

IDEAS in your LIST by the CATEGORY

LINE CLUSTERING

Category A: Benefits Very loyal and loveable

all of the time Fun to play with both



Category B: Challenges




COLUMNS

The last form of Pre Writing in the Schaffer Method is forming Columns

COLUMNS

#1The subject of your pre writing goes

in this box

COLUMNS

#1Dogs

#2Two main ideas go in the second

two boxes

COLUMNS

#1Dogs

#2 Companions

Responsibility

COLUMNS

#1Dogs

#2 Companions

Responsibility

#3Each idea in #3 has at least five

words

Each idea in #3 has at least five

words

COLUMNS

#1Dogs

#2 Companions

Responsibility

#3–Very loyal

and loveable all of the time

-They take a lot of

care and attention

INTRODUCTORY & CONCLUSION PARAGRAPHS

3 Things you must do in your INTRO

1. Grab the reader’s attention

2. Smoothly bridge the attention-grabber to the thesis

3. State your thesis

3 Types of Attention-grabbers

1. Story or anecdote2. Startling or unusual fact or statistic3. Relevant quote

Conclusion Paragraph

To wrap it up right, your conclusion must meet these 3 criteria:

1) It must be all commentary2) It must restate the thesis in different

words3) It must give a finished feeling to the

essay1) “CALL TO ACTION” for persuasive writing

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