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Jinzuo Dai
Emre Koyuncu
English 106,Section 11
1 May 2011
Cover letter
This Cover letter is for the assignment#5 Revision Portfolio. In the following
paragraph i will comment the feedback i get for my assignment#2an#3 and justify my
revision.
The portfolio is include 4 file the photo essay, photo essay's rational paper,10-page
essay,and this cover letter.
Assignment#2, this is a photo essay. The grade i get is actually pretty good however
their is one thing i miss in my rational paper which is the introduction and the
conclusion.the feedback i get form this assignment is showing that i lost 10pts for
missing intro and conclusion. This showing my weakness in the paper organization.
For the revision of this assignment#1 i add a introduction for the rational paper simply
showing how i will do in this rational paper. Also i add a conclusion for the rational
paper.
Assignment#3, 10 page essay. The grade of this assignment is not as i expect. Since
my lack of skill of organization the feedback i get told me this essay is more like a
free writing than actual essay. The thesis statement is not wide enough for the essay,
also because the lack of translational statement make my essay feel not well structure.
For the revision of this essay, first i change the format to Time new roman 12. Then i
start to revise my thesis statement in order to make it wide enough for my essay. What
i do here is, i try to add all my point in this thesis statement make it clear enough for
my reader to under stand the whole structure i will do in the following paragraph.
After i finish my new thesis statement i make a new outline in order to keep the essay
together as a unit. Then i add a short translational statement for every point, as a mark
leading my reader to next point also doing a simple conclusion for the point i made
before. In order to keep my point in balance i delete a point form Into the wild to
keep every movie have one point on wildness and one point on dealing death. Also i
doing the change on my ending, the old ending is only talking about death which
missing another main point. For the revised one, i add a conclusion of all my point i
made in the essay as the ending of my essay.
For the A#2 its easy for me to revise because it just missing the intro and conclusion
in the ending however i put most of my work on the A#3, its seriously in need a
revise. After all my hard work i believe now the organization is totally better than the
original one, it now a real essay not a "free writing" as it used be.