14 September 2016

Homework

● By end of class Thurs:○ Intro/conclusion planning due

● By beginning of class Fri:○ Body paragraph plan due ○ If it is done, you get to type. If not,

you will work on it.● Beginning of class Mon:

○ Complete typed, printed first draft of paper

Bellwork

● Look over the comments on your thesis/topic sentences that I returned to you (we will discuss them today)○ Many of you seem to have a plan that

will lead to either plot summary or a summary of how an idea is developed

○ Instead, you need to write about CHOICES Bradbury and Douglass made to convey the idea

Note: Please be sure you are keeping the notes that we do over things like thesis/topic sentences, intro/conclusion, etc. These belong in the folder for this class.

Today’s plan / Tomorrow’s plan

I am buying a house tomorrow, so I will have a sub

● TODAY, we will:○ Go over tomorrow’s lesson on intro/conclusion/body paragraphs

■ THEN○ Address today’s lesson on revising thesis/topic sentences○ Revise thesis/topic sentences

● TOMORROW, you will:○ Have work time to finish intro/conclusion drafts and make progress on body paragraph plans

As always, this slideshow will be on the blog for your reference. I know today is a lot of information!

Introductions and Conclusions

Begin + End Your Paper Effectively

What do you know? What do you need to know?

Fill in the “K” and “W” section on your charts. If you can’t think of what to say, here are some questions to consider:

● What should an introduction do overall?● What are the parts of a successful introduction?● What should a conclusion do overall?● How are an introduction and a conclusion alike?

A good introduction...

DOES

● Engage the reader● Set the tone of the paper● Present the thesis● Includes title + author when referencing a

work of literature or rhetoric● Have around 100-150 words

DOES NOT

● Present any evidence● List what the paper will be about● Start with “Imagine…”● Have more words than your body

paragraphs

Parts of the introduction

Attention getter● Consider one of the nine types; if you don’t use one of those, it needs to be something

better and more interesting

Bridge● The transition from your attention getter to your thesis (includes transition words +

phrases)

Thesis● You know what that is. It should be the final sentence of your intro.

WARNING: BAD intro ideas

Using a random, undocumented quote from the internet● All quotes need to be cited from reliable sources (not just supposedly said

by someone reliable)

Starting with “imagine…”● This was a great idea… in fourth grade

Having no clear attempt to engage the reader● Why not at least try???

A good conclusion...

DOES

● Refer back to the intro in some way to bring the paper full circle

● Begin by restating the thesis● Have around as many words as the intro

*MAY include a call to action or intriguing point for the reader to ponder when they finish reading

DOES NOT

● Summarize or re-list all of the main points of the paper

● Have one or two sentences

Parts of the conclusion

Thesis● You know what that is. It should be the final sentence of your intro.

Bridge● The transition from your thesis back to the bigger idea you will leave your reader with.

Final thought● The idea or question you want to leave your reader with.

So, intros and conclusions both...

● Present NO evidence● Center on engaging the reader● Have a common thread to tie them together and bring the paper full circle● Include the thesis

For THIS essay...

● I recommend referencing the “other” work in your introduction● See example on sample essay (I reference “IGMUS” in my paper about

“NBN”)● This reference can be your attention getter● Use your work time to plan your intro + conclusion

Rhetorical anlaysis: Body

ParagraphsOverall ideas + for this paper

Body Paragraphs● Where your argument, evidence, and proof come together to prove your

point

● ALL ideas clearly support the thesis○ Key words from thesis must appear throughout paragraph, not just in topic sentence /

summary sentence

● Use an organizational strategy to help your reader follow your argument

● Have around 200 words; less than 150 indicates lack of depth of

development

Body Paragraphs● Begin with topic sentence

● End with summary / transition sentence (see sample essay for example)

● Contain at least two clearly developed examples to support topic sentences

○ Examples = evidence + explanation

○ Examples are organized into “chunks”

■ 8 -sentence

■ Majors-minors

■ Quotation sandwiches

Quotation Sandwich ReviewTOP SLICE:● Your assertion about how the author uses a strategy to achieve his purpose.

FILLING:● Cited evidence of the strategy in use in the writing.

BOTTOM SLICE (this is the challenging part):● Your explanation of how the strategy achieves the purpose you said it would. See

the sample essay on the back of your assignment for more examples.● Bottom slice must have a clear connection back to overall purpose. The reader

should not have to figure out the connection. You have to say what it is.

Rhetorical analysis vs. Summary

Discusses the author

Presents a specific strategy for the paragraph

References the rhetorical web

Does not depend on content

Discusses what happens

Mentions an event or character with no connection to the idea it is a strategy

Mentions literary devices as if they exist in the story without an author choosing to put them there

Focuses mainly on content

Rhetorical analysis

Discusses the author

Presents a specific strategy for the paragraph

References the rhetorical web

Does not depend on content

Bradbury warns readers about the negative consequences that the trend towards techonolgy and away from literacy can have on society.

In the opening of the novel, Bradbury’s imagery portrays the dark world that we would live in if we didnot have books.

Bradbury continues to develop his purpose with appeals to readers’ emotions that show the disastrous effects of technology on the individual.

FInally, Bradbury’s logical deductions prove the importance of books in a society to the reader.

Summary

Discusses what happens

Mentions an event or character with no connection to the idea it is a strategy

Mentions literary devices as if they exist in the story without an author choosing to put them there

Focuses mainly on content

Bradbury’s novel is relevant to our world because their society is in decline due to a lack of literacy.

In the beginning of the novel, imagery paints a picture of a dark world where no books exist.

Mildred’s suicide attempt shows how she has no hope as a result of her society’s lack of literacy.

Montag and Beatty have a conversation that shows how bad their society is as a result of their lack of literacy.

Yes vs. No

Bradbury warns readers about the negative consequences that the trend towards techonolgy and away from literacy can have on society.

In the opening of the novel, Bradbury’s imagery portrays the dark world that we would live in if we didnot have books.

Bradbury continues to develop his purpose with appeals to readers’ emotions that show the disastrous effects of technology on the individual.

FInally, Bradbury’s logical deductions prove the importance of books in a society to the reader.

Bradbury’s novel is relevant to our world because their society is in decline due to a lack of literacy.

In the beginning of the novel, imagery paints a picture of a dark world where no books exist.

Mildred’s suicide attempt shows how she has no hope as a result of her society’s lack of literacy.

Montag and Beatty have a conversation that shows how bad their society is as a result of their lack of literacy.

Yes vs. No

Bradbury emphasizes the importance of literacy in order to warn people of its continued value in the face of technological progress.

Bradbury presents Mildred to portray the importance of literature since, without it, she becomes emotionless.

Bradbury’s shift in tone from ominous and destructive to hopeful and constructive shows how literature fulfills humanity.

Through Faber’s explanation of the value of books, Bradbury makes his own stand on the value of literature.

In the novel, people value technological process over literature.

Mildred values technology over literature and nearly commits suicide as a result.

Montag goes from being depressed to being more optimistic as he discovers literature.

The character Faber also discusses how literature should not be devalued in the face of technology.

So now...

● Revise thesis + topic sentences● Using today’s handout, get them checked by 3 peers

○ Under “Thesis,” I have no idea what I meant by the third YES NO thing (the purpose they have written about), so ignore that

● Turn in by 4:00 today (and you will get them back tomorrow)● 10 points of achievement grade