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Writing ParagraphCreated by Ima N. Kusmayanti

S1 Computational Science

School of Computing

Telkom University

2014

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Pre-Writing Process

Think about anumbrella topic

Create a really

specific topic

ChoosingTopic

Related facts

Related incidents

Related reasons

Related examples

Make an

outline

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Choosing a Topic

Whats your

umbrellatopic?

Choosing

Umbrella Topic

Whats your

topic?

Choosing Your

Topic

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Choosing a Topic

Phone

My Phone My i-Phone 4

Features of

my i-Phone 4

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Making an Outline: Major Details

Features of

my i-Phone 4

Sending text

messages

Single calling

and multi-

calling

Browsing the

InternetTaking pictures

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Major details + Minor details

Features of

my i-Phone 4

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Writing 1stDraft: Introductory Sentence

Technique: Amazing Fact

People around the world own different kinds of cell phones that

fit their bills and their needs.

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Writing 1stDraft: Supporting Sentences

1stDetail: Example1. For example, I can send text messages to my friend or forward the text to my groups.

2ndDetail: Example

1. The second feature is single-calling and multi-calling.

2. I can call my mother and my father at the same time, and then, we would have a family

conversation.

3rdDetail: Example

1. The third feature is sending pictures.

2. I can take a picture and send it to whoever I want.

3. I even can post it in my social network.

4thDetail: Example

1. The fourth feature is browsing the Internet.

2. When you find a wi-fi spot, you can surf the Internet for free.

3. You can check your email and read e-book.

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Writing 1stDraft: Topic Sentence

My choice is iPhone 4 and there are many activities that I can

do using my phone.

Pattern: Description

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Writing 1stDraft: Concluding Sentence

All in all, my iPhone 4 makes my life easier.

Technique: Opinion

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1stDraft

People around the world own different kinds of cellphones that fit their billsand their needs. My choice is iPhone 4 and there are many activities that I

can do using my phone. for example I can send text messages to my friend or

forwrd the text to my groups. The second features is single-calling and

multi-calling. I can call my mother and my father at the same time, and then,

we would have a familyconversation. The third feature was sending pictures. Ican take a picture and send it to whoever I want. I even can post it in my

social network. Browsing the Internet is the fourth feature. When you find a

wi-fi spot,you can surf the Internet for free.You can check your email nd read

e-book. All in all, my iPhone 4 makes my life easier.

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Ask your friend and your

teacher to proofread yourparagraph!

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1stDraft

People around the world own different kinds of cellphones that fit theirbills and their needs. My choice is iPhone 4 and there are many activities that

I can dousing my phone. for example I can send text messages to my friend

or forwrd the text to my groups. The second features is single-calling and

multi-calling. I can call my mother and my father at the same time, and then,

wewould have a familyconversation. The third feature was sending pictures.I can take a picture and send it to whoever I want. I even can post it in my

social network. Browsing the Internet is the fourth feature. When you find a

wi-fispot,you can surf the Internet for free.Youcan check your email ndread

e-book. All in all, my iPhone 4 makes my life easier.

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Revise your

paragraph.Check citation No COPY and PASTE

Check mechanics

Neatness (spaces, font,size)

Commas, periods

Spelling, capitalization

Check grammar

Word choices and sentencestructures

Make all sentences impersonal

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2ndDraft

People around the world own different kinds of cell phones that fit their bills and theirneeds. The best choice iPhone 4 due to several excellent features. For example, the

text messaging allows users to send a message and forward it to any groups available

in the phone using other apps, such as LINE, WhatsApp or BBM. The second feature is

single-calling and multi-calling. Users can call more than two people at the same time.

For instance, they would call their parents, and then, they would have a family

conversation. The third feature is sending pictures. Users are able to take a picture andsend it to whoever they wish. They even can post it in their social network. The fourth

feature is browsing the Internet. When users find a wi-fi spot, they can surf the

Internet for free. They can check your email and read e-book. All in all, iPhone 4 makes

life easier.

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Revise your paragraph.

1. Check neatness of project

2. Check mechanics and spelling

3. Check sentence fluency

4. Check construction of idea

5. Overall task completion

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Submit your paragraph to

your teacher.

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Lets compare the two drafts!

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1st

Draft 2nd

DraftPeople around the world own different kinds of

cellphones that fit their bills and their needs. My

choice is iPhone 4 and there are many activities

that I can dousing my phone. for example I can

send text messages to my friend or forwrdthe

text to my groups. The second features is single-

calling and multi-calling. I can call my mother andmy father at the same time, and then, wewould

have a familyconversation. The third feature was

sending pictures. I can take a picture and send it

to whoever I want. I even can post it in my social

network. Browsing the Internet is the fourth

feature. When you find a wi-fispot,you can surf

the Internet for free.Youcan check your email nd

read e-book. All in all, my iPhone 4 makes my life

easier.

People around the world own different kinds of

cell phones that fit their bills and their needs. The

best choice iPhone 4 due to several excellent

features. For example, the text messaging allows

users to send a message and forward it to any

groups available in the phone using other apps,

such as LINE, WhatsApp or BBM. The secondfeature is single-calling and multi-calling. Users

can call more than two people at the same time.

For instance, they would call their parents, and

then, they would have a family conversation. The

third feature is sending pictures. Users are able to

take a picture and send it to whoever they wish.

They even can post it in their social network. The

fourth feature is browsing the Internet. When

users find a wi-fi spot, they can surf the Internet

for free. They can check your email and read e-

book. All in all, iPhone 4 makes life easier.


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Now its your turn

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