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Beginnings and Endings

Kayla Skarbakka, Writing ConsultantWriting CenterWalden University

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Session Overview

How to begin and end a paper• Introductions and Conclusions

Why these elements matterHow to write effective beginnings and endings

for your own work• Structure• Tips

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Beginnings and Endings: Why?

Why an Introduction?Provide background and contextEstablish the problem and why it is importantGive purpose or argument for paper

Why a Conclusion?Restate main argument of paperBring together all the subtopicsPoint to social change implications

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Beginnings and Endings: Why?

Ways to Visualize the Purpose of the Introduction and Conclusion:

Bookends propping up the great ideas you discuss in the body of your paperBread holding the sandwich fixings togetherA GPS navigating the reader into the material and outA complete conversation, with a handshake and a goodbye

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Beginnings

An introduction is a piece of text thataccomplishes two important tasks: first, it attracts readers’ interest, and second, it presents the topic and makes some comment on it. It contains, in other words, a strong lead, or hook, and often an explicit thesis as well. Many introductions open with a general statement about the topic and then go into more detail, leading up to a specific thesis at the end. (Lunsford, 2011, p. 93)

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Beginnings: Thesis Statement

The most important sentence of your paper because it offers the central argument and purpose

A thesis statement is concise, specific, and arguable usually the last sentence in your introduction

Example thesis statements:The most effective treatment plan for methamphetamine addiction

may be a combination of pharmacological and cognitive therapy.To improve patient care in a rehabilitation setting, nurses must follow

Jean Watson’s theory of caring.For more on thesis construction: http://writingcenter.waldenu.edu/405.htm

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Beginnings: Structure

Funnel ShapeBroad: Background/context

Narrower: The problem relating to that background

Narrowest: What you are arguing or proposing about that problem (the thesis statement)

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Beginnings: Structure

Conflict is inevitable in a healthcare environment because of emotional, financial, and operational stressors (Vivar, 2006). However, conflict is both a positive and negative phenomenon that effective nurses navigate. By assessing conflict situations, nurses can develop insight, recognize strengths and limitations, and accept outside resources to manage such situations (Manion, 2005). The particular assessment best suited to nurse-doctor conflict is the PEPRS framework.

Why does this introduction work? Flow from broad, to narrower, to narrowest Clear argument Appropriate level of detail Appropriate academic voice

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Beginnings: Structure

Structure Don’ts: Too much detail (direct quotes,

evidence that goes beyond background and should be placed elsewhere)

Too vague (reiteration of assignment guidelines)

“Blueprint” or step-by-step of what is to come in the paper

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Beginnings: Structure

For this application, I have selected an acute care setting. In this paper, I will explain why patient safety is important in this setting. Second, I will identify the key challenges for nurses regarding patient safety. Finally, I will describe two strategies for improving patient safety and explain why I chose them.

Why is this not the greatest introduction? Assumes reader knows assignment Gives a step-by-step of paper (the “blueprint” design) Uses the assignment guidelines as sentences Gives only a general overview (could apply to any fellow

student’s paper) Does not give a real sense of problem or argument

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Beginnings: Tips

Per APA, there should be no “Introduction” heading.

Incorrect: Introduction

In this paper, I will …

Correct:Title of the Paper

In this paper, I will …

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Beginnings: Tips

LengthShort course paper: usually just a paragraph; Longer, complex papers: can be several paragraphs. Be brief.

Grammar and Voice: Use a formal academic voice.

Watch out for these common issues: A casual or conversational tone

Let’s first discuss healthcare in America today. As you know, healthcare is a big problem in America

today.These examples talk directly to the reader, as if in a chat. Make sure there is distance between writer and reader.

Healthcare is a problem in America today because 40% are without insurance and therefore susceptible to untreated injury and disease.

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Beginnings: Tips

Common Issues: Passive voice (No subject or “doer” of the action)

In this paper, the problem with healthcare will be argued.Instead, use the active voice:

In this paper, I will argue that the problem… Anthropomorphism (Human traits to inanimate objects)

This paper will analyze…The literature review determined that…

Because a paper or a section of a paper cannot describe or reveal, use “I”:

I will analyze…Through the literature review, I determined…

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Beginnings: Tips

Common Issues: Questions

If 40% of Americans are uninsured, what do they do if they become sick?Why doesn’t the government do something about inflated health premiums?Though questions can “hook” the reader, in academic writing, avoid them in order to– Maintain an unbiased, formal tone– hook the reader with your evidence– express the problem in a straightforward way

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Beginnings: Tips

Common Issues: Direct quotes

“The great fault of the 21st century is the lack of access to healthcare for those of low socioeconomic means, leading to an increase in both preventable deaths and anxiety disorders” (Smith, 2010, p. 7).Because this is your paper, you’ll want to use your own words to guide the reader.

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Beginnings: Tips

Common Issues: Verb tense shifts

• Use the future tense when explaining the paper: In this paper, I will analyze healthcare reform.

• Use the past tense when describing the research: Douglas and Jones (2011) stated that, despite progress in healthcare reform, low-income communities will not see changes until the next decade.

• Use the present tense when presenting something that is currently or always true: Millions of Americans lack health insurance due to increasing premiums and unemployment.

Weak verbsIn your thesis especially, use powerful verbs that promote argument or analysis.Not so effective: summarize, explain, describeBetter: argue, compare, critique, synthesize

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The body of your paper goes here, in between your introduction and conclusion

It should develop your ideas in such a way as to convince the reader of your argument

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Endings

After the body of your paper, rather than just stopping, you will want to ease your reader into your final thoughts on your topic, otherwise known as a conclusion.

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Endings

What is the purpose of a conclusion?Acts as a reminder of

• Argument• Main points

Gives the big pictureProvides closure

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Endings

Without a conclusion…

…your readers may feel lost, confused, and unsure why they spent all that time

reading your paper.

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Endings

A conclusion is a piece of text thatleaves readers satisfied that a full discussion has taken place. Many conclusions begin with a restatement of the thesis and end with more general statements that grow out of it: this pattern reverses the common general-to-specific pattern of the introduction. (Lunsford, 2011, p. 93)

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Endings

Create closure throughStructureNo new informationAvoiding the “blueprint”Synthesis rather than summary

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Endings: Structure

Triangle ShapeNarrow: Restating the

thesisBroader: Reiterating main

pointsBroad: Implications of

argument to social change and future research

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Endings: Tips

Be brief• Typically one paragraph for course papers

Use headings• Level 1 heading• Common headings: Conclusion, Summary, or

Discussion

SummaryIn conclusion, ….

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Endings: Tips

Have a similar tone to the paper• Word choice, scholarly language

Follow the same writing rules as an introduction• Avoiding anthropomorphism, passive voice,

rhetorical questions, and incorrect verb tense

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Endings: Tips

No new information should appear in a conclusion.

New information includesDirect quotesIntroduction of new sources

Avoid “flip-the-page” syndrome

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Endings: Tips

Just like an introduction, a conclusion should not be in a “blueprint” format.

In this paper, I discussed how informatics is an important part of nursing. I included information from peer-reviewed sources and noted how informatics will impact my field and organization. I concluded with some of the trade-offs of implementing informatics and not.

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Endings: Tips

Why the blueprint doesn’t work: All summary Simple word choice and sentence structure Might annoy your reader

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Endings: Tips

So…what does work?Synthesis instead of summary

Include the main points of your paper Put main points back together for your reader Phrase argument in a different way

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Endings: Tips

Tie back to introduction and thesisReiterate overall argument

• Why did you write this paper?• Why is this topic important?

Remind readers of how you proved that argument• Studies, theories, experience, data

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Endings: The Future?

Discuss future implications of research or topic

Not new informationShould naturally build throughout your

textReiterates the importance of your

argument

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Endings

Sample Conclusion ParagraphEmploying informatics in an organization may

include frustration and pushback from healthcare staff, but using a system like CPOE is a necessity. In my organization, improved and consistent patient care was an early benefit, and scholars continue to note the long-term benefits of informatics. As CPOE becomes a future requirement for healthcare organizations, administrators should encourage its use and fund training to have a smooth, well-received implementation.

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Recap

BeginningsConstruct an arguable thesisEstablish your scholarly toneRemember the funnel shape

EndingsReiterate your thesisSynthesize your main pointsRemember the triangle shape

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Questions

Thanks for joining me this evening!

Use the Question box to ask for clarificationFor more information on beginning or ending

a paper, see http://writingcenter.waldenu.edu/320.htm

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Reference

Lunsford, A. (2011). The St. Martin’s handbook (7th ed.). Boston, MA: Bedford/St. Martin’s.

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Resources

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http://researchcenter.waldenu.edu/

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