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EWRT 1AClass 17

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AGENDA Editing Strategies:

compound sentences, dangling modifiers, homonyms

Discussion: Open for questions

In-Class Writing: Writing Workshop Editing

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Punctuation

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Compound Sentence

A compound sentence is made up of two or more simple sentences joined by one of the following:

A comma and a coordinating conjunction I like to study grammar, and I love this class.

A semicolon I like to study grammar; I love this class.

A semicolon and an adverbial conjunction I like to study grammar; therefore, I love this

class.

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Coordinating Conjunctions

Coordinating Conjunctions are used to join together two independent clauses.

For And Nor But Or Yet So

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COMPOUND SENTENCE:adverbial conjunctions

MOREOVERHOWEVERNEVERTHELESSOTHERWISETHEREFORE

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COMPOUND SENTENCE:CONJUNCTIVE ADVERBS

Thomas is cool; moreover, he is fashionable

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Luke’s grandmother buys him sweaters; however, he does not wear them.

Clause 1 Clause 2

Independent Independent

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Look for Run-On Sentences

Look for compound sentences in your essay. Make sure you are using both a comma and a conjunction. Example: , and

Look for adverbial conjunctions; make sure you have punctuated those sentences correctly. Example ; however,

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Common Writing Errors

Dangling modifiers

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Dangling ModifiersA dangling modifier is a word or phrase that modifies a word not clearly stated in the sentence. A modifier describes, clarifies, or gives more detail about a concept.

Having finished the assignment, Jill turned on the TV.

"Having finished" states an action but does not name the doer of that action. In English sentences, the doer must be the subject of the main clause that follows. In this sentence, it is Jill. She seems logically to be the one doing the action ("having finished"), and this sentence therefore does not have a dangling modifier.

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The following sentence has an incorrect usage:

Having finished the assignment, the TV was turned on.

"Having finished" is a participle expressing action, but the doer is not the TV set (the subject of the main clause): TV sets don't finish assignments. Since the doer of the action expressed in the participle has not been clearly stated, the participial phrase is said to be a dangling modifier.

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Strategies for revising dangling modifiers:

1. Name the appropriate or logical doer of the action as the subject of the main clause:

Having arrived late for practice, a written excuse was needed.

Who arrived late? This sentence says that the written excuse arrived late. To revise, decide who actually arrived late. The possible revision might look like this:

Having arrived late for practice, the team captain needed a written excuse.

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2. Change the phrase that dangles into a complete introductory clause by naming the doer of the action in that clause:

Without knowing his name, it was difficult to introduce him.

Who didn't know his name? This sentence says that "it" didn't know his name. To revise, decide who was trying to introduce him. The revision might look something like this:

Because Maria did not know his name, it was difficult to introduce him.

The phrase is now a complete introductory clause; it does not modify any other part of the sentence, so is not considered "dangling."

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3. Combine the phrase and main clause into one:

To improve his results, the experiment was done again.

Who wanted to improve results? This sentence says that the experiment was trying to improve its own results. To revise, combine the phrase and the main clause into one sentence. The revision might look something like this:

He improved his results by doing the experiment again.

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1. After reading the original study, the article remains unconvincing.

2. Relieved of your responsibilities at your job, your home should be a place to relax.

3. The experiment was a failure, not having studied the lab manual carefully.

Are these correct?

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Incorrect: After reading the original study, the article remains unconvincing.

Revised: After reading the original study, I find the article unconvincing.

Incorrect: Relieved of your responsibilities at your job, your home should be a place to relax.

Revised: Relieved of your responsibilities at your job, you should be able to relax at home.

Incorrect: The experiment was a failure, not having studied the lab manual carefully.

Revised: They failed the experiment, not having studied the lab manual carefully.

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Look for Dangling Modifiers

Check your introductory clauses to make sure that the doer is the subject of the main clause that follows it.

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Misused Words

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Homonyms Than and then

I am tanner than she.We were both on the beach, but then she went inside. There, their, and they're

You can put your shoes over there.Their shoes were dirty, so they left them outside.They’re just walking around barefoot right now. To, too, and two

I am going to the mall.Jesse said she wants to go too.We are each looking for two new outfits.

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Homonyms Weather and whether

The weather tomorrow is supposed to be beautiful.I don’t know whether to go for a hike or a swim. Whose and who's

Whose scarf is this? Who’s going to the movie with us? Your and you're

Your dog is bigger than my dog.You’re going to have to keep him on a leash.

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Check for Misused Words

Than and then There, their, and they're To, too, and two Weather and whether Whose and who's Your and you're

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Surface Revision Strategies

Read Aloud Reading the paper aloud slowly

can often bring to attention large and small mistakes missed in the writing and typing process. Read each sentence and ask does it make sense? Is it awkward? Am I including words that are not actually written on the paper? Sometimes reading the paper out of order can help isolate problems. Try reading the paragraphs starting with the last sentence and then reading the previous sentence and so on; this can reveal problems in the sentences.

Isolate Specific Problems

Isolating specific problems can help give objectivity to one's personal work. One way to isolate specific issues is to circle them on a paper draft and look at them one by one. For example: circle all commas and then go back and look at each comma asking if it is in the appropriate place with the correct usage. Another example would be to circle all verbs and then go back one by one and identify the tense and verify subject verb agreement.

 

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HOMEWORK Post #19: Your edited

Essay #2 Study: Vocabulary (1-

16) Bring: Clean copy of

Essay #2; SMG