陈郑津

高三高三 (9)(9)班欢迎您！班欢迎您！

Does the writer use any linking words?

Are there any good sentence patterns 句式

Is there any advanced vocabulary 高级词汇

Are there any mistakes?

Language

Is everything to the point(切题 )?

Are all the details stated?content

Does each part have a topic sentence?

Is the essay divided into parts? structure

ASSESSMENT

高考英语作文评分标准

第一档是极优档， 21-25 分。标准为： 1 、书写规范； 2 、覆盖所有内容要点； 3 、有效使用语句间的连接成 分； 4 、运用较多语法结构和词汇。

Just as the saying goes, Well

begun is half done(好的开头是成功

的一半)； All is well that ends well

(结尾好，一切都好)。

as everybody knows/as is known to all

开头

to begin with /first of all

for one thing ..., for another (thing)

on one hand...,on the other hand

when it comes to…

首先 / 第一

当提到…

众所周知…

一方面…另一方面

In general

In a word

总结

In short/brief

Generally speaking

In summary/In conclusion

All in all

Use linking Use linking wordswords

as well as

not only… but also并列

and/ both…and

either…or/neither…nor

Although /despite/in spite of

On the contrary转折

But/however/while

what’s more

moreover/furthermore

in addition

besides 递进

What’s worse/to make matters worse

therefore

so

as a result/consequence

thus 结果

thanks to/due to

meanwhile

after that/afterwards

In the end/finally/at last

时间顺序

later

Immediately/at once

后来

最终

在那之后

立即

与此同时

from my point of view

As for me

As far as I’m concerned

表示观点

In my opinion/view

for my part

Fill in the blanks

1．Stand over there you' ll be able to see the oil

painting better.

2．Start out right away, you' ll miss the first

train.

and

or/otherwise

3．Half of the girls choose film and TV stars as their idols,

______ 48% of the boys favor sports stars. while

Competition1

Translation 1．努力学习，你就会被重点大学录取。

_________________________________________________

2．游泳不但有益健康，而且能帮助我们的培养坚强的意志。

___________________________________________________

_________________

Work hard, and you will be admitted to a key university.

Swimming not only benefits our health, but also helps us

build a strong will.

3．多亏医生的及时治疗，他获救了。

________________________________________________ Thanks to the doctor' s timely treatment, he was saved.

（ 1 ） Use idiomatic （惯用的，地道的） phrases and sentences ， and avoid Chinglish.

Good good study, day day up.

(1) 我在报纸上看到一则消息 .I saw a news on newspaper.

I read ___________news from the newspaper.

(2) 工人们热烈欢迎我们参观农场 .

The workers welcomed us to visit the farm.

The farm workers gave us ________________.a warm welcome

a piece of

(3). 老师要我们课后查字典。 The teacher asked us to look up the dictiona

ry after class.The teacher asked us to _______________________________________________________________after class.

(4) 百分之四十学生认为应收门票但价位不能太高40% of the students think fees should be charged but the price shouldn’t be expensive.

…but the price shouldn’t be too _________.

look up the words in the dictionary/ consult/refer to the dictionary/

high

Does the writer use any linking words?

Are there any good sentence patterns 句式

Is there any advanced vocabulary 高级词汇

Are there any mistakes?

Language

Is everything to the point(切题 )?

Are all the details stated?content

Does each part have a topic sentence?

Is the essay divided into parts? structure

ASSESSMENT

（ 2 ） Use advanced vocabulary and various sentence patterns . （高级词汇和多变的句式）

Tips for advanced vocabulary

标新立异

短语优先

避免重复

I received your email last week, but I am busy preparing

for my final exam, which is important for me, so I didn' t

reply to you without delay.

→ I received your email last week, but I am busy preparing

for my final exam, which is vital for me, so I didn' t reply to

you without delay.

(2013·山东高考满分作文)

标新立异

Moreover, I will open more channels for you to speak

out your opinions and need.

→ Moreover, I will open more channels for you to

voice your opinions and need. (2013·天津高考

书面表达)

另外，我会开发更多渠道，让你们说出观点和需求。

1. Suddenly I had an idea that we should adopt the homeless child.

I ___________________an idea that we should adopt the homeless child. （想出） came up with/ hit on

2. Nowadays, more and more people get education on line.

Nowadays, there is__________________ _____________ getting education online .

an increasing numberof people

3.He spends all his spare time in reading. →　He _____________ all his spare time ______reading.（投身于）

devotes to

5. He read the letter, because he was curious.

4. She started laughing suddenly.

She______________________. 突然大笑

He read the letter______________. 出于好奇out of curiosity

burst into laughter

6. I will try my best to learn English.

I will __________________________________ to learn English. （不遗余力）

make every effort/ spare no effort

短语优先

To achieve one' s dream, one must try to equip oneself

with rich knowledge and set a goal easy to reach.

→ To achieve one' s dream, one must make great efforts

to equip oneself with rich knowledge and set a goal easy

to reach.

(2013·北京高考满分作文)

What' s more, we can pour out the troubles we face, and

release our pressure from different aspects.

→ What' s more, we can pour out the troubles we are faced

with, and release our pressure from different aspects.

(2013·重庆高考满分作文)

2. He didn't listen to what I said in the class.

（对…充耳不闻）

turned out to be

He __________________ what I said in the class.

turned a deaf ear to

1. As a result, the plan was a failure.

The plan _______________a failure.（结果是，被证明是）

I like reading while my brother likes watching football

matches.

→ I like reading while my brother enjoys watching

football matches.

避免重复

（ 2 ） Use advanced vocabulary and various sentence patterns . （高级词汇和多变的句式）

Tips for various sentence patterns

1.Passive Voice （被动语态）

2.Emphatic Pattern （强调句）

3.Ellipsis （省略）

4.Inversion （倒装）

5.Clauses （从句）

6.Nonfinite Verbs ( 非谓语动词 )

1．Passive Voice(被动语态)

I' m delighted to know that the Shanghai Museum will

organize a famous art exhibition and you are collecting

opinions of the public as to selecting the location for the

exhibition, which encouraged me to write to express my ideas.

→ I' m delighted to know that a famous art exhibition will be

organized by the Shanghai Museum and opinions of the public

are being collected as to selecting the location for the exhibition,

which encouraged me to write to express my ideas.

(2013·上海高考满分作文)

2. Emphatic Pattern(强调句)

As a saying goes, the little thing matters most.

→ As a saying goes, it is the little thing that matters most.

(2013·上海高考满分作文)

Our parents have devoted their unconditional love to us,

which indeed deserves our appreciation and reward.

→ ___________________have devoted their unconditional

love to us, which indeed deserves our appreciation and

reward.

(2013·重庆高考满分作文)

It’s our parents who

Competition2

3．Inversion(倒装句)

The children can grow up mentally and physically healthy

only in this way.

→ Only in this way _________________________mentally and

physically healthy. (2013·福建高考满分作文)

can the children grow up

We don' t know its value until we lose health. (not until倒装

句)

________________________________________. Not until we lose health do we know its value

4．Ellipsis（省略句）

If it is so, I hope you will have a wonderful time.

→______, I hope you will have a wonderful time.

(2013·山东高考满分作文)

Although they were faced with many problems, they

didn' t lose heart.

→_________________with many problems, they didn' t

lose heart.

If so

Although faced

Whenever he didn' t perform well in his studies, she would

blame him bitterly, expressing her disappointment in him.

(2013·湖北高考满分作文)

每当他在学习时做得不好，她总会训斥他，表达对他的失

望。

5．Clauses（从句）

———Adverbial clause（状语从句）

Noun and Attributive clauses

（名词性从句和定语从句）

1．我为自己在爸爸不在家时自己所做的感到自豪。

I took pride in __________ ____ in the absence of my

father. (2013·北京高考满分作文)

what I did

2．I' ve always longed for the days. I will be able to be

independent then.（用定语从句连接）

_________________________________________________

________________.

I' ve always longed for the days when I will be able to

be independent

6. Nonfinite Verbs ( 非谓语动词 )

When we hear the news, we jumped with joy.（分词作状语）

Hearing the news, we jumped with joy.

We are invited to a party. The party is to be held next Friday. （分词做定语连接）

We are invited to a party to be held next Friday.

Mid-term Composition

每个人都渴望健康，健康有多重要？而你又珍惜了

吗？请认真阅读下面的引语 (quotation) ，按要求用英语写一篇短文。

A healthy mind is in a healthy body.-------John Jay, an American naturalist.

内容要求：

1. 你对该引语的理解；

2. 你的体会（结合学生生活）

3. 适当的结尾。

注意： 1. 开头部分已给出，但不计入总词数） 2. 词数：120 左右

As far as I’m concerned, we can be more efficient if we are healthy physically. So get rid of the bad habit which ruins your body and pay more attention to your health.

Nowadays, there is a common phenomenon that lots of people are eager to have a healthy body.

As students, it’s necessary for us to keep healthy and cherish our body to deal with the high pressure of study.

However, staying up too late and never doing activities make us weak, resulting in our sad endings in study.

Most of them devoted themselves to studying without doing any exercise. As a result, their body is weakened and they are easy to come down with a disease.

Another equally important aspect is that an increasing number of students don’t do enough sports.

From what have been shown above, we can come to a conclusion that health is important but not everyone attach importance to it.

If you are dying for a healthy body, above all , you should have a healthy mind.

Only when we are healthy can we think actively, and it goes without saying that only when we are healthy can we live a happy life.

As a high school student, especially one who is preparing for the college entrance exam, I bury myself in study.

According to reports, the leftovers in restaurants across the country are almost enough to feed 200 million people annually. __________(linking word), China has started（单词或词组替换） a national campaign “Eat up all on the Plates” .

Against Food Waste

Therefore

take take on/launched/organizon/launched/organiz

eded

Exercise

Most people in China have the tradition of entertaining （改为 it 做形式主语） their guests with more than enough food ， because they believe （改为分词做状语） that they have not satisfied their guests if there is no food left on the table, and they think it is ( 改为定语从句 )a good way to show their hospitality. They think (that) others will look down upon them （改为被动语态） if they pack up the leftovers. ____________ (linking word), restaurant trashcans are often found full of leftover foods.

It is the tradition for most people in China to entertain

believing

which they think is

they will be looked down upon

As a result

The “Eat up all on the Plates” campaign will（词组替换 , “ 打算，是用来”） reduce the waste and raise people's awareness. People warmly welcome it with positive responses （改为被动语态） . As middle school students, we should______________________ （“使……成为一个规则”，用 it 做形式宾语） to say “No” to food waste, and try to ____________________ （养成……的习惯） never ordering or cooking more than _____we need___________ （为了） save our limited food resources. We can hope for a better future only when everyone realizes it. （改为倒装句）

is intended tois intended to

It is warmly welcomed with positive responses

make it a rule to

form/develop the habit of

what In order to

Only when everyone realizes it can we hope for a better future.

Homework

广告在我们的日常生活中非常普遍，很多同学很容易被广告影响，盲目购买厂家通过大量广告所宣传的商品，甚至上当受骗。就“广告”这一主题为你的校报写一篇短文，让同学们对广告有清楚的了解。内容包括：

1．做广告的真实目的。2. 如何避免被广告误导。

要求： 1．词数： 120～ 150 ； 2．可适当增加细节以使行文

连贯，题目自拟。

Write an essay by using the skills learned today.

Thank you!

Thank you!