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Ch. 3-1
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Chapter 3Chapter 3
Improving
Writing Techniques
Ch. 3-2
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Formal Research Methods for Gathering Information
Formal Research Methods for Gathering Information
Search manually (books, magazines, journals).
Access electronically (Internet databases, the Web).
Go to the source (interviews, surveys, questionnaires, focus groups).
Conduct scientific experiments (measure variables using control groups).
Ch. 3-3
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Informal Research Methods for Gathering Information
Informal Research Methods for Gathering Information
Search company files.
Talk with your boss.
Interview the target audience.
Conduct an informal survey.
Brainstorm for ideas.
Ch. 3-4
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Organize Information with an Outline
Organize Information with an Outline
TitleI. First major component
A. First sub-point1. Detail, illustration, evidence2. Detail, illustration, evidence
B. Second sub-point1. Detail, illustration, evidence2. Detail, illustration, evidence
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Organize Information with an Outline
Organize Information with an Outline
II. Second major componentA. First sub-point
1. Detail, illustration, evidence
2. Detail, illustration, evidence
Ch. 3-6
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Organize Information with an Outline
Organize Information with an Outline
Tips:• Define main topic in title.• Divide the topic into major components (3-5).• Break the components into sub-points.• Strive to make each component exclusive (no
overlapping).• Don’t put a single item under a major component.• Use details, illustrations, and evidence to support
sub-points.
Ch. 3-7
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Organizing Business MessagesOrganizing Business Messages
Direct StrategyMain idea comes first
followed by details
and explanations
Indirect StrategyExplanation precedes main idea
Ch. 3-8
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Organizing Business MessagesOrganizing Business Messages
Direct StrategyAdvantages: Saves reader’s time Sets a proper frame of
mind Prevents frustration
Indirect StrategyAdvantages: Respects feelings of
audience Encourages a fair
hearing Minimizes a negative
reaction
Ch. 3-9
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Organizing Business MessagesOrganizing Business Messages
Direct StrategyUseful when: Receiver is receptive Receiver requires no
education about topic Message is routine
Indirect StrategyUseful when: Receiver may be upset Receiver may be hostile Receiver must be
persuaded or educated Message is sensitive
Ch. 3-10
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Effective SentencesEffective Sentences
Complete sentences have subjects and verbs and make sense (are capable of standing alone).
Example:
Subject Verb
Employees send many e-mail messages.
Ch. 3-11
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Effective SentencesEffective Sentences
Clauses also have subjects and verbs. Independent clauses can stand alone. Dependent clauses rely on independent clauses for their meaning.
Example: Dependent Clause Independent Clause
When you speak, you reveal yourself.
Ch. 3-12
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Effective SentencesEffective Sentences
Phrases are groups of related words without subjects and verbs.
Example: Phrase Phrase
In the afternoon, I work at the mall.
Ch. 3-13
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Effective SentencesEffective Sentences
Avoid sentence fragments. Fragment
Even though the pay was low. Many candidates applied.
Revision:Even though the pay was low, many candidates
applied.
Ch. 3-14
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Effective SentencesEffective Sentences
Avoid run-on (fused) sentences. Fused Sentences
Two candidates applied only one was hired.
Revisions:Two candidates applied. Only one was hired.
Two candidates applied; only one was hired.
Two candidates applied, but only one was hired.
Ch. 3-15
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Effective SentencesEffective Sentences
Avoid comma-splice sentences. Comma SpliceMany were qualified, Jeff was hired.
Revisions:Many were qualified. Jeff was hired.Many were qualified; Jeff was hired.Many were qualified; however, Jeff was hired.Many were qualified, but Jeff was hired.
Ch. 3-16
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following to avoid fragments, run-on sentences, and comma-splices. You can create a Web-based job portfolio it
will impress potential employers.
You can create a Web-based job portfolio; it will impress potential employers.
Ch. 3-17
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following to avoid fragments, run-on sentences, and comma-splices. Send a scannable résumé. When you apply
for a job.
Send a scannable résumé when you apply for a job.
Ch. 3-18
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following to avoid fragments, run-on sentences, and comma-splices. Although technical skills are important.
Communication skills are also in great demand. Although technical skills are important, communication skills are also in great demand.
Ch. 3-19
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following to avoid fragments, run-on sentences, and comma-splices. College used to be for young people,
however many older students now seek degrees. College used to be for young people; however, many older students now seek degrees.
Ch. 3-20
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Emphasis Through MechanicsEmphasis Through Mechanics
Underlining:
Which of these methods do you prefer?
Ch. 3-21
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Emphasis Through MechanicsEmphasis Through Mechanics
Italics and Boldface:The use of boldface and italics captures the reader’s attention.
Ch. 3-22
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Emphasis Through MechanicsEmphasis Through Mechanics
All Caps:
Notice how EXPENSE-FREE stands out.
Ch. 3-23
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Emphasis Through MechanicsEmphasis Through Mechanics
Dashes:Other methods–including dashes–may be used.
Ch. 3-24
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Emphasis Through MechanicsEmphasis Through Mechanics
Font Changes:
• Changing from a large font to a smaller font or to a different font adds interest and emphasis.
Ch. 3-25
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Emphasis Through MechanicsEmphasis Through Mechanics
Tabulation:Listing items vertically emphasizes them:
1. First item2. Second item3. Third item
Ch. 3-26
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Emphasis Through MechanicsEmphasis Through Mechanics
Other means of achieving mechanical emphasis include the following: use of white space, colour, lines, boxes, columns, titles, headings, and subheadings.
Which of the above techniques are appropriate in business letters? Memos? E-mail messages? Reports?
Ch. 3-27
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Emphasis and De-emphasis Through Style
Emphasis and De-emphasis Through Style
To emphasize an idea:• Use vivid words, such as in “bug-free software”
rather than “dependable software.”• Label the main idea. For example, use phrases such
as more importantly, the principal reason, or the best alternative.
• Put the important idea first or last in the sentence.• Put the important idea in a simple sentence or in an
independent clause.
Ch. 3-28
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Emphasis and De-emphasis Through Style
Emphasis and De-emphasis Through Style
To de-emphasize an idea:• Use general, rather than specific, words (some
customers complained, rather than 125 customers complained).
• Place the idea in a dependent clause connected to an independent clause containing a positive idea.
Example:
Although items cannot be returned for cash, you will receive
store credit for any returned purchase.
Ch. 3-29
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Active- and Passive-Voice Verbs
Active- and Passive-Voice Verbs
Active-voice verbs show the subject performing the action.
Examples:
Most major employers require drug testing. (Active voice; the subject is acting)
Dr. Smith recommended Tina for the job. (Active voice; the subject is acting)
Ch. 3-30
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Active- and Passive-Voice Verbs
Active- and Passive-Voice Verbs
In passive-voice sentences, the subject is acted upon. Passive-voice verbs require helper verbs.
Examples:Drug testing is required by most major employers.
(Passive voice; the subject is being acted upon)
Tina was recommended for the job by Dr. Smith. (Passive voice; the subject is being acted upon)
Ch. 3-31
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Active- and Passive-Voice Verbs
Active- and Passive-Voice Verbs
Use the active voice for most business writing. Use the passive voice to emphasize an action
or the recipient of the action–rather than the actor (Specialists were hired; Laura was honored).
Use the passive voice to de-emphasize bad news (Although your lease cannot be renewed, we can offer . . . ).
Ch. 3-32
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Convert the following sentence to active voice. You may have to add a subject. Our membership meeting was postponed by
the president.
The president postponed our membership meeting.
Ch. 3-33
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Convert the following sentence to active voice. You may have to add a subject. The résumés of job candidates are sorted
quickly by the software program Resumix.
The software program Resumix sorts résumés of job candidates quickly.
Ch. 3-34
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Convert the following sentence to active voice. You may have to add a subject. Computer paper was ordered yesterday.
Rachel ordered computer paper yesterday.
Ch. 3-35
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Convert the following sentence to passive voice. We must delay shipment of your
merchandise because of heavy demand.
Your merchandise shipment must be delayed because of heavy demand.
Ch. 3-36
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Convert the following sentence to passive voice. The technician could not install the
computer program.
The computer program could not be installed.
Ch. 3-37
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Developing ParallelismDeveloping Parallelism
Parallelism is a writing technique that creates balanced writing. Match nouns with nouns, verbs with verbs, phrases with phrases, and clauses with clauses.
Ch. 3-38
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Developing ParallelismDeveloping Parallelism
Poor: The process of writing involves organizing, composing, and
revision.
Parallel: The process of writing involves organizing, composing, and revising. (Matches -ing
verbs)
Ch. 3-39
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Developing ParallelismDeveloping Parallelism
Poor: We are very concerned with the quality of raw materials, where
they are located, and how much it costs to transport them.
Parallel: We are very concerned with the quality, location, and
transpor- tation costs of raw materials. (Matches nouns)
Ch. 3-40
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Developing ParallelismDeveloping Parallelism
Poor: Serena takes the telephone orders, Matt locates the items in
the warehouse, and the items are sent by Yolanda.
Parallel: Serena takes the telephone orders, Matt locates the items
in the warehouse, and Yolanda sends the items. (Matches
active- voice verbs)
Ch. 3-41
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UnityUnity
Unified sentences contain thoughts that are related to only one main idea. The ideas in a sentence are better expressed by separating the two dissimilar clauses and by adding a connecting phrase.
Ch. 3-42
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UnityUnity
Poor: Our customer service is excellent, and you may visit our website at any time.
Unified: Our customer service is excellent. For added convenience, you may visit our website at any time.
Ch. 3-43
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Imprecise WritingImprecise Writing
Imprecise writing occurs when sentences twist or turn unexpectedly away from the main thought.
To correct, revise it so that the reader understands the relationship between the thoughts.
Ch. 3-44
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Imprecise WritingImprecise Writing
Poor: The laptop that you sold me is excellent, and I have a
vacation scheduled soon.
Precise: The laptop that you sold me is excellent. When I go on my
vacation next week, I’ll be sure to bring it along.
Ch. 3-45
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
How could parallelism be improved in the following sentence? Our knowledge management system focuses
on the collecting, storage, and sharing of best practices.
Our knowledge management system focuses on the collecting, storing, and sharing of best practices.
Ch. 3-46
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
How could parallelism be improved in the following sentence? We are pleased to recommend Elizabeth
because she has sincerity, she is reliable, and she works with diligence.
We are pleased to recommend Elizabeth because she is sincere, reliable, and diligent.
Ch. 3-47
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Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers
Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers
For clarity, modifiers must be close to the words they describe or limit. Be particularly careful to place a logical subject immediately after an introductory verbal phrase.
Ch. 3-48
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Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers
Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers
Poor: After considering the problem carefully, new procedures were
suggested by management.
Revised: After considering the problem carefully, management
suggested new procedures.
Ch. 3-49
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Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers
Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers
Poor: Any student has full on-line privileges who is enrolled in the
college.
Revised: Any student who is enrolled in the college has full on-line privileges.
Ch. 3-50
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Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers
Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers
Poor: It’s hard to understand why employees would not go to our
technical support staff with software problems.
Revised: It’s hard to understand why employees with software
problems would not go to our technical support staff.
Ch. 3-51
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Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers
Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers
Poor: Using a search engine, the Web site was finally located.
Revised: Using a search engine, we finally located the Web site.
Ch. 3-52
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following sentence to correct any misplaced modifiers. Retain the introductory phrase. To be hired, two years of experience is
required.
To be hired, one must have two years of experience.
Ch. 3-53
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following sentence to correct any misplaced modifiers. Retain the introductory phrase. Dipped in butter, you can really enjoy a fine
lobster.
Dipped in butter, a fine lobster can truly be enjoyed.
Ch. 3-54
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following sentence to correct any misplaced modifiers. She died in the house in which she was born
at the age of 88.
At the age of 88, she died in the house in which she was born.
Ch. 3-55
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Try Your SkillTry Your Skill
Revise the following sentence to correct any misplaced modifiers. To receive an employment form, fill out this
application. (Tricky!) The sentence is correct as it stands. “You” is the understood subject of a command.
Ch. 3-56
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Three Ways to Achieve Paragraph Coherence Three Ways to Achieve Paragraph Coherence
To help guide your reader or listener from one thought to another, develop coherence by using one of these devices:1. Repeat a key idea or key word(s).
Next month we plan to launch a promotion for our new Web site. The
promotion will involve newspaper and TV campaigns.
Ch. 3-57
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Three Ways to Achieve Paragraph Coherence Three Ways to Achieve Paragraph Coherence
2. Use a pronoun.
Considerable interest is now being shown in our extended GIC’s. They are more
profitable when left on deposit for long periods of time.
Ch. 3-58
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Three Ways to Achieve Paragraph Coherence
Three Ways to Achieve Paragraph Coherence
3. Use an appropriate transitional expression.
Time Associationbefore, after
first, second
meanwhile
next
until
when, whenever
Contrastalthough
but
however
instead
nevertheless
on the other hand
Ch. 3-59
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Three Ways to Achieve Paragraph Coherence
Three Ways to Achieve Paragraph Coherence
3. Use an appropriate transitional expression.
Cause, Effectconsequently
for this reason
hence
therefore
Additional Ideafurthermore
in addition
likewise
moreover
similarly
Ch. 3-60
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Three Ways to Achieve Paragraph Coherence
Three Ways to Achieve Paragraph Coherence
3. Use an appropriate transitional expression.
Illustrationfor example
in this way
Ch. 3-61
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Paragraph LengthParagraph Length
Paragraphs with eight or fewer printed lines look inviting and readable.
Ch. 3-62
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Composing the First DraftComposing the First Draft
Complete all necessary research. Find a quiet place to concentrate and work. Prohibit calls, visitors, and interruptions. Organize information using an outline. Decide whether to sprint write (get your
thoughts down quickly and revise later) or revise as you go.
Imagine you are talking to a reader or listener.