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The Lady on The
Los Feliz
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The Treatment
Act One: Introduce Problem
Scene 1
Ext. Los Feliz Blvd Night,
Opening Shot Camera fades and we see a road sign Los Feliz Blvd
[Dialogue Dorian Narrating]. The camera pans down as we glance at Dorian
walking down a dark street from an elevated position just under the sign.
Tracking Dorian as he enters the building on his left (cameras right); the
camera turns to face the building and climbs until reaching a window [Steps
can be heard]. As we gaze in from the window; Dorian enters from a door on
the left which has Dt. Dayle written upon it.
Int. Dorian Office - Night,
Camera cuts fully body shot as Dorian walking around his desk in the centre
and sitting down as his chair. The camera goes to close up as Dorian picks
up a case file upon the desk. [No sooner the sound of high heels can be
heard] Dorian turns to face the window. Camera cuts to an over the shoulder
view as we look to see a woman walking in and out of the light which beats
down on the side walk. As she comes into the light for the final time the
camera cuts to a close up as she slowly turns towards camera her eyes
looking up at Dorian (off camera). Dorian sees her looking and walks out of
sight into the shadows of his room. Once again we get a close-up of Mave as
she brushes her hair behind her ear. She smiles and turns back to the
sidewalk. Final shot of is mid-shot as Dorian leans on the sill from the
shadows as he tries to peer and see her walk away.
Scene 2
Int. Cafe Midday,
The Cafe is dimly lit as we see a pan shot of Dorian reading a
broadsheet; a hot cup of coffee beside him. The camera goes to a mid
shot of Dorian [as high heels are heard again] dropping his paper he
looks to his right through the window as the figure of Mave walks
past. The camera takes an off centred position to the right as sunblinds the view of the environment inside leaving it white. As Mave
walks across the window she get mid-way before she stops as she
sense eyes staring. Turning, there are a bright light flashes and
blinds Dorians view of Mave before white noise takes over as the
scene transition to a static shot of Mave beaten face appears for a
second before white noise takes us to the next transition.
Scene 3
Ext. Los Feliz Blvd Night
After the transition, the camera fades in to a behind full-body shot
of Dorian silhouette standing under a street lamp; lighting his
cigar. A cab comes in to screen from the right as he pulls off the
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lamppost and stick his arm out hailing for the cab. The rain is
hitting the street hard bouncing up as the cab screeches to stop. As
Dorian moves towards the cab the camera cuts to a close-up of his
hand reaching for the handle of the cab. Suddenly a voice is heard
from behind. The camera has a close-up of Dorian face; he stands up
and turns to face the voice. The camera zooms in as Mave looks
towards him with drenched hair and a magnificent smile. [The
converse briefly] as the camera pans back to a full shot of the taxi
we see Dorian opens the back door and makes way for Mave to enter
before swinging round the other side and getting in.
Scene 4
Int. Taxi Late Night
The pair converse at an intimate position from one another as we see
from a mid-shot of the back seat. They appear to get closer as againMave pulls her hair behind her eye once again. The intimacy gets
frustrating, as they begin to whisper as their lips get closer.
Ext. Street Late Night
Camera sits on the street floor as the car comes into scene and
screeches to a halt with the front wheel skidding nicely into shot.
Int. Taxi Late Night
Camera goes back to mid shot of the back seat as both characters
correct themselves after being hurled forward. Dorian now showing a
facade of anger pulls himself towards the divide as the camera cutsto an over shoulder shot of Dorian. As he goes to converse a dark
figure turns and hits him with an object in a similar shape to a
guns handle. Dorian falls to the floor as the camera remains at the
same position. This time the figure retracts his arm [Mave can be
heard screaming] and moves into the light and for the first time we
see Sammy. His torso in the shadow we see him lift and point his arm
out once again through a hole in the divide. The camera zooms in on
what appear to be the silhouette of Sammy holding a gun. The scene
fades out to next transition
Act Two
Scene 5
Int. Taxi Morning
The scene fades in as we look over Dorian as we see him stir a wake.
The camera cuts to position on the backseat as Dorian rise and we
see a side shot of him. Fury present in his features. Dorian looks
around to find a dim light abandoned taxi [followed by the sound of
him grunting] he lifts him arm and reaches of screen [sound of door
handle opening] as he goes to lift himself out the cab the sun
invades and bleaches out the screen followed by static. A second
image appears of Mave lying motionless on the floor beside the sofa
in nothing more that bra and panties. Several puncture wounds are
visible as the scene is cut short by white static.
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Scene 6
Ext. 6th Floor of Los Feliz Apartment Block 1 (Sammys Home) Late
Night
White static open the scene as we look from behind as we track the
silhouette of Sammy walking down the corridor. Only to be lit by the
lightning coming through the windows on his right. As he nears his
apartment he turns to the left and we cut to a close up of Sammy
hand going towards the lock with his key before noticing the door
ajar. The camera swings up with vicious pace as we look from beside
Sammy face. A flash of lightning shows Dorian face as he grabs
Sammy. The camera cuts down the hall to down the hallway as we see
Sammy slung into his apartment. [Sounds of a struggle can be heard,
followed by punching] Finally Dorian and Sammy emerge back in the
hallway Dorian gripping him with two hands slamming him against the
wall. [Dorian screams a question at Sammy] The Scene fades out.
Scene 7
Ext. Alley Late night
The image of a door appears as from the fade in. The words crimson
can be seen. We look upon from a downward position as a leg appears
flying from stage left. It flings the door back with force leaving
the abyss behind it. The clip fades once more.
Int. Gang Hideout Late Night
We fade in to see an over head shot of Dorian coming out of thestairwell. His gun raised, he comes out in to the opening, static
disrupts for a millisecond; pivoting left we follow. Dorian drops
his gun as before him he sees Mave bound to a chair under a light.
The scene disrupted by static but continues as Mave showing her
weakness, bring up her head to see the figure in front. [We hear
Mave exclaim Dorians name in hope]. Static disrupts again for a bit
longer as [the sound of a phone ringing can be heard]. Dorian looks
to rush towards Mave as Static takes over and is replaced by white
noise [however the ringing remains] White noise takes over.
Act 03
Scene 8
Int. Living Room Late night
We begin totrack back from the white noise as we appear topass
through a transparent barrier. As we continue we see a black matte
border encircle the white noise which seconds later we gather it is
a TV set [meanwhile the ring has come to a stop and we hear two
voices conversing one crackling as it from the phone the other
clear]. As we see ourselves in a dark room which gradually as we
track further band from the TV becomes more visible as the light
fades away. The camera will reach mid way when it will slop upwards
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and we see Mave on a big poster above the TV and as the distance
between TV and the camera increase other posters littering the wall
appear. [Meanwhile we engage with the fact Dorian is being spoken
too by Sammy on the phone making arrangements]. Finally the camerapans back enough to see the silhouette of Dorian watching the TV
screen. He hangs up the phone and places it on the table on his
right. Finally his head drops as the camera fades. The image re-
appears with a close-up of the Mave poster above the TV. A sudden
flash [followed by gunshot heard] as we see the bullet makes contact
with the image of Mave just right of her rib cage. As we zoom slowly
in we begin to see trickling of liquid before a nice flow of blood
comes from the poster before the white static cuts the clip.
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The Step Outline
Act One: Introduce Problem
Protagonist sees the female for the first time in the street and isbewildered by her looks.
He sees her again as she passes by the window of the cafe.
Dorian halls for a cab and sees again Mave inside. They converse
before Dorian enters.
The car comes to a harsh stop as they continue talking. But as
Dorian goes to enquire hes knocked unconscious by the Driver
Sammy Jones.
Act Two: Fighting The Problem
Dorian regains consciousness and peers around the cab. Noticing hes
alone he lives the cab
Dorian tussles with Sammy in alley and knock him unconscious.
Dorian smashes through the door in the alley and walks in.
Entering the gangs hideout, Dorian peered down the room and sees
Mave tide up behind a small group of the gang. Mave cries out
Dorian.
Act Three: Twist ending
The image turns to white noise and we peel away to see weve been
watching the TV in a littered room.
We hear a conversation between Dorian and Sammy negotiating an event
that night.
We then see the entire room as we pan back and see Dorians
silhouette in an army chair looking glum.
Audience focus on poster above TV, suddenly flashing as a gun goes
off and blood sprays across the poster.
The camera pans back to see a different room with a body lay on the
floor and a shadow figure walk out the door.
The Premise
Story of a Detective, who faces his corrupt lifestyle which destroys
his dream film noir career when the women he loves, dies because of
him.
The Logline
Story of a Detective, whose dream to be like detectives, in film
noir is trampled on his corrupt lifestyle causing the death of his
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damsel in distress. Thus leaving him to solve the crime and put his
bad past behind him and be that perfect detective he dreams about.
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Character Biographies
The
Initiate
Name Samuel Jones
Height 6ft 2
Age 18
Back story Sammy Jones grew in the neighbourhood at the end ofLos Feliz Blvd and had been accustomed to crime from
an early age. This became an influence on his life as
he began to hang with gang member whilst at school
and at home. However when trying to initiate into the
local gang (The White Fences Whom would later join
part of Latin Kings) he wasnt excepted to due to his
colour even though his mother was from south American
origins. In result by the time he was 16 he was
isolated at his school and received a beating by the
gang 20yds from his house. This was a nearly the end
from SJ but lucky for him a Crip gang where riding by
and saw the white fence beating a fellow African
American.
The gang where shot down in an improvised drive-by
and SJ was escorted to the car and driven to the
nearby set safe house. His allegiance to the Crips
grew as he began to hang with the member at school
and saw himself accepted into the group. But as a
child he remained not a member until he came of age.
However it was a month after his 17th birthday when he
watched the awful image of his mother being mowed
down by a drive-by. At first it appeared to be
another gang but after an investigation began it
appeared to be that of the White fences.
In conclusion, SJ began to commit crimes against
South Americans; be it steals from a shop or beating
on locals walking home. In result his racial hate
grew and his ambition to be part of the cribs grew.
By the time it came to his 18th SJ was ready to become
a fully fledged crib and to locals had became known
as Diablo Muerte (- Devils Death or DD for Short).
As standard this began his initiate progress but for
his reputation the (Now known) Crimson had set him a
bigger task this one would be a famous actor of Latin
background.
Affiliations SJ, Sammy, Diablo Muerte, DD
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The Dame
Name Maryese Moreau
Height 5ft 7
Age 23
Back story Maryese had dreamed about becoming a model. Butreceived much rejection at the start of her career.
She instead for the time found work in a local
fashion shop and worked on her figure which due to
numerous rejection and comments by people within the
industry became her obsession. By the time she was 19
see became the ideal woman, the fashion industry icon
but at a huge price. Maryese had become bulimic;
vomiting after every meal, she became prone to
fainting but pushed passed health issues as she loved
the attention her body had given to her.
The obsession became curse, as much as it was a gift
to her. She remained ill most of the time suffering
from starvation. Her personality out of the limelight
became vacant and impassive; rendering her to, the
nickname of Sad Beautyto her friends as they watch
her old self deteriorate to a fashion zombie.
As her modelling career spiralled in legendary status
she was given by her agency, a mansion on the top end
of Los Feliz which she moved into from her home town
in Florida. This gave her more Job opportunity but
most of all entered her into the world of acting. By
the next summer she had starred in her first feature
film and brought her more fame and financial backing.
As the money came in, she used it to help the less
fortunate; setting up foundations and charities
across the states of America. Her work helping lower
youth unemployment and crimes nationwide. Her name
soon became The American Dream but to many she became
The American Saviour. With this came stalkers and
other psychopaths whom would send e-mails and letters
to her. Many of which mentioned her beauty andalthough they frightened her they made her happy
because of this. No sooner her obsession turned to
OCD as she became focused on nothing more than
maintaining her voluptuous body to get more praise
and in some terms stalker mail.
By the time she was 23 she was national icon and a
woman adored by the nation. Idolized by the women and
romanticised by men. She represented the best of
America but as the recession hit. Accolades meant
nothing as Maryese was about to find out.
Affiliations Sad Beauty, The American Dream, The American Saviour,Nations Princess
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The
Detective
Name Dorian Dayle
Height 6ft 5
Age 27
Back story Dorian past was full of accolades, from a young age heexcelled in school and he was awarded special
recognition for his extracurricular activities in
school. Playing the basketball team and American
football during his free time.
By the end of high school, he looked towards a career
in law, whilst still maintaining his physical abilities
running track for his college Yale. During his time
there he fell in love with Film Noir. Idolizing the
likes of Sam Spade (The Maltese Falcon), Philip Marlowe
(Murder, My Sweet) and Mark McPherson (Laura), whom
became influential as the first semester, came to a
close. Before his second his ambition had changed and
his work in law had shown so much corruption that he
came out and entered in to a Police academy. By his 23rd
birthday he graduated from the academy but due to his
knowledge and quick initiative during his final police
trials he was promoted immediately to detective.
During his career as a Dt. He became notorious to gangs
as he fished out cells one by one. Taking out big hits
which previously seemed untouchable. He became infamous
as The Cripplerto Crips and The Vampire to the Bloods.
As his legacy continued, his fame gained between the
Los Angeles community and infamy between gangs.
When the recession hit an all time low, things changed
as gangs came into power over local enforcement. The
Crips and Bloods especially had become a joint gang
which profited more than ever from their joint drug
ventures and as a collaborative force known as The
Crimson they began to run the streets. Organizing
themselves into stronger cells with different agendas
making it implausible for anyone to bring them down.
For Dorian this became a big hit as all cases went cold
and his great name in the community was dragged through
the dirt. By the first year of the depression he became
impatient with his failure to bring justice.
It was on a small gun crime charge turned his world
upside down as a Crimson Lieutenant was cornered down
an alley by Dorian. Before the arrest took place the
Lieutenant tried to bribe Dorian. As his mind tossed
over his choice he became aware of his possibility to
become a legend once again. Taking the bribe he told
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the Lieutenant to contact him once more to discuss an
agreement. By the end of the week Dorian had made a
pact with the Gang, As they made transaction with each
other to supply their needs. Dorian would pay off
members to stop crimes in certain areas or a planned
hit. Whilst he would take money for initiations. When a
gang recruit would kill a person to gain entry to the
gang, he would pull cops from that area giving them
false evidence of a crime on the other side of town.
With this he became the man of the hour once again and
he felt that during this time he became another hero of
the recession.
Affiliations Dt. Dayle, The Crippler, The Vampire