Post on 03-Jan-2016
REVISION
1. When revising, assume that your reader is unconvinced. Each claim or statement must be confirmed with additional detail.
For example: I am a highly qualified candidate because I have leadership skills.
* What should follow this topic sentence?
REVISION
2. A strong easy to follow format will help your reader follow your argument and understand why you are explaining certain aspects of your life.
Example: When I worked at the writing center, I had a lot of different opportunities. Once, I helped a student with special needs and many students were English Language Learners.
* What additional information is needed so the reader understands the relevance of the material.
ACTIVITY: REVISE THIS LETTER To Whom it May Concern,
I am applying for the position at Amazon. I have recently graduated high school and would like to make some money before beginning college this fall.
I have shown leadership skills, a good work ethic, and good communication skills.
I hope you would consider me for the position.
Thank you, Random high school student
INSTRUCTIONS:
1. Revise the letter.
2. Introduce yourself.
3. Explain how you have leadership skills, a good work ethic, and a good communication skills. Show how you have illustrated these qualities.
4. Feel free to make this revision fictional for this activity.