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Mark Scheme (Result s)
Summer 2010
GCE
GCE Engl ish Language & Lit erat ure (6EL01) Paper
01 – Exploring Voices in Speech & Writ ing
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Mark Scheme
English Language and Literature – Unit 1
Mark Assessment Objective
0 – 6
AO1: Select and apply relevant concepts and approaches from integrated
linguistic and literary study, using appropriate terminology and accurate,
coherent written expression
Question
Number Answer Mark
1(a)(i)
1 mark for each identification (1x3)
1 mark for accurate exemplification of feature (1x3)
Features identified and exemplified might include:
• cont rast bet ween t he professional greet ing (good
af t ernoon, t ake a seat , how can I help you) and t he
informal (hi…)
• adj acency pairs/ t ag quest ions (f l ying when?/ 24t h; how many
t ravel l ing?/ t wo)
• backt racking (shal l we book/ do you want t o book)
• f i l ler (erm)
• simult aneous speech/ overlapping (marked wit h/ / )
• col loquial ism (div/ wobbler)
• imperat ives/ inst ruct ions (t ake a seat )
• repet it ion as conf irmat ion (28t h/ yeah 28t h)
These are suggest ions only. Accept any val id spoken word feat ures.
(6)
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Question
Number Indicative content Mark
1(a)(ii)
(2x2) for comment s t hat relat e t he chosen feat ures t o t he
funct ion wit hin t he ext ract . Accept any comment t hat relat es
t hought ful ly (and wit h underst anding) t o t he feat ure and it s
funct ion. Expect comment s on t he t ransact ional nat ure of t he
exchange and t he dynamic bet ween agent / cust omer/ brot her.
(4)
Band Mark
AO1: Select and apply relevant concepts and approaches from
integrated linguistic and literary study, using appropriate
terminology and accurate, coherent written expression
1 0 – 2
• Provides basic comment wit h inaccuracies or omissions
• Gives general ised comment which may be l imit ed t o a generic
def init ion of t he funct ion.
2 3 – 4
• Makes accurat e comment s which are ful l and insight ful
• Makes comment showing considerat ion of t he funct ion of t he
feat ure wit hin t he ext ract .
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Question
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1(b) Candidat es are l ikely t o show awareness of cont ext and comment on devices t hat
relat e t o t he st ruct ure, form and language af forded by t he very dif ferent
cont ext s of t he ext ract s.
Candidat es may wel l ident ify and exempli fy t he spoken language feat ures/ t erms
cont ained wit hin each ext ract . Higher band answers are l ikely t o cont ext ual ise
t hese wit hin t he ext ract s and according t o t he furt her prompt s of t he quest ion.
Reward any comment t hat relat es t o t he cont ext or dynamic of t he piece or t o
t he funct ion of t he language feat ures wit hin t his cont ext .
Candidat es may respond t o each bul let point in t urn, or provide an int egrat ed
reponse.
Candidat es’ responses can be expect ed t o include t he fol lowing:
Text B: blog
Audience:
• t hose browsing/ fol lowing t he Guardian blog sit e – specif ical ly t ravel
post ings
• st udent s/ gap year st udent s
• t hose int erest ed in Skins (a t een TV drama)
Purpose:
• t o inform, ent ert ain, promot e
• writ t en t o est abl ish rapport wit h audience
Mode:
• blog af f i l iat ed t o a nat ional newspaper websit e which suggest s a higher
degree of planning t han a spont aneous post and invit es comment s and
int eract ion
Point s of int erest / comment might include:
• t he sense of voiced int roduct ion in t his, t he f irst , ent ry (Hel lo. I’ m Max
Gogart y. . . ). The reference t o age and experience incorporat ed here t o
signal fut ure cont ent / approach/ appeal
• assumed/ shared knowledge and experience/ shared sense of cont ext wit h
specif ic focus on yout h/ st udent cult ure and cont ext
• sense of immediacy and shared j ourney t hrough use of t ense
• t he focus of ant icipat ed experience : t he assumpt ions it makes about
audience in t erms of expect at ion and aspirat ion and t he language used t o
convey t his (swimming/ sunbat hing/ f ul l -moon par t ies/ beaut i f ul gi r ls. . . )
• t he promot ional nat ure of t he f inal sect ion
• sense of mult iple purposes
Spoken language feat ures:
• direct address (you could come wt h me. . . )
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• use of punct uat ion t o indicat e del ivery or pause (. . . / -)
• shif t s in focus/ regist er
• col loquial ism (bunch/ dodgy/ sharpish. . . )
• backt racking (wel l , not every st ep).
Text C: autobiography
Audience:
• readers wit h an int erest in t he l i fe and perspect ive of Berkof f
Purpose:
• t o inform, ent ert ain and connect wit h t he audience
Mode:
• print ed, permanent , highly-craf t ed, l i t erary record
Point s of int erest / comment might include:
• use of age (when I was t en years old) t o cont ext ual ise – opport unit ies for
comment s on generic convent ion here
• assumed knowledge in t he reader regarding t he ‘ geography’ of London
and t he way in which dist rict s are referenced (Ant hony St reet (of f
Commercial Road, E1); a mi le up t he road in Poplar)
• cont ext ual isat ion (af t er t he war) and impl ied references t o rat ioning
• use of product names (Tizer) and t it les (Troxy) t o generat e a sense of
place and t ime
• use of cinema as source of social and cult ural l i fe/ st imulat ion and how
t his cont ribut es t o our underst anding of Berkof f
• t he int egrat ion of child and adult voice/ perspect ive and how t his is
achieved
Spoken language feat ures:
• use of parent hesis t o add informat ion and achieve a sense of direct
conversat ion wit h t he reader (my parent s, sist er Beryl and I)
• use of informal/ col loquial language t o capt ure t he voice – bot h of t he boy
and t he t imes – (hang out / nat t er / old bloke)
• t he sense of t he adult evaluat ive/ ref lect ive voice (I seemed t o be
perpet ual ly hungry/ t hen considered a f i rst -class grammar school / I not ice
t hat t he local aut hor i t ies. . . ) and how t his is incorporat ed
• use of el ision (I’ d)
Higher band responses wil l cont ext ual ise t hese feat ures according t o t he
audience and purpose of t he wider t ext and of fer t hought ful comment on how
t hese are int egrat ed.
These are suggest ions only. Accept any val id spoken word feat ures
(40)
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Band Mark
AO2: Demonstrate detailed critical understanding in analysing the
ways in which structure, form and language shape meanings in a
range of spoken and written texts
1 0 – 4
• makes basic observat ional and descript ive comment s
• makes comment s on how st ruct ure, form and language shape
meaning, comment s are l ikely t o be general and brief
• support s some comment s wit h minimal exemplif icat ion
• makes reference t o one of t he t wo ext ract s only.
2 5 – 9
• makes some observat ional and descript ive crit ical comment s
• makes comment s on st ruct ure, form and language, comment s
wil l be part ial ly developed and l inks t o how t hese shape meaning
may be underdeveloped
• support s most comment s wit h exemplif icat ion, but may lack
consist ency at t he bot t om of t he band
• makes reference t o bot h ext ract s wit h minimal coverage of one
of t he t wo ext ract s.
3 10 – 15
• crit ical ly analyses in a most ly accurat e way, ident if ies clear l inks
bet ween form and funct ion, at t he bot t om of t he band t he
crit ical analysis wil l be l imit ed
• makes comment s on st ruct ure, form and language, comment s
wil l be det ailed, and wil l l ink consist ent ly t o show how t hese
shape meaning
• support s al l comment s wit h relevant exemplif icat ion
• makes reference t o bot h ext ract s, select ing appropriat e mat erial
f rom bot h ext ract s.
4 16 – 20
• crit ical ly analyses providing det ailed and accurat e comment ,
examining clear l inks bet ween form and funct ion
• makes comment s on st ruct ure, form and language, t hat are ful l
and insight ful , and wil l examine some of t he ef fect s produced
• support s al l comment s wit h relevant and wel l -chosen
exemplif icat ion
• makes reference t o bot h ext ract s, select ing mat erial f rom bot h
ext ract s wit h insight and discriminat ion.
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Band Mark
AO3: Use integrated approaches to explore relationships between
texts, analysing and evaluating the significance of contextual
factors in their production and reception
1 0 – 4
• makes some basic comment s on cont ext al t hough t his is l ikely t o
be uneven across t he ext ract s
• ident if ies aspect s but an ext ract may be omit t ed.
2 5 – 9
• makes some developed comment s on cont ext . Responses include
comment s on t he relat ionship bet ween t he language of t he t ext s
and t he cont ext in which t hey are produced and received
• examines bot h ext ract s: at t he bot t om of t he band t he det ail
across ext ract s may be uneven and t here wil l be omissions; at
t he t op of t he band t he det ail across ext ract s wil l be more
devleoped.
3 10 – 15
• makes developed comment s on cont ext . Responses include wel l-
developed l inks bet ween t he language of t he t ext s and t he
cont ext in which t hey are produced and received
• examines bot h ext ract s: at t he bot t om of t he band det ail across
ext ract s wil l be consist ent and t horough; at t he t op of t he band
t here wil l be some evidence of sophist icat ion.
4 16 – 20
• makes ful ly developed comment s on cont ext . Responses include
conf ident and insight ful l inks bet ween t he language of t he t ext s
and t he cont ext in which t hey are produced and received
• examines bot h ext ract s: at t he t op of t he band sophist icat ion is
more ful ly developed and t here wil l be discriminat ion and
insight .
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Question
Number Indicative content
2
The f irst prompt invit es a det ailed invest igat ion of t he given ext ract wit h a
specif ic focus on t he at t i t ude and perspect ive of t he female narrat or.
Candidat es’ responses may include references t o aspect s of synt ax, lexis,
phonology, graphology and discourse t hat cont ribut e t o t he creat ion of voice
t hroughout t he ext ract , such as:
• t he impact of t he opening declarat ive and how it funct ions wit hin t he
st ruct ural convent ion of fairy t ale
• t he insight af forded by Cart er’ s use of f irst -person perspect ive
• t he passive role of t he girl in t he t ransact ion and how t his is achieved
• t he at t i t ude of t he girl narrat or t o t his enforced passivit y and how t his is
conveyed t o t he reader (f ur ious cynicism/ circumst ances f orce mut ely. . . / I
wat ched/ r ids himself of t he last scraps of my inher i t ance)
• t he girl ’ s at t i t ude t o her fat her and how t his is conveyed t o t he reader:
ref lexive pronoun (beggars) himsel f t o at t r ibut e blame; t one/ irony what a
burden al l of t hose possessions must have been t o him; det ail of
observat ion t he veins in his f orehead st and out and t hrob; underst anding of
fat her’ s value syst em expect at ion of perpet ual pleasure
• t he girl as represent at ive of women in societ y ( I wat ched wi t h t he f ur ious
cynicism pecul iar t o women. . . )
• t he underlying mat erial ism of t he girl and how t his is revealed t o t he
reader( my inher i t ance; we owned; ser f s. . . )
• t he sense of j ourney/ escape – l inks t o convent ion – cult ural and cl imat e
cont rast and how t his in achieved/ conveyed. There is considerable
pot ent ial t o cit e l i t erary devices in t his respect (alliteration: lovely land
where t he lemon t rees grow/ l ion l ies down wi t h t he lamb; personification
t he snow f ol lowed us f rom Russia/ i t ran behind our carr iage/ t he sun spi l l s
f rui t f or you
• t he sensuous modif icat ion in descript ion of t he Sout h t o furt her t his
cont rast (volupt uous air/ sensual let hargy / sweet Sout h)
• t he use of pronoun t o height en cont rast and develop t he sense of
st ranger/ dif ference (at home we are at war/ t he f i rewat er they cal l . . . )
• t he danger and decept ion embedded wit hin t his cont rast
(deat hly/ inf ect s/ st arved/ let hargy. . . )
• t he way in which references t o t he Beast are capit al ised – ident if icat ion
wit h t he Devil – consol idat ed wit h reference t o t he Devi l ’ s pict ure cards
and Bibl ical al lusion t he l ion l ies down wi t h t he lamb.
These are suggest ions only. Accept any point t hat considers Cart er’ s t echnique and
which sust ains focus on issues of t he t ask.
The second prompt ext ends t o t he wider col lect ion wit h a direct focus on t he
posit ion of women and t heir at t i t ude t o t his posit ion.
Reward responses t hat demonst rat e an underst anding of t he component s of t he
second prompt , especial ly t he impact on t he reader.
(50)
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Question
Number Indicative content
3
The f irst prompt invit es a det ailed invest igat ion of t he given ext ract wit h a
specif ic focus on t he perspect ive of t he child narrat or.
Look for a close reading of t he ext ract it self – t here are many opport unit ies t o
explore Doyle’ s t echnique and t o make l inks wit h t he rest of t he novel.
Point s t o look out for and reward may include aspect s of synt ax, lexis, phonology,
graphology and discourse t hat cont ribut e t o t he creat ion of voice t hroughout t he
ext ract such as:
• insight af forded by f irst –person perspect ive
• t he visual/ sensory/ cont ext ual fact ors which combine t o develop t he
voice/ perspect ive of t he narrat or
• breaks in chronological sequence and how t hey capt ure t he t hought
processes of a child (I was on my own. . . )
• evidence of Paddy’ s det erminat ion t o move on t o a dif ferent phase in his l i fe
and his awareness of t he process he must undert ake t o achieve t his
t ransit ion (he t err i f ied me/ t hat was j ust messing)
• met hods used t o convey Paddy’ s admirat ion of Leavy t o t he reader
• t he fact t hat it is t he det achment of Leavy t hat at t ract s Paddy and how t his
prepares him for t he inevit abil i t y of his fut ure (al l by himsel f / i t wasn’ t a
real smi le/ f ight s t hat never t ouched him). There is considerable scope t o
make l inks wit h Paddy’ s accept ance of t he breakdown in his parent ’ s
marriage here
• st ruct ured sequencing and incorporat ion of direct speech (reference t o how
t his is marked – no speech marks/ repeat ed hyphen - and why)
• Paddy’ s awareness of t he dif ference bet ween Leavy and himself and t he
ot her children, and how t his is conveyed t o t he reader (pronoun: he had no
f riends/ we l iked gangs…)
• t he qual it ies in Leavy t o which Paddy aspires and why
• t he use of smoking as a vehicle and symbol of change and development
• t he process of smoking and t he received/ inst ruct ional voices incorporat ed
int o t his process (i t was a Maj or t he st rongest / I made sure my l ips were
dry…duck’ s arse of i t )
• language t echniques employed by Doyle t o capt ure t he event and process of
shared smoking
• t he sense of r it e of passage achieved by t he f inal declarat ive (I’ d made i t . ).
These are suggest ions only. Accept any point t hat considers Doyle’ s t echnique and
which sust ains focus on issues of t he t ask.
The second prompt requires candidat es t o move beyond t he ext ract t o make l inks
wit h ot her part s of t he novel and t o explore t hese l inks t hrough j udicious
select ion – and appl icat ion- of evidence f rom t he novel as a whole.
(50)
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Question
Number Indicative content
4
There are obvious opport unit ies t o analyse aspect s of black vernacular here and
candidat es may wel l analyse t his aspect of t he ext ract in some det ail , l inking
cont ent and st yle t o Cel ie’ s voice and her ret el l ing – t hey should obviously be
rewarded for t his. Examples include:
• omission of copula verb ‘ t o be’ (she black as t ar )
• omission of t hird person inf lect ion (I sneak back/ he say)
• double negat ion (don’ t say not hing)
• unmarked possessive (t hey husband whore).
Expect comment on t he epist olary nat ure of t he novel.
The f irst prompt invit es specif ic invest igat ion of t he narrat ive perspect ive and t he
insight it af fords int o t he at t i t ude of t he t hree charact ers t o Shug Avery and t he
nat ure of t he relat ionships bet ween fat her and son/ husband, and wife/ husband,
and ‘ lover’ / Cel ie and Shug. Candidat es’ responses may include references t o
aspect s of synt ax, lexis, phonology, graphology and discourse t hat cont ribut e t o t he
creat ion of voice t hroughout t he ext ract such as:
• direct speech and how t his is marked
• Celie’ s sensit ivit y t o Shug ( I shet t he widow)
• Celie’ s observat ion of non-verbal signals (Old Mr _____ clear his t hroat / Mr
_____’ s grunt r ight t here)
• old Mr _____’ s descript ion of Shug, his use of negat ively-versed met aphor
and simile and what it reveals about his at t i t udes and values (she black as
t ar / she nappy headed…). Pot ent ial for invest igat ion int o at t i t udes t owards
degree of ‘ blackness’ here
• at t it udes t o race, and relat ionships bet ween black and whit e communit ies
impl ied by her mammy t o t his day t ake in whi t e people dir t y clot hes.
• t he escalat ion of old Mr _____’ s insult s f rom t he physical (she got legs l ike
basebal l bat s) t o t he moral (I hear she got t he nast y woman disease/ nobody
even sure who her daddy is/ al l her chi ldren got di f f erent daddys) and t he
mot ivat ion behind t his escalat ion. The use of euphemism (nast y woman
disease) especial ly t he choice of adj ect ive may wel l be explored here
• t he dif fering, yet paral lel , escalat ion of responses t o t hese insult s:
o Mr_____ don’ t say not hing/ I drop a l i t t le spi t …
o I t wir l t he spi t round wi t h my f inger . I t hink bout ground
glass/ Mr_____ t urn his head slow/ you aint got i t in you t o
underst and…
• Mr _____’ s at t i t ude t o his fat her, his developing st rengt h/ def iance and how
t he voice of Cel ie bot h capt ures and responds t o t his (wat ch his daddy
dr ink/ t urn f ul l f ace on his daddy)
• Mr _____’ s at t i t ude t o, and defence of , Shug and how t he voice of Cel ie bot h
capt ures and responds t o t his (I Love Shug Avery/ should have marr ied her
when I had t he chance/ al l Shug Avery chi ldren got t he same daddy/ I vouch
f or t hat …)
• t he t hreat conveyed by t he l ist ed declarat ives (and repeat ed st ruct ures) of
Old Mr _____’ s f inal ut t erance (Wel l , t his is my house… Trash blow over I
burn i t )
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• Walker’ s use of t ense as Cel ie ref lect s t hen proj ect s (next t ime he come I
put a l i t t le Shug Avery pee in his glass)
• t he unif icat ion and mut ual underst anding conveyed by t he f inal declarat ives
(our eyes meet / This t he closest us ever f el t ).
These are suggest ions only. Accept any point t hat considers Walker’ s t echnique and
which sust ains focus on issues of t he t ask.
Al l point s – t hrough t heir exemplif icat ion – of fer opport unit y for close analysis.
Candidat es are expect ed t o move beyond t he ext ract t o make l inks wit h ot her part s
of t he novel wit h a specif ic focus on t hese voices and how t hey have been shaped
by t he societ y around t hem.
Candidat es should be able t o demonst rat e t heir awareness of t he met hods used t o
capt ure t hese voices and t o comment on t he cont ext s t hat shape/ inf luence t hem
t hrough j udicious select ion of evidence f rom t he novel as a whole.
(50)
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Question
Number Indicative content
5 This ext ract develops t he perspect ive of Merivel t owards himself and his l i fe.
There are many opport unit ies t o use t his as a base f rom which t o t race t he
development and shif t s in t hese at t it udes as t he novel progresses (t hereby
addressing t he second component of t he quest ion) and t o of fer shif t s in his values
and perspect ive on Sevent eent h cent ury England as a result .
Expect a close reading of t he ext ract i t sel f .
Candidat es’ responses may include references t o aspect s of synt ax, lexis,
phonology, graphology and discourse t hat cont ribut e t o t he creat ion of voice
t hroughout t he ext ract such as:
• t he opening declarat ives and t he sense of ‘ diary’ t hey convey l inked t o t he
fact t hat t his, coming as it does, at t he st art of a chapt er, signals a
progression/ change t o t he reader. Candidat es might also make reference
t o t he fact t hat t his chapt er is ent it led ROBERT (as opposed t o Merivel) as
an indicat ion of a change in t he way t he narrat or views himself
• t he immediacy af forded by t he use of present t ense
• t he direct address t o t he reader (t he man you know al l t oo wel l / t he person
I asked you t o pict ure)
• t he signif icant use of ref lexive pronoun in Merivel ’ s self -appraisal (I have
been absent f rom mysel f ) and t he sense of separat ion it conveys t o t he
reader
• t he use of t he t hird person t o refer t o his former self (I saw him/ t he man
you know al l t oo wel l )
• his descript ion of his former self – and his reference t o t hat self as Merivel
(t he person… wear ing a scar let sui t / t he Fool Mer ivel ) and his involvement
of t he reader wit h t his observat ion of himself in his former incarnat ion (I
asked you t o pict ure…) t he use of past t ense signif icant here
• t he af fect ion he conveys for his former self (a sent iment al
t enderness/ af f ect ion) which af fords cont rast t o his previous self -
ef facement and t he use of t his af fect ion as spur t o complet e t he st ory (i t is
t his t enderness t hat has led me t o complet e t he st ory)
• awareness of closure (I passed f rom one l i f e int o anot her)
• t he imperat ive t o t he reader (under t hese t hings you may draw a l ine)
fol lowed by t he l ist t hat encapsulat es change, culminat ing wit h t he shared
sense of closure (nei t her you nor I wi l l see t hem again/ you wi l l not be
ret urned t o t hem)
• t he use of f ire as a met aphor for consumpt ion and t he l inks it af fords t o t he
st ruct ure/ sequence of t he novel as a whole
• t he use of t he proper noun (No one cal ls me Mer ivel / I am not even Sir
Robert / I am Robert ) and t he t ransit ion embedded wit hin t his
• t he det ail of t he descript ion of his ‘ present ’ self of fers sharp comparison t o
his ‘ former’ self where adornment is replaced by funct ional it y
• Merivel ’ s communicat ion of his discomfort (a vexat ious i t ching of t he
nipples/ very heavy/ causes me a deal of misery) and of his sense of
deprivat ion achieved by cont rast wit h his former l i fe - especial ly t hrough
his t hought s on food
• his det erminat ion t o rel inquish his old l i fe and t o overcome t he urge t o
escape t he present (such t hought s I set aside/ a yearning (almost
perpet ual ) t o saddle Daneuse and r ide away f rom here)
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• t he sense of hopelessness and lack of direct ion conveyed in t he quest ion
wit her should I r ide?
These are suggest ions only. Accept any point t hat considers Tremain’ s t echnique
and which sust ains focus on issues of t he t ask.
Al l point s – t hrough t heir exemplif icat ion – of fer opport unit y for close analysis.
Prompt ed by t he second component of t he quest ion, candidat es are expect ed t o
move beyond t he ext ract t o make l inks wit h ot her part s of t he novel. Candidat es
should be able t o demonst rat e t heir awareness of t he met hods used t o capt ure
Merivel ’ s voice and t o comment on t he cont ext s t hat shape/ inf luence it t hrough
j udicious select ion of evidence f rom t he novel as a whole.
(50)
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Question
Number Indicative content
6
Candidat es are l ikely t o explore t he ext ract in dept h and t o comment on t he let t er
writ ing convent ions employed t o cont ext ual ize it and t o shape t he voice of Max.
Expect comment on t he epist olary nat ure of t he novel la. Alt hough t he ext ract is
select ed mid–way t hrough t he let t er candidat es may wel l make references t o t he
codes and convent ions t hat shape it s cont ent and should be rewarded for t his if
t hey do.
Point s t o look out for and reward in t erms of t he explorat ion of t he ext ract it self
may include references t o aspect s of synt ax, lexis, phonology, graphology and
discourse t hat cont ribut e t o t he creat ion of voice t hroughout t he ext ract such as:
• t he let t er heading t hat formalizes and dist ances and which also hint s at
censorship
• t he signif icance of t he dat e and l inks t o comment s on pol it ical cont ext
• t he pol it ical nat ure of address – t he f irst inst ance of break in
convent ion/ direct address
• t he st ruct ures indicat ive of a non-Engl ish voice (I much regret / not qui t e a
week ago)
• t he lack of passion and dist ance achieved by t he harsh declarat ive and t he
pronoun embedded wit hin it (Your sist er is dead), which might wel l be
cont ext ual ized in l ight of t he former relat ionship bet ween Grisel le and
Mart in
• t he manipulat ion – and dist ort ion – of Max’ s voice/ words t o dist ribut e
blame/ responsibil i t y (she was, as you have said, very much a f ool )
• t he nat ure of Mart in’ s descript ion of his family l i fe and what it reveals about
his priorit ies and his increasing af f luence
• t he signif icance of his naming of t he baby (Adolf )
• t he use of t ense in t he second and t hird paragraphs t o achieve t ension in t he
ret el l ing and t o af ford insight int o t he t hought processes and j udgment s
made by Mart in
• t he use of t he int errogat ive t o develop t his (can I hide her?/ can I endure…?)
• t he swit ch t o an assimilat ed voice of propaganda and nat ional dut y t o
f inal ise choice but t he manipulat ion of t hat voice t o ref lect an element of
courage/ loyalt y which might speak of underlying guil t (as a German I have
one plain dut y/ she has displayed her Jewish body…pure young German
men/ I should hold her / t his I cannot do)
• t he t ransfer of choice/ responsibil i t y t o Grisel le (she looks at me and
smi les…and makes her own choice) and what t his reveals about Mart in
• t he manner in which he relays t he ki l l ing of Grisel le, t he separat ion f rom it
he achieves, and t he underlying horror, t hrough t he el l ipt ical approach he
adopt s, in t he simple declarat ives he employs (I go int o t he house/ in a f ew
minut es she st ops screaming)
• his repeat ed assert ion t hat he was powerless t o int ervene (I was helpless/ I
was helpless t o aid her).
These are suggest ions only. Accept any point t hat considers Taylor’ s t echnique and
which sust ains focus on issues of t he t ask.
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The second component requires candidat es t o move beyond t he ext ract and should
cert ainly explore t he changes in voice and at t it ude – part icularly in Max – t hat t he
relayed incident t r iggers.
There are many opport unit ies for analysis here and, provided t hat candidat es
sust ain focus on t he cent ral issues of t he t ask – i.e. Mart in’ s response and
subsequent act ion which signals a shif t in t he direct ion of t he novel la and t he
correspondence t hat is i t s cent ral st ruct ure - t hey should be rewarded.
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Question
Number Indicative content
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Candidat es are l ikely t o explore t he ext ract in det ail and t o comment on what it
reveals about Fish and t he impact of his near-drowning on himself and his family.
Responses should of fer explorat ion of how Wint on’ s manipulat ion of narrat ive
perspect ive enables t he development of t his myst ical narrat or and t hat it is
perhaps t he voice of t he drowned Fish who succumbed t o t he wat er, separat ed
f rom t he incomplet e survivor t hat Fish has become. They should be able t o
comment on t he innovat ion t his represent s and on t he added dimension it af fords
t o t he novel as a whole.
Point s t o look out for and reward in t erms of t he explorat ion of t he ext ract it self
may include references t o aspect s of synt ax, lexis, phonology, graphology and
discourse t hat cont ribut e t o t he creat ion of voice t hroughout t he ext ract such as:
• t he impact of direct address and t he conversat ional nat ure of t his address
(she sees you, boy) and what it reveals about Fish’ s condit ion
• how t he prot ect ive act ions of t he family are conveyed and perceived (wi t h
t he cord of her dressing gown she t ies you t o a t ree/ t here’ s always
someone wi t h t hei r f ingers in t he bel t loops of your pant s…). There is a
dist ance and separat ion achieved t hrough pronouns (she/ t heir ). There may
be comment on t he fact t hat t hese act ions, al t hough wel l-int ended,
separat e Fish f rom his dest iny
• how ot her voices are incorporat ed, for example t he int egrat ion of t he l ines
f rom a hymn (t he beaut i f ul , t he beaut i f ul , t he r iver) and t he Bibl ical t one
and al lusion (every l iving creat ure t hat swarms/ t hat t he wat ers of t he sea
become f resh…) wit h obvious l inks t o Fish’ s experience/ upbringing and how
t his has shaped his voice
• how t his ‘ int ernal ’ voice reveals t he operat ion of a damaged mind t hrough
it s disj oint ed st ruct ure and sequence
• how t he voice est abl ishes and communicat es t he lure of t he river - and
conveys t he inevit abil i t y of Fish’ s end. For example, t he simple repet it ion
of t he noun (river) highl ight s it s signif icance and endows it wit h a voice of
it s own
• t he profound nat ure of t he voice as it decodes, for Fish, t he nat ure of
exist ence and how t his is conveyed t o t he reader (now is always and
never / f rom and t o wi l l be always and never)
• t he reference t o t he myst ical aborigine and t he l inks t his af fords t o ot her
charact ers (such as Quick) and t o t he narrat ive as a whole (a dark man
comes f l ying by your t ree…). There is pot ent ial t o explore indigenous
Aust ral ian cult ure here and t o comment on t he f igure as a st ruct ural device
across t he novel
• t he shif t of t ense in t he penult imat e paragraph, and t he cert aint y
conveyed (your t ime wi l l come/ you’ l l have a second of knowing…)
• t he sense t hat Fish wil l somehow become unit ed/ whole/ healed in t he f inal
act of drowning (you’ l l be me…) and t he l iberat ion deat h wil l bring –
t hrough repet it ion (f ree t o come and go/ f ree t o puzzle…/ f ree f rom t he net
of t ime). The force of his int ernal voice not only account s for his obsession
but also engenders an underst anding of t his on t he part of t he reader. The
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voice here conveys a sense of what has been lost .
These are suggest ions only. Accept any point t hat considers Wint on’ s t echnique
and which sust ains focus on t he voice and it s signif icance in conveying Fish’ s
sit uat ion t o t he reader.
The second element of t he quest ion prompt s candidat es t o move beyond t he
ext ract t o make l inks wit h ot her part s of t he novel and t o explore t hese l inks
t hrough j udicious select ion – and analysis - of evidence f rom t he novel as a whole.
Reward responses t hat focus on Wint on’ s manipulat ion of t he narrat ive t o
int egrat e myst ical/ ancest ral voices t o lead Fish and ot her charact ers t o t he f inal
act of release.
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Question
Number Indicative content
8
Candidat es are l ikely t o ident ify t he st ory as represent at ive of t he ‘ adult ’ sect ion
of t he col lect ion and explore t he charact erist ics of voice and viewpoint i t
cont ains. They might also l ink it t o t he cent ral t heme of paralysis.
This ext ract comes part -way t hrough Gabriel ’ s encount er wit h Miss Ivors who is
involved in t he movement t o rest ore Irish language and cult ure. Look for a close
reading of t he ext ract it self .
Point s t o look out for and reward in t erms of t he explorat ion of t he ext ract may
include references t o aspect s of synt ax, lexis, phonology, graphology and discourse
t hat cont ribut e t o t he creat ion of voice t hroughout t he ext ract such as:
• Miss Ivors’ s underlying obj ect ive in what seems a pol it e invit at ion. The
reference t o t he Aran Isles (wit h ful l cont ext ual isat ion af forded in t he
Appendix) as predominant ly Ir ish-speaking and a common dest inat ion for
t hose involved in t he Nat ional ist movement
• The guile t hat t he voice of Miss Ivor’ s conveys t hrough t he seemingly
innocent / convent ional manner in which t he invit at ion is versed (Wil l you
come wit h us on an excursion?/ i t wi l l be splendid out in t he At lant ic/ she’ s
f rom Connacht isn’ t she?)
• Gabriel ’ s sense of her mot ivat ion and t he nat ure of his curt response,
emphasised t hrough use of adverb (her people are, said Gabr iel shor t ly)
• t he escalat ing pressure on Gabriel conveyed t hrough Joyce’ s t hird-person
observat ion of t he act ions of Miss Ivors laying her warm hand eager ly on his
arm
• t he increasing aggression on t he part of Miss Ivors conveyed t hrough t he
repeat ed int errogat ive but where? which int errupt s Gabriel ’ s
uncomfort able at t empt s t o respond and which reveal her det erminat ion t o
ext ract Gabriel ’ s dest inat ion
• t he cont inued aggression of Miss Ivors’ quest ioning and t he ef fect it has on
Gabriel
• t he impact of Gabriel ’ s declarat ive Ir ish is not my language
• Joyce’ s use of t he t hird person t o at t r ibut e t he t erm cross examinat ion
wit h it s connot at ion of court room int errogat ion and t he reference t o an
ordeal and how t his places t he reader in respect of t he exchange
• Joyce’ s use of adverb t o convey Gabriel ’ s increasing discomfort (and
possibly guil t ) (awkwardly/ nervously)
• t he accusat ion achieved t hrough int errogat ive and use of pronoun (haven’ t
you your own land/ your own count ry/ your own count ry)
• Gabriel ’ s f inal response I’ m sick of my own count ry. Sick of i t !
These are suggest ions only. Accept any point t hat considers Joyce’ s t echnique and
which sust ains focus on at t it udes t owards Dubl in and elsewhere in Ireland.
The second element of t he quest ion prompt s t he candidat e t o move beyond t he
ext ract and t o make l inks wit h ot her aspect s of t he st ory.
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Band Mark
AO1: Select and apply relevant concepts and approaches from
integrated linguistic and literary study, using appropriate
terminology and accurate, coherent written expression
1 0 - 4
• responses wil l not ext end beyond t he ext ract . At t he bot t om of
t he band, mat erial select ed f rom t he ext ract is l imit ed. At t he
t op of t he band, mat erials select ed f rom t he ext ract wil l be
appropriat e
• ident if ies a l imit ed number of l inguist ic and l i t erary feat ures,
wit hout employing appropriat e t erminology
• writ es wit h minimal clarit y and t echnical lapses.
2 5 - 10
• responses may not ful ly ext end beyond t he ext ract , select ion of
addit ional evidence might not ful ly l ink t o t he t ask
• ident if ies some l inguist ic and l i t erary feat ures, wit h some use of
accurat e t erminology
• writ es wit h some clarit y and wit h some t echnical lapses.
3 11 - 15
• responses wil l ext end beyond t he ext ract and explorat ion is
l ikely t o l ink ful ly t o t he t ask. Select ion of evidence wil l be
largely appropriat e wit h clearly developed l inks t o t he t ask. At
t he bot t om of t he band, t hese l inks might lack clarit y and
precision
• ident if ies a range of l inguist ic and l it erary feat ures, wit h some
use of accurat e and appropriat e t erminology
• writ es wit h clarit y and t echnical accuracy.
4 16 - 20
• responses wil l ext end beyond t he ext ract and explorat ion wil l
l ink conf ident ly t o t he t ask. Select ion of evidence wil l be
sophist icat ed, wit h consist ent ly developed l inks t o t he t ask
• explores conf ident ly a ful l range of l i t erary and l inguist ic
feat ures, wit h sophist icat ed use of accurat e and appropriat e
t erminology
• displays sophist icat ed, wel l-cont rol led writ t en expression,
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Band Mark
AO2: Demonstrate detailed critical understanding in analysing the
ways in which structure, form and language shape meanings in a
range of spoken and written texts
1 0 - 4
• makes basic observat ional and descript ive comment s
• makes basic comment s on st ruct ure, form and language
• support s comment s wit h minimal exemplif icat ion
• refers only t o t he ext ract .
2 5 - 10
• makes some observat ional and descript ive comment s
• makes l imit ed comment on st ruct ure, form and language. Links
t o how t hese shape meaning wil l be undeveloped
• support s some comment s wit h exemplif icat ion, but at t he
bot t om of t he band t his wil l be l imit ed
• makes l imit ed reference t o mat erial beyond t he ext ract .
3 11 - 15
• analyses some of t he mat erial , at t he bot t om of t he band
analysis wil l be l imit ed
• makes some comment s on st ruct ure, form and language. Links t o
how t hese shape meaning wil l be part ial ly developed
• support s comment s wit h exemplif icat ion alt hough t his wil l lack
consist ency at t he bot t om of t he band
• makes some reference beyond t he ext ract .
4 16 - 20
• of fers a reasonable range of analysis
• comment s on st ruct ure, form and language wil l general ly l ink t o
how t hese shape meaning
• support s most comment s wit h most ly appropriat e
exemplif icat ion
• makes developed reference t o mat erial beyond t he ext ract .
5 21 - 25
• analyses t he mat erial conf ident ly
• analyses st ruct ure, form and language wit h clear l inks t o how
t hese shape meaning
• support s most comment s wit h discriminat ing choice of
exemplif icat ion
• makes det ailed reference t o mat erial beyond t he ext ract .
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6 26 – 30
• analyses t he mat erial conf ident ly and crit ical ly
• analyses st ruct ure form and language wit h ful ly developed and
percept ive l inks t o how t hese shape meaning
• support s comment s wit h a discriminat ing choice of
exemplif icat ion
• makes percept ive and det ailed reference t o mat erial beyond t he
ext ract .
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