I-AmericanMIEL-Con Essay

Revision Day One

1st MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the MAIN IDEA sentence. Make sure it…

States text #1 and character #1 from thesis. Is the short story or poem punctuated with quotation marks around it?

Gives specifics about race, culture, OR tradition from the story.

Relates back to the argument of the thesis. Does not include ambiguous pronouns

referencing characters or stories/poems.

1st MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH The EVIDENCE that you choose needs

to support the main idea. Does the evidence support the main idea?

Read the first sentence and then skip directly to the evidence (quote). If it does not clearly support it, find another piece of evidence.

In choosing your EVIDENCE, do not use dialogue between two people or a mixture of dialogue and narration.

1st MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Read the INTRO to EVID and

EVIDENCE. Are there 2-4 sentences in the intro to evid

before the evidence (quote)? Does the intro to evid give enough

background on what is happening before the evidence is introduced? Is all the information relevant? Is the transition between intro to evidence and evidence seamless?

1st MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Are your own words connected to the quote like

in the example below?The narrator states, “Hamadi liked to use Spanish

words” (136). Comma needed after the signal phrase Some common signal phrases: states, says, narrates,

recalls, asks, wonders, exclaims Do not say, “In the text it says…” or “The evidence to

support this is…” Instead, tell me who says or thinks the quoted line. Incorrect: In the text it says “Hamadi liked to use

Spanish words.” Correct: The narrator states, “Hamadi liked to use

Spanish words.”

1st MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the EVIDENCE. Is it cited correctly? Example: The narrator

feels that she has been punched in the stomach and states, “Though I liked the sharp taste of garlic and pepper biting my tongue, I stopped eating my mother’s food” (106). Parentheses are around the page number Page number is written without “pg” Period comes after the parentheses (not inside

the quotes)

1st MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the LINK.

Are there at least 2-3 sentences of analysis here? Does your link clearly explain HOW the evidence

supports your main idea? Does the link clearly explain what the quote

means and it’s importance? Link should NOT explicitly state the phrases this

quote means or this quote says. If those actual phrases are in the paragraph, cross them off (and make sure the sentence still makes sense.)

1st MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the CONCLUDING

SENTENCE. Make sure it is not the exact same

wording as the main idea sentence. Make sure it restates the idea of the

main idea and summarizes the evidence.

2nd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the MAIN IDEA sentence. Make sure it…

States text #2 and character #2 from thesis. Is the short story or poem punctuated with quotation marks around it?

Gives specifics about race, culture, OR tradition from the story.

Relates back to the argument of the thesis. Does not include ambiguous pronouns

referencing characters or stories/poems.

2nd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH The EVIDENCE that you choose needs

to support the main idea. Does the evidence support the main idea?

Read the first sentence and then skip directly to the evidence (quote). If it does not clearly support it, find another piece of evidence.

In choosing your EVIDENCE, do not use dialogue between two people or a mixture of dialogue and narration.

2nd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Read the INTRO to EVID and

EVIDENCE. Are there 2-4 sentences in the intro to evid

before the evidence (quote)? Does the intro to evid give enough

background on what is happening before the evidence is introduced? Is all the information relevant? Is the transition between intro to evidence and evidence seamless?

2nd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Are your own words connected to the quote like

in the example below?The narrator states, “Hamadi liked to use Spanish

words” (136). Comma needed after the signal phrase Some common signal phrases: states, says, narrates,

recalls, asks, wonders, exclaims Do not say, “In the text it says…” or “The evidence to

support this is…” Instead, tell me who says or thinks the quoted line. Incorrect: In the text it says “Hamadi liked to use

Spanish words.” Correct: The narrator states, “Hamadi liked to use

Spanish words.”

2nd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the EVIDENCE. Is it cited correctly? Example: The narrator

feels that she has been punched in the stomach and states, “Though I liked the sharp taste of garlic and pepper biting my tongue, I stopped eating my mother’s food” (106). Parentheses are around the page number Page number is written without “pg” Period comes after the parentheses (not inside

the quotes)

2nd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the LINK.

Are there at least 2-3 sentences of analysis here? Does your link clearly explain HOW the evidence

supports your main idea? Does the link clearly explain what the quote

means and it’s importance? Link should NOT explicitly state the phrases this

quote means or this quote says. If those actual phrases are in the paragraph, cross them off (and make sure the sentence still makes sense.)

2nd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the CONCLUDING

SENTENCE. Make sure it is not the exact same

wording as the main idea sentence. Make sure it restates the idea of the

main idea and summarizes the evidence.

3rd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the MAIN IDEA sentence. Make sure it…

States text #3 and character #3 from thesis. Is the short story or poem punctuated with quotation marks around it?

Gives specifics about race, culture, OR tradition from the story.

Relates back to the argument of the thesis. Does not include ambiguous pronouns

referencing characters or stories/poems.

3rd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH The EVIDENCE that you choose needs

to support the main idea. Does the evidence support the main idea?

Read the first sentence and then skip directly to the evidence (quote). If it does not clearly support it, find another piece of evidence.

In choosing your EVIDENCE, do not use dialogue between two people or a mixture of dialogue and narration.

3rd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Read the INTRO to EVID and

EVIDENCE. Are there 2-4 sentences in the intro to evid

before the evidence (quote)? Does the intro to evid give enough

background on what is happening before the evidence is introduced? Is all the information relevant? Is the transition between intro to evidence and evidence seamless?

3rd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Are your own words connected to the quote like

in the example below?The narrator states, “Hamadi liked to use Spanish

words” (136). Comma needed after the signal phrase Some common signal phrases: states, says, narrates,

recalls, asks, wonders, exclaims Do not say, “In the text it says…” or “The evidence to

support this is…” Instead, tell me who says or thinks the quoted line. Incorrect: In the text it says “Hamadi liked to use

Spanish words.” Correct: The narrator states, “Hamadi liked to use

Spanish words.”

3rd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the EVIDENCE. Is it cited correctly? Example: The narrator

feels that she has been punched in the stomach and states, “Though I liked the sharp taste of garlic and pepper biting my tongue, I stopped eating my mother’s food” (106). Parentheses are around the page number Page number is written without “pg” Period comes after the parentheses (not inside

the quotes)

3rd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the LINK.

Are there at least 2-3 sentences of analysis here? Does your link clearly explain HOW the evidence

supports your main idea? Does the link clearly explain what the quote

means and it’s importance? Link should NOT explicitly state the phrases this

quote means or this quote says. If those actual phrases are in the paragraph, cross them off (and make sure the sentence still makes sense.)

3rd MIEL-Con BODY PARAGRAPH Look at the CONCLUDING

SENTENCE. Make sure it is not the exact same

wording as the main idea sentence. Make sure it restates the idea of the

main idea and summarizes the evidence.